Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 September 20

Origin of IBM "Winchester" Disks: The term Winchester appended to a range of IBM disks derived from the fact that they were developed at IBM's Hursley research lab near Winchester UK
There were an awful lot of people working at the IBM Hursley lab (near the city of Winchester) in the 60s and 70s developing the sealed disk drives that became known the Winchester disks. How then did the article on disk drive development come to contain so much conjecture and misinformation?

60.231.63.46 (talk) 01:46, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
 * You'll have to query this in the talk page of whatever article's contents you're disputing, this page is for giving feedback.  Ma &reg;&copy; usBr iti sh [talk] 01:51, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Milaap
This article is new and unreviewed, please review it. Thanks!

Shubhere (talk) 04:50, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Forevermore (Juris album)
Greetings! I just created an article for the album of Filipino singer Juris called Forevermore. Could someone please review it. Thank you very much in advance. :)

Rovheel (talk) 06:11, 20 September 2011 (UTC)


 * ✅  Ma &reg;&copy; usBr iti sh [talk] 08:40, 21 September 2011 (UTC)
 * All okay!

User: Afia Mansoor/Etsko Schuitema
Afia Mansoor (talk) 07:03, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Tony, Caro and John
This UK band and their 1972 album 'All On The First Day' were significant to the UK Psychedelic Folk movement in the early 1970's. Please review my article on the band history

Astronautilus (talk) 08:22, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Senate Oceans Caucus
This article is new, and only a newly formed organization, please review and provide feedback

Aesco77 (talk) 08:42, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

If You And Me (EP)
Greetings! I just created an article for the EP album of Filipino singer Juris called If You And Me. Could someone please review it. Thank you very much in advance. :)

Rovheel (talk) 08:47, 20 September 2011 (UTC)


 * ✅  Ma &reg;&copy; usBr iti sh [talk] 23:41, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
 * All okay!

Pierre Daura
Will you please review our article? Thank you!

Pierredaura (talk) 12:50, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Ken_Wickham
Rotrodfan (talk) 14:11, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

User:MaxyH/Silence therapeutics
Hello, I have written an entry for a biotech company called Silence Therapeutics - I've tried to make sure the sources are reliable and independent, although I appreciate one of them is a corporate factsheet I found on the website, but it does outline partnerships with other companies. I had a previous article I wrote for Silence Therapeutics deleted as the tone was too promotional. I got some great feedback and help from one of your editors [Jimfbleak] so I hope the tone is now neutral & the article generally up to Wikipedia standards. Thanks! MaxyH (talk) 14:16, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

West African Recipes
Please review and give feedback. Thanks.

Aistudents (talk) 15:16, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Guelph Hydro Inc.
Guelph Hydro Inc. (talk) 15:56, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

[The history of the Art Institute of Seattle]
Please review our article

12.193.24.142 (talk) 16:54, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

Parker H. French
Hello Marcus: Hi - your reply was in the wrong spot, but have moved it. This business is making me feel rather slow-witted and old. I sure hope this is the right place to respond.

Personally I would recommend you pick the most prominent/notable members of the expedition and discuss a bit about them with citations There isn't anyone prominent, or even notable. I might list a few members about whom something can be said in a new section.

if you can give a solid reference as to where people can find that list (of expeditioners), whether in a book or an external site The only list that exists is in my computer. I had the idea that I might be able to upload the list somewhere (Wiki Commons?) as a file of some kind (What kind? A .pdf? Or I could scan a doc and upload a jpeg.) Perhaps some future historian might have a use for it. No one is going to want to just read it.

''If you first find info on a website, then the same in a publication, cite whichever best supports the way you write in onto Wiki. Books are usually better, as websites can vanish overnight, most books are almost always trackable to verify'' I am now adding links to websites of books, journals, newspapers, etc. when I find them. Some material I got through inter-library loans (Pingenot's article for example) only to find later that they are on-line. Others I found on-line in the first place (e.g., Strickland) but I still cite the original (published) source first.

Aren't any memoirs dating back to 1850s going to be long past copyright term anyway, and no longer in need of permission? I wondered if the people who inherited the unpublished documents (which, btw, were written some years later, e.g., Cooper, 1901.) had some legal claim to the contents. It isn't worth worrying about. All three of them have expressed some interest in someday publishing something. Perhaps one or another will edit my page.

I noticed that in the William Walker article the author has a section "Cultural References" in which he mentions Alex Cox’s film, Walker. French is portrayed in that film (in a minor role.) Maybe I should mention it?

Just about everything published about French contains errors and my main purpose here is to correct the historical record.

"This article is an orphan." I have made very minor edits to Walker, Filibusters, and Ned McGowan pages which link to the French article. I can't see a way to link to Lopez that isn’t silly. I can't imagine where else links would naturally occur, so I guess the article will always be an "orphan?"

Mgblakes (talk) 18:43, 20 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Hello!
 * The right place to respond is usually in the original RFF, or open a dialogue on my talk page to maintain feedback. With a new RFF, such as this one, there is always the chance it might be missed, such as if I don't do any RFFs for a few days. You're likely to get a faster response via my Talk page, if I'm online, and if you "watch" it, you will be able to reply back also.

Regards,  Ma &reg;&copy; usBr iti sh [talk] 23:21, 20 September 2011 (UTC)
 * No prominent members: No leaders, or anyone who did some feat, or was killed/injured, perhaps?
 * Hmm, if you have your own list, normally it cannot be uploaded or included without sufficient references, else it may be considered original research and removed. I imagine if you have been able to produce such a list though, you must have sources to have gathered them from, why not reference them? I am not sure if PDFs can be uploaded to Wiki or Commons. I think you can through the normal WP:Upload system, but it needs to have an appropriate licence.
 * Orphan: As long as at least 3 other articles link to it, you're fine. You had 4, if I recall, so I removed the orphan tag yesterday.
 * Lopez link: considered using the see also hatnote template?
 * Films can be mentioned, yes - "In fiction" or "Cultural references" sections are not uncommon, see Arthur Wellesley, 1st Duke of Wellington as an example of how to incorporate such references. Either name is acceptable.

Potter v Broken Hill Proprietary Company Ltd
Linden (talk) 19:13, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

User:Tins1128/Kool Smiles
Your feedback would be appreciated. Thank you!

Tins1128 (talk) 19:27, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

== The_Throwdowns Hi, need a third party to review the article so they can remove the template at the top stating this is a new, unreviewed article. Thanks. Also please let me know what improvements I should make and if there are any other complaint ==

Would like to get the page reviewed, so the tag is removed.

Styson (talk) 22:14, 20 September 2011 (UTC)

American Imperialism
In the entry "American Imperialism", several great works are missing, such as those written by Peter Gowan, The Global Gamble (1999) and Vassilis K. Fouskas and Bulent Gokay, The New American Imperialism

92.21.199.107 (talk) 22:58, 20 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Well, maybe the people who created and contributed to the article haven't read them, to cite them. If you want to contribute to the article, go ahead - there's nothing can be done about it here, this is a feedback page for new articles.  Ma &reg;&copy; usBr iti sh [talk] 08:04, 21 September 2011 (UTC)