Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/Archive/20

Curotek
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:26, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Alfresearch/Curotek

This is a new article relating to one of the providers of assisted living technologies.

Alfresearch (talk) 22:41, 27 January 2010 (UTC)

The Balance
Done - user name spamblocked. – ukexpat (talk) 19:29, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Hi, just finished writing an article on a well-known Canadian rock band

The name of the article is called The Balance

User:The Balance Music/The Balance

Thanks for your time, and looking forward hearing from you!!

The Balance Music (talk)User:The Balance Music 10:50 (EST) Jan 27/2010


 * It's not immediately clear to me that the band meets the notability requirements set out at WP:BAND, or that either of the albums meets the requirements for albums set out at WP:NALBUM. So before any of these are moved you will need to cite significant coverage in reliable sources demonstrating their notability. – ukexpat (talk) 17:47, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

2009 flu pandemic in Taiwan
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:31, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

2009 flu pandemic in Taiwan 2009 flu pandemic in TaiwanAngelaseh (talk) 08:16, 28 January 2010 (UTC)

Martino Tirimo
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:32, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Jowilson55/Martino Tirimo

This is my first Wikipedia article so I just want to check I'm along the right lines. There are no references because I've only used Tirimo's website for information (with permission), which is posted in the External links section anyway.

Many thanks

Joanna

Jowilson55 (talk) 10:28, 28 January 2010 (UTC)


 * The subject's own website is often not a reliable source. You need better sources for most of his claims and assertions. See other tags on the article now. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  17:36, 4 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Prosec/FGH Security Ltd
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:14, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

FGH Security is a new Wikilink I have posted - any feedback wourld be appreciated on it.

Prosec (talk) 12:27, 29 January 2010 (UTC) Prosec 29/01/10


 * See User talk:Prosec/FGH Security Ltd. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  18:36, 29 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Couple of major problems: first, the draft does not indicate how or why the company is notable per the guidelines set out at WP:CORP; second, it is too promotional in tone - it reads like a company marketing piece. So at this stage I would not recommend moving it to the mainspace as it would probably be speedily deleted. – ukexpat (talk) 16:20, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Russell.Shackleton/Sandbox
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:19, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Russell.Shackleton/Sandbox

I would appreciate comments on my article which is Little Smalltalk 3.04 DOS. I would like to link to it from the Little_Smalltalk topic eventually. kta0410 (talk) 08:01, 30 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Couple of major problems: first, the draft does not indicate how or why the subject matter is notable as described in WP:N and further in WP:PRODUCT - it will need significant coverage in reliable sources to show notability; second; half of the draft looks like a how-to, and that is not suitable for Wikipedia per WP:HOWTO. – ukexpat (talk) 16:14, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

Vokab Kompany
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:23, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Vokab Kompany User:Steviebeatbox/Vokab Kompany

Steviebeatbox (talk) 08:41, 31 January 2010 (UTC)

I can't figure out how to construct the box at the upper right corner of the page with band/musician info. I tried copying another bands from the sandbox, then replacing the pertinent information, but no luck. Would appreciate feedback. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Steviebeatbox (talk • contribs) 16:30, 31 January 2010 (UTC) Steviebeatbox (talk) 06:40, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Please take a look at Wikipedia's inclusion criteria for bands set out at WP:BAND - the band does not appear to be notable per this guideline. – ukexpat (talk) 15:30, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

The Leeds Look
Done – ukexpat (talk) 20:24, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

The Leeds Look

I would be grateful for feedback on this article.

I was surprised that the "Leeds Look" was not mentioned in the existing Architecture of Leeds article but if my stuff was merged in to this there would be a danger of the article becoming too long especially as I have some other potential bits and pieces about Leeds architectural history that could be added. So should my article remain separate with a link from the Architecture of Leeds article? EricPolymath (talk) 14:41, 31 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Looking good! – ukexpat (talk) 19:31, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

Dr. Michael C. Ain
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:26, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Jaynamller/new article name here gives general information about the only surgeon in America who is a dwarf. (Jaynamller (talk) 16:09, 31 January 2010 (UTC)Jayna Miller, January 31, 2010) I would appreciate editorial comments on the article. Thank you so much!


 * I have reviewed the draft and as you will see I have made some formatting and other layout edits, and added some wikilinks. I have also added some inline tags identifying some issues, but generally you will need to find some sources that support the statements made and further demonstrate his notability. Also, I see you have some references in - take a look at WP:FOOTNOTES and WP:CITE for help with formatting references or leave a note on my talk page if you need help figuring it out. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 19:27, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

Ramon Naval Guico
Done – ukexpat (talk) 20:26, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Ramon Naval Guico Ramon Naval Guico --121.1.18.242 (talk) 05:19, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have reviewed, removed the tag, cleaned up the text a little and added some categories. I also added project templates to the talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 16:06, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Demonicld/Konstantinos Fotiadis
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:27, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

please make my article exist. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Demonicld (talk • contribs) 13:40, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Sorry but this individual does not meet Wikipedia's notability requirements - please take a look at WP:N and WP:BIO. – ukexpat (talk) 15:10, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

Freelance Whales
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:28, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Hello, this is the first article I've written and would appreciate advice of whether it is ready to post as an official wikipedia page (it is currently a user space draft)

User:Ledhotjimipepper/Freelance Whales

--Ledhotjimipepper (talk) 14:38, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Needs significant work. The band does not appear (from the article) to meet notability guidelines - see WP:BAND. (GregJackP (talk) 03:08, 2 February 2010 (UTC))

Transatlantic Literary Studies
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:30, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:English 468/Transatlantic literary studies

This article's purpose is to introduce some of the theories and basic introductory information on the relatively new way of studying literature in a transatlantic context. This was compiled by a college class, and I could use some help with some feedback. Thank you. —Preceding unsigned comment added by English 468 (talk • contribs) 19:10, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * This reads like an essay for a university course, rather than an encyclopedia article. Nuujinn (talk) 01:46, 16 February 2010 (UTC)

HOMER:_Micropower_energy_modeling_software
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:31, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

hi, I would appreciate some feedback on this article: User:Cruciblecom/HOMER:_Micropower_energy_modeling_software. I think this topic belongs in Wikipedia because there are many thousands of people around the world using this free software, and it facilitates the integration of multiple power sources in an energy system, specifically conventional and renewables. The software is available for free and is often used in developing countries.

If I can figure it out I'm going to add some pictures to the story.

Many thanks! Lili —Preceding unsigned comment added by Cruciblecom (talk • contribs) 23:53, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have done a little reformatting per the Manual of Style. Also at the moment the article is a little promotional in tone (for example, use of the circle-R, which I have removed), and will need to be toned down accordingly. A few more cited sources would be good too. – ukexpat (talk) 19:10, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Junemillom/Ambrose Hotel, Barrow-In-Furness
Done - deleted per Articles for deletion/Ambrose Hotel. – ukexpat (talk) 20:42, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

hi, my first page (hopefully of many as I plan to do a serries of pages on local pubs/hotels that are of note), can I have some feed back please. User:Junemillom/Ambrose Hotel, Barrow-In-Furness —Preceding unsigned comment added by Junemillom (talk • contribs)


 * I moved the article to Ambrose Hotel as there is no need for the "Barrow-in-Furness" disambiguation. I also tidied up the text, fixed some typos, added some wikilinks, and some categories. You will need to find some more sources to support notability - at the moment the article is not showing the significant coverage in reliable sources required, hence the maintenance tags that I have added. – ukexpat (talk) 02:00, 2 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I also found a suitably licensed image at the Geograph project (an excellent source by the way), so I uploaded it to Commons and added it to the article. It's a little small and a higher resolution one would be much better, but it will do for now. – ukexpat (talk) 02:53, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Prince EX03 Red Racquet
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:44, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Zach_emory/Prince_O3_Red

Prince EX03 Red

This is an article about a racquet from the EX03 Prince series and lists specs, professional players who have used it, etc. It is not meant to be an advertisement, but rather a source of information for those who are interested in the racquet. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Zach emory (talk • contribs) 03:24, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
 * The article does read like an advertisement--you've got a large quote in there from the manufacturer, and your references are the manufacturer and a vendor website. I suggest dropping the quote, and getting some references into the article from sources not associated with the manufacture or sale of the racquet. If this racquet is notable, there should be some interviews or magazine articles about it.Nuujinn (talk) 12:55, 5 February 2010 (UTC)


 * As it is "fairly new" it is unlikely to meet the notability requirements. – ukexpat (talk) 18:57, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

Article on Enzo Mucci
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:45, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Rossomonte/Enzo Mucci

Hello I am created a page on the British Coach Enzo Mucci, I would like any feedback on this before I publish it. The URL is as follows -    http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Rossomonte/Enzo_Mucci&oldid=341291280  —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rossomonte (talk • contribs) 14:08, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Have a look at WP:BIO, it will give you some pointers as to what is expected of a biography article. At the present time their is no indication of why the gentlemen is notable and there are no independent third party references to back up the information. Paste  Let’s have a chat. 15:37, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Dr. Chris E. Stout
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:50, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Global initatives/Dr. Chris E. Stout This article discusses some of the awards and contributions of Dr. Stout. It focuses mostly on his newest project, the Center for Global Initiatives. --Global initatives (talk) 16:54, 2 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Please read WP:NPOV and WP:BIO, you would also seem from your username to have a close affiliation with the subject, indeed your username could be considered promotional, please see WP:USERNAME. Happy to help with any questions. Paste  Let’s have a chat. 17:12, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Sitefinity Page
Done - draft deleted as spam, user name blocked. – ukexpat (talk) 19:01, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi, I wrote an article about Sitefinity - a web content management system, could you please review it and let me know if I can move it to mainspace and what else I need to do to move it. Link to article is here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sitefinity

--Sitefinity (talk) 09:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

David Joseph Marcou
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:10, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I would like some feedback on the article User:Kayak paddler/David Joseph Marcou. I would like to know if it is neutral in tone, specific details as to notability, and formatted properly. Sincerely, --Kayak paddler (talk) 20:03, 17 January 2010 (UTC)
 * In terms of style, I'd suggest breaking it up into smaller paragraphs. It's also structure as two lists--you might consider merging the two sections and rewrite it as a narrative in chronological order. Nuujinn (talk) 11:41, 26 January 2010 (UTC)

Thank you very much for your feedback. I will review the guides you suggested Sincerely, --Kayak paddler (talk) 00:29, 27 January 2010 (UTC)
 * No problem, pop me a note on my talk page when you're done if you'd like me to take another look. Nuujinn (talk) 15:27, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Jhuber08/TeamDynamixHE
Done - speedily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 20:13, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Jhuber08/TeamDynamixHE

--Jhuber08 (talk) 20:31, 27 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Article is now in mainspace at TeamDynamixHE. I have tagged it for deletion as spam because it is way too promotional in tone. – ukexpat (talk) 19:25, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Marijan Dundek
Done - appears to be stale. – ukexpat (talk) 20:16, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Marijan Dundek (This is appearing in red so I must be doing something wrong in this link)

Big apologies for posting this twice - I accidentally merged it with someone else's query above mine (User: Mysdaao) which was checked 'Resolved', so I was afraid if I didn't post it again it wouldn't be seen as the editors would think it was all part of that other query. Very sorry for the confusion! My new comments are below, starting with 'Thank you for your prompt feedback'.

Hello, I have created a new entry which is currently in draft form at

User:Meechpod/Marijan Dundek

I've tried to find the answers to the following questions but I'm afraid I got lost in the many different help sections. My main questions are:

How do I upload the two images? (public domain)

How do I add the subject category?

There are probably some other issues that need fixing, like the format of the links in References and External Links.

I think that once these issues are resolved, the article is ready for going live.

Thank you for your help. I look forward to hearing from you.

Meechpod (talk) 12:25, 30 January 2010 (UTC)


 * You add categories by typing eg.   at the bottom of the page for each category that you want the article to appear in. It's best not to do this until the article is "live".


 * For help formating your references, see Citing sources. You especially need to make sure that you reference his "claims to fame" so to speak - say who thinks he's an authority, where does it say his book is the top-selling one, the most popular etc.


 * By the way, to link to an article or page here, like you have done above, you just need to enclose the name in two square brackets, eg.  User:Meechpod/new article name here  gives User:Meechpod/new article name here.


 * Hope this helps, -- Beloved Freak  13:07, 30 January 2010 (UTC)


 * (after edit conflict) I'll leave the upload question to somebody more familiar with that than I am; but are you sure the pictures are public domain? You'll need to demonstrate that. (If you're planning to use the photo of the Lesotho Promise from the Jewellery Outlook article, that appears to belong to Graff Diamonds).
 * You add an article to a category by inserting anywhere in it - usually at the bottom.
 * There are indeed issues which need fixing, so that the article is not ready for going live. The minor point is that the language is not encyclopaedic: please read WP:PEACOCK. The more serious one is that there are no independent, substantial references to reliable sources. While the article does implicitly assert the subject's notability as the author of a significant book, you need to establish his notability, and meet the stringent requirements of WP:BLP or the article will certainly be nominated for deletion as non-notable. --ColinFine (talk) 13:09, 30 January 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for your prompt feedback. I have removed 'peacock' terms such as 'top-selling' and 'popular' ('top-selling' was included on the basis of the book having the top spot in the Amazon ranking of books of this subject matter -- is that allowed to be mentioned?).

I read the section WP:BLP and it seems that the subject meets these criteria, as his book has been judged notable in its field by the organizations mentioned and peer reviews (such as the two cited in references). I'm not clear as to why these two sources do not qualify as independent, reliable references, as they come from independent published sources.

I don't believe I have other source material I can add, so please tell me if you feel the article does not merit inclusion on the basis of the references given so far and I will delete it. Thank you for your help. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Meechpod (talk • contribs) 18:38, 30 January 2010 (UTC)

Meechpod (talk) 19:24, 30 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Without cited references it is hard to tell, but at the moment the subject does not appear to be notable per WP:BIO. – ukexpat (talk) 20:21, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Realtek Media Player
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:19, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi,

The Realtek Media Player page has been deleted, I created this : User:Bikepunk2/Realtek_Media_Player Since this software exist and is actually installed on a lot of computers, people might want to know what AvRack is about (if the article is ok, I'll make a redirect from AvRack) and expect to find an answer on wikipedia. I just would like to know if it's ok, then I publish it or not. Thanks in advance for your time. Bikepunk2 (talk) 21:26, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
 * See WP:ITEXISTS section in the essay about the arguments you should avoid in deletion discussions. The article does not cite any independent reliable source. Sole Soul (talk) 22:26, 31 January 2010 (UTC)

Central Church of Christ (Paducah,KY)
Done - article deleted per WP:PROD. – ukexpat (talk) 20:22, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Just need someone to look at my article. It's not long, but it's short sweet and to the point. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Grandrivers,ky (talk • contribs) 22:17, 31 January 2010 (UTC)


 * It is short and to the point. I think you might consider casting the sentence beginning with "You" to a more neutral phrasing. It would also be nice if you could include some references about the church, from say local newspapers, and perhaps some links to other articles in wikipedia for context (such as any general articles on the Church of Christ). Post a note on my talk pages if you'd like any additional help. Nuujinn (talk) 23:55, 31 January 2010 (UTC)

Microscan Systems, Inc.
Done - no response from requester. No more sources added, looks like it's heading to AFD. – ukexpat (talk) 20:23, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Microscan Systems, Inc. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Tstraws/Microscan_Systems,_Inc.

Tabitha Straws 2/1/1010Tstraws (talk) 23:56, 1 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Two major problems: first it is very promotional in tone - the opening sentence is right out of the Marketing 101 handbook; second, you need to cite some significant coverage in reliable sources to demonstrate notability per WP:CORP. If you don't fix these issues soon, the article will, I am afraid, be tagged for speedily deletion. – ukexpat (talk) 19:03, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

Spoke fund
Done - draft deleted as spam, user name blocked for spamming. – ukexpat (talk) 20:30, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

To Whom It May Concern,

I would like feedback on my drafted article. This is about a new investment option model, called a "spoke fund". The article contrasts spoke funds from mutual funds, hedge funds, and separately managed accounts.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Islainvest/Spoke_fund

Islainvest (talk) 06:52, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

André Fernandes
Done – ukexpat (talk) 20:32, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I wrote and article on André Fernandes, a Portuguese composer (for film and tv) and musician, I'd like to have some feedback.

--Udenied (talk) 17:55, 2 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Good enough for a stub. If you could expand it further that would be great. – ukexpat (talk) 21:07, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

kaiserbahnhof halbe
Done – ukexpat (talk) 20:33, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

New article name is Kaiserbahnhof Halbe

Background

The town of Halbe is about 40 km south east of Berlin. Northeast of the town is a level crossing from the main street which leads to the train station for Halbe. Parallel to the railway track about 10 meters apart from each other to the north is the Public Station Building and to the south the extraordinary and historic listed property, the Royal train station building, also known as the Royal reception building. In older sources and on postcards the station is also known as the Emperor Station or is designated the Imperial Hunting Seat for the Hohenzollern family.

History

The history of Halbe station is closely linked with the development of the Prussian railway system. After 1838 the first Prussian railroad track had already been opened from Berlin to Potsdam. In the following decade further fast connections to the capital Berlin were developed. A second rapid development phase of the railway began in the 1860’s. In little more than a decade the number of the tracks emanating from Berlin doubled.

The Cottbus from Görlitz line

The first new building of this second phase was the Berlin connection with Cottbus from Görlitz. A royal decree of 1858 smoothed the way for the line's construction. Bethel Henry Strousbergs, the railway king of this time, formed the Berlin Görlitzer Railway Company. A cabinet order of May 1864 approved the building of the railway by Strousberg's corporation. The initial distance to Cottbus was completed in 1866, and to Görlitz the 1867. The main station in Berlin was designed in 1866-68 by August Orth.

The Halbe train station on this line was used from 1866 until just before the First World War in 1912 when the building was adapted for other uses, primarily by reducing the installation of partitions and with the height of the rooms being reduced with false ceilings. Furthermore a single-storey porch was added to the structure to the south and the goods sheds to the north were extended.

The Architect August Orth

The Royal reception building was designed by the renowned Berlin architect, August Orth. The building, probably a gift of the railway company to the kaiser, served as starting point for his hunts in the extensive forests surrounding Halbe. The kaiser and later emperors used the Royal reception building, which was administered by a house yard master, on only three occasions.

August Orth was one of the most important architects in Berlin in the second half of the 19th Century. Beside numerous churches (e.g. the 1865 Zionskirche in Berlin) he was particularly famous as the architect and planners for the rapidly developing railway network. He is regarded as one the founding fathers of Berlin's metropolitan railway. From the 1860s he was the preferred architect of the railway tycoon Bethel Henry Strousbergs, for which he sketched in 1867/68 a splendid palace and from 1868 the large cattle and slaughterhouse in Berlin's Wedding district. The buildings for the Berlin Görlitzer railway, which also developed from the Strousberg's connection, are an outstanding example of Orth’s work. The most important building was thereby the 1866-68 established large representative reception building in Berlin. SHis most famous was the Gorlitzer railway station, which was destroyed in World War Two. The site has a small cafe in the remaining building and is a large park. The Royal reception building in Halbe is an important example of Royal train stations by this the architect August Orth.

The architecture of the Station Building

That Station reception building the station Halbe is a red building of exposed bricks, whose wall surfaces are highlighted with horizontal strips by yellowish clay bricks. It consists actual reception building adjacent to the single-storey goods shed to the north directly with a ticket hall, restaurant and official residence as well as other facilities. The simple decoration of the building is completed by ornaments such as round windows.

The exterior of the Royal Train Station building

Royal reception building is a rectangular, single-storey building of exposed red bricks with four towers and a entry extending into the large freestanding area to the east of the building. The towers each open in in each case five arched arcades to the free standing area to the east and to the railway tracks to the west. At the track side there were formerly two entrances. From the free standing area the entrance was possible by those on horse and carriage. It was crowned by an eagle carved out of red stone. The wall surfaces consists of red clay bricks horizontally laid and broken by bands of yellow clay bricks. All joints are mortared with red joint mortar. Straight-lineness and regularity of the brick-work are emphasized by a joint line. The upper evel is surrounded by a parapet wall, which incorporates the remaining window and wall openings.

The interior of the Royal Train Station

The inside of the Royal receipt building comprises three complex curved rooms with magnificent painted ceilings. In the design drawings these are called 'Vestibul', 'Waiting rooms of the Kaiser' and 'Salon for the Attendants'. Finally there was a 'Toilet & closet' as well as an area for the servants. With the 1912 changes partition walls and an intermediate ceiling were inserted, the original space remaining hidden above the intermediate cover. Golden painted stucco ribs with narrow bundle staffs are visible comprising oak leaves and shells. A spiral staircase in the northeast tower gives access to the first floor.

The Halbe Station Buildings - an ensemble

With the Station reception building and Royal reception building Halbe ensemble of station buildings is unique in Brandenburg. First both buildings are important examples Prussian railway buildings in the second half of the 19th Century.

Other comparable Royal reception buildings

Royal reception building in Halbe documents the railway company's enthusiasm for assisting the Kaisers. The building is the earliest example of a building reserved for the Kaiser and his guests in Brandenburg. Comparable buildings are the later Kaiser stations in Zehdenick Neuhof (1888) and Joachimsthal (1899) and Potsdam (1906).

[edit] References Bidlungswerk Brandenburg der Deutschen Gesellschaft e.V.

—Preceding unsigned comment added by Petermacky (talk • contribs) 01:14, 3 February 2010 (UTC)

Draft at: User:Petermacky/Kaiserbahnhof Halbe


 * The article is now in mainspace - nice work so far. I have made a few formatting changes, but the most pressing issue is references - the article has none, but needs them to support notability. – ukexpat (talk) 21:33, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

N.G.J. Ballanta
Done – ukexpat (talk) 20:33, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

New article: N.G.J. Ballanta about an early 20th century West African composer and music scholar. User:Becky Brock Kiel/N.G.J. Ballanta Becky Brock Kiel (talk) 06:51, 3 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have made a few formatting and layout edits, but it looks pretty good. The article has references, but they are not cited properly. Please take a look at WP:CITE for assistance. – ukexpat (talk) 21:50, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Global Samaritans
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:36, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Check this article on the non-profit Global Samaritans.

User:Sporter85/Global Samaritans

Sporter85 (talk) 02:26, 4 February 2010 (UTC)
 * The article may not meet the notability criteria of WP:CLUB. Please provide some more third party references to substantiate the notability of the organization. Thanks. - Reconsider !  07:37, 4 February 2010 (UTC)

Micro-mega rule
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:37, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I am asking your response to my article 'Micro-mega rule', which was posted on January 25, 2010. It was posted as "this page is a new unreviewed article", but I cannot see it now in Wikipedia. Is it accepted? Can I receive some feedback?

Josep Colomer February 5, 2010

 —Preceding unsigned comment added by 83.54.199.217 (talk) 09:42, 5 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I cannot find any trace of an article called Micro-mega rule. Are you sure that was its title? What user name did you use to create it? Thanks. – ukexpat (talk) 01:55, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

Summer Leadership Initiative
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:38, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I have written an article: User:Tschweizer/new article name here    I would appreciate any feedback before I go live. This describes a not for profit organization that provides youth leadership programs. Thank you.

Tschweizer (talk) 01:10, 6 February 2010 (UTC) Tom  February 5, 2010
 * The article says the group was "founded by Tom Schweizer"—is that you? If so, you should read up on Wikipedia's best practices for editors with conflicts of interest and its FAQ for organizations. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 02:40, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

North of England Education Conference
Done – ukexpat (talk) 20:56, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

North of England Education Conference

My first article - looking for some general feedback and if it needs appropriate tag for improvement.

Many thanks

Davidburnell (talk) 16:59, 6 February 2010 (UTC)
 * First, I want to note that this is a very fine effort for a first article.


 * While I have some observations, most fall into the optional areas for improvement, as opposed to requirements.


 * I was looking for the overall purpose of the conference, and didn't find it clearly stated in the lede or as its own section. Those not familiar with the conference, might reasonably guess it has something to do with education goals, but it isn't obvious whether this means pedagogy, proposed legislation, or what. The best hint is in a section titled "Speakers" but that isn't the place I would look to find a purpose. Consider a separate section to cover the purpose or goals. It probably also belongs in the lede, but be aware that a lede section summarizes the article, so it is not only acceptable to be in both places, it is virtually required.
 * On a related point, I wondered if there were some notable deliverables - proposed legislation, proposed organizations or reorganizations of the educational system, white papers, or something else.
 * Please check out referencing. You nicely included some references, but the citation style could be improved.
 * Please examine the capitalization in the last sentence of your Delegates section (and you can refer to WP:MOSCAPS for help.) In some cases, e.g. Directors of Education, I assume the term is formal and requires capitalization, but I wonder if "Headteachers", "Higher Education", "Health", "Police",  and "Voluntary Sector" should be capitalized.
 * You have a major heading "Since 2004" and discuss each conference since that date. Is there something special about 2004, or is that simply when you starting an annual summary?
 * The annual conferences are a secondary heading (which is fine) but the 2011 conference has a different level heading and a different title structure. I don't see a good reason for this, and would use the same format as for the other conferences.
 * In the section on the 2007 conference, you refer to "14 - 19 Learners". I don't know what this means.-- SPhilbrick  T  22:58, 6 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have removed the tag and made a few minor formatting edits. Marking as done for archiving. – ukexpat (talk) 20:56, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

War Of Love
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:57, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

I created the article for Christian Singer Sheila Walsh's album User:Hermeyjdi/War Of Love and was looking for feedback on it. Is it ready to post on the main site and if so how do I do that? Hermeyjdi (talk) 18:35, 6 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I am afraid that it is not ready to me moved to the mainspace yet. At the moment there are no references from reliable sources to demonstrate that the album meets the notability guidelines set out at WP:NALBUM, and without those it would be quickly nominated for deletion. – ukexpat (talk) 18:50, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

Richard O'Brien (author, collectible toys expert)
Done - deleted as a copyvio. – ukexpat (talk) 20:57, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi - If possible, I'd like some feedback on a collectible toys expert in this article: Richard O'Brien (author/collectible toys expert). It's my first article and I want to be sure it's okay. Anyone who likes toys or comics might be interested in reading it. Thanks AlisonMarek (talk) 01:43, 7 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have moved it to Richard O'Brien (author) which is in line with Wikipedia's naming conventions. I have also reviewed it and made some formatting changes. The main issue is with references - you should try to use in-line citations from the references you are using - please take a look at WP:FOOTNOTE and WP:CITE for assistance or leave me a message on my talk page. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 02:01, 7 February 2010 (UTC)


 * It has now been tagged for deletion as a copyvio of the author's bio on amazon.com. – ukexpat (talk) 18:51, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

new Article: List_of_countries_by_greenhouse_gas_emissions_per_unit_area - feedback requested
Done – ukexpat (talk) 21:02, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:2SickNick/List_of_countries_by_greenhouse_gas_emissions_per_unit_area

Perhaps an issue is that because the page is based on another list of GHG per capita, some of the text is repeated from the original page.

On the other hand, these lists of countries can get out of hand if too many different lists are put in the same article and, in any case, the whole point of this article is that there are other ways to rank countries other than total GHG emissions or GHG per capita - which are the generally quoted yardsticks.

- Nick —Preceding unsigned comment added by 2SickNick (talk • contribs) 06:14, 8 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry, but I don’t feel it is appropriate as an article, which is unfortunate, as you’ve obviously gone to a fair amount of work to create it.


 * As you correctly note, there are multiple ways of measuring GHG emissions. I don’t see the value of GHG/area. I read your explanation; it didn’t persuade me, but I’ll emphasize, it isn’t particularly important to try to persuade me. What is important is to find reliable sources discussing GHG as a ratio to area as a meaningful measure. Short of that, the article is Original Research which is strictly prohibited.


 * As an alternative, if you are convinced that it has value as a measure, you can persuade a reliable source to publish your research. If it catches on, it will then be appropriate for Wikipedia. SPhilbrick  T  16:38, 9 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Could it be relevant to the idea of ecological footprint? In any case, you do need to explain exactly why such an article could be useful. Itsmejudith (talk) 18:02, 9 February 2010 (UTC)

I don't entirely see your point about it being "original research" All I've done is to take existing tables of data that are themselves encyclopaedic and combine them together. maybe I've combined it in a new way, but it doesn't seem so unusual to me. Seems as if I need to learn more about the purpose and style of Wikipedia, anyway. Thanks for the feedback. 2SickNick (talk) 00:39, 10 February 2010 (UTC)

OK, I've now read "What Wikipedia is not, and the no-original-thought clause is clearly valid NOT. I'll use the page somewhere else and maybe one day it's results will be posted back here by a third party! —Preceding unsigned comment added by 2SickNick (talk • contribs) 00:31, 11 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Glad you understand. Sometimes it seems odd to some that original thoughts would actually be discouraged, but it does make some sense. Good luck getting it published elsewhere. -- SPhilbrick  T  03:58, 12 February 2010 (UTC)

Joseph M. Sabol--Request for review
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 21:03, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Picman6500/Joseph M. Sabol

This article is about Joseph M Sabol. An American Videographer who produced a documentary video on the 3 Mile Island Steam Generator Transport. This over land hauling project was the largest in US History. To do what he did was next to impossible. Joe did this entire production by himself at the request of KMX International, the company responsible for the over land transport.

From what I understand, he shot this video covering 70 miles in 30 days, film style. If you were able to see the obstacles in this job, you would appreciate this. The companies that were involved have been nominated for awards in their respective industries for the highest achievement possible using the video Joseph shot. Joseph did an amazing job and since he is a product of Parma Ohio, we (the authors ) feel he is notable.

We request a review so that we can correct any problems so it is published on Wikipedia and the other reason is that we feel not only that this article is worthy of publication but if it were not for the Security Issues involved, the media would have picked this up much sooner than it did. As it was, there was a News Media Center established in the same place as they used during the nuclear accident. Joseph was the only one allowed to videotape this entire project from the actual off loading on the Deleware to the arrival at 3 Mile Island. This is unprecedented.

Thank You

Siduanil (talk) 15:36, 8 February 2010 (UTC)Sidu Anil, Author, 2/08/2010


 * The article, which is currently at User:Picman6500/new_article_name_here, has a number of issues, most importantly notability. There is no clear assertion as to why Mr. Sabol or his company meet Wikipedia notability criteria.  You could make a case for the notability of the transport of the steam generators, if it was the largest overland transport in US history (citation needed though), but that fact would not confer notability on the person who filmed it.  The documentary itself may be notable enough for an article, if it attracts sufficient interest and media attention.  It is conceivable that J & J Video Productions meets the criteria through its work, so the article might stand a better chance of sticking if it was about J & J rather than its owner.  In any case, you will need to assert notability clearly, preferably in the lead section, before this article is ready to go live, and support it with reliable independent third-party citations.  If you believe this is about a unique and unprecedented person or event, you need citations to confirm this.
 * Once notability is established, the tone of the article needs some work. The present version reads in parts like Mr. Sabol’s resume and in parts like promotional literature for his company.  Phrases like “being somewhat of a visionary” are POV.  Individuals should be referred to by their surnames (“Sabol” rather than “Joe” or “Joseph”) (see WP:MOS). Where specific assertions are made, such as the “national recognition” of J & J, the uniqueness of the steam generator transport etc., these should be supported with inline citations. Finally, you currently have external links embedded in the text, which is incorrect for Wikipedia.  Many of these need to be changed to internal Wikilinks (such as Kutztown State University and Pat Garrett).  Some others should be replaced with inline citations that confirm specific assertions, and any remaining relevant external links, such as the link to J & J’s official website, should be placed in an External links section at the bottom of the article.
 * NB: You describe yourself as the "authors", but the article appears to have been created by User:Picman6500. Please read WP:Multiple accounts and WP:Role account to ensure you are editing according to Wikipedia policy.  Ka renjc 11:35, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Raleigh Downtown Live
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 21:19, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

User:DeepSouth2010/Raleigh Downtown Live Raleigh Downtown Live

(DeepSouth2010 (talk) 18:21, 8 February 2010 (UTC))


 * It's not clear to me whether this is supposed to be an article about the event or a list of acts that have appeared at the event. Either way there are notability issues. You will need to find significant coverage in reliable sources to demonstrate notability. The event's own website doesn't count as it is a self-reference, but press coverage would be ideal. – ukexpat (talk) 18:47, 8 February 2010 (UTC)

Centage
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 21:19, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

This is my first article. I'm researching budgeting companies for a college task and believe this work in process has great information. It is not complete, but I want to be sure I'm doing things correctly.

User:Jacobsassoon/Centage

Jacobsassoon (talk) 22:32, 8 February 2010 (UTC)
 * In its current state, it reads like an advertisement for the company's products. If you're writing about the corporation, I think more information about the corp. would be appropriate.Nuujinn (talk) 03:22, 10 February 2010 (UTC)

lleitmotif
Done - article deleted as spam, user name blocked. – ukexpat (talk) 19:23, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

lleitmotif

Hello, this is my first wikipedia entry. Please give me feedback.

Lleitmotif (talk) 06:41, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You might want to take a look at WP:NOTADVERTISING. - Reconsider !  08:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Article tagged for speedy deletion as spam - clearly advertising masquerading as an article. User name reported as a spam name. – ukexpat (talk) 19:03, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Opium and Romanticism
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 21:29, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Opium and Romanticism

I just wrote the article and was hoping to get some feedback on it. It is about the presence of opium during the Romantic era in England, and it focuses on three different arguments about its ability to influence literary creation. It ends with some examples of famous Romanticists and their creations. Please let me know what you think!

Aoleson88 (talk) 03:56, 9 February 2010 (UTC)


 * It looks to me like an essay assignment, which is not appropriate for Wikipedia.


 * I suggest you read the What Wikipedia is not policy page; in particular, the sections on Wikipedia is not a publisher of original thought ("Although Wikipedia is supposed to compile human knowledge, it is not a vehicle to make opinions become part of such knowledge") and Wikipedia is not a manual, guidebook, textbook, or scientific journal ("The purpose of Wikipedia is to present facts, not to teach subject matter"). Perhaps the article title should be redirected to Opium instead? Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 05:34, 9 February 2010 (UTC)

I have edited some of the information. It was not an essay assignment--I think the last line in the Overview made it appear that way. Does this look any better? Aoleson88 (talk) 04:44, 11 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Well, just starting with the first paragraph I see a number of style and wording issues (but I'm new at this). Using the word "ensnared" is probably not the best choice--it's not really neutral. "what is most commonly recognized" is passive voice and not referenced--I studied comp lit for about 14 years, and personally I don't regard opium as a "creative counterpart" to literature and poetry--and the important thing about that is both mine and and the position you put into the paragraph are points of view, and don't belong in an encyclopedia article. Likewise, if you want to assert that there were three different views of the effects of opium on Romantic Lit, you need to supply a verifiable reference. And it seems from the later text that these three views are from three people; Abrams, Schnieder and Hayter. Are there not more proponants of each position you could cite?


 * It gets better further on, but you might consider rewording parts of it to make the references clearer in the prose (eg. "Soandso has argued that Coleridge's use of opium interfered with his ability to finish Cristobal and Kubla Kahn"). For example, the Opium, Real Images, and Dreaming as a Channel section reads well, but it's unclear to me if the entirety of that section is Hayter's opinions, or comes from other sources as well. It might help if you think of this as an article on the different views of the effects of opium use on English romantic authors,


 * I think you have a nice start here, though, good work! Nuujinn (talk) 01:15, 13 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Thank you so much for your feedback! It was very helpful!  When I re-read the article I definitely saw what you meant about it sounding somewhat skewed instead of impartial.  I'm still editing, so we will see how it goes!  Thanks again!  Aoleson88 (talk) 16:30, 15 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Glad to help, it's a good topic, I wrote my comp lit senior page on opium and coleridge. Drop me a note on my talk page or here when you're down with another round of edits, and I'll take a look. Nuujinn (talk) 01:43, 16 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Just took a look at the revised version, it looks like it's much better. Could someone else take a look and see what else needs to be done before it can be moved into real space? Nuujinn (talk) 01:00, 20 February 2010 (UTC)

Sean Quinn (writer)
Done – ukexpat (talk) 21:45, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Article Name: Sean Quinn (writer)

I'd welcome some general feedback--I know the article needs more content--and I'm working on that. I also would like help directing people to this article, for instance, if you search for "Sean Quinn" an Irish Businessman comes up with no direct link to Sean Quinn the White House Press Corps writer. Thank you,

IYHBerry —Preceding unsigned comment added by Iyhberry (talk • contribs) 02:04, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I don't entirely know if this should be an independent article just yet, as there may need to be more significant coverage of this individual from third-party sources. Could be mistaken. In any case, the references need proper formatting, the mentioning of President Obama should likely include a link to his article, and "on the ground" might read better if it were hyphenated. Also, the first biographical ref didn't directly lead to a page which verified its claim. -- James26 (talk) 08:32, 10 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I've cleaned up the article a little (removing unsourced info, adding more citations) but it could still use some (sourced) expansion. The main thing it needs now, though, is another incoming link or two. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 01:45, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Wishabi
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 22:06, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Wishabi

I would appreciate any feedback and/or edits to this article that I've created about Wishabi, a Canadian based online shopping service. I've read all the guidelines and tried to follow them as much as possible before moving it from user space to public space. It's looking for editing, proofreading and any other changes that would make it a good Wikipedia article. Any feedback is welcomed, and I'll do my very best to fix or improve this article. Thanks! Mkpauling (talk) 04:01, 12 February 2010 (UTC)
 * To your credit, it's well written and I think you have included enough external sources to be able to argue for notability. But the article reads as if you're somehow associated with the company and have written an advertisement. Nuujinn (talk) 00:44, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

Brett Wood
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:08, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Brett Wood

(Pmdance (talk) 12:52, 11 February 2010 (UTC))


 * I'm assuming that you're asking for feedback on User:Pmdance/Brett Wood (the article you created) and not Brett Wood (as you linked to above). The article looks promising, but it needs references for statements like "Brett has recorded on many Australian albums". Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 19:37, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

New article /* Cumbre Judicial Iberoamericana */
Done - deleted, not in English. – ukexpat (talk) 22:28, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hello to everybody

I'd like to request for feedback about my new article "Cumbre Judicial Iberoamericana" (Latinamerican Judicial Summit). The summit is a non profit organization which involves al the Latinamerican judiciaries, plus Andorra, Spain and Portugal.

At the moment I work for the General Council for the Spanish Judiciary, and this is the institution which runs the permanent secretariat of the related summit.

The General Council has already taken an agreement in order to authorize this article at wikipedia.

Thanks to all for your feedback

Jorge

Jcarrera747 (talk) 18:45, 11 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Assuming that you're referring to Cumbre Judicial Iberoamericana, it's got one huge problem: it's not in English. Maybe you should post it at http://es.wikipedia.org instead? The English language Wikipedia is for articles in English. Dori ❦ (Talk ❖ Contribs ❖ Review) ❦ 19:43, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Harley Sherman Manuel
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:29, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Harley Sherman Manuel

Looking for feedback on this document. Waiting on resource from JSTOR to corroborate story. Don't have access to dbase.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Arlsphinx/new_article_name_here —Preceding unsigned comment added by Arlsphinx (talk • contribs) 18:49, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Arlsphinx (talk) 18:46, 11 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I don't believe this person will meet the Notability standards. Being a Doctor isn't inherently notable. I see a peer-reviewed paper, so the specific relevant standard is WP:ACADEMIC. It doesn't appear to me that he qualifies.-- SPhilbrick  T  18:32, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

Uyama Hiroto
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:30, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

A beginner here, writing an article about an established Japanese musician and producer who ironically does not have much information posted about him on the web. http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Elliotmc/Uyama_Hiroto —Preceding unsigned comment added by Elliotmc (talk • contribs) 22:33, 11 February 2010 (UTC)
 * With just three sentences and no verifiable sources, I think it will take some more work. References do not have to be web based--magazine and newspaper articles are fine if correctly referenced. Nuujinn (talk) 00:30, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

SeeClickFix
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:32, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Ellioteaton/SeeClickFix [[user:Ellioteaton/SeeClickFix]

Hi, I'm new to Wiki and I think I've followed all the guidelines pretty well, I just wanted to make sure the formatting on this is correct. Any suggestions are appreciated!

Ellioteaton (talk) 22:39, 11 February 2010 (UTC)
 * There are serious issues with Notability Very few links to reliable sources. One of your best links, to the NYTimes, was messed up. I partially fixed it, but you ought to look at WP:CITE to cite it properly. Find a way to use the NYT reference in the article, as opposed to simply in the list of external links. (External links do not count when assessing notability).
 * As it stands, if it were proposed for deletion, I'd be hard pressed to disagree, but if you can add more reliable sources, it will help.-- SPhilbrick  T  17:41, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

Criticism of the IPCC
Done - redirected to Criticism of the IPCC AR4. – ukexpat (talk) 22:34, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

This is a new article which i just moved to mainspace, i would like both help and feedback on tidying it up. Thanks mark nutley (talk) 10:48, 12 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It needs a lot of work - reference citation style and general cleanup. I'll try to make some of the fixes myself.-- SPhilbrick  T  15:11, 12 February 2010 (UTC)
 * After further review, I agree that this article is redundant given Criticism of the IPCC AR4. While an argument can be made for a broad article covering all criticism of the IPCC, rather than just AR4, virtually everything in this article relates to AR$. Consequently I will support the AfD (subject to merging an unique, relevant material). You obviously have interest in the subject, but that interest would be better served improving the existing article. --  SPhilbrick  T  15:20, 12 February 2010 (UTC)

Fry-Wagner Moving & Storage
Done - speedily deleted. – ukexpat (talk) 22:35, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Fry-Wagner Moving & Storage is at article about a notable company in the moving industry. The article is linked and referenced. I would appreciate your feedback. Thanks!

Kristy860 (talk) 14:34, 12 February 2010 (UTC)
 * To establish notability, you need to use verifiable references, and in this case all of your references appear to be from Fry-Wagner and UVL. Also, the article appears to be an advertisement more than anything else, see WP:NPOV for what you should strive for.
 * The timeline is done as a list and I think that would be better rendered in prose, and fleshed out with more details. Nuujinn (talk) 00:26, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

obselidia
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:37, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi,

this is the first time I've ever written for wikipedia, not sure if I've got it right. In particular, I couldn't figure out how to post the reference to an article I quote.

Thank you for your patience and your help.

Best Deebstar (talk) 05:12, 13 February 2010 (UTC)deebstar
 * Unfortunately, your article contains very little. Among other issues, it has no reliable sources. You asked specifically about posting a reference - check out WP:CITE and footnotes -- SPhilbrick  T  18:03, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

Kasapuram
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:44, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

A small village located in the Guntakal Mandal area of Anantapur district in the southern state of Andhra Pradesh in India. Kasapuram is famous for it's Lord Nettikanti Anjaneya temple which carries it's history way back from 16th Century, a period of Vijayanagara Samrajya of Sri Krishna Devaraya.

The Village attracts interest because of the Hanuman Temple whose annual income can be said to have crossed Rs. 2 Crores due to evergrowing amount of pilgrimage. About half of the Village's population depends on the Temple for livelihood directly or indirectly.

Kasapuram can be divided into two parts by the main road, where one part is the proper village and the other being the Temple area. The Temple area is said to have had a name called "Nettikallu" which is the base for the Lord's name "Nettikanti" currently. The temple area looks quite developed because of a huge pilgrimage and income of the Temple. The Village borders the Anantapur district area adjoining Maddikera village of Kurnool district.

References http://www.apendowments.gov.in/Kasapuram/Pages/Home.aspx —Preceding unsigned comment added by Vinay.kvc (talk • contribs) 15:24, 13 February 2010 (UTC)
 * This is not a place to write an article, but to ask for feedback about an article you have written elsewhere. Check out Article wizard 2.0 for an easy way to start your article.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:59, 13 February 2010 (UTC)

Zibbet
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 22:46, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

User:ACraftyArab/Zibbet

I'm new to Wiki and would love some feedback

ACraftyArab (talk) 06:36, 14 February 2010 (UTC)Kay Tarapolsi, Feb 13, 2010ACraftyArab (talk) 06:36, 14 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry but it reads like WP:PROMOTION. Wikipedia article must meet Notability standards, this one has not met that standard. SPhilbrick  T  16:01, 15 February 2010 (UTC)

Eckhard Stratmann-Mertens
Done – ukexpat (talk) 22:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

The name of my article is Eckhard Stratmann-Mertens, a founding member of the German Green Party and one of the first Green Party members to be elected to the German parliament. (A group of 28 were sent all at once.) Additionally, Mr. Stratmann-Mertens was the first Green to speak in the Bundestag (parliament).

This article is essentially a translation from the German Wikipedia article. Finding new information in a newspaper article, which was not in the original German article, some of my article is different from the original.

Anyone familiar with translation knows that one must always choose between translating word-for-word and making it read like a well-written text. Translating word-for-word results in very awkward writing, full of strange grammar and syntax. To make things sound better in English (my native language), I re-wrote some of the original, staying true to the information contained in it.

I have revised this article a number of times, improving the writing and look of the page and I think it's ready to go live. Then the lists and articles where Mr. Stratmann-Merten's name already exists on English and German Wikipedia pages can be linked to this article.

Thanks!

Marrante (talk) 16:09, 14 February 2010 (UTC) Valentine's Day
 * It's good and nearly ready to go live. You did the right thing in not sticking too closely to the German, because en.wikipedia doesn't have to be exactly the same as de.wikipedia. A few minor points.


 * Start with the subject's name in bold, and with his alternative name (formerly known as...) . After that, only use his surname. I thought the corduroys and open-necked shirt were relevant, but what he said wasn't. Perhaps there is a nuance in the German that is impossible to translate (was this much more informal than the usual first speech, for example?) You could just leave it out. In the lede you can just say he is a school teacher and give the details later. The name of the school doesn't need to be in twice. No need for links to articles in German wiki. Thanks very much for your contribution. Itsmejudith (talk) 14:10, 15 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi and thanks for responding. I have made all the recommended changes, re-working some of it to make the copy (as in copywriting, not duplicate) flow better. The significance of the quote is that in his introduction, Stratmann-Mertens addressed the citizens of Germany before the members of parliament. I have added that information to the article, but left out the actual quote. I think the description in prose is sufficient.


 * I hope this can now go live.


 * Quick question — not sure how to search for the answer, so I hope it's okay to ask here. I notice that some pages seem to go live with a "redirect" from the User page. Why is that sometimes done and can that be avoided with this contribution of mine?


 * Marrante (talk) 17:31, 15 February 2010 (UTC)
 * The move will automatically generate a redirect. When I write a new article, I do it in user space, then move it into main space, then delete the redirect.-- SPhilbrick  T  17:58, 16 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks! Marrante (talk) 17:27, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

Praise
Done – ukexpat (talk) 22:59, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Dear Wikipedia, If I had Wikipedia when I was in school and growing up I today would be a genius. With all the HTML and ways of finding and defining material and information I would have the ego of Texas. I love Wikipedia. It is the absolute best dictionary thesaurus and Encyclopedia on this planet.

You are a Godsend to me. Sincerely  —Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.158.128.52 (talk) 02:35, 17 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Thank you for your comment. – ukexpat (talk) 02:39, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

Blik
Done - speedily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 16:48, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

I would appreciate any feedback for the post I wrote about blik - a cool wall graphics company in Venice. thanks

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Hkoop/blik

Hkoop (talk) 23:11, 10 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, your citations are malformed, see WP:Cite for more info. Also, I'm not sure you have established notibility, the article could use more 2nd and 3rd party references. And this reads pretty much like an advertisement--making the prose more neutral and less enthusiatic would help. Nuujinn (talk) 23:02, 14 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Obviously your advice to tone it down has fallen on deaf ears. It still reads like an advertisement so I have tagged it for deletion as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 21:48, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

New Europe (newspaper)
Done - speedily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 16:57, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

This is my first article. Any feedback would be appreciated!

New Europe User:Sintechhs/NewEurope

Sintechhs (talk) 12:50, 16 February 2010 (UTC)


 * A google search show many references to this newspaper. I suggest that you add more information from the other sources so that the article sounds less like a press release.


 * I would also suggest removing the section 'Media Partnerships' because it contains mainly information that will go out-of-date.


 * And lastly, consider adding

to the end of the article. jmcw (talk) 15:14, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

Please Review- East Meets West Productions
Done - speedily deleted per A7 of the criteria. – ukexpat (talk) 16:59, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

I would really appreciate someone reviewing my article on East Meets West Productions. It was named the Small Business Administration's Minority Small Business of the year. I think the article has good citations and is properly formatted.

Thank you,

NMR2010 (talk) 17:27, 16 February 2010 (UTC)
 * No, it was named the SBA's Corpus Christi district office MSB of the year; not the same thing! -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  18:06, 16 February 2010 (UTC)

Philosophic Burden of Proof
Done – ukexpat (talk) 17:00, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Originally there was one Burden of Proof article that attempted to deal with both Legal Burden of Proof and Philosophic Burden of Proof. This proved too unwieldy, and we therefore decided to split the article into two. Philocentric (talk) 18:34, 16 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It seems like you took some very positive and constructive steps, great work! One thing I recommend you try before another big change is to notify the Wikiprojects listed on the top of the article's talkpage. In this case, WikiProject Law. In fact as this is a specialized area and there are some great editors over there please post this thread to that project's talkpage and ask if some folks could take a look. -- Banj e  b oi   19:29, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

Douglas M. Johnston
Done - in mainspace and reviewed; user name blocked as a spam name. – ukexpat (talk) 17:02, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Douglas M. Johnston

LauraICRD (talk) 20:17, 16 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have reviewed the article and removed the new article tag. I added some wikilinks and made some other formatting changes. The article does read like a resumé or curriculum vitae so I have added an appropriate tag and it would appear from your user name that you have a conflict of interest. – ukexpat (talk) 20:40, 16 February 2010 (UTC)

The Atomic Coffee Machine
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 17:20, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

This article concerns the 1946 'Atomic' coffee machine. It is factual and referenced. In the future I hope to add more information but I have already provided good references for the article. The images are my own work. I would be happy to have it reviewed.
 * Generally, this is reasonably written. However, references do not establish notability. For instance, blogs (e.g., CoffeeSnobs.org) are not reliable references, and a Google Patent search that shows only the patent abstract and date is dangerously close to original research. Also often surprising to new editors, other Wikipedia articles are not considered reliable sources. Notability requires coverage in reliable sources other than the ones just mentioned, and beyond a commercial web site dedicated to the subject of the article. See RS and N for more on reliable sources and notability, respectively. In this case, you might try searching for coverage in art history or art deco publications, like Art Nouveau and the like. One other minor point : Wikipedia's Manual of Style discourages the use of "The" as the first word in an article title. Better to change yours to "Atomic Coffee Machine".Writeswift 17:07, 17 February 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Writeswift (talk • contribs)

SEARCH, The National Consortium for Justice Information and Statistics
Done - Article deleted and user blocked for promotional editing. They can request unblock, have the article userfied or simply start a non-work related account. -- Banj e b oi   19:12, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

SEARCH, The National Consortium for Justice Information and Statistics

I am new to Wikipedia and would like feedback on which parts sound too much like an advertisement. Thanks!

Chrisatsearch (talk) 15:17, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

Ravens & Chimes
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 17:28, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi Wikipedia community. I would like some help/feedback about my new article Ravens & Chimes that I've posted in my userspace. Any constructive input would be greatly appreciated! Thanks, Baileykwilliams (talk) 18:37, 17 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Fixed the link to your article, and responded on the talk page. &mdash;Akrabbimtalk 19:05, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

Userpages
Done - answered. – ukexpat (talk) 17:31, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

I notice that a lot of people on here have fancy "user pages" with colorful alignments and great pictures. Wikipedia could save a lot of server space if we just simplify. Western Pines (talk) 07:19, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * The place to propose changes is Village pump/Proposals rather than here, which is where people can request feedback on articles they have created. Excessively complex user pages are not encouraged, particularly when the content is unrelated to Wikipedia activities, but opinions on appropriate user page content vary considerably.  There is guidance on what you can and cannot have on your userpage here.  See also WP:PERFORMANCE.  Ka renjc 12:02, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Tania de Jong
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 17:37, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi could i please get some feedback on this article?? it's been up for more than 24 hrs but i havent gotten any feedback. anything would be appreciated! thanks in advance :)

Tania de Jong Enyfink135 (talk) 11:52, 18 February 2010 (UTC)


 * This seems to be your first article – congratulations on a pretty good start, with most boxes ticked. I’ll remove the unreviewed tag.  Suggestions:  I’d split the current lead section after  “in 40 countries” and place the rest of it in a new “biography” section, and expand her personal details a little if relevant info is available (the Morris Kaplan and Lorna Edwards interviews currently cited in “Further links”would seem to be a good source.).  The Reviews section lacks checkable citations and is promotional rather than encyclopaedic; it would be better removed altogether.  YouTube links are not blanket-banned in Wikipedia but they often involve illegal use of copyrighted material, and videos of shows and newscasts are specifically mentioned as of concern (see guidance here).  Unless you can show that your YouTube links don’t breach policy, they are better removed too.  The format of some of your Further links needs tweaking, and you need to add categories  - I will help out directly with this shortly.  Ka renjc 12:36, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Jacob Eisenberg (American musician and author)
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 17:45, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

I would like to get some feedback on this article. I think it's okay, but would just like to run it by the crew here.

This is about a man who was a noted piano author and teacher during the 1920's - 1940's. He was active till his death in 1964. He wrote about 100 articles and a number of books related to teaching piano. He also interviewed a number of world-famous musicians in his day. Because of the era in which he was active, much of his work is hard to come by now, though there are some articles or excerpts on the web and some of his books are available for sale at Amazon, Barnes & Noble and antiquarian sellers online. Of course, I can't use links for Amazon & crew, so I amassed what I could and added the list of his works that I found in his last book, which I own. He also made a very important contribution to another notable person, namely his wife, in that he taught her piano, an act that led to her becoming internationally famous toward the end of her life.

I look forward to any feedback on this article, either here or on my talk page. Thanks in advance! Marrante (talk) 15:26, 18 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I think it looks pretty good. Nuujinn (talk) 01:45, 20 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you! Marrante (talk) 03:13, 20 February 2010 (UTC)

Making an article 'Live'
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 17:48, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

I've created an article, but how do I make it 'Live' now? I know it sounds simple, but I can't seem to figure it out... —Preceding unsigned comment added by Newsdoggie (talk • contribs) 17:00, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * If you mean Ross Palombo, it is live.


 * However, it needs work. It needs proper references - see WP:CITE and footnotes for more info.


 * Adding references properly looks hard, but it isn't. Come back if you need more help.-- SPhilbrick  T  17:43, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Michelle Dipp
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 18:04, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Can the team review the new article Michelle Dipp?

Holly2305 (talk) 17:18, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm new here, but this looks like a résumé to me. Have a look at WP:SPIP and RESUME to find out more about Wikipedia's policy on this sort of article. Marrante (talk) 17:43, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I agree. CEO's of companies are not always notable, and VPs almost never are (on the basis of position). Meeting Notability standards with reliable sources is important. I confess I looked quickly, but I didn't see any evidence of a source sufficient to establish notability.-- SPhilbrick  T  17:50, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Ok fine but pls dont go tag the article just yet..lets bring this concerns up on the talk page first ...see if your concerns can be satisfied...We cant keep deleting every new article form new editors..we will keep losing them ...! no speed delete needed i think ..if you like a vote perhaps ..Buzzzsherman (talk) 17:56, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It would help if new editors would create new articles in user space, then we wouldn't have to worry about the possibility of over-zealous deletion. In fact, if Holly would consent, this could be moved to user space, and cleaned up at a leisurely pace. Otherwise, it should meet out requirement and it decidedly doesn't. I did a quick search myself to see if I could find something notable about her, but failed. Doesn't mean it isn't there, but it is more work than just a simple search and add references.-- SPhilbrick  T  18:48, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Well i like you Sphilbrick...great idea lets PM her and make this suggestion...if only everyone was like you and thinking of the new editors feelings ..no way a new editor will ever know all the 5000 guidelines... !hug Sphilbrick...Buzzzsherman (talk) 19:25, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

vegetable monsters
Done - deleted per this AFD discussion. – ukexpat (talk) 18:06, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

vegetable monsters Please give me all the feedback possible - and any comments you may have on content and/or style. Rdeastis (talk) 19:20, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * This page needs a lot of work, and may not meet the criteria for inclusion at all. The article applies the term to all plants of the genus Monstera, whereas there is no reference to indicate that this term is in general use for this genus of plants.  The term is attributed to Erasmus Darwin who does, indeed, use the term in his Botanic Garden..., but no to refer to Monstera species specifically, but to any plant which meets his definition (i.e. plants with double flowers).  The etymology of the term "monster" is also wrong: monstrum is no "that which teaches" but rather "that which warns" (monere = to warn). (See the etymology of monster at M-W.com.) If the article is allowed to remain, the references must be rewritten to be inline references, so the facts and the references which verify them can be linked.  WikiDan61 ChatMe!ReadMe!! 19:41, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Rockbridge Rapids Baseball
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 18:53, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Rockbridge Rapids Baseball

User:Stogieman/Rockbridge Rapids Baseball

How do I move the draft to the main page? Stogieman (talk) 22:34, 13 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It's not yet ready for the main page. You need to establish Notability through the use of reliable sources as references. While it looks like you have one reference, it isn't properly formed. Check out footnotes for help, and one will not be enough.-- SPhilbrick  T  03:18, 14 February 2010 (UTC)

Scientific Anomalies
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 18:55, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

There is a growing public mistrust of scientific announcements with Global Warming the latest to be under attack. The essay suggests a number of anomalies that should be more widely publicised. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Michael Nettleton (talk • contribs) 16:10, 14 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Assuming you are talking about this, sorry, but it reads like an essay. See WP:NOT. While you do have some references, these are brought together as a WP:SYNTHESIS, which is not appropriate for Wikipedia.  SPhilbrick  T  15:57, 15 February 2010 (UTC)

The Bar Method
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 18:56, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

This article was previously deleted. I never saw the original, but wanted to publish my version of The Bar Method. Thank you. 34pin6 (talk) 17:36, 14 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I did a quick search in Google . This article seems like advertising: see WP:ADVERT. Try to find some strong third-party source: YouTube is not WP:RELIABLE. jmcw (talk) 14:51, 17 February 2010 (UTC)


 * A YouTube video can fall under a reliable source, under two conditions:
 * 1. If it is a convenience link
 * 2. If the video contains information that is deemed a secondary source (see YouTube in the section on reliable sources here)
 * It appears in this case, the author is utilizing the YouTube videos - which house the original news stories - in good faith. As for advertising, it does not appear, at least to me, that this stub is anymore advertising-sounding than the entry on, say, Pilates. I think it's a good start. However, I would double check the facts here of the article before publish; the first sentence, for example, doesn't have adequate support. Artemis84 (talk) 21:07, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

I found some better sources: KUSA-TV, KUSI-TV, Huffington Post, San Diego Magazine and a couple others, all covering the Bar Method in depth. Please have a look: Bar Method Draft. 34pin6 (talk) 01:35, 20 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Just had a look at Bar Method. It has a better encyclopedic tone and many media references to establish notability. The article would be still better if you could find any reference to support the technical description or a reference from a third-party review of the system. Congratulations! jmcw (talk) 13:29, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

HS Beavers
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 18:58, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

HS Beavers

How can I get the infobox to the top of the page?

I used Template:Infobox UK Ultimate —Preceding unsigned comment added by Fuzzybear47 (talk • contribs) 00:26, 17 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It looks like there is a problem with the template, but it also looks like you created the template. My template skills are limited, but I'll try to see if I can figure it out.-- SPhilbrick  T  01:22, 17 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I looked at the template, but I do not see the problem. You might check at the help desk, where there are more volunteers,a nd often some with technical expertise. You might also post here, where editors with interest and expertise with infoboxes can help. BTW, I'm a it surprised they call themselves and Ultimate Frisbee team, most teams I know have dropped the "Frisbee" as the game is often played with other brands of discs.-- SPhilbrick  T  01:44, 17 February 2010 (UTC)
 * You have two issues, IMHO. One is the article itself which I'm not sure if you're creating for fun or practice but I posted a welcome template to your talkpage which has some helpful links. The second is the template which as Sphilbrick notes is a bit complicated. I suggest you ask for template help at Help talk:Template, they are very skilled at templates and likely can sort things out. -- Banj e  b oi   19:41, 17 February 2010 (UTC)

User:Nathan_Winters/Draft_of_MSRRA
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 18:59, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

I started working on creating an article User:Nathan_Winters/Draft_of_MSRRA and was looking for some feedback. TIA for your time and assistance. Nathan Winters (talk) 02:35, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * For one thing, it doesn't explain what the bill actually put into law. &mdash;Akrabbimtalk 03:16, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Drafts of bills that never passed are not going to pass our tests of notability. This reeks of publicity for the author of the failed bill. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  03:35, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * As the article currently stands it is lacking in information and needs to be expanded. You should include what exactly the law does and how it effects spouses.  More on the background of the bill would be helpful also, such as, why was the original bill introduced.  Additional reliable secondary sources should be included to show notability.  The Facebook source should be completely removed.  Also just a small point, the Act did pass and President Obama signed it into law on 11 Nov 2009.    GB fan  talk 19:57, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Systemic bias
Done - sending to archive. – ukexpat (talk) 19:00, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

I am a regular and prolific wikipedia editor. I have on-going problems with POV, incivility and "cabalism" by members of a particular wikiproject.

The problem is this: there is a certain class of topics which are interdisciplinary (I will call the fields field A and field B), but the members of the project for field A demonstrate no respect for the contributions of editors in field B. The members of field A greatly outnumber the members of field B, and their attitude seems to be that these topics are solely within thier own province, and that field B is really just, sort of a pretender (as if they think B is like a hobby to them or something, when it actually is a more rigorous and comprehensive study than A is.)

Great volumes of legitimate, academically supported, and unique contributions have been deleted. Some of it wholesale, and some of it is the long term, peacemeal activity. Some of it is by a few dedicated editors, and some of it is by one-timers, and newbies. The problem seems to be a pervasive attitude within the field A.

I have several questions, but my primary one is this: beyond the mediation services provided in WP, is there some judicial check? If I disagree with a mediated resolution, is there some duly appointed judicial body which is authoritative? My problem is that the "wikipedia consensus" obviously fails in situations like these. Is a mediation committee able to see beyond the rancor of a large group that wrongly sees contributions from field B as "POV pushing" when the reality is that academics from field B actually produce legitimate subject matter. It seems that the problem is respecting legitimate interdisciplinary contributions.Anon12e456 (talk) 19:52, 18 February 2010 (UTC)


 * WP:Systemic bias is a known and recognized problem at Wikipedia. As an organization that generally governs itself by consensus, members of larger groups are going to skew the view of the encyclopedia toward their side.  Ideally, the dispute resolution process should address this bias by involving editors who are not involved in either side of the dispute.  Unfortunately, it often happens that editors who are not familiar with either side are not well enough informed to make useful decisions, and so they stay away from such discussions.  I'm afraid there really isn't a "final arbiter"; the community itself is its own final arbiter.  I can only suggest that you exercise patience and try to build bridges between "field A" and "field B" to produce better articles in the common areas.  I also suggest that you review the sockpuppetry rules.  You claim to be a "regular and prolific" editor, and yet this user name was created solely for the purpose of creating this entry.  Creating a new account to avoid the scrutiny of those with whom you have a dispute does not appear to fall under the legitimate uses of an alternative account.  WikiDan61 ChatMe!ReadMe!! 21:16, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * (ec)Sorry, but you are in the wrong place. This is a place to elicit feedback about specific articles. You have a concern, but a very different concern. I urge you to check out Dispute resolution, and try some of the steps there, and look into mediation or arbitration, as well as discussion at project pages if they exist.-- SPhilbrick  T  21:21, 18 February 2010 (UTC)

Dora Levy Mossanen
Done - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 19:08, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Pieraklein/Dora Levy Mossanen

I would like help adding content to this page. There is already a reference to one of the author's books on wikipedia under Harem and then the Fiction Section. I would like to link these pages.

Also this author is a regular contributor to the Huffington Post, has been featured in various media: radio (NPR - National Public Radio: The Politics of Culture), tv, blogs, papers, etc. and has her book translated into more than 10 different languages.

I am still learning how to add content... Any additions are welcome, and notes, or comments.

Best, Pieraklein (talk) 00:12, 19 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Nice work. I can't see any immediate issues, but it would suggest some minor adjustments such as adding categories and expanding the scope of the topic. - Reconsider !  08:37, 19 February 2010 (UTC)