Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 September 12

Klm433/Border Hills Halfbred sheep
This is my first article contribution to Wiki. The article is about a crossbreed of sheep and the benefits of the qualities of the parents. Any advice regarding content or formatting would be appreciated.

Klm433 (talk) 02:39, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Empowered democracy
I created this new page on a novel thesis for alternative democratic institutional arrangements. The aim was to provide a brief summary with a short paragraph on its reception and influence. Any feedback is welcome. Thanks!

Archivingcontext (talk) 07:05, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

United Coffee
Hi, The article on United Coffee, previously discussed here, is now online. Any comments are welcome. Thanks!

DiagramBeFun (talk) 07:39, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

The Hague Institute for Global Justice
Could someone review this page, so the tag for new unreviewed article can be removed? All feedback is very much appreciated.

LauraDH (talk) 09:06, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Uch Power
Please review my article.

Mzeeiqbal (talk) 13:43, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Union Shield - 2011
This military exercise is yet to take place, but I am ready to modify it as soon as new data occurs. Thanks.

Kantervo (talk) 13:54, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

You Can’t Lead With Your Feet on the Desk: Building Relationships, Breaking Down Barriers, and Delivering Profits
I need my article, You Can’t Lead With Your Feet on the Desk: Building Relationships, Breaking Down Barriers, and Delivering Profits to be reviewed. I am fairly new to Wiki and would appreciate any assistance with getting it edited.

Hollyreslink (talk) 14:00, 12 September 2011 (UTC)
 * The article needs more critical analysis and review. It reads too much like a promotion of the book, especially the "reception" section. What are the problems and criticisms of the book? Archivingcontext (talk) 01:43, 13 September 2011 (UTC)

Ageism toward Adolescents, United States
This is intended as an essay, partly in response to the existing editor essay on Ageism and partly to extend the discussion of ageism against adolesents to include new information. I anticipate that one objection might be self-citation in places, one reason for which is that, after a considerable search, we found no other sources that had researched such topics as comparative adolescent and adult behaviors with economic circumstances held constant, how many teens are killed by adult drunken drivers, etc. (all of which we published in reputable journals). Thank you for your feedback. Mmales (talk) 14:04, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Philosophy Football FC
I would be grateful if somebody would review this article about a London-based football (soccer) club with a history of political and cultural activism. They are also leading a renaissance of interest in the Situationist concept of three-sided football. Many thanks.

PFFC (talk) 14:19, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Global Linguist Solutions
All,

I would like to have an outside source review the Global Linguist Solutions entry and provide a little bit of feedback as to what information is missing, where the article could stand to be expanded, etc. There is conflict of interest, as I work for the company, however there were outside resources and links used to verify all information in the article, and there is no marketing/branding/etc in the article itself. Also, as it is a new article, it needs to be reviewed for compliance.

Thank you!

CJohannsen (talk) 15:47, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

User:Hatsglasgow/The Big Figure
can this be submitted? it's about a new band I read about in the paper.

Hatsglasgow (talk) 16:04, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Nantgarw tradition
This is the first article I have created. I would just like someone who knows a little about wikipedia and'or morris dancing to take a look at it and tell me if anything more needs to be done to it.

Tabulabells (talk) 16:22, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Kiereni secondary school (Kenya)
What i have to do? please someone could help me? thanks

Tarmax (talk) 18:53, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

User:Yeepsi/List of John Lennon songs
I need someone to review my article, User:Yeepsi/List of John Lennon songs, before I move it. It's in a similar vein to List of George Harrison songs.

Yeepsi (Talk to me!) 20:22, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

Untitled Need help meeting guidelines
Hi there,

We are trying to meet all of Wikipedia's guidelines but am hoping someone can review our page and let us know if there are any additional edits that need to be made: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ideahall/Sabal_Financial_Group

Also, we keep getting this error and don't know how to resolve it: cite error: There are &lt;ref> tags on this page, but the references will not show without a template or a tag; see the help page.

Please advise. Thanks! 21:28, 12 September 2011 (UTC)


 * I added the to your article so the References will now show. Good luck with your work.  01:08, 15 September 2011 (UTC}


 * The error message links to a help page. Did you not see it or was the help page not useful? ---— Gadget850 (Ed)  talk 12:27, 15 September 2011 (UTC)

Jan Nickman
This is my first article contribution to Wikipedia with approximately 10-12 more contributions to be added over the course of the year. The additional contributions will cover each of Jan Nickman's films. I would very much appreciate reviews, feedback and any other assistance available to ensure this and future contributions are done properly. Thank you in advance for any help you might offer. 22:11, 12 September 2011 (UTC)

API_Management
I just moved this article from my user-space. I requested feedback on the draft version a couple of weeks ago but didn't receive any so I figured I'd go ahead and move it to Wikipedia proper.

Here's a summary:

"API management refers to the process of publishing and managing application programming interfaces (APIs). Commonly this is achieved through the use of a software application known as an API management system or solution. API management systems were first developed around 2006 in response to the increasing use of Web APIs. API management systems exist primarily to help Web API publishers make it simple to create new applications against the APIs they publish." 23:16, 12 September 2011 (UTC)