Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 11

Holeum
Nightbat (talk) 00:12, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Although the article's subject is certainly way out of my depth, I think it is reasonably well written and structured. I can't find any immediate problems other than you might perhaps want to rely less on just a few sites as sources because it is not considered as reliable. Chevy  monte  carlo  15:48, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Stettheimer Dollhouse
K got the sections (though they seemed unnecessary to me in such a short article). No web-based references on this topic--one of the reasons I contributed this article. Don't know what the "essay issues" would be? Hseneff (talk) 16:22, 14 March 2011 (UTC)

Hseneff (talk) 01:57, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * A few suggestions:


 * The article would probably benefit with the addition of sections.
 * The sources in the article could do with some improvement; what about some web-based references, perhaps?
 * I think there may be some essay issues. Chevy  monte  carlo  15:54, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Desire Caught by the Tail
Article written for Desire Caught by the Tail, one of 2 plays written by painter Pablo Picasso. Would appreciate a second set of eyes and hopefully an approval, since this is my first article. Thanks for looking!

Rangmaker (talk) 03:22, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * It's nicely written, seems notable, has an infobox which is great, and has plenty of links, so it seems a good start to me. Although I think the sources could do with some work - what about web-based references? Chevy  monte  carlo  15:58, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Leo Rubinfien
Please give feedback on this page so it can get published! Thanks!

Freyapowell (talk) 04:03, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * By the way, the article is already 'published', that is, it is already in the main space so you don't need to move anything. As to the article itself, I think it would benefit from being further divided into sections, inline citations used to display the references you currently have, perhaps an infobox, and finally maybe some suitable names added to your sources and external links, like this:




 * For external links, it's exactly the same except without the tags, which are just for references. If you don't understand don't worry about it; I'll add an appropriate tag to your article so that it can be cleared up by someone else, or you can let me know and I will give it a go myself. Best of luck! Chevy  monte  carlo  16:03, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Van Howard
This is my first Wikipedia article. My reference for this article is the person himself, Howard Vandevender (aka Van Howard). Van, as his friends know him, played with Ray Price as his lead singer for 4 years. Van provided me his bio through his daughter.

Does the submission look like it meets the Wikipedia standard and is the reference adequate?

Nmantooth (talk) 04:44, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, to be honest I don't think the single reference that you currently have is enough. According to WP:CITE, Wikipedia articles are supposed to have references from multiple sources that are independent of the article's subject (see WP:VRS or WP:Reliable references for more information). Although the article's subject may have helped you that is not enough to suitably verify the statements and facts in the article. As a result, I think the main issue is the sources. Chevy  monte  carlo  16:09, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Temple of the Sacred Gift
Jghmemphis (talk) 05:59, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Riocold/CESA_-_Colegio_De_Estudios_Superiores_De_Administraci%C3%B3n
Necesito que validen si este articulo esta bajo los lineamientode de Wikipedia, me gustaria publicarlo inmediatamente pero quiero que sea un articulo permanente, que no contravenga ninguna limitación de Wikipedia, realmente les agradesco la colaboración.

Luis F Rojas 06:36, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

[] Stub on the replica car company PowerCars
Nerfherder69m (talk) 11:12, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Van Did
Please give me some feedback on this article

Adriana Doring (talk) 14:13, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

Rick Skwiot
This is a new article for American author, Rick Skwiot. Rick Skwiot is the award-winning author of three published works set in Mexico and a critically praised childhood memoir. He received the Hemingway First Novel Award for his debut work, Death in Mexico (formerly titled 'Flesh') and was the Willa Cather Fiction Prize Finalist for 'Sleeping With Pancho Villa' in 1998. In addition, he has published numerous feature stories, short stories, essays and book reviews in magazines and newspapers. Rick has taught creative writing at Washington University in St. Louis and at the University of Missouri-St. Louis, where he served as the 2004 Distinguished Visiting Writer.

Jaynenavarre (talk) 16:51, 11 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Very nicely written introduction to your subject here, and nicely constructed article. But it really falls flat when it comes to references. There are two places that are important to review: (1) Notability (people), and (2) Identifying reliable sources. You say your subject received a "Hemingway First Novel Award". You need to find some citation verifying that fact, preferably from some official site. Who makes the award, by the way? This is not an idle question: a person is "notable" if he "has received a well-known and significant award". The Willa Cather Fiction Prize is another item that needs references and clarification. When you say he was a "finalist", does that mean it was an award, or was he nominated and someone else got the award? Some documentation of the Distinguished Writer position would be helpful as well. You say Christmas at Long Lake was "acclaimed", so you need to show where it was acclaimed, or remove that word. Also, it needs italics in the article and removal of the quotes adding italics in the list of works. (I fixed these two.) The "slated for 2012" and mention of a planned work sounds like sales language. I would suggest removing it unless you are pitching his work. Tkotc (talk) 18:14, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

CounterfeitElectronicComponents
Please comment on my recently published article.

Mpasdon (talk) 19:31, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Websalad/Premier Cabs Wriing about Sydney taxi, Premier Cabs, passengers rights in taxi, external links which are helpful to Sydney travellers.
As this is my first contributions. Your feedback is appreciated.

Websalad (talk) 21:05, 11 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Murdox/GNAA
I feel that the current userspace draft is ready for an RFF. The reliability of the sources has been raised as a potential problem, and I feel that this has been addressed. Furthermore, I feel that feedback is needed to further improve the draft. LiteralKa (talk) 21:55, 11 March 2011 (UTC)


 * My first thought is that the lead section seems a little long compared to the rest of the article. It might be a good idea to use some of the material in the lead to start a new section in the body of the article. Qrsdogg (talk) 02:45, 12 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the feedback! I will attempt to fix this over the weekend. LiteralKa (talk) 03:59, 12 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Also, I think ref#24 might violate the linking to youtube regulation. Qrsdogg (talk) 04:02, 12 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I removed the 3 YouTube citations and replaced them with the appropriate citation templates. LiteralKa (talk) 16:44, 12 March 2011 (UTC)

Joyent
I am a newbie so please be gentle. I've posted a proposed new outline for a complete rework of the article in the Discussion tab. I've been collecting external resources in support of each section, but I would really appreciate feedback on the proposed new structure. Thanks.

RhodaBernstein (talk) 23:09, 11 March 2011 (UTC)