Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 May 19

CameronAlborzian
Hello, please consider the re-working of the "Cameron Alborzian" page in light of more extensive information as well as proper biographical information.

Karmayogi2012 (talk) 01:20, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Jang_and_Kev
Dear Sir/Mdm,

sorry to trouble you for your time to help me with this article, thanks.

Oldboy007 (talk) 01:30, 19 May 2011 (UTC)


 * I have tagged some things for you to take a look at. The most important is the need to prove notability with reliable, third party sources per the General Notability Guidelines. The other stuff is pretty easy to fix and can be taken care of later; you should see if there are more sources available to demonstrate notability. Crisco 1492 (talk) 06:35, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

Peter Buchanan-Smith
This is my first article, about a graphic designer who has won a Grammy for working with the band Wilco and who is best known for developing a line of hand-painted axes that have been featured in many magazines and in newspapers. I hope it works!

Shoppingatlas (talk) 01:36, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Mboucher87/Vinyl Gloves
A brief article on the development, pros and cons of disposable vinyl gloves.

Mboucher87 (talk) 03:48, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Kmccall/Tom Spahn
This is my first article for publication. I've tried to follow all the rules. It could use a thorough critique.

Kmccall (talk) 04:58, 19 May 2011 (UTC)


 * He seems to be notable, but you need to try and demonstrate it better. IMDB is not accepted as a reliable source, so you should try and find some more sources; newspapers would be great, for example. You need to take a look at your capitalization (I caught some mistakes, like "Elementary school") and the categories could use some improvement. Wikification looks good, but you should expand your article before sending it to the article space. Hope that helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 06:40, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Jayadevbhaskaran/K Bhaskaran
Jayadevbhaskaran (talk) 07:46, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Bollerfra/Media_Pro_1
I have added a small wiki on the new DAM product, Media Pro 1 released by Phase One a few weeks ago. It contains software history(bought from microsoft), general info and some features

Bollerfra (talk) 09:21, 19 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Hi Bollerfra, it looks a little like advertising to me. You should take a look at our guidelines for choosing neutral terms when writing an article. Also, you have yet to adequately prove the notability of the product. There are thousands of software programs released every year; not all are notable enough for Wikipedia.
 * Other than those major concerns, there are a few things I noticed.
 * You have yet to add any categories. Categories are useful for allowing people to find your article once it is in main space.
 * You haven't wikified enough. You should include at least a few more links in the text.
 * You should take a look at our guidelines for reliable sources. You cannot use Wikipedia as a reference, like you have for reference number three.
 * Don't forget to remove www.example.com from your external links section.
 * I hope that helps. Crisco 1492 (talk) 10:08, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Trevor coelho/ThinkPad T Series Laptops
Hi,

I've created a page on the ThinkPad T Series laptops. I was editing the ThinkPad Edge page recently, and noticed that most Lenovo products don't really have pages on Wikipedia. This is the first of several pages I'm planning on creating and I'd appreciate any feedback to help me along the way.

Trevor coelho (talk) 11:10, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

Windsor Brokers
Please review, I would appreciate any feedback I could get for my article.

Elie (talk) 14:02, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/US_Green_Chamber
I would like to submit this article for general review, thank you!

Faualex (talk) 18:13, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:KevinBillinghurst/Jeppe Wikström
Greetings, First posting. Fixed some suggestions on links and categories from an earlier submission of the same article. Would very much like to have this posted live ASAP as the subject is now in the news regarding a new global photography project officially launched last week. See here: aday.org

Very grateful for any assistance getting this page live.

Thanks

KevinBillinghurst (talk) 18:27, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

Jgfop:Rolf_Schwirz
Thank you in advance.

Jgfop (talk) 18:27, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Guinunez/Malbec_World_Day
Hello, I've added this article, I think it is very close to a final version. My greatest concern is about the details on the events, I am not sure if I over did it.

Thanks!

Guinunez (talk) 19:16, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Sensio3d/Sensio
Hello, a first attempt at creating a page. It looks okay to me but would like feedback. More new pages are planned, notably technical ones referenced in this first article. Thanks in advance for your help.

Sensio3d (talk) 19:24, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Coolboyvinnie/War_Of_The_World:_Goliath
Is this articel good enough for wikipedia? There isn't much informatie yet because the movie will be released in 2012.

Coolboyvinnie (talk) 20:39, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Christopher_Mayo
This is my first attempt at creating a Wiki article. The subject is the UK-based Canadian composer Christopher Mayo. Would appreciate any feedback/reviews please. Many thanks.

Thompsonben19 (talk) 21:03, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

IgnitionWeb
Want to know how to get this article live. User:Pat yoshida/IgnitionWeb

Pat yoshida (talk) 21:47, 19 May 2011 (UTC)

Untitledhttp://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lindsayjonesdiamondbones/Enter_your_new_article_name_here
please help with edit

thanks!

Lindsayjonesdiamondbones (talk) 01:09, 20 May 2011 (UTC)

Thecus
Hello, I'm a little bit confused about how my article is still labeled as a "new unreviewed article", as it was reviewed, accepted, and posted. There is one link issue that I'm not really sure how to fix, but besides that, is this an official Wikipedia article now? Thank you!

122.116.86.242 (talk) 07:50, 20 May 2011 (UTC)