Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 28

User:Bungeegal23/A_Dog%27s_Purpose
Bungeegal23 (talk) 02:09, 28 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Seems like a fun book, but review Notability (books) and make sure you can document its notability. If you proceed, you need inline references to third party information. I put a sample reference in your article to show you how to do this correctly. Use the Cite web template at Citation templates. The system will create the footnote list for you, once you record the reference material properly. The book's site must be an External link. I fixed this for you. Don't worry about categories until later. I hope you don't mind that I rewrote the first sentence a bit too... Tkotc (talk) 06:32, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

All 6's And 7's
I just need for this article to be reviewed so it can be added to the site.

BiggKhrisco (talk) 06:12, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Prosimos
What do you think about the type of information given on the project? does it provides too many information or does it lack something?

RGimenez (talk) 14:00, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * The information looks good, but it could be referenced more clearly and written from a more neutral point of view. I've tagged the page with some suggestions for improvement. Let me know if you have any questions. Jncraton (talk) 23:47, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

Mandatory Arrest Policies - new section (diffs)
I added the section titles "mandatory arrest policies" to the article and I would like feedback on the quality of the writing and information provided. I cited all my sources and included the external links. I provided information about the history of mandatory arrest policies in the U.S. as well as the most recent arrest rates from the National Institute of Justice.

Meganmack1408 (talk) 14:19, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Not a new article, but a new section of an article; here are the diffs. (took a minute to track down what Megan was asking us).MatthewVanitas (talk) 01:12, 29 March 2011 (UTC)

Cavity Perturbation Theory
This is a new article that I created. This topic is relevant to RF and microwave engineering but it was not described or discussed anywhere else on Wikipedia. I'd like to know if my article format and overall structure are acceptable. Any other comments or feedback would be welcome.

HTii (talk) 15:18, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Might want to drop in to WP:WikiProject Physics and solicit technical advice there. MatthewVanitas (talk) 17:38, 29 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Oweise/OpenWGA
The article is about a software product for which I am the chief architect, so there surely is a Conflict of Interest. That said I tried to provide a neutral view of the product that should solely serve researching purposes. However, before posting that to the public I'd like to ask an editor for her/his opinion. If there are problems I'd really appreciate any helpful hints about making the article more closely comply to Wikipedia's rules.

Thanks! Oweise (talk) 15:37, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

DynaVenture
Good Day Editors!

Would someone please review my article on DynaVenture, a private conglomerate company based in Saskatchewan Canada. I have already put in a few requests, some feedback would be greatly appreciated!

Best,

Suzy

Suzy Huber (talk) 17:34, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Locust34/Comic Book Hall of Fame
could you please review my article to double check for standards?

Locust34 (talk) 17:54, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

MakeItWork
This is my first article and I was hoping for any suggestions!

Shabu262 (talk) 17:56, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Make It Work, Inc.
Any suggestions welcome!

Shabu262 (talk) 17:57, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, your article was automatically deleted since it is about a person or organisation but did not provide neutral, third party references proving WP:NOTABILITY. Such articles are subject to immediate deletion.  If your article can be improved, you can request that a draft be unlocked and restored to your personal userpage for further work. MatthewVanitas (talk) 01:15, 29 March 2011 (UTC)

Chicago Hearing
The first time I've created a page. Please let me know if I did anything wrong.

TimSallinger (talk) 18:23, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Evan1t/Riverbed
This is my second draft of a replacement page for my company, Riverbed. I am an employee of the company, but I want to make sure that I have written an article that is unbiased and does not read like an advertisement, and that is sufficiently referenced. Thank you in advance for your input and time.

Evan1t (talk) 18:51, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * I think the parts where you get into "services offered" is where you start sounding too much like a corporate brochure. The lede looks good... until you hit "Riverbed products are often deployed to solve network bandwidth and performance problems in these areas of technology:", so I'd nix that.  Same with the "WAN optimisation" section.  I don't know tech stuff well enough to know what is "here is unique stuff the company is known for in the community" and what is "here is what our company can do for you!!!", so I'll defer judgement on that portion.  Parts seem pretty well-done neutral history/significance, but it still has a strong advert vibe, especially the lengthy portions drawn from the company's own website. Also, since it can never be posted enough, please scope the below warning. MatthewVanitas (talk) 21:40, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


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 * style="background-color:#c8ffc8" | Wikipedia's Law of Unintended Consequences If you write in Wikipedia about yourself, your group, your company, or your pet idea, once the article is created, you have no rights to control its content, and no right to delete it outside our normal channels.  Content is irrevocably added with every edit, and once added will not be deleted just because the author doesn't like it any more. Any editor has the right to add or remove material to the article within the terms of our content policies. If there is anything publicly available on a topic that you would not want included in an article, it will probably find its way there eventually. More than one user has created an article only to find themselves presented in a poor light long-term by other editors. If you breach our editing policies or "edit war" in an attempt to obtain a version of your liking you are likely to have your editing access removed.

In addition, if your article is found to not be worthy of inclusion in the first place, it will be deleted, as per our deletion policies. Therefore, don't create promotional or other articles lightly, especially on subjects you care about.
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Palluruthy Relief Settlement,Cochin
Its a rehabilitation shelter under Corporation of Cochin started during the time of Kings of Cochin.But authentic information or reference sources are less.If you know any reliable reference sources and more relevant matters which help to add the credibility of the subject ,please advice........

78.93.35.174 (talk) 19:02, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, I see the article was deleted, as articles about people or organisations must be properly footnoted with reliable references from the very outset. If you'd like the article restored on your personal User pages, you can request that here, and you can work on a draft until you find references.  Suggest you ask for help at WP:WikiProject India; maybe someone there is familiar with the topic. MatthewVanitas (talk) 21:32, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Anatabine
65.242.107.218 (talk) 19:05, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Terrie O'Connor Realtors
I believe I am ready to post this article. Terrie O'Connor Realtors is a company in my town that seems to be appearing more and more in newspapers and blogs. The President came to Bergen Community College and I thought it would be good to have a page for it here.

Mfoltz29 (talk) 19:54, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, an article about a person or organisation must have links to neutral, third-party references at all times or it is subject to immediate deletion (which is what happened in your case). Note too that for a relator office to be covered, there needs to be some justification for why someone would want to know about this office.  Any particularly distinctive practices, notable effect on local politics, scandals?  If all that can be said about a business is "it exists", there doesn't need to be an article for it.  So just think on the motive for an article, and then see whether there are neutral, third-party references to corroborate notability. MatthewVanitas (talk) 20:49, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

Hi Matthew- I appreciate your feedback. However, I believe I contributed reasons as to why this might be beneficial for wikipedia- it is a company that seems to be coming up more and more in our community and they have speakers visiting places like college campuses, radio interviews, etc. is that not enough? Also- I used 3rd party websites- including ".edu" sites. Any more advice to keep it on? Thanks everyone


 * In your case I would contact the editor who authorised the deletion, both to ask for his specific concerns, and also to ask that a draft of the page be undeleted and added to your personal User: workspace so you can attempt to improve it. The current article on the mainspace was deleted for insufficient notability. MatthewVanitas (talk) 21:10, 30 March 2011 (UTC)

How do I know who authorized the deletion? Thanks for your help, I appreciate it!

Mediafly, Inc.
There is a "New Unreviewed Article" template in the article and has been there for about a month. Need someone to review the article and remove the template.

Stevesier5 (talk) 20:59, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Bdone318/Brandon S. Meyer
Bdone318 (talk) 21:08, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Greetings, none of your "footnotes" were actually footnotes, so I've removed them. First off, to make a link to another Wikipedia article, just put double brackets around a word:  Germany --> Germany.  Don't cite other Wikipedia articles as footnotes.  Further, footnotes are not used just to link to a concept ("2010 MTV Awards"), but are to prove points raised in the article:  "Smith was a guest speaker at the 2010 awards ".  Right now the article is not ready for release since it lacks third party, neutral sources to demonstrate notability.  Please read up on WP:NOTABILITY and WP:RS to get this part down.  Also, just for kicks (your subject is defintely more notable than these), check out Wikipedia talk:No one cares about your garage band for perspective on why we're so, so picky about proper sources for musician articles. MatthewVanitas (talk) 21:30, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

User:CkiteY/The President's Daughter series
are my references done correctly? CkiteY (talk) 21:40, 28 March 2011 (UTC)

DAB Country_Style_%28album%29 from Dean Martin Discography
The link from Dean Martin Discography Country Style points to a different Artists / Album.

72.49.105.99 (talk) 23:26, 28 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Not really a feedback issue, but noted and fixed. We call this issue "disambiguation" (WP:DAB); it's a good reminder to always check where your links are going, as many persons/works/places share the same name, and sometimes links need to have caveats applied to go to the right article. MatthewVanitas (talk) 01:08, 29 March 2011 (UTC)