Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 22

http://pid.gov.pk/newagency-papers.htm
kindly review my article regarding this newspaper from lahore pakistan- you can check the newspaper in the following link of pakistan governments website

http://pid.gov.pk/newagency-papers.htm

scroll to the end of the page to check daily lahore post enlistment 117.102.34.132 (talk) 01:12, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Desire2Learn
Article was created in October, 2010 by User:WildWomenWin. It has been reviewed by a few Wikipediens. I think it's ready to have the new article notice removed.

mattclare (talk) 02:16, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Ivana_%22Ivy%22_Vujic
Just looking for help getting Ivy from Kittie her own page instead of a redirect to the Kittie Wikipedia page.

Schulze73 (talk) 03:22, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

The Empty Space
Feedback appreciated!

Dbengali (talk) 05:39, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * First impressions: it's very short, needs more explanation.  And you can't cite a book as a reference for itself; you need to find third-party mentions (books about directing that refer to that book's importance, reviews, reception, etc.).  I'm not an expert on book articles, but I suggest you drop into WikiProject Books talk-page to get some advice: Wikipedia talk:WikiProject Books. MatthewVanitas (talk) 17:20, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Alexandra Solnado
Hi, Would someone kindly review this biography about bestselling portuguese writer and spiritual healer. Thank you

85.242.163.247 (talk) 11:58, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

The Value Engineers
How can I add a contents box and include the company logo? How can I stop the article being an 'orphan'?

TVE86 (talk) 12:05, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Alexandra Solnado
please, kindly review this biography about bestselling portuguese writer and spiritual healer. Thank you

85.242.163.247 (talk) 12:15, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

User:MaxWyss/Loss estimates in real time for earthquakes worldwide
This is an article on how to quantitatively estimate human losses less than 1 hour after earthquakes worldwide to facilitate relief efforts. Please give feedback.

MaxWyss (talk) 15:07, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Stephen Whitney (1776-1860)
My article is about a notable New York "merchant" of the early 1860's, whose name comes up in many histories of the period. Wildcatman99 (talk) 15:28, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Overall looks like an excellent, well-constructed article. In the "Later Life" section you say that Whitney was an investor in Bank of America. But the current Bank of America, if I can cite Wikipedia, dates to 1904 and Whitney died 1860, so I would suggest some clarification of that point. Which brings me to the second quibble, which is citing the Wikipedia Astor article. Wikipedia is not a reliable source (believe it or not). Maybe you can find the source the Astor article used and use it yourself. I shouldn't doubt that you've looked into it, but is there any relationship with the Whitney Family (Wikipedia article) of John Hay Whitney? Nice job! Tkotc (talk) 21:19, 23 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Westerngal/Booth_Western_Art_Museum
Still learning here.... Would love feedback on my new article.

Westerngal (talk) 16:09, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetigs, a few observations:


 * The article needs to be "wikified"; that is, type double-brackets around notable terms to make a link: Byzantine Empire --> Byzantine Empire. The main paragraph is decent, but you want to add some footnotes from neutral third-parties to verify the basic notability of the museum.  Also need to spell out "GA" and note it's the US state (we have many non-US readers).  Need to fix your footnotes so that an author/title/date appears rather than just a linked number.  To do this, add the footnote citation after the link but within the brackets, like so:  .  Your last section, "other notable facts"; things that sound like "trivia" are discouraged; maybe instead make a section "awards and recogition" or similar.  And make it a subsection by putting double equal signs (=) around the section title. All good? MatthewVanitas (talk) 17:15, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Dkinsella/TULIP Cooperative Credit Union
I'm a first time editor and I'd like to get feed back on this post. It's for TULIP Cooperative Credit Union, which is a coop credit union in Olympia, WA.

Thanks

Dkinsella (talk) 17:56, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

The Portland Cello Project
Just checking to make sure I did everything right -- the citations, etc. E.g., Should the titles of the articles be in italics, for example, even though they're linked as URL's? Thanks!!

Dejenkin (talk) 17:58, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Article looks good; myself, I tend to put article names in Italics. One thing you may want to do: the autogenerated titles for some of the news sites are just "Colorado Times" or whatever.  You may want to manually tweak those so that the publisher (name of paper) appears in the appropriate spot, and the title of the individual article you're citing (eg. "A Night Out With Cellos" or whatever) appears in the footnote. MatthewVanitas (talk) 19:43, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Nice! Yeah, I'll get the titles in there like that. Thanks! Dejenkin (talk) 22:22, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Main:Bonyfingers/Ken_Hatfield_Composer/Guitarist
Please review this article. I am writing it on behalf of the great composer/guitarist Ken Hatfield. I can't figure out how to get a picture of Ken here and I would also like to link it to the WIKI pages of Gene Bertoncinni and Jim Ferguson.

Bonyfingers (talk) 18:03, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, to link a name, type double-brackets around it: Jim Ferguson --> Jim Ferguson. If a name is a common one, check the link and make sure you're going to the right named individual. Your article right now has no blue wikilinks, so you need to go bracket specific names and technical terms (not common words like guitar or album, but specific or technical terms like MTV, seven-string guitar, Boston Symphony, etc.


 * The other thing your article must have, or face deletion, is reference (WP:References) to neutral, third party sources which verify the notability (WP:NOTABILITY) of this figure. That is, proof that published media or academic works have discussed this man and his importance.  Articles about living figures (WP:BLP) positively must have footnotes to reliable sources, or they are deleted since they are at risk for inaccurate information or libel.  Try making those changes, and feel free to post back here with any questions. MatthewVanitas (talk) 19:14, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

Brodie Brazil
Looking for a review of a new page of a public figure. OK updated with suggestions. Now how do I clear the "needs review" flag?

Ngmcs8203 (talk) 20:20, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Your image isn't showing up. Also, for your references, the source (which paper or TV show) isn't visible.  Check out how some other pages are footnoted, and fix your footnotes so the source is visible.  Also, generally, the title of the article is worked into the link, rather than the link being a separate [1] in the middle of the footnote. MatthewVanitas (talk) 20:39, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Hmm, the image must have been deleted. It's his current bio headshot everywhere he has an account. At what point is it no longer copyrighted to CSN and becomes part of his bio? I thought an official headshot was more appropriate than some random fan shot. I'll fix the links. --Ngmcs8203 (talk) 20:48, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Unless it's been specifically released as Creative Commons, Public Domain, or similar, it's not WP-able, even though it may be widely distributed online. There are exceptions for Fair Use, but since he's alive that wouldn't apply.  One possible way to use the official headshot would be to get the owner of its copyright to file an "OTRS".  I'm not really familiar with that process, but if you Google "OTRS wikipedia" you should be able to find a write-up on how to get permission from the owner. MatthewVanitas (talk) 21:45, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Thanks. He sent me another image, but will probably be deleted since it's just his official headshot and there's no way to verify that it was given proper release. I'll research this a little bit more and either a) submit a ticket or just live with the fact that there is no properly licensed headshot available. Thanks again. --Ngmcs8203 (talk) 22:06, 22 March 2011 (UTC)


 * If you're in contact with him and he's cool with Wikipedia, it shouldn't be at all hard to get an OTRS permission. You just have to read up on it for 15min or so to figure it out.  As best I understand, it's a way that the owner of an image can email Wikipedia Legal and say "hey, I do indeed release this image to Creative Commons."  Just bear in mind, there's no such thing as "releasing only to Wikipedia"; it has to be unconditionally licensed as Creative Commons or similar by the owner. MatthewVanitas (talk) 23:32, 22 March 2011 (UTC)

THALAMUS (Thalamus?)
The web-page "THALAMUS" is not opening on request

59.96.145.104 (talk) 09:08, 23 March 2011 (UTC)