Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 May 28

List of common English usage misconceptions
Request new article review. Thanks.

Airborne84 (talk) 03:26, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

verb displacement
Thanks for the input Chzz. I have added refs and made suggested corrections. Is it OK now?

Tomo Talk (talk) 05:45, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

X-Sat
Hello I have created this article nearly a month ago but it is still unreviewed.Anybody who has exhaustive reviewing experience may review it and remove the template signifying the need for review.

Thanks,

gauravpruthi 10:58, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

Hi there - I've taken a look through the article, and the first thing that sticks out is that it needs more references, and it needs them in the correct places (i.e. the reference should come directly after the fact which it references, not at the beginning of paragraphs or sections). Ideally every stated fact, uinless it's very obvious (such as "the sun rises in the east") should have a reference, so readers know where the fact came from, and they can check that it's true! Read through the following pages for more information on this.


 * Basic 'how to write an article properly' information
 * Wikipedia's manual of style
 * What references should be
 * Referencing for beginners

… and here's one which makes producing good citations a lot easier!
 * Citation templates

Your article could also use several wikilinks, to help readers to understand more of the terms used, for example:

X-Sat is a microsatellite

… which you would type as: X-Sat is a microsatellite

and:

analyze and implement onboard parallel processing algorithms

which you would type as: analyze and implement onboard parallel processing algorithms

It's neither necessary nor desirable to make wikilinks to words whose meanings are obvious to most people, but anything that readers are likely to want more information on, to help their understanding, should be linked.

Finally, and very importantly, make sure that your article hasn't directly copied from anybody else's words, including material published by the manufacturers, and that it's also not too similarly worded.

I hope this is helpful for you. Pesky ( talk  …stalk!) 12:19, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Musegaze/Dissensus
This is an important concept that as yet has no article, so I did my own research. This is basic info derived from the sources listed, among other research. Did I do it right?

Musegaze (talk) 13:35, 28 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Had a brief look - at first glance this really looks as though it should be in Wiktionary, rather than Wikipedia :o). Also, be wary of using a large quotation unless it's clearly formatted as a quotation, with the citation included in the quote section.  Look at the Manual of Style (quotations section) to learn more about how to do this.  Pesky  ( talk  …stalk!) 17:45, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

User:Hxrayzhu/Hubcase
Please review this new article and let me know what it takes to qualify. Thanks a lot!

Hxrayzhu (talk) 16:50, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

The Ladies Auxiliary of the International Union of Mine Mill and Smelter Workers
I would appreciate it if an experienced editor could provide feedback on how to improve this entry. Thanks in advance! Andy Q26 (talk) 18:06, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Reishaaa/Michelle_Hodkin
Reishaaa (talk) 18:19, 28 May 2011 (UTC)

Jeffrey_Rubinoff_(sculptor)
Dear Editors, I would be very grateful for a review of this article. Regards, Karun Koernig

24.85.251.94 (talk) 19:09, 28 May 2011 (UTC)


 * I have reviewed the article, it was well written and only needed minor fixes for spacing, formatting etc.. I did however, tag that article for neutrality, since I didn't find its tone Neutral. It didn't appear to be very encyclopedic in its content and more PR-like. Maybe someone more familiar with the subject can take a look at those issues. Thanks. Theo10011 (talk) 07:14, 1 June 2011 (UTC)

James Fitzjames I have just posted a new entry about James Fitzjames, of the Franklin Expedition. Much appreciate any help with it.l
Could you let me know any improvements or corrections for me.

Wbatters (talk) 21:26, 28 May 2011 (UTC)