Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 June 15

MangoSpring
I would like some feedback on objectiveness and the number of reliable sources (notability).

MangoSpring (talk) 01:06, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

SongorLagoon My article covers the high points of the Songor Lagoon, which is a protected wetland site in Ghana, Africa.
Any suggestions for improvement? This is my first article, and I had some difficulty with formatting the citations.

Jordan Heather (talk) 03:49, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Marc Fennell (Mixed Martial Arts) This is an article about Marc Fennell, Professional MMA Referee and Trainer.
Und4454 (talk) 05:10, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Jcobras3/DFJ Frontier
Hello, this is my first article and I would like some suggestions for the "Investment Criteria" section. The formatting of the four categories is different than what I have seen on other Wikipedia pages. Any suggestions? Thanks!

Jcobras3 (talk) 07:28, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Kevtone
This isn't my first page, but I started the page using the wizard, for completeness. I have taken it a ways and now punted it out for merciless editing. Yes, I will tackle more citations. Any other good ideas?

d u f f  09:10, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Tyler Willman
This isn't my first page either, but I started the page using the wizard, for completeness. I have taken it a ways and now punted it out for merciless editing. Yes, I will tackle more citations. Any other good ideas?

d u f f  09:11, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Calm Down Juanita
This is obviously also not my first page, but I started the page using the wizard, for completeness. This one ties the previous two that I just submitted for comment, to a whole lot of other pages, which I've also added cited material to. I have taken it a ways and now punted it out for merciless editing. Yes, I will tackle more citations. Any other good ideas?

d u f f  09:14, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Greplin_(Search_Engine)
I'd like some help, tips, or direction on making this article better. I have source-able information, but lack the know how to do it properly

Diggity123 (talk) 11:02, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Cross Channel Intelligence Community
Still new to this, started a new article re this law enforcement agency, requested feedback and was advised to add references and reliable sources which I've done to the best of my ability but would like to know how this article is made live now?

Hmcl1985 (talk) 12:24, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Ginger Software article was updated
I've added sources and references to the article based on the comments.

S givon (talk) 12:40, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Livacph/red24
I would like some feedback on this article - this is my first article and I'm not sure if it is sufficient enough. I appreciate all your feedback. Thanks

Livacph (talk) 13:30, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Star_Micronics
Please can someone review my page, so somebody other than me (the creator) has seen it and the banner at the top can go. Thank you.

Rbutler star (talk) 13:31, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:TradeCurrents/TradeCurrents
Can someone please help me with the following: - How do I add a picture and where do I place it? - Are the citations correct? If no, what is missing? - How does the article finally go live?

http&#58;//www.tradecurrents.com (talk) 14:47, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Gregtheross/LEAD_Technologies
Let me start out by saying that I do work for LEAD Technologies. I have carefully read the guidelines for COI and I am requesting feedback on this article in good faith. I believe it has been written from a NPOV and that I have followed the guideline "Do not write about these things unless you are certain that a neutral editor would agree that your edits improve Wikipedia."

As you can see for the history of LEAD_Technologies, there were previous attempts in 2008 and 2009 to add this page. These were done under different management.

Please review my editing history and judge for yourself. I admit to the mistake of misinterpreting the definition of a "minor edit" which the user J.M. corrected me on. If you review those edits you will see that they were written with neutrality and an effort to improve upon lists of companies that provide software for specific technologies such as JPEG 2000, JPEG XR, etc. Since then I have made other edits and contributions to discussions within the broad field computer science (including other companies) and plan to do so in the future as a regular contributor.

That being said, here is why I believe this article will help improve Wikipedia:


 * There are several pages which mention LEAD Technologies or LEADTOOLS (e.g. JPIP, List_of_optical_character_recognition_software, etc.). In the case of LEAD Technologies, this article will provide an actual landing page rather than "This page does not exist".  For LEADTOOLS, see below.  Other Wikipedia contributors have added our company and/or product into those lists, so I want to provide valid information for those links.


 * There is a redirect for LEADTOOLS pointing to GrapeCity, which is not technically correct. They are a reseller and have localized LEAD's product for their market.  Having a redirect point to them makes it look like they are the developers.  This page will correct and clarify that redirect.


 * The company is notable for several reasons including the US patent held by co-Founder Mr. Daher, as well as the fact that it is a 20+ year old software development, was one of the first companies to provide digital imaging technologies in the form of a toolkit that programmers and developers could us, and was the first company to provide a software only solution for JPEG on the Microsoft platform (which at the time was MS-DOS).

I welcome your input, accountability and help in assuring the page is written with neutrality.

Thanks, Gregtheross (talk) 15:24, 15 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Since it's been almost a month without feedback, I've resubmitted my request at Requests_for_feedback/2011_July_7Gregtheross (talk) 12:58, 7 July 2011 (UTC)

JoyceLowry/Manuel Carbonell
I am trying to change the article name as per requested. I thought I dealt with the disambiguation issue, however it did not change anything for me to proceed. As in Manuel Carbonell, sculptor. My utmost respect to anyone who has written an article, it is not easy even when you have all the required information, including photos. So any and all help is fully appreciated to this novice. Thank you in advance.

Joyce lowry (talk) 15:31, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

VideoOverIP
This article is about a remote desktop protocol called VideoOverIP, developed by Texas based VDIworks. This article adds to the body of information already on Wikipedia regarding remote desktop protocols such as RDP, VNC, PC-over-IP and others. Sources used include product sheets, product descriptions, press releases and journal articles regarding the protocol.

Vditech (talk) 15:46, 15 June 2011 (UTC)


 * Did not find any "journal articles"? It is sourced only to company advertising and one blog entry from 2009 that questions why yet another protocol was being defined, and that he had not tried it yet. Those are not "independent and reliable sources" by WP standards. The article is missing citations and wikilinks in most places, has no lead section, and has already been flagged as being too verbose. I will propose a merge. If after two years there has been no independent coverage in even trade press, perhaps we should wait and see if it becomes notable first.

Also your user name makes one wonder if there is any conflict of interest? Generally we encourage new editors to work on a few other articles before writing one on a subject they are associated with. Thanks. W Nowicki (talk) 23:07, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:MTron73/Greater_Toronto_Marketing_Alliance
I have done my best to format the page per wikipedia standards as well as cite the information as much as possible. I am basically looking for feedback on the page to ensure that it meets the quality standards before i publish the page

Thank you.

6-27 - Well, I moved the page to the main site as I thought the page was up to par for wiki quality standards. Still waiting for some feedback.

MTron73 (talk) 16:44, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:mythoughts 21:24, 16 June 2011 (UTC)/Fluid Equipment Development Company
How do I remove the first (upper) infobox? Does evrything else look okay?

6-16 figured it out by viewing history at top of page. I could see both boxes then and deleted the one I coudn't edit because it was covering the edit button.

6-16 OKAY.....so now how about moving the contents box??

mythoughts 21:22, 16 June 2011 (UTC) (talk) 17:05, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Solairus aviation
I wanted to see if this article is worthy of wikipedia.

Several Companys in the private aviation industry that are much smaller and less notable than Solairus Aviation have pages, and although two wrongs don't make a right, with such a substantial presence in the business aviation industry, it would seem that Solairus is notable enough to be included.

Solairus Aviation was founded by Dan Drohan and Jake Cartwright in 2009. In May 2009, Solairus obtained FAR Part 135 certification, which enabled them to expand their service offerings to the private travel marketplace and provide their managed aircraft owners a supplemental revenue source.

In August 2009, Solairus achieved Aviation Research Group/US (ARG/US) Platinum status.

In September 2009, Solairus earned “10 or more”, seating/large cabin authority.

In June of 2010, Solairus Aviation added six new aircraft to its fleet. These aircraft include a Florida based Gulfstream G550, a Connecticut based Bombardier Global Express, and a Seattle based Challenger 605. The California fleet additions included a a Dassault Falcon 900 and a Challenger 601.

Roger McMullin, former CEO of TAG Aviation Holdings S.A. of Techniques d'Avant Garde joined Solairus Aviation's Board of Directors in 2010.

In May 2011, Solairus Aviation opened its third office located in Denver, CO.

The company’s fleet now numbers nearly 50 aircraft under management, ranging from King Airs and Citations to Gulfstream and Global Express aircraft, over twenty of which are available for on-demand air charter. The aircraft are based in more than a dozen states throughout the U.S.

Jetset09 (talk) 18:36, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

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Toolowtheybuild (talk) 18:55, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

User:MichelleWestMarketer/DisclosureNet
I've made this factual article on a company. Is it okay to be approved? I've used a few external links to 3 different organizations.

MichelleWestMarketer (talk) 20:24, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Christ Episcopal Church (Red Wing, MN)
We have added a page about this historic church (Christ Episcopal Church (Red Wing, MN)) and would like to request your review. Thank you so much for you help. Look forward to reading your ideas to improve our page.

Thank you.

Edward Welles (talk) 20:45, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Corporacracy
I have just posted a re-write of the Corporacracy article. I feel that although there are some similarities between this article and Corporatocracy (part of the reason for original deletion was that too many similarities were found), they are different enough to warrant two separate articles. I have amended the article with a revised explanation, examples of the theory, and many references supporting it. Please review, discuss, and comment.

Gmw&#39;srevelation (talk) 21:09, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

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When I went to Wikipedia's entry on "Wetlands in California" I noticed that the Gardena Willows Wetland Preserve was missing from that list. I just finished writing and uploading an article on this important Preserve. I don't have a specific question, but I would appreciate feed back on my article.

Calystegia (talk) 23:56, 15 June 2011 (UTC)

Dom Kennedy
What do you think? I really want this page to counted as a music one.

Mstraciecc (talk) 04:25, 16 June 2011 (UTC)

User:Waterangel91/Sandbox
This is the first article that I create, I appreciate all your feedback on any aspect, especially wording, formatting, neutrality. Thank you for your time.Waterangel91 (talk) 07:53, 16 June 2011 (UTC)

Hi, well, I saw your article, and the first thing I noticed is that it is a bit short. Some expanding would do it some good. I checked some references, but the first one seems to be a bit un-neutral in the 4th paragraph. (talking about Singapore's ideal location for the organization...) The article, at a glance, seems to be neutral enough, but I'm not an expert at that. It seems to have enough references for an article of its size, but I think it will be able to go into the mainspace without being speedily deleted. Please remember to check if there is another article about nearly the same topic, because I know from experiance that if you don't check thoroughly enough, no matter how good it is, the article will be deleted by another editor in no time (check why at the link for the criteria for speedy deletion) You might want to wait a bit more for another editor to check because I'm defenately not an expert. Good luck! :) --Geo7777 (talk) 07:25, 19 June 2011 (UTC) <!-- ...but don't type after this line!