Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/2011 September 25

Bangladesh Primiere League BPL
This is the wiki page for BPL t20 bangladesh.

Jamilewu (talk) 03:45, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

Xeround
I've written an article about Xeround, a company which develops cloud database software. The company has been surveyed in a large number of important computing publications and appears to be notable. I have cited the relevant sources to support the basic facts of the article. Please let me know if you agree about notability, and if you have any comments or ideas for improvement.

Gilad.maayan (talk) 10:10, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

Joe Miller (Long Drive Champion)
Joemiller11 (talk) 10:29, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

Sparkle (2012)
I have a page on the upcoming movie remake Sparkle, starring Jordon Sparks. I just really want to get the article verified I have sources and everything.

3mshaw (talk) 11:36, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

SOS Online Backup
Hi. I have re-written an article about the backup software SOS Online Backup with all the available and googled infos, please check the differences here. This is my first article re-write, and depending on the quality of my work i may continue contributing to other articles as well.

Doctor muthu's muthu wanna talk ? 14:22, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

User:Alberto Assaf/Ghosta
this is my first article, it's about a lebanese town "Ghosta" , great location with plenty of monasteries , it's ready , however i was unable to post a photo , plz leave a feedback

Alberto Assaf (talk) 15:36, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

The Gruesome Twosome (1967 film)
This is my first article, please leave a feedback!!!!! Thanks!

UncleSam300 (talk) 16:28, 25 September 2011 (UTC)


 * ✅ Ma&reg;&copy; usBriti sh  &#91;Talk]&#91;RFF]''' 16:44, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
 * This film sounds really awful, haha... anyway...
 * I'm having trouble finding any reviews, awards, etc so that it can be considered notable, per WP:MOVIE guidelines. If you can find any references to add, reliable sources, they are much needed to make sure this article does not get deleted due to not being notable.

Ripple (UCMS)
Kapil207goyal (talk) 16:50, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

La Pestilencia
This is my first article on Wikipedia. I gathered most of the information by my own knowledge, the band's webpage, and well known events known by everybody in Colombia. I listed the sources in the references section. I plan to expand this article in the future with more details.

Hybridv3 (talk) 17:55, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ Ma&reg;&copy; usBriti sh  &#91;Talk]&#91;RFF]''' 14:10, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
 * First I'll cover your sources:
 * Your own knowledge doesn't count, per original research
 * The band's website represents itself, per WP:COI is not a reliable source
 * MySpace is not considered a reliable source either, again due to COI and self-published content.
 * At is stands now, the article lacks:
 * Notability: there is more on this for bands in WP:NMUSIC, which I recommend you read.
 * If the band has 6 albums, look for some third-party, independent reviews/ratings, etc to account for notability.
 * The discography table was not quite wiki-standard, have updated to wikitable format to save time explaining.
 * As it stands now the article is at risk of deletion, you need to work fast to get it updated. Recommend you put inuse atop the page to reduce the risk - if editors see it's being worked on, you have better chance of avoiding this.

Eric Thal
I wanted to make sure the format for the references is correct. Thank you!

Timber 57 (talk) 21:32, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
 * ✅ Ma&reg;&copy; usBriti sh  &#91;Talk]&#91;RFF]''' 14:52, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Have copy-edited the article to meet wiki standards and removed "Notes" column from table as it was empty.
 * I have gone through every reference, and they are all very trivial - usually only a passing reference or a mention in a cast list. For a living person's biography you need to establish their notability. In this case, due to the trivial nature of the sources, that has not yet been achieved. Given that Thal has been in various shows over 12 years, what we really need are some third-party, independent reliable sources that talk more about Thal himself, in-depth, than about his roles and their fictional parts in films. Any interviews, newspaper coverage, etc about Thal from a neutral point of view is required, perhaps 2 or 3 good articles should be enough.
 * "Personal life" needs expanding and citing.
 * Method of referencing itself is good, just that the actual references are not sufficient to make Thal seem notable.

User:Osmanbedel/Literature_Circles_in_EFL
I've written an article about Literature Circles in EFL 'Englis as a Foreign Language', teacher accompanied classroom discussion groups among EFL learners, who regularly get together in class to speak about and share their ideas, and comment on others' interpretations about the previously determined section of a graded reader in English, using their ‘role-sheets’ and ‘student journals’ in collaboration with each other. I have cited the relevant sources to support the basic facts of the article. Please let me know if you agree about notability, and if you have any comments or ideas for improvement.

Osmanbedel (talk) 22:08, 26 September 2011 (UTC)