Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 October 24

User:Mollytamale9/Amos Kennedy
Mollytamale9 (talk) 02:52, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

Matha Ayurveda Eye Hospital
Arunjithp (talk) 10:07, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

User:Nikhilchandra81/Indian_Holiday_Pvt_Ltd
Hi I am unsure whether this page sounds like an advertisement and risk deletion or may I go ahead and create this article. Please help! Thanks.

Nikhilchandra81 (talk) 10:24, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

User:Galeglider/Tomas E. Dy-Liacco
How can I improve my article and make it look like a wiki page?

Galeglider (talk) 11:58, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

User:Mhurst08/L.A._Lewis
or try this link: User:Mhurst08/wiki/L.A._Lewis or http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/L.A._Lewis (sorry, still trying to learn wikipedia URL structures for internal communications)

Mhurst08 (talk) 18:03, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

Dennis E. Puleston
Cakerkela (talk) 18:44, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

User:Curiouscientist
This is a request for feedback on a final draft of a scientific biography of Myron A Hofer, one of the leading researchers in the field of Developmental Psychobiology. It was prepared by the Department of Psychiatry at Columbia University, the New York State Psychiatric Institute, several of Hofer's colleagues, and by Hofer himself.

Curiouscientist (talk) 19:25, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

User:Copybite/sandbox
Since I'm new to creating Wikipedia articles, I want to make sure I've maintained neutrality in this article about the company Getaround. Any other suggestions are also welcome.

Copybite (talk) 19:49, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

Craig McKinley (physician)
Because the Article Wizard system has changed, this article did not go through the usual probationary period with the "Unreviewed new article" template. I would appreciate feedback on it, especially since I have not previously written an article about a living person who has gone through legal problems as serious as McKinley's.

Gildir (talk) 22:21, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

Huawei E5
In the last few weeks I have prepared a draft for a new article on Huawei's E5 mobile device range and have now made this draft available in my userspace for other editors to view and provide comments. As I have noted in a disclosure on my userpage, I do have a potential conflict of interest with Huawei as a topic. While I have aimed to write this new article from a neutral point of view, as much as I am able, I would like to ask for another editor to review and provide feedback on the article draft. You can see the draft article here: E5 draft.

To write the article I have used reliable secondary sources including articles from Macworld, Engadget and Slash Gear as well as using information available on Huawei's website. Since the E5 has been featured in a number of secondary sources, has won awards including "Work Gadget of the Year" at the T3 Gadget Awards in 2010 and is the top selling network card in Japan, I believe that it meets the notability standards for an article on Wikipedia.

It would be much appreciated if another editor could review the draft and suggest any changes necessary, or if you feel that it is ready, it would be helpful if you could move the article out of my userspace. If you have any questions or comments please make these on my talk page or the talk page for the draft, and I will reply to them as quickly as I am able. Thank you. Bouteloua (talk) 22:53, 24 October 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Jos%C3%A9_Antonio_Bottiroli&oldid=457237027
Hi, somebody out there can check out my article and advise on taking it online! A lot of work will be done on the article and its presentation format and layout later but like to see something online soon! thx S

Soroushsabzi (talk) 00:24, 25 October 2011 (UTC)