Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 March 6

User:AbhisheksinghWIKI/Monsoon of Indian subcontinent
I am looking for feedback on the following aspects of this article:
 * 1) The quality of the prose - Is it too clunky? Repetitive? Too technical? Too simple?
 * 2) Quality of explanation given - After reading the article does it give a clear understanding of the concept of "Monsoon of Indian subcontinent" and its associated effects on local humanity affected by it?
 * 3) Citations - Sufficient or need more?
 * 4) Any other feedback?

Thank you for your time.

abhishek singh (talk) 01:44, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

The Travel Navigator
Cptsk1ttles (talk) 03:06, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Ling zhu md/Implicit Contracts
The old entry on implicit contracts is listed under implicit contract theory.

I revised the old entry by expanding the role of implicit contracts in both the theory of labor market and capital market. Since it is my first Wikipedia article, I welcome any comment from other Wiki writers.

Best regards,

Ling zhu md (talk) 05:12, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

National Pharmaceutical Product Index
How can we improve this new article stub?

Tonyfaull (talk) 09:41, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Canadian_Headstones
Clarksonon (talk) 14:42, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Gilesrick&oldid=416067648 Please review and let me know if it is an article that is postable
Is this an article that can be posted in it's current form?

Gilesrick (talk) 15:50, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Gilesrick/Audioprosthology
Sorry for the bad link

Gilesrick (talk) 15:54, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Sephiroth9611/Beatrix Schuba
Yhis is my latest version of the article about the Austrian figure skater. It is currently a C-Class article and I am looking for ways to improve it. I am in the process of obtaining images. Sephiroth9611 (talk) 16:10, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
 * This is a really minor point, but shouldn't you be referring to your subject by her surname throughout the article instead of familiarly by her first name? I can't give any suggestions for improvement (other than the image you will provide). I was a bit surprised by the references, including the relevant quotation. Personally I found it useful where the reference wasn't immediately available online, but I hadn't seen it done that way before. Well organized, well documented, well written. Tkotc (talk) 06:28, 9 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the feedback. Regarding your main point about using the subject's first name, I have been in contact with the subject's publicity agency regarding permission/licenses for use of imagery for the article.  Their first permission was not up to Wikipedia guidelines for granting a license, so I had to email back for clarification.  They haven't gotten back to me.  In one of the replies I received, the man I am in contact with mentioned the subject prefers her nickname Trixi.  I wasn't sure what to make of that and thought it meant rather to use that rather than her given name or surname since it's a biography of living persons...  Thought I'd err on the side of caution.  As far as the references and quotations of the relevant passages included, I tried to be as thorough as possible in filling out the fields of the cite tag.  --Sephiroth9611 (talk) 20:46, 9 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Craigpugh/Greentop_Circus - I tried to create this but it got a speedy delete, any ideas on whether this new version meets the criteria would be most welcome.
Craigpugh (talk) 16:41, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
 * I left some comments on your user talk page. Tkotc (talk) 21:10, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

Please suggest any structural changes
Dear Volunteer, Please if you can have a reading of my article and suggest any changes required. If you can provide any direction, I will be very grateful to you.

Regards, Nisarg Shah

Nisargrshah (talk) 17:28, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

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I requested feedback when I first finished this page and have now responded to the comments - I would be grateful if someone else could review it so that the banner is removed from the top of the page. If there are any further changes that I should make then I'm also happy to amend it further, please let me know. Many thanks, Abi

AbiDiamond (talk) 19:02, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

User:NeverMindMePlease/Orphan (computing)
This is my first article. I was just wondering, before I made this a proper article:
 * Is this article reliable enough to be validated?
 * Is this article notable enough?


 * I read the article and one of the references. There are three or four things you can do to improve the article a bit, depending on your interest and sources, etc. Yours, 98.210.208.107 (talk) 04:28, 7 March 2011 (UTC)

NeverMindMePlease (talk) 19:37, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sandalwood
There are several interesting problems/opportunities here. I worked on this for an hour yesterday, cleaning up English, vandalism, spam links, and so on. The more it was cleaned up, the more I checked references, the more I realized there's much more potential.

There are issues about religious use, medicinal use, ecology, botany, history, etymology, organization, Wikilinking, and perhaps WP:BIAS. (However there are no outstanding controversies!)

The article gets 25,000 hits per month, which places it on a par with "pepper" (There's half as much traffic to "mustard".) It's given a High Importance, but the only Wikiproject involved (Zoroastrianism) may not be especially active (?), and at any rate may not have the biological, ecological and other expertise that would be useful.

98.210.208.107 (talk) 19:52, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

Marco Giovino
Hello,

This is my first time creating a Wikipedia article / page. I spent many hours over the course of a few days to do everything correctly. I am now finally submitting this for review. Marco Giovino is the lead percussionist in Robert Plant's (formerly of Led Zeppelin) Band of Joy.

I am open to all feedback and suggestions you can provide so that this page can be set live.

Thank you!

Brenda

Brendabender14 (talk) 21:06, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

Steve Dacri
I am looking for feedback on the article I just wrote, on the close-up magician who recently passed, Steve Dacri. What can I do to improve the article? I have a lot of material that Steve wrote about himself, about how he learned about magic and his stories about celebrities such as Bob Hope, Milton Berle, etc. How much of that is it okay to use, verbatim, with quotation marks? Also, how big can I make the photos?

Pattymooney (talk) 21:18, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

Quod Financial
Hi, I've recently created a new wikipage on Quod Financial. I've heard from them on wall street journal, waters technology and bobsguide many times, but couldn't find anything on wikipedia?! They seem to be quite famous within the tarding technology providers community. Does anyone knows more about them?

Awaiting for your feedbacks/help. Thanks, Bahman

Bahman.kalantari (talk) 21:28, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

User:Rondeauw/Springwater Center
I would like some feedback on this drafted article. For some reason, the external link is also showing up in the References section. Can this please be removed? I do appreciate your help.

Rondeauw (talk) 23:09, 6 March 2011 (UTC)

Hans Schimmerling
This is my first Wikipedia article. Any helpful comments would be greatly appreciated. Thanks.

Monellemr (talk) 23:44, 6 March 2011 (UTC)
 * All mentions of him after the first paragraph should use his surname. Put his dates in parentheses after the appearance at the beginning of the article of his name in bold. (I fixed these.)


 * There may be difficulties because you have no "inline" references in your article. You would be better off if you had a citation at least at the end of the various paragraphs of text showing what the source of your knowledge was. Since you have three sources and many paragraphs, it might be easiest to use "named references", where upon first use of a reference the tag has a name (e.g. ) and subsequent uses just use the name (e.g. [notice spacing]). For more on this see Citing sources. You might also find it useful to employ the templates at Citation templates.


 * Are there no other citations going to his involvement in the music festival? In fact, the whole music festival issue ended up confusing me, because I could find no "official site" to use to try to verify the claim. The Stammbaum item has an online presence; you should show that. Using the template would help. You refer to many publications, yet have no "Works" section. You might consider that. You might also consider an "infobox". Even though your subject seems like an interesting and probably "notable" individual in the Wikipedia sense, I wish the documentation were better. Some cursory googling shows that pickings are slim, however. Tkotc (talk) 22:28, 8 March 2011 (UTC)