Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 27

Liquid Impact Forming
This is a draft article about a metalworking process used in tubular part shaping in different industries. I would like to receive some feedback about its conformity to Wikipedia standards. Thank you.

Kalvino314 (talk) 03:11, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

The Wereling Trilogy
Is there anything I need to improve in this article? It's about the Wereling Trilogy by Stephen Cole

Shadow Wolf 001 (talk) 04:13, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

Sharon Carpenter
Hi, please can you give me some feedback on the article I wrote on television personality Sharon Carpenter. I think mostly everything seems to be in order but I'm not sure if the references were formatted properly. Thanks for your help!

BritishBloke (talk) 05:09, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I only reviewed the references with an eye towards formatting and not with respect to their content, nor with whether they seem likely to establish "notability".


 * You should try to fit the references into the article as "inline" references. That is, they should appear in the article at the point there is a fact stated that the reference verifies. The reference data should be placed between a tag pair at that point. If you put " " below the "References" heading, the "system" will create a list of footnotes for you. See Citing sources for more. An alternative means of formatting and recording your references is to use the templates at Citation templates, namely the "Cite web" template. This is optional, and occasionally doesn't fit the data at hand, but almost all the time a convenient method. Good luck on your article. Tkotc (talk) 05:00, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Toys (David Bowie album)
I really appreciate all the thought you folks here have put into safeguarding. Seems to work out?

I just want to get rid of the 'new article' template on my page. I think It's an incredibly important, vital, and solid entry, and I would just ask any 'David Bowie experts' to go over it and make sure I didn't miss anything. Color and shading of the material, by those more familiar with the more subtle aspects of Mr. Bowie's life and career, would be appreciated. And those that can put the 'album' coding in, who know the proper rules (for 'missing' info)and may have more info about how to do that.

I think I know what's going on, let me know.

-Kevin Balla

Milohammond (talk) 05:51, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

Words With Friends
I created a new article, Words With Friends. Would someone mind reviewing it? Thanks.

JovanWelks (talk) 13:23, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

Concept House of Knowledge
Please review the page

119.154.19.231 (talk) 19:03, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Iainfmacleod/Breanish Tweed
could you please tell me if my article s on the right lines, thanks for your help. ==

Could you please tell me if I am on the right lines?

Iainfmacleod (talk) 19:45, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
 * You appear to be asking for feedback on the draft article User:Iainfmacleod/Breanish Tweed.


 * Your references need to be "inline". See Citing sources. They need to include sufficient "bibliographic" data. I suggest you use the "Cite web" template at Citation templates to record the data. And they need to be from "reliable sources" (see WP:RS and related pages). This last point can be frustrating, but one important aspect of this is that "blogs" are rarely regarded as reliable sources, and you have used one as a reference.


 * The External links should have been in a bulleted list (I fixed that) and need a bit of descriptive elaboration. See how I formatted the last link for you to see how to do this.


 * For general information on formatting an article, see Manual of Style (layout).


 * You tried to add some categories, but you need to look at Portal:Contents/Categories to see the categories available, if you want to do that. Categories are entered as, eg.


 * The draft article is a bit skimpy. I hope you plan to elaborate somewhat. Tkotc (talk) 05:21, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Joachim de Posada
This is a page on Joachim de Posada, a Latino best selling author.

MiraLatina (talk) 19:53, 27 March 2011 (UTC)

Concept House of Knowledge
please review it

Ssagheer (talk) 20:04, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Page already deleted. Tkotc (talk) 05:49, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Lima Class 66
Bachmannlover (talk) 20:13, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
 * You need to revise the first sentence of the article a little. The boldfaced stuff should be part of the article. It's not a title. The title is created by the system. How about something like "The Lima Class 66 is a diesel locomotive produced by the Name of Company from 1911 to 1923." Something along those lines, using the correct facts, of course. See, I had to look this up. It's a locomotive, right? I was thinking it was an engine out of a Freightliner tractor. The article should make this clear at the get-go. What was it, who made it, when was it make, who bought it. This should be clear to someone who isn't a "fan" or a railroad buff. You seem to understand these things, but you have to spell it out for those of us who don't.


 * Your article has only one reference. You really need more external third party reliable sources. Use a search engine and find a few. The photo was a good idea, if you can get past the permissions hurdle. Tkotc (talk) 06:08, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

German Prisoners of War in the United States
Please review the article.

Leidseplein (talk) 22:35, 27 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I see someone gave you a barnstar for the excellence of this article, and you definitely deserve it. The only problem, exceedingly minor, but exceedingly time-consuming to fix, is that the references are "bare". I'll cut to the chase and tell you that you should use the "Cite web" etc. templates at Citation templates to record the data. Not only does this make the references look much better, but it protects the integrity of the encyclopedia by providing data that helps recover from creeping link rot. Anyhow, this is an excellent article and deserves the highest quality documentation, right? Thanks for writing it! Tkotc (talk) 05:31, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Archangel Ancient Tree Archive
Hello, I have just created a new article (as you can see) about a non-profit organization called Archangel Ancient Tree Archive, whose goal is to take samples of the worlds oldest and most successful (meaning they grew to substantial widths and heights) trees, take their genetic material, and clone them in an effort to clean up the environment.

I would appreciate either help or feedback on the new article I just created, as I am (somewhat) of a new-comer to Wikipedia. I hope you find everything "ship-shape". :) Obamas Barrack (talk) 02:14, 28 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Your article needs references to multiple independent third party sources to demonstrate the notability of the subject and to verify facts stated in the article. The problem is that you have only cited the subject's own web site. This is not a third-party. You should simply refer to their site under "External links". I did this for you. Then, Google is your friend. A quick glance suggests there is information "out there". For doing references, see Citing sources (a bit overwhelming), then use the "Cite web" template at Citation templates to accumulate the data. When you're done, you will have something like this: at each place in your article where you need a reference. Tkotc (talk) 05:48, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Olivia Junell/William Hundley
This is an article on the Austin based artist William Hundley. Hundley works in a variety of mediums, but is most widely known for his photography works.

Olivia Junell (talk) 05:29, 28 March 2011 (UTC)