Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/Archive/22

Cambridge Innovation Center (CIC)
User:CambridgeQueen/Sandbox Cambridge Innovation Center

CambridgeQueen (talk) 17:46, 29 January 2010 (UTC)

Russian battleship Sevastopol (1895)
Just want to see what needs to be done to improve this before CSD can be survived. Have already added infobox based on User:Sturmvogel 66's comment. User:Buggie111/ Russian battleship Sevastopol (1895) Buggie111 (talk) 16:36, 31 January 2010 (UTC)

Oh, it should be 1892, not 95 Buggie111 (talk) 00:19, 1 February 2010 (UTC)

Toodalu
Done - speedily deleted. – ukexpat (talk) 21:00, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Toodalu is a location based social network. If you get the chance please review it. I'd highly appreciate any feedback. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Quamico (talk • contribs)

Lily Adamczyk
HI, I am trying to write about the Artist Lily Adamczyk and I could use some feedback please. I would also like help posting some of her pictures into the article. This is my very first article.

Thanks Oils4you (talk) 21:51, 2 February 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Oils4you (talk • contribs) 08:30, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Portofino framework
I wrote a new article about the Portofino framework. It is currently under my personal page and available for your review.

Portofino is an open-source web application framework written in Java and based on model-driven engineering. It was already mentioned by others in Model-driven engineering, Commercial open source applications, Domain-driven design and Metamodeling, often as "ManyDesigns Portofino".

Predonzani (talk) 10:58, 3 February 2010 (UTC)

LindaFowler/Princeton Symphony Orchestra
Dear Wikipedia editors:

Would you kindly review the following draft for Princeton Symphony Orchestra? Many thanks and best,

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lindafowler/The_Princeton_Symphony_Orchestra

Lindafowler (talk) 18:47, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Linda Fowler 2/3/10

Enviralment
User:Weemz/Enviralment

Hello, I'm a new member to Wikipedia and this is my first of hopefully many submissions. I figured I would start with something small and easy like the site Enviralment to ensure that I get the submission process down pat before moving on to bigger and lengthier submissions. The work I'm submitting is a Canadian blog called Enviralment, which is similar to Small Dead Animals and others of that ilk. It has been featured on some predominant Canadian sites, most notably The Green Party of Canada.

I would appreciate some feedback and opinions on my first submission.

Thanks you.

--Weemz (talk) 19:30, 3 February 2010 (UTC)

Playground (2009 film)
I would appreciate a review of an article on the documentary, Playground, (2009 film) User:Ekso8/Playground (2009 film) which focuses on the child sex trade in the United States and was released last year. The film was directed by Libby Spears and its executive producers include George Clooney, Grant Heslov and Steven Soderbergh.

Ekso8 (talk) 18:42, 4 February 2010 (UTC)

Brand Tribalism
Hi I have added more relevant citations for your approval. The article is called Brand Tribalism

Thanks you.

Jozette Heerman (talk) 12:12, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Lily Adamczyk
HI, I am trying to write about the Artist Lily Adamczyk and I could use some feedback please. I would also like help posting some of her pictures into the article. This is my very first article.

Thanks Oils4you (talk) 21:51, 2 February 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Oils4you (talk • contribs) 08:30, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Portofino framework
I wrote a new article about the Portofino framework. It is currently under my personal page and available for your review.

Portofino is an open-source web application framework written in Java and based on model-driven engineering. It was already mentioned by others in Model-driven engineering, Commercial open source applications, Domain-driven design and Metamodeling, often as "ManyDesigns Portofino".

Predonzani (talk) 10:58, 3 February 2010 (UTC)

LindaFowler/Princeton Symphony Orchestra
Dear Wikipedia editors:

Would you kindly review the following draft for Princeton Symphony Orchestra? Many thanks and best,

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Lindafowler/The_Princeton_Symphony_Orchestra

Lindafowler (talk) 18:47, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Linda Fowler 2/3/10

Enviralment
User:Weemz/Enviralment

Hello, I'm a new member to Wikipedia and this is my first of hopefully many submissions. I figured I would start with something small and easy like the site Enviralment to ensure that I get the submission process down pat before moving on to bigger and lengthier submissions. The work I'm submitting is a Canadian blog called Enviralment, which is similar to Small Dead Animals and others of that ilk. It has been featured on some predominant Canadian sites, most notably The Green Party of Canada.

I would appreciate some feedback and opinions on my first submission.

Thanks you.

--Weemz (talk) 19:30, 3 February 2010 (UTC)

Playground (2009 film)
I would appreciate a review of an article on the documentary, Playground, (2009 film) User:Ekso8/Playground (2009 film) which focuses on the child sex trade in the United States and was released last year. The film was directed by Libby Spears and its executive producers include George Clooney, Grant Heslov and Steven Soderbergh.

Ekso8 (talk) 18:42, 4 February 2010 (UTC)

Ginerva (Ginny) Weasley
Done - redirected per consensus re minor characters. – ukexpat (talk) 18:30, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

My article is over 24 hours old and it's still unreviewed. I was just wondering if I need to make any improvements on it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by BDime89 (talk • contribs) 13:51, 10 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello. It looks like yo've made a good start with this article. I think one problem is that there already was an article at Ginny Weasley in the past, and it was decided that the character wasn't notable enough to have her own article. I think somebody mentioned this to you on 25 March. I don't know if you read the discussion at Talk:Ginny Weasley or not. Remember, you can take part in any discussion there. At the moment there is a section on Ginny at Dumbledore's Army, and that's as a result of consensus between Wikipedia editors. it makes things a bit confusing if there are different articles about the same thing, so I've redirected the article you wrote to Dumbledore's Army for now, and I suggest you try and talk to other editors about it at Talk:Ginny Weasley if you want a separate article. I'll put your work back on your userpage so you still have a copy. Your efforts are appreciated though so don't let this put you off contributing more to Wikipedia. Regards, -- Beloved Freak  18:22, 11 April 2010 (UTC)

Hispania-A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguese
Done - merged and redirected. – ukexpat (talk) 18:10, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

Hispania- A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguese

To whom it may concern:

I have created the article Hispania-A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguse working as an Editorial Assistant for the journal's Editor-in-Cheif, Dr. Sheri Spaine Long. Any comments you can make on the formatting, references, or general tone of the article would be greatly appreciated.

Many thanks, Andrewmc 23:28, 10 April 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Hispaniaaatsp (talk • contribs)
 * You have a severe conflict of interest; your username is not acceptable, and you should not be editing on this topic. As a matter of fact, the article Hispania (journal) already exists. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  14:17, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * First please read WP:COI - users are strongly encouraged not to create or edit articles where they have a conflict. Second, we already have an article (albeit a stub), Hispania (journal) created in March 2010, that appears to be about this journal so the content from your article will have to be merged into the existing article and Hispania- A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguese redirected to Hispania (journal). I suggest that you contact the editors who have been working on the other article (you can see who they are by looking at the article's history page) and see if one of them will help with the merger, and/or enlist help to do so at the talk page of the Academic Journals Wikiproject which you will find here. Your user name also appears to be in breach of our user name policy. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 14:24, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Content has been merged into Hispania (journal) and article redirected, by User:Crusio. – ukexpat (talk) 15:38, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

User:Sngha2/Midmac
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 18:18, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

Summary of the MIDMAC bridge bidding system, including Complete Hand Valuation. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Sngha2 (talk • contribs) 14:24, 11 April 2010 (UTC)


 * I think there is the basis of a worthwhile article here but it needs work in a couple of areas. First it reads like a how-to, which is explicitly what Wikipedia is not. Take a look at articles on other bidding systems such as Acol and model you draft on those. The Acol article will also give you some hints about appropriate layout. The second area is notability. The draft may just barely reach the threshold with the citation of two books, but you really need more references if you can find them, coverage in Bridge magazines, websites etc, and citations should use one of the appropriate templates such as Cite book or Cite journal. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 14:12, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks very much for your feedback, I will make amendments. sngha2

LIAS
Done

LIAS Hi,

I recently made, for the first time, a new entry on Wikipedia. The rather short article gives information on the history and current status of an academic journal called 'LIAS'. I would be most grateful for any comments regarding style and contents.

Dirk 192.87.139.143 (talk) 13:07, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Dirk, please make sure you are logged in when you edit! The article has been reviewed and tagged with several issues tags that should be self-explanatory. You may be able to get some assistance from the Academic Journals Wikiproject if you ask at its talk page. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 15:52, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

Ginerva (Ginny) Weasley
Done - redirected per consensus re minor characters. – ukexpat (talk) 18:34, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

My article is over 24 hours old and it's still unreviewed. I was just wondering if I need to make any improvements on it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by BDime89 (talk • contribs) 13:51, 10 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Hello. It looks like yo've made a good start with this article. I think one problem is that there already was an article at Ginny Weasley in the past, and it was decided that the character wasn't notable enough to have her own article. I think somebody mentioned this to you on 25 March. I don't know if you read the discussion at Talk:Ginny Weasley or not. Remember, you can take part in any discussion there. At the moment there is a section on Ginny at Dumbledore's Army, and that's as a result of consensus between Wikipedia editors. it makes things a bit confusing if there are different articles about the same thing, so I've redirected the article you wrote to Dumbledore's Army for now, and I suggest you try and talk to other editors about it at Talk:Ginny Weasley if you want a separate article. I'll put your work back on your userpage so you still have a copy. Your efforts are appreciated though so don't let this put you off contributing more to Wikipedia. Regards, -- Beloved Freak  18:22, 11 April 2010 (UTC)

Hispania-A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguese
Done - merged and redirected. – ukexpat (talk) 18:09, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

Hispania- A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguese

To whom it may concern:

I have created the article Hispania-A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguse working as an Editorial Assistant for the journal's Editor-in-Cheif, Dr. Sheri Spaine Long. Any comments you can make on the formatting, references, or general tone of the article would be greatly appreciated.

Many thanks, Andrewmc 23:28, 10 April 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Hispaniaaatsp (talk • contribs)
 * You have a severe conflict of interest; your username is not acceptable, and you should not be editing on this topic. As a matter of fact, the article Hispania (journal) already exists. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  14:17, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * First please read WP:COI - users are strongly encouraged not to create or edit articles where they have a conflict. Second, we already have an article (albeit a stub), Hispania (journal) created in March 2010, that appears to be about this journal so the content from your article will have to be merged into the existing article and Hispania- A journal devoted to the teaching of Spanish and Portuguese redirected to Hispania (journal). I suggest that you contact the editors who have been working on the other article (you can see who they are by looking at the article's history page) and see if one of them will help with the merger, and/or enlist help to do so at the talk page of the Academic Journals Wikiproject which you will find here. Your user name also appears to be in breach of our user name policy. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 14:24, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Content has been merged into Hispania (journal) and article redirected, by User:Crusio. – ukexpat (talk) 15:38, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

LIAS
Done

LIAS Hi,

I recently made, for the first time, a new entry on Wikipedia. The rather short article gives information on the history and current status of an academic journal called 'LIAS'. I would be most grateful for any comments regarding style and contents.

Dirk 192.87.139.143 (talk) 13:07, 12 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Dirk, please make sure you are logged in when you edit! The article has been reviewed and tagged with several issues tags that should be self-explanatory. You may be able to get some assistance from the Academic Journals Wikiproject if you ask at its talk page. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 15:52, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

How do you thank someone who edits a page about you?
Done

I found an article on Wikipedia about me and a company I founded. The article a few months ago was a terrible distortion - since whoever wrote it hadn't been there. A friend, cleaned it up, and there have been several "unknown" attempts at rewriting it. I checked today and whoever "cleaned" it up - actually did a good job.

How do yoy post a "thank you" for the people who cleaned it up? Is that kosher? Also, how do you keep it the way it is - so no one else messes it up - or is that one of the drawbacks of Wiki?

Your Servant, David —Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.224.230.35 (talk • contribs)


 * You can check the "history" tab of the article to see who has been editing the page, and leave messages on their talk pages (the "talk" link next to each name, and then click "new section" to start a new thread). It is entirely kosher to thank people for their hard work, as long as you don't go overboard (use your own discretion). As for making sure no one messes it up, unlike some other Wikis, Wikipedia allows articles to be edited by anyone, at anytime, except when there is excessive disruption on a page. Otherwise, you are free to check back on the article from time to time to see how it's doing, and you can ask at the help desk if you're not sure what's going on. Someguy1221 (talk) 08:49, 13 April 2010 (UTC)

Need Help in Formatting Page
Done

I tried to create a page and thought I had created the "categories" properly but I cleared didn't get it right. Any assistance would be greatly appreciated. It is under "Raul Danny Vargas". —Preceding unsigned comment added by Damets65 (talk • contribs) 05:03, 14 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Fixed, and I've left a message on your talk page. - Reconsider !  14:38, 14 April 2010 (UTC)

Ultimate Software
Done - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 18:43, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

I kindly ask for your review of Ultimate Software User:Dporcaro/Ultimate_Software. It is a public company with many sources of notability that should be added to Wikipedia.

Your time and thoughts are greatly appreciated.

Thank you, Dporcaro (talk) 21:31, 9 April 2010 (UTC)Desiree Porcaro April 9, 2010


 * First please read WP:COI - in your position as "SEO/Social Media Specialist at Ultimate Software", you clearly have a conflict of interest and are strongly advised not to create or edit articles where you have a conflict. Second, as a NASDAQ listed company the subject almost certainly meets the notability criteria set out at WP:CORP, however the article is rather spammy (referring to the company's products as "solutions",and using the circle-R are Marketing 101) and the list of "Recognition" is too long and should be limited to nationally recognised awards from major publications or institutions. Please take a look at articles for other major companies to see how they balance the good and bad. There are other outlets such as WikiCompany. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 14:50, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

Agree with the above. That said, often new business articles are overly detailed with structural / marketing material that is irrelevent in an encyclopedia. This one is reasonable and needs to be tidied and tightened rather than deconstructed and rewritten. Clovis Sangrail (talk) 13:12, 16 April 2010 (UTC)

Xena: Warrior Princess
Xena: Warrior Princess. Touchy article, with strong and differing opinions. I have recently restructured it, improved style, added bits. Require general feedback on how to improve it further, for self and others who regularly patrol it. Would like reclassification to C/B class if appropriate. Bards (talk) 16:11, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

Xena: Warrior Princess
Xena: Warrior Princess. Touchy article, with strong and differing opinions. I have recently restructured it, improved style, added bits. Require general feedback on how to improve it further, for self and others who regularly patrol it. Would like reclassification to C/B class if appropriate. Bards (talk) 16:11, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

Brand Tribalism
Hi I have added more relevant citations for your approval. The article is called Brand Tribalism

Thanks you.

Jozette Heerman (talk) 12:12, 2 February 2010 (UTC)

Commotio
User:OxfordSinger/Commotio

Looking for initial feedback, please - first Wiki contribution. Thank you. OxfordSinger (talk) 16:54, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

P.T. Barnum Awards
P.T. Barnum Awards Hello, looking for feedback on this page on a Tufts University awards show for excellence in the entertainment industry. Please let me know if you see any errors or have more information. Thank you   Carchi01 (talk) 22:35, 7 February 2010 (UTC)carchi01 2/5/10

Denielle Hann
User:Nlmusicguy/Denielle Hann

New to Wiki. Please provide feedback/edits on Denielle Hann. It must also be posted to wiki by someone who has that ability.

Thanks very much Nlmusicguy (talk) 15:23, 9 February 2010 (UTC)Nlmusicguy 09 Feb 2010

Review LTX-Credence article
LTX-Credence Corporation

Two companies have merged, updating the historical data. Easy review. Ref'ed AP article on the subject, sourced by the newly merged company. Rbenech (talk) 22:21, 9 February 2010 (UTC)

Bill Zadick
I've written a biography article for User:Rosalita923/Bill_Zadick, a US amateur wrestler who has won a world championship. It's the first article I've ever created, so I'd be grateful for any and all feedback regarding anything you feel needs to be added, deleted, or cited differently.

Many thanks! --Rosalita923 (talk) 17:27, 10 February 2010 (UTC)

New Article: American Car Designer Eric Stoddard
Request to review information about Automobile Designer Eric Stoddard. Review resources on related car designs, please.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eric_Stoddard

Speedstudio (talk) 13:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC) SpeedStudioDesign.com

You have a decent amount of resources. I don't really see anything wrong. Maybe remove some of the duplicate content under "Career."

Aimelise (talk) 13:50, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Tito in ekšn
Tito in ekšn punk rock group from the 90s
 * Partizanchek (talk) 17:16, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Reconnective Therapy
Reconnective Therapy Reconnective Therapy ```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Psullivan7 (talk • contribs) 13:03, 14 February 2010 (UTC)

Crazy Waiting
user:chasingflowers/crazywaiting A recent South Korean movie that I love. Several of the actors have their own Wikipedia pages already, so I thought it would be notable. Chasingflowers (talk) 01:28, 15 February 2010 (UTC)

Feedback requested, please.
Hello,

May I please get some feedback on the following page?

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Weatherlands/European_Climate_Assessment_and_Dataset_%28ECA%26D%29

I would like to make it live as soon as possible since our website, eca.knmi.nl, has been updated as well.

Note: All images are intended to be copyrighted as open to the public. They are generated by "using" the website which anyone can do.

Thanks for your time, please respond in "my talk."

Good day, ~WL

Weatherlands (talk) 10:24, 15 February 2010 (UTC)


 * This post says "our website"; what is your connection with this organization? -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  17:45, 16 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi Orangemike, sorry it has taken me so long to respond. I say "our website" because I sometimes work on the project and they gave me the task of sharing information about the database.  It is a database of freely available data that is downloadable on the website so no costs are involved at all.  The project was initiated by the European Climate Support Network (ECSN) but is coordinated by KNMI.  Do you still consider this a conflict of interest?


 * Also, can you please explain to me why all of my external links have been broken?


 * Thanks,
 * Weatherlands (talk) 10:18, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

International media reaction to Barack Obama's election
I would like to invite feedback on this draft article on the international media reaction to Barack Obama's 2008 election. Please note that images are available to improve the article's look and will be added once the page is published. Please leave comments on the draft's discussion page. Thank you! --Amandaroyal (talk) 19:06, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Mark W. Moffett New page to post
I would like to post a new page about the Sociobiologist/National Geographic Top Photograher/Ant expert/etc. Mark Moffett. Below is the revised draft of the article with more references. I would also like to add one or two photos, but do not know how to do that. Thanks. Never did this before. -Roc Ordman

Mark W. Moffett, Ph.D.
“Mark has developed a career that combines science and photography, in spite of being a high school dropout. Although his family was not academic, encouraged by his parents he sought out biologists by the age of 12. “ [1] Moffett received his BA in Biology at Beloit College in Wisconsin in 1979. He received his PhD from Harvard University where he studied with E. O. Wilson, who developed the field of sociobiology. Mark was the first PhD candidate that Wilson had accepted in about a decade, but Mark was so fascinated by ant behavior that Wilson agreed to accept him as a student. Moffett taught himself novel photographic techniques for his 1989 Ph.D. on ants. National Geographic magazine published these novel photographs, and he went on to become a top photojournalist of that magazine Moffett became curator of ants at Harvard, and then directed Harvard's Museum of Comparative Zoology. His research concerns insect social behavior and the structure and dynamics of forest ecosystems, particularly their canopies. He travels the world studying different insects and ecosystems. He has investigated and written about canopies of the Amazon rain forest, where he operates a research station in Peru. He also has worked on the supertall coniferous forests of the Pacific Northwest, for which he led the first ever ascent and study of the world's tallest tree, known as the National Geographic redwood. In 1993 Harvard University Press published Moffett's book, The High Frontier: Exploring the Tropical Rainforest Canopy. He has a new book coming out in early 2010. Today his research and National Geographic photography are interspersed with writing and public lecturing about rain forests. In 2010, he is Research Associate, NMNH, the Smithsonian Institution, Associate Curator, the University of California, Berkeley, and Contract Photographer, National Geographic Magazine. He also operates a research station in the Amazon Rainforest in Peru along the Amazon River. A photomural he produced there can be seen at Olbrich Botanical Gardens in Madison, WI.

Among his achievements, his home page is, giving a list of over 80 peer-reviewed publications and 20 articles in National Geographic. Among his awards are the Lowell Thomas Medal from National Geographic, and the Beloit College Roy Chapman Andrews Award. He has written books on ants, frogs, and the rainforest.

EXTERNAL LINKS
 * Photographer of National Geographic
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User:HealthGal/Tracey_Powell
This is an article about Tracey Powell, a healthcare entrepreneur who is highly-recognized in the industry as having produced the first and only FDA-approved at-home kits for anonymous HIV and Hepatitis-C testing. By de-stigmatizing STD testing and providing an online, confidential forum for risk evaluation and expert test recommendations, he has enabled thousands who otherwise would not have sought out such information to receive anonymous STD testing, and subsequent treatment as applicable.

HealthGal (talk) 01:34, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

Sun Yat-sen's prayer at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor
Hi

This is my first article (lot of fun). In fact I have never edited a page either. I was going through the page on Sun Yat-sen trying to find out about this prayer that he made at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor. I had seen a reference to the fact that Sun Yat-sen had visited and prayed at the tomb three days after he took power in a book on the Forbidden city. I got very curious as to why he, who had been trying to overthrow the Qing dynasty, would visit the tomb of the founder of the Ming dynasty. In any case one thing led to another and I managed to find the original prayer mentioned in a book published in 1912.

I would like to add a reference to this prayer in Sun Yat-sen's original article and as such would like to add the prayer itself as an article which can be then be linked.

User:MalikFeb2010/Sun Yat-sen's prayer at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor

MalikFeb2010 (talk) 04:49, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * For starters, welcome to Wikipedia. Please continue to edit here. Looking at the article on Sun Yat-Sen, I see no reason for this to be a separate article. But it is very well written and sourced and probably belongs within the article if it is indeed notable enough. Unfortunately, I do not know enough about his life to tell you if it is notable or not, but regardless, it does not need its own article.BillyJack193 (talk) 04:58, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the quick feedback. I think this was a very graceful tribute by Sun Yat-sen to the Ming Emperor and as such should be part of the page on him - also points to the centuries long conflicts that have taken place between the Chinese Han race and the Eastern and Western Tartars. I presume (not sure  how it gets determined if it is notable enough or not) that it will be okay for me to go ahead and figure out the appropriate place and add it into the original Sun Yat-sen article.MalikFeb2010 (talk) 05:43, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * From what you have said, it is notable enough, so go ahead and add it. If you put it in the wrong place, I am sure some of the other editors of the article will help you out. Good luck.BillyJack193 (talk) 06:04, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I am going to have to disagree with the above comments. The place for the complete text of the prayer is Wikisource - the text can be posted there and linked to in the main article. Large chunks of source material like this should not be added to a Wikipedia article. – ukexpat (talk) 20:40, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have no problem putting it in Wikisource. However can you point out which category you think is appropriate? Please do consider that this is not a "religious prayer" in the strictest sense of the word. I checked Wikisource and am not sure where you would like to see it placed. Any recommendations? MalikFeb2010 (talk) 03:43, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Miaohui
Literally Temple Fair, this is a festivity common in China during the Chinese New Year. A lot of materials are already present on Chinese WP. I wonder if anyone wants to have a look and make some translations if possible. It is amazing that no article exists yet about this tradition.Btmachine333667 (talk) 09:52, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

Visionlearning.com
I just created the article Visionlearning.com User:Neopropism/Visionlearning.com and would love some feedback on the tone, etc. I've tried to be as unbiased as possible, but am not sure if some of my descriptions seem too favorable.

Thanks! Neopropism (talk) 17:22, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

David Newman aka Durga Das (Chant Artist)
Hello,

I posted an article about musician David Newman a few months ago in my userspace. At that time I was advised to wait until his next album came out on the Nettwerk label since he would then meet notability requirements. That album is coming out in a few weeks so I've made a few edits and would like to get the ball rolling again. If anyone has any input, thanks in advance!

Here is the article: David Newman aka Durga Das (Chant Artist)

AmaruKR (talk) 23:07, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Having an interest in the world of chant generally, I read through the proposed article and checked for Newman and Durga Das on line. The text of the article is pretty much all based on personal websites and social media. I was unable to find a third-party source beyong the one Yoga magazine and it seems to be more pr than anything else. Until there are reviews of the albums or the studio in WP:RS, which might occur after the new album which is still in the porudction process, this appears to be a local musician/entrepreneur looking for WP publicity. I would say certainly not yet; the subject needs to have more more prominence than he has right now. If you have a careful read through Wikipedia's guidelines for notability in musicians, you will see that this individual meets none of the tests as far as I can tell. Bielle  (talk) 23:22, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi Bielle,


 * Thank you for taking a look and for your feedback.


 * One of the guidelines for notability is "Has released two or more albums on a major label or one of the more important indie labels (i.e., an independent label with a history of more than a few years and a roster of performers, many of which are notable)" which I believe is applicable here since Newman's new album is being released through Nutone/Nettwerk, as was his last. The latest album was produced by a Grammy-award winning producer, who is also listed on WP. In addition, though chant is certainly a niche genre that will never get mainstream air time, there are other kirtan artists on WP who are also now making music through Nettwork/Nutone.


 * Would it help to have more review articles referenced for past albums? I did not do so since a lot of the information was repeat or strictly reviews of albums.


 * A few more points that might help the case: Newman has been putting albums out since 2003. In 2004 his second album was reviewed on NPR. In 2008 he was mentioned in an article called "Yoga Rock Stars" in Yoga+Joyful Living Magazine.


 * In any case thanks again for taking the time. I won't say the impetus for this article is devoid of promotional considerations but I have tried to make it objective and do want to respect the WP guidelines. I wouldn't submit an article if I didn't believe the person belonged here. However, if the consensus is to wait, I will.


 * Best,
 * AmaruKR (talk) 16:59, 24 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I appreciate your work and your interest, AmaruKR. However, I am still not seeing notable here as WP defines it for musicians; "at least" ia an absolute minimum standard. If there is some press in a major publication about the person, that might be helpful; the Yoga magazine is more pr than news, I think, and so is much of the writing still. As for the albums, if they get significant coverage, they might warrant an article with a paragraph on the musician, but I am not even seeing the grounds for that yet. This is just my opinion. Others' opinions are welcome. Bielle (talk) 17:05, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Anybody else care to weigh in? Advice on how to proceed is welcome. Thx,
 * AmaruKR (talk) 23:27, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

VertiKa
I started the page VertiKa and revised it after first review and seek another. --Ewikiwriter (talk) 13:07, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Just read through your article, and I think it's pretty good. There's plenty of references and reliable sources in there, and the structure makes it really easy for me to read and find out the important information. However, I would say with the 'history' section that you could perhaps put the dates in bold and separate the sections a bit more. Apart from that, I think it's a really well written article! Please ask if you require any more opinions on the article. Chevymontecarlo (talk) 16:18, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Edgar Blazona
Edgar Blazona Hello, I welcome all feedback on this new article I created. Please let me know where and how I can improve. Thanks! Taramelinchuk (talk) 18:09, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Kathryn Wallace
Kathryn Wallace is an American film and print journalist. Please review and let me know if this person is notable enough and what else I might need to move to mainspace. Link to article is here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Joeistaller/Kathryn_Wallace

Joeistaller (talk) 01:06, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Not a bad start, although I would suggest a review of the external links and the in-text links. Also, the "Inside Guantanamo" section does not appear to be entirely relevant. - Reconsider !  01:32, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

Please check this article for publication
Jo Hamilton (musician)

Hello

I have comprehensively referenced this article, as well as adding a photograph of the artist.

I need the thumbnail to be accepted as I have reduced its size considerably.

Please contact me regarding this

Thanks

Shelley Atkinson —Preceding unsigned comment added by Artsdeville (talk • contribs) 16:18, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Dice.com
Hello, I just created an article for Dice.com. Dice is the leading IT recruiter in the United States and has also provided industry reports that have been published by Reuters. The article is here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Athard/dice.com. Please look at it and let me know if this is good enough for Wikipedia. Thank you.

Athard (talk) 18:47, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jordanmakesmusic/Faces_On_Film
I made a page for the band Faces on Film. Since it's my first page, general feedback would be appreciated. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jordanmakesmusic (talk • contribs) 21:45, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Jim Lord, Singer/songwriter
Jim Lord, Singer/songwriter Jim Lord, singer/songwriter requesting feedback on article. Lord is considered by many to be "one of the best artists you hear little about" (source: CHIC Magazine, Music Notes, January 1983 Issue, P.9). He was a singer/songwriter in the 70's/80's, influenced by the British folk scene, recorded a couple of successful albums but changed career tracks in the mid-80's to pursue a career in photojournalism, where he was a very successful, award winning, wartime photojournalist particularly known for his work in Nicaragua and Guatemala during the civil wars in those areas on the 1980s (the information on his photojournalism career is NOT included in his musicians bio page, but for your edification). Lord returned to his singer/songwriter roots in early 2000's and is currently working on an album, scheduled for release later in 2010.

Thanks for taking time to review Lord's singer/songwriter bio.

Jdlongshot2 (talk) 18:21, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Village Roots Garden
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration. I've just completed my 1st Wikipedia aricle ever, on community gardening at User:VitusKonter/VillageRoots. Please let me know how it looks. VitusKonter (talk) 07:27, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It looks really well done, nice organization nice pictures, nice layout, so it pains me to report that it may not meet the Notability requirements. I hope it does, but you should search for more examples of coverage in reliable sources.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:14, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you. I've added a few more citations, and hope to add more in the next week to help establish notability. VitusKonter (talk) 06:51, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * If it doesn't meet notability, see esp WP:LOCAL, then perhaps it should added to the Bay View, Milwaukee article. Nuujinn (talk) 20:50, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I've already done several edits and added 3 new sections to the Bay View, Milwaukee article (and I plan on adding more), but I think that the Village Roots article is too large to be included within the Bay View article. VitusKonter (talk) 06:51, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Nope, not even in "the other East Side" is this notable. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  02:38, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

User:NotableCheckertools/Sarey (singer)
How can i improve this article any help? Feel welcome to change the article to improve the quality. (NotableCheckertools (talk) 19:15, 28 February 2010 (UTC))

/User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

I would like to publish this article and would like to know if there are any reasons that it would be denied.

Wikiwhackjack (talk) 20:53, 28 February 2010 (UTC) Chris Lott, 2/28/10
 * You haven't established why these guitars are Notable. You need to show that they are discussed in multiple reliable sources. So far, you have zero sources.


 * It will help (but not be sufficient) to show that notable musicians use the guitar. While you have listed two, you've haven't cited any references to verify that they do own the guitars.-- SPhilbrick  T  23:47, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Smoked Bear
Please provide feedback on a short article describing a public education campaign called Smoked Bear. Once I find the text or an MP3 of the radio spot(s) mentioned in the article, I will also include them on the article page.

Thanks in advance for any reviews. TnCom (talk) 04:59, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You linked to one article about the campaign, but I've found no other mention of the campaign, so I'm worried that it would not survive a proposal to delete on the basis of lack of Notability. Are there other discussions of this campaign in reliable sources?


 * Please do not copy the entire text of the campaign, as it is almost certainly a violation of Copyright. You may be able to use excerpts, but even that has to be done with care. An MP3 of the campaign is also almost certainly a copyright violation. You are free to investigate getting permission, but let's see if you can satisfactorily establish Notability first.
 * Sorry I can't be more positive.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:29, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I agree with SPhilbrick, I only found the one reference on google. It sounds like this is the personal mission of one indvidual at this point. Nuujinn (talk) 00:34, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for the feed back SPhilbrick and Nuujinn. I was able to find another source and put it in the reference section. I will also try to find where the campaign is posted and provide a link there instead of posting the text or the MP3 TnCom (talk) 05:08, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Sven Windahl
Hi, Just created a page on Swedish professor of communications Sven Windahl. This is my first Wikipedia article, so I hope someone out there will be able and willing to provide some constructive feedback.

Brainfu (talk) 10:32, 1 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry, but I'm just not sure he's really notable--it seems like he has the normal credentials for an active academician, but nothing out of the ordinary or of particular notablity. This isn't a criticism of him or his work, there are very many people who do valuable and significant work who aren't notable. Nuujinn (talk) 16:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

FANTASTIC MAN magazine
Hello I created an article for Fantastic Man magazine last week and it does not seem to be live yet. I suppose it still needs feedback. I'm having a hard time with the whole Wikipedia submission process -- it is very convoluted if you ask me -- but from what I can tell, my article still needs to be reviewed. I'm eager to get it live so if someone can help me out, I would really appreciate it...

Thanks!

Matthew Stewart Matty stewart (talk) 12:54, 1 March 2010 (UTC)


 * It is live as Fantastic Man (magazine). I made some minor edits. When you reference a website you need to provide a brief title for the website, not just a link. See what I did with the New York Times reference. Anyway, a good start and OK as a stub article. Itsmejudith (talk) 13:58, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

Alex Hibbert
User:TinTin7/New article name here

Hello,

Below is the updated version of Alex Hibbert's wikipedia page. I would much appreciate some feedback and hope all is adequate before it goes live. Thank you very much!

Alex Hibbert is a polar expedition leader, outdoor photographer, athlete and zoologist. In 2008 he broke the record, along with his teammate George Bullard, for the longest unsupported polar expedition in history. At 21 years old Alex led the 1374 mile, over 113 day Tiso Trans-Greenland Expedition.

Alex Hibbert wrote the story of his expedition in his book The Long Haul which will be published by Tricorn Books on March 15th, 2010. [edit] References

<http://www.tricornbooks.co.uk/menu-reviews}

<http://www.londonspeakerbureau.co.uk/alex_hibbert.aspx]

<http://www.wideworldmag.co.uk/features/alex-hibbert-s-polar-expeditions} [edit] External links


 * [www.alexhibbert.com ]

TinTin7 (talk) 13:15, 1 March 2010 (UTC)March 1st, 2010

PeerPong
PeerPong

Please give a general review of newly posted PeerPong Wiki entry. I am looking for ways to improve it.

Thank You! Lforrest11 (talk) 19:20, 1 March 2010 (UTC)Laura Forrest 3/1/2010


 * The big problem here is notability - as the site is still in private beta it is most unlikely to meet the notability guidelines at WP:WEB nor does the company appear to meet the guidelines at WP:CORP. The website/company may meet the guidelines at some time in the future, but they do not at the moment. I have tagged the article for speedy deletion. Sorry. – ukexpat (talk) 18:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Jack Garson
Jack Garson

If anyone could review the above article it would be greatly appreciated!!

Jack Garson (born December 19, 1960) is the founder of Garson Claxton LLC and leads the firm’s business and real estate practice groups. Jack serves as a legal advisor for numerous local, regional and national companies, focusing on business transactions, commercial real estate, commercial leasing, and construction law. He is also a US author of How to Build a Business and Sell It for Millions published by St. Martin’s Press in March 2010.

Thanks!

MegOTMM (talk) 22:06, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Eriktb/Ala Moana Bowls
User:Eriktb/Ala Moana Bowls

Hello, this is my first wikipedia entry. Please give me feedback. Eriktb (talk) 03:40, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I think it's a pretty good start. The first thing I'd suggest is cleaning up the citations, see WP:CS for exmples--you might start with the basic footnote examples. If you have any questions or problems, drop me a note on my talk page. Nuujinn (talk) 15:35, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Tongal
User:Fightonfortroy/Tongal

This article is about the crowdsourcing company Tongal. I'd appreciate any constructive criticism. Thanks for the help.

Fightonfortroy (talk) 04:03, 2 March 2010 (UTC)Fightonfortroy

Edward W. Estlow
Hello, please review [|Edward W. Estlow] for inclusion LSClark (talk) 07:56, 2 March 2010 (UTC)LSClark March 2, 2010


 * It's coming along nicely. In the headings, only capitalize the first word. The Manual of style helps with such things. Make sure you refer to the subject as "Estlow" throughout; avoid chatty phrasing like "Ed and his wife". Don't include the names of his children unless any of them are notable in their own right. Include links to relevant firms and institutions, especially University of Denver, on first mention. When you say "internal university documentation", that may be all right, but we prefer to use sources that other people can check. If you are referring to university web pages, give the URLs. Itsmejudith (talk) 12:41, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Portland (communications)
Dear All,

I would greatly appreciate it if someone could review this article have written on a PR company. Not the most interesting I know, but the consultancy has links to a fair few British politicians so I think it is of notable interest.

Many Thanks. --Adam Wildman (talk) 09:55, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure the company meets notability requirements, since it appears that the sources cited focus mostly on the people rather than the corporation. See WP:CORP for some more detail. Nuujinn (talk) 23:24, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi,

Thanks for taking the time to to back to me so quickly. In regards your comments, do you mean that the article needs re-wording, i.e. having quotes/references directly refering the company itself. What I'm asking is, will re-wording the article save it from deletion?

Thanks again. --Adam Wildman (talk) 11:31, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I can't say what will or won't save an article from deletion, since I'm not really involved in that part of the process at this point. I will say I think that if you move the article into your user space and work on it some more there, it's got a better chance of lasting longer. And yes, what I take from the article in it's current state is here's a PR firm seeking PR on the basis of the fame of the people who are associated with them. Wikipedia isn't about promotion, and while it seems that some of these individuals are themselves notable, I'm not seeing any evidence that the firm is. Nuujinn (talk) 00:20, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Robert "Bob" Olszewski, Miniature Figurative Artist (Born: May 2, 1945 - )
User:ROlszewski/Robert Olszewski  —Preceding unsigned comment added by ROlszewski (talk • contribs) 15:30, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * This appears (based on your user name) to be an autobiography. Creating an autobiography is strongly discouraged as it is hard to write about yourself from a neutral point of view. The draft is very promotional/non-neutral/unencyclopedic in tone and will need a lot of toning down and rewriting before it can be moved to the mainspace. It will also need more references to reliable sources to demonstrate notability per WP:CREATIVE. If you are the subject, I would suggest that you abandon the draft but ask for it to be created by posting at articles for creation. – ukexpat (talk) 18:32, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Shameless autobiographical spam; nothing of merit, nothing salvageable. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  01:23, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I concur with ukexpat and Orange Mike that this is not appropriate for WP. However, it is quite extensive, and shows evidence of a lot of work; it would be a shame to lose it. There is another site which accepts bios, without the NPOV requirement, but I've forgotten the name of it. Can someone remind me, so that Bob might move this work to a better venue?-- SPhilbrick  T  14:24, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Poking around, I found two options: Biographicon, WikiBios -- SPhilbrick  T  14:39, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Montana Justice Foundation
Montana Justice Foundation

I have recently updated the Montana Justice Foundation page to include links on and to the page. I am hoping for someone to review the article again with these changes in place.

The Montana Justice Foundation is a non for profit organizations that uses IOLTA funds and donations to fund legal aid initiatives around Montana.

Lauren Asprooth (Lauren Asprooth 16:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Laurenasprooth (talk • contribs)


 * Before we worry about links, there is a more serious problem. The article needs citations to reliable sources that demonstrate how or why the organization is notable per the guidance at WP:ORG. Without such references, the article is destined to be nominated for deletion. References to the Foundation's website do not qualify as reliable to show notability. There are some formatting issues too: please take a look at Infobox non-profit to see how to use infobox code correctly; the tables for the executives and directors are not necessary, bulleted lists will do. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:45, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

International League of Conservation Writers
User:PattyMaher/International League of Conservation Writers

PattyMaher (talk) 22:38, 2 March 2010 (UTC)Patty Maher

Music_Teachers_Association_of_California
Hi, I would like feedback on my article about the Music Teachers' Association of California, MTAC, at User:Lowellwebster/Music Teachers Association of California. My article is very similar to the article MTNA. When my page is accepted, then a new entry needs to be made in the MTAC disambiguation page. Thanks, Lowellwebster (talk) 22:40, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Please read the notability guidelines for organizations set out at WP:ORG - at the moment the draft has no references to reliable sources that demonstrate the notability of the subject. Note that the org's own website is not a reliable sources for establishing notability - significant coverage in third party sources is required. Hope this helps. (The same comments apply to MTNA and I have tagged it accordingly - I am surprised that it has survived for so long without references.) – ukexpat (talk) 16:59, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Ramekin Counterpane
Thanks for reviewing my new article on Ramekin Counterpane, the '70s art-rock band from the Southern California desert.

I appreciate your help.

Rememberthe60s (talk) 02:21, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Saying that the band's popularity is comparable to 10cc does not reflect reality. You should have another look at this statement. Also, the quote needs attribution.

Brhodewalt (talk) 03:06, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * The fact that this band has no mention at Allmusic, instantly suggests to me that they are not notable. Please read the guidelines - they may save you much time and effort.


 * Derek R Bullamore (talk) 15:36, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

The Real Estate Investment Securities Association (REISA)
The Real Estate Investment Securities Association (REISA)

This is original information about a real estate industry trade group. There are currently about 30 of these type of groups listed in Wikipedia, but nothing on REISA. Errors pop up related to the references and am not experienced enough to resolve it. I tried to be neutral and only state the facts. Help me to not make this an advertisement, but an informative piece on what the association is about.

(Investmentconnector (talk) 05:47, 3 March 2010 (UTC))
 * It's not bad at all. It will be better if you take out a lot of the detail, because that is what makes it read like an advertisement or corporate website. For example, it isn't appropriate to have the full postal address; the city is sufficient. The article could be about half the length. If there is any discussion of the association in independent sources, for example trade press, that should be added. Itsmejudith (talk) 16:46, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Organizational Behavior And Leadership During A Political Revolution
To Whom This May Concern,

Hello, this is my first real contribution to Wikipedia. Please feel free to edit this so it meets the encyclopedia standard, or help teach me so I can do this myself.

Thanks! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Robsmyth40 (talk • contribs) 07:23, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi, I will see if I can provide some helpful points. First off, this article indeed reads a lot like an essay - and needs to be re-written in encyclopedic style.  Also, please look at incorporating good inline citations (see here), and add a good introduction that properly summarizes the entire article - with a short succinct statement that truly defines what is meant by "Organizational Behavior And Leadership During A Political Revolution", and that this can be considered a truly encyclopedic article. Jwoodger (talk) 02:18, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Head Cut (Stream Geomorphology)
Would appreciate a review of my first article about a geomorphological feature I encountered on a recent field visit. I was calling this feature a small waterfall in the field but I assumed there was a better name for it. Thus I found info on a head cut from the North Carolina Dept of Water Quality and summed up what I learned in this article.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Submerged-arc_furnace_for_phosphorus_production
To whom it may concern

Very little is found in Wikipedia on submerged-arc furnaces. Submerged-arc furnaces is a very important subset of electrical arc furnaces and should have a rightful place on such a great website. This article deals with the production of phosphorus by using such a furnace.

I hope you find this a good first step Regards Emile —Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilescheepers444 (talk • contribs) 16:03, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I think it's a very good start, but I think you need more references. It's best if every assertion made in an article can be supported by an external and reliable source. I think you should be able to find some more with just a little work, but drop me a note on my talk page if you get stuck. Nuujinn (talk) 21:17, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Electro Thermal Dynamic Stripping Process
Electro Thermal Dynamic Stripping Process

Can someone please review my article?

Thanks!

174.0.65.21 (talk) 17:22, 3 March 2010 (UTC)Phil mc2 2010/03/03


 * I am afraid that I have tagged the article for speedily deletion as spam - it appears to be an advertisement and how-to for the process masquerading as an article. – ukexpat (talk) 16:50, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Ski Utah
Hello- I am trying to create an article on the history of skiing in Utah. This is the first draft User:Jkunzer/Ski Utah. The article discusses the history and development of skiing in Utah and the state's 13 resorts. I would really appreciate any feedback.

Jkunzer (talk) 22:32, 3 March 2010 (UTC) Jessica Kunzer 03/03/10


 * At the moment the draft is far too promotional in tone and would be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace in its current form. Some of it is written in the first person which may indicate that you are connected with the organization - if so, you have a conflict of interest and should not be creating the article. Final point for now, the draft has no references to reliable sources to demonstrate that the subject meets the notability guidelines set out at WP:ORG. – ukexpat (talk) 16:45, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Maclau/Cecilia López Montaño
User:Maclau/Cecilia López Montaño

I would really appreciate a ny reviews on the Senator's page in english. She already has one in Spanish but given the nature of her international work, she feels it would be helpfull to have an official version in this language.

Thank you,

MC —Preceding unsigned comment added by Maclau (talk • contribs) 22:47, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I’m afraid this is not suitable to go live at present, firstly because it does not comply with Wikipedia’s policy on neutral point of view. The layout is fine and some of the material is neutral and factual, but in parts it reads like a promotional piece written by the senator herself or a press officer, and  contains a number of peacock terms  and value judgements: (“... a tireless and determined writer” “... effective and strong political control” “...her most outstanding work is ...” “...solid professional background that keeps growing every day”).  These all need to be removed or rewritten in a neutral tone, as does the comment about “the government’s inefficient management of the financial crisis” which is political bias.  If you are writing this on behalf of Ms. Lopez, you should read Conflict of interest carefully before proceeding further.  If you do go ahead, the second sentence in the lead section would be better as the first sentence, stating exactly what Ms Lopez does before anything else.  Most crucially of all, this article is completely unreferenced and has no citations at all for any of the information in it.  You need to find reliable third-party sources and cite these correctly  - see  Citing sources.   The two links to Ms Lopez’s websites are currently embedded in the text; they should be removed to an external links section at the end.
 * I am slightly concerned by your reference to an “official” version in English. Please bear in mind that if this article goes live it is in no sense an official work:  you will not own it  and nor will Ms Lopez.  Anyone can and will edit it, and you will have no right to keep your own preferred version.  It’s always worth reading through WP:LUC  before making an article about a person or subject with which you are closely affiliated.   Ka renjc 20:47, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Paintball
Over the last several months I have worked on Paintball quite a bit, and would be curious to see if it could be a candidate for a higher ranking (currently sitting at B ranking - and is a former good article nominee). Jwoodger (talk) 00:52, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm not involved in quality assessment at all; perhaps someone who checks in here on occasion can help, but my impression is that Quality assessment of articles tends to be managed by projects. There is a WikiProject Paintball; perhaps check in there (and add your name to the list of volunteers :) and you might ask one of the regulars in that project who does the assessments.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:45, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

James W. "Jim" Case
James W. "Jim" Case

(Jborrego16 (talk) 06:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC))


 * It's a well constructed, well organised and and generally well written article, though it suffers somewhat from POV language and "anecdotism" in places and should be toned down to a more neutral style. The lead section should be more specific about what the subject actually did - his notability isn't down to his university, it's down to his work as a TV production executive.  I did have some anxiety about his notability at first, because there are few checkable references and those that exist don't make too strong a case for his notability, but reading through WP:N again I think he makes it on his association with pioneering programmes for public TV, and perhaps this could be emphasised more in the article.  The "personal interview" cited in several places is an inadmissible piece of original research unless it's published somewhere in a neutral third party source, and it should be removed from the citations list along with any important facts that rely solely on it.  Subheadings should be initial capitals only, per WP:MOS.  The article title should not have both versions of his name in, and should be changed to Jim Case if that's how he was always known, or alternatively James W. Case with the first line of the lead section beginning "James W. "Jim" Case was ..." etc.  Hope this helps, and thanks for writing the article.   Ka renjc 11:21, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Good Garage Scheme
Please could the page Good Garage Scheme be reviewed and any appropriate feedback left so I can ammend and build upon the page. I have added all appropriate sources and information to my best ability, but would appreciate any constructive criticism.

Thanks

Laurahuet (talk) 09:28, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to establish Notability, by showing this is discussed in third party, reliable sources. While you do have some references, all but one is to the entity itself, so do not qualify as external references. The remaining reference may not qualify, but I didn't even see the reference to the campaign.-- SPhilbrick  T  14:57, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Winifred Marshall Gales
I'd love to get any feedback you may have on this article on Winifred Gales. I've included all of the biography I could find, and also some external links. Thanks! NCandbeyond (talk) 13:50, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * One of the key issues to address is Notability, in particular, look at WP:AUTHOR. I don't know anything about the books this author has written, but there are books and there are books. The notability could be established by identifying reliable sources discussing either the author or the books, ideally both.-- SPhilbrick  T  14:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Lost Boys: Why our Sons Turn Violent and How We Can Save Them
The article in question

My first ever article so need some help. Wrote a simple introduction with external links for an important book in the comprehension of youth violence. Thanks in advance --Mbret001 (talk) 08:10, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Well, the article itself lacks inline citations--you're providing a simple description of the work, and an external link to a review. You could improve the article by adding some inline citations for some external references that help establish why this book is notable. Nuujinn (talk) 14:59, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Project Noah
Project Noah

Peterhorvath (talk) 15:12, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I have reviewed and added a couple of maintenance tags. The main issue is notability - I am not convinced that the references demonstrate notability per the guidelines at WP:PRODUCT. – ukexpat (talk) 16:34, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

John Russell (musician)
This is my first article. I've put quite a lot of work into it but would appreciate it if someone could review it or give some feedback. Many thanks!PressedBack (talk) 15:49, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Here's the link: John Russell (musician)PressedBack (talk) 15:52, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Unfortunately the link you have provided is to the disambiguation page for John Russell. Could you try again ?


 * Derek R Bullamore (talk) 16:13, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * – ukexpat (talk) 16:24, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * A very impressive first article; congratulations. I've removed the unreviewed tag. If I had a (very) minor quibble it would be the reference to events being "ongoing" as this type of material tends to date. Other than that, nice work.  Ka renjc 18:46, 6 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Hey, thanks! I take your point about "ongoing" and will find a way to ammend that. --PressedBack (talk) 22:38, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Employer Branding and Employer Brand Management
User:R W Mosley/Employer branding and Employer brand management

(R W Mosley (talk) 18:20, 5 March 2010 (UTC))


 * I have taken a look and made some formatting fixes to the headings to comply with the manual of style. The subject would appear to be notable. A couple of points - please take a look at WP:LEAD for an explanation of what the lead section should do. At the moment it is not at all clear from the lead what the subject actually is/means. Also there is some jargon in the article which may not be immediately comprehensible to the layman reader. When it is ready to move to the mainspace, I think Employer branding would be the correct title. You have plenty of references, which is good. If any of them are online, please use the cite web template to cite them, and similarly cite book for citations from books and cite journal for journals. There is also a technique for using the same reference more than once and that's explained at WP:NAMEDREFS. Hope this helps.  – ukexpat (talk) 18:35, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.
Hi.

I am looking for feedback on my first article. The Article is: User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

I have tried to read the help articles and guidelines thoroughly, and would appreciate some feedback. I have permission to reproduce the material contained in the article, and have footnoted all the information in the article itself.

The wikilink to the article is:

User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

Thank you, in advance, for your time.

Rangertee (talk) 20:13, 5 March 2010 (UTC)Rangertee. March 5, 2010: 3:07p.m.EST (GMT-5:00)
 * Entries in "See Also" should not be full links but Wikilinks. I fixed the first two for you.
 * Please read Article Layout, as your layout does not match the desired layout.
 * Links in External Links should not be the same ones as in References.
 * You have a Notes section with some references, but a separate Reference section with others. The second section is not how references are done. See footnotes
 * In many cases, you've linked to a term in WP, but used the full url, not just the Wikilink. I fixed the ones in your lede, as examples.
 * Most importantly, you said you obtained permission to use material. This is a tricky and serious area. Sometimes, people will give permission to use material as long as it is used in Wikipedia only. That type of permission is not sufficient, and people need to understand that once in Wikipedia, it can be used elsewhere, for many purposes include for profit and for parody. You need to have permission sent to Wikipedia, in proper format. See WP:COPYRIGHT for general info, and WP:PERMISSION for specific steps to ensure that proper permission is obtained. Sorry for the bureaucracy, but copyright is taken very seriously and we want to make sure we do it right.-- SPhilbrick  T  15:45, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Ideatree
IdeaTree

Looking for general correctness. Thanks.

Ronman57 (talk) 21:09, 5 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to establish Notability, by showing this is discussed in third party, reliable sources. While you do have one reference, you need more. -- SPhilbrick  T  15:28, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Lost Boys: Why Our Sons Turn Violent and How We Can Save Them
Would like to request feedback for the revisions I have made for my page. Page link. Thanks in advance for your time. It is much appreciated.--Mbret001 (talk) 21:34, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Dimitri "Mobengo" Mugianis
dimitri "mobengo" Mugianis —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bovenga (talk • contribs) 21:37, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Denver Depression of 1893
Denver Depression of 1893 I would just like to have my article reviewed to make sure things are in order for a wikipedia entry.

MichelaA (talk) 21:57, 6 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I don't think "bimetallism" should be capitalized. I changed it.
 * I made a few other minor fixes, you can click on history to see what I did (ask if you need more help on how to see historical changes).
 * I'm not enamored with "disestablished" as a word choice under causes. What about "repealed" (assuming it was repealed)?
 * You have some phrases indented with a bullet point for no obvious reason, e.g "Owned by Reverend Thomas Uzzell".
 * Your opening sentence of "Effects" could use a more specific time frame.
 * The next sentence is too long, consider changing July to "in July and ending the sentence there.
 * The sentence that starts "Many unemployed miners.." needs work—it starts fine, but ends awkwardly.
 * The sentence starting "August 11, 1893" shouldn't start with a bare date; work it into the text. The end of that sentence is awkward; I can guess what it means, but it needs improvement.
 * After footnote 12, you should have text that flows, not bullet point type items in text.
 * In the last sentence before Politics, this should not be a bulleted. What does "this" refer to? "broadway" shows are in New York. I assume you mean something like theatrical productions.
 * In People, I presume all of these people are dead, so it is odd to see the death date for one of the people. I suggest removing it.
 * "Only saved from destitution in 1898 by his appointment to Postmaster." Is not a sentence.
 * Despite this longish list, everything I've mentioned is easy to fix, but give it a good run through to see if other wording needs tightening up. -- SPhilbrick  T  23:00, 6 March 2010 (UTC)
 * External links are for links not in references, so I removed the external link.-- SPhilbrick  T  23:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Bexhill Amateur Theatrical Society
Bexhill Amateur Theatrical Society Bradburp (talk) 09:37, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Please read Article Layout, your article structure isn't in the form desired. You'll also need to establish Notability by providing references to reliable sources.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:13, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Publishing Article
Hello - can you please let me know why my article isn't posting? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mbeaudreault/Mercator_Risk_Services

THanks,

Maura —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mbeaudreault (talk • contribs) 12:20, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
 * By "posted" I assume you mean you want it to show up if someone does a search for it. That won't happen until it is moved into mainspace, but that shouldn't happen until it is ready.


 * Sorry to be blunt, but it reads like a advertisement, not an encyclopedia article. See WP:PROMO.


 * You haven't established why this company has Notability. I'm sure it will meet the standard; I'm familiar with the company, but you need to establish it by providing references to reliable sources. References can be tricky for new editors, see WP:CITE and footnotes for help.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:10, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Alan Loveday
Dear Wiki Editor

Please review my article on the violinist Alan Loveday Alan Loveday Flying spiccato (talk) 15:19, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You have no references to reliable sources. The format is not appropriate for Wikipedia, see Article Layout for some guidance. The style of writing is not encyclopedic; check other articles on other violinists to see the difference.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:32, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Article named Virtual disk image
I will appreciate a review of the technical article virtual disk image

Categories: Virtual machines | Virtualization software | Hypervisor | Computer Storage | Computer File Systems

Thanks (Barnet.Herts (talk) 23:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC))


 * I took an admittedly quick look through, and it seems fine to me. I'll take another look later once my head cold clears up, but that seems like a very useful article for sysadmins. Nuujinn (talk) 00:17, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

Hamilton Bradshaw
The Wikipedia page Hamilton Bradshaw was recently created. Much thanks to the help that has been provided by my peers editing the page. However, as can be noted when viewing the page, there is still work to be done. Specifically, I need help removing the "advert" designation at the top of the page. It was added when the page was more biased than it is now, but I think almost all of the bias has been eliminated. Can someone please review the page and help me to make it sound completely neutral? I would really like to get the "advert" designation removed.

Additionally, to get the page legitimized, the page states that "This page is a new unreviewed article." I would like for a verified Wikipedian to review the site and remove this designation when reviewed. I would love for the site to be legitimized. Thanks for your time.

CodyJDick (talk) 11:17, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I think this one needs a lot of work on the tone, it's still very promotional. For example, these phrases are very far from a neutral point of view:

However, Caan isn't the only human capital asset that Hamilton Bradshaw touts. Because Caan is often away from the office, between filming Dragons' Den, interviewing on major news and talk shows, and huminitarian and philanthropic projects, the company has many other staff.


 * Also, I think you should eliminate pretty much all of the material that comes directly from HB's web site and promotional materials. You have some good references, but they are overshadowed by the promotional material, and I'm not sure that what you have established notability.Nuujinn (talk) 15:21, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Commotio
User:OxfordSinger/Commotio

Looking for initial feedback, please - first Wiki contribution. Thank you. OxfordSinger (talk) 16:54, 6 February 2010 (UTC)

P.T. Barnum Awards
P.T. Barnum Awards Hello, looking for feedback on this page on a Tufts University awards show for excellence in the entertainment industry. Please let me know if you see any errors or have more information. Thank you   Carchi01 (talk) 22:35, 7 February 2010 (UTC)carchi01 2/5/10

Denielle Hann
User:Nlmusicguy/Denielle Hann

New to Wiki. Please provide feedback/edits on Denielle Hann. It must also be posted to wiki by someone who has that ability.

Thanks very much Nlmusicguy (talk) 15:23, 9 February 2010 (UTC)Nlmusicguy 09 Feb 2010

Review LTX-Credence article
LTX-Credence Corporation

Two companies have merged, updating the historical data. Easy review. Ref'ed AP article on the subject, sourced by the newly merged company. Rbenech (talk) 22:21, 9 February 2010 (UTC)

Bill Zadick
I've written a biography article for User:Rosalita923/Bill_Zadick, a US amateur wrestler who has won a world championship. It's the first article I've ever created, so I'd be grateful for any and all feedback regarding anything you feel needs to be added, deleted, or cited differently.

Many thanks! --Rosalita923 (talk) 17:27, 10 February 2010 (UTC)

New Article: American Car Designer Eric Stoddard
Request to review information about Automobile Designer Eric Stoddard. Review resources on related car designs, please.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Eric_Stoddard

Speedstudio (talk) 13:14, 11 February 2010 (UTC) SpeedStudioDesign.com

You have a decent amount of resources. I don't really see anything wrong. Maybe remove some of the duplicate content under "Career."

Aimelise (talk) 13:50, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Tito in ekšn
Tito in ekšn punk rock group from the 90s
 * Partizanchek (talk) 17:16, 11 February 2010 (UTC)

Reconnective Therapy
Reconnective Therapy Reconnective Therapy ```` —Preceding unsigned comment added by Psullivan7 (talk • contribs) 13:03, 14 February 2010 (UTC)

Crazy Waiting
user:chasingflowers/crazywaiting A recent South Korean movie that I love. Several of the actors have their own Wikipedia pages already, so I thought it would be notable. Chasingflowers (talk) 01:28, 15 February 2010 (UTC)

Feedback requested, please.
Hello,

May I please get some feedback on the following page?

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Weatherlands/European_Climate_Assessment_and_Dataset_%28ECA%26D%29

I would like to make it live as soon as possible since our website, eca.knmi.nl, has been updated as well.

Note: All images are intended to be copyrighted as open to the public. They are generated by "using" the website which anyone can do.

Thanks for your time, please respond in "my talk."

Good day, ~WL

Weatherlands (talk) 10:24, 15 February 2010 (UTC)


 * This post says "our website"; what is your connection with this organization? -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  17:45, 16 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi Orangemike, sorry it has taken me so long to respond. I say "our website" because I sometimes work on the project and they gave me the task of sharing information about the database.  It is a database of freely available data that is downloadable on the website so no costs are involved at all.  The project was initiated by the European Climate Support Network (ECSN) but is coordinated by KNMI.  Do you still consider this a conflict of interest?


 * Also, can you please explain to me why all of my external links have been broken?


 * Thanks,
 * Weatherlands (talk) 10:18, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

International media reaction to Barack Obama's election
I would like to invite feedback on this draft article on the international media reaction to Barack Obama's 2008 election. Please note that images are available to improve the article's look and will be added once the page is published. Please leave comments on the draft's discussion page. Thank you! --Amandaroyal (talk) 19:06, 19 February 2010 (UTC)

Mark W. Moffett New page to post
I would like to post a new page about the Sociobiologist/National Geographic Top Photograher/Ant expert/etc. Mark Moffett. Below is the revised draft of the article with more references. I would also like to add one or two photos, but do not know how to do that. Thanks. Never did this before. -Roc Ordman

Mark W. Moffett, Ph.D.
“Mark has developed a career that combines science and photography, in spite of being a high school dropout. Although his family was not academic, encouraged by his parents he sought out biologists by the age of 12. “ [1] Moffett received his BA in Biology at Beloit College in Wisconsin in 1979. He received his PhD from Harvard University where he studied with E. O. Wilson, who developed the field of sociobiology. Mark was the first PhD candidate that Wilson had accepted in about a decade, but Mark was so fascinated by ant behavior that Wilson agreed to accept him as a student. Moffett taught himself novel photographic techniques for his 1989 Ph.D. on ants. National Geographic magazine published these novel photographs, and he went on to become a top photojournalist of that magazine Moffett became curator of ants at Harvard, and then directed Harvard's Museum of Comparative Zoology. His research concerns insect social behavior and the structure and dynamics of forest ecosystems, particularly their canopies. He travels the world studying different insects and ecosystems. He has investigated and written about canopies of the Amazon rain forest, where he operates a research station in Peru. He also has worked on the supertall coniferous forests of the Pacific Northwest, for which he led the first ever ascent and study of the world's tallest tree, known as the National Geographic redwood. In 1993 Harvard University Press published Moffett's book, The High Frontier: Exploring the Tropical Rainforest Canopy. He has a new book coming out in early 2010. Today his research and National Geographic photography are interspersed with writing and public lecturing about rain forests. In 2010, he is Research Associate, NMNH, the Smithsonian Institution, Associate Curator, the University of California, Berkeley, and Contract Photographer, National Geographic Magazine. He also operates a research station in the Amazon Rainforest in Peru along the Amazon River. A photomural he produced there can be seen at Olbrich Botanical Gardens in Madison, WI.

Among his achievements, his home page is, giving a list of over 80 peer-reviewed publications and 20 articles in National Geographic. Among his awards are the Lowell Thomas Medal from National Geographic, and the Beloit College Roy Chapman Andrews Award. He has written books on ants, frogs, and the rainforest.

EXTERNAL LINKS
 * Photographer of National Geographic
 * 
 * 
 * 
 * 

User:HealthGal/Tracey_Powell
This is an article about Tracey Powell, a healthcare entrepreneur who is highly-recognized in the industry as having produced the first and only FDA-approved at-home kits for anonymous HIV and Hepatitis-C testing. By de-stigmatizing STD testing and providing an online, confidential forum for risk evaluation and expert test recommendations, he has enabled thousands who otherwise would not have sought out such information to receive anonymous STD testing, and subsequent treatment as applicable.

HealthGal (talk) 01:34, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

Sun Yat-sen's prayer at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor
Hi

This is my first article (lot of fun). In fact I have never edited a page either. I was going through the page on Sun Yat-sen trying to find out about this prayer that he made at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor. I had seen a reference to the fact that Sun Yat-sen had visited and prayed at the tomb three days after he took power in a book on the Forbidden city. I got very curious as to why he, who had been trying to overthrow the Qing dynasty, would visit the tomb of the founder of the Ming dynasty. In any case one thing led to another and I managed to find the original prayer mentioned in a book published in 1912.

I would like to add a reference to this prayer in Sun Yat-sen's original article and as such would like to add the prayer itself as an article which can be then be linked.

User:MalikFeb2010/Sun Yat-sen's prayer at the tomb of the Hongwu Emperor

MalikFeb2010 (talk) 04:49, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * For starters, welcome to Wikipedia. Please continue to edit here. Looking at the article on Sun Yat-Sen, I see no reason for this to be a separate article. But it is very well written and sourced and probably belongs within the article if it is indeed notable enough. Unfortunately, I do not know enough about his life to tell you if it is notable or not, but regardless, it does not need its own article.BillyJack193 (talk) 04:58, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the quick feedback. I think this was a very graceful tribute by Sun Yat-sen to the Ming Emperor and as such should be part of the page on him - also points to the centuries long conflicts that have taken place between the Chinese Han race and the Eastern and Western Tartars. I presume (not sure  how it gets determined if it is notable enough or not) that it will be okay for me to go ahead and figure out the appropriate place and add it into the original Sun Yat-sen article.MalikFeb2010 (talk) 05:43, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * From what you have said, it is notable enough, so go ahead and add it. If you put it in the wrong place, I am sure some of the other editors of the article will help you out. Good luck.BillyJack193 (talk) 06:04, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I am going to have to disagree with the above comments. The place for the complete text of the prayer is Wikisource - the text can be posted there and linked to in the main article. Large chunks of source material like this should not be added to a Wikipedia article. – ukexpat (talk) 20:40, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have no problem putting it in Wikisource. However can you point out which category you think is appropriate? Please do consider that this is not a "religious prayer" in the strictest sense of the word. I checked Wikisource and am not sure where you would like to see it placed. Any recommendations? MalikFeb2010 (talk) 03:43, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Miaohui
Literally Temple Fair, this is a festivity common in China during the Chinese New Year. A lot of materials are already present on Chinese WP. I wonder if anyone wants to have a look and make some translations if possible. It is amazing that no article exists yet about this tradition.Btmachine333667 (talk) 09:52, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

Visionlearning.com
I just created the article Visionlearning.com User:Neopropism/Visionlearning.com and would love some feedback on the tone, etc. I've tried to be as unbiased as possible, but am not sure if some of my descriptions seem too favorable.

Thanks! Neopropism (talk) 17:22, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

David Newman aka Durga Das (Chant Artist)
Hello,

I posted an article about musician David Newman a few months ago in my userspace. At that time I was advised to wait until his next album came out on the Nettwerk label since he would then meet notability requirements. That album is coming out in a few weeks so I've made a few edits and would like to get the ball rolling again. If anyone has any input, thanks in advance!

Here is the article: David Newman aka Durga Das (Chant Artist)

AmaruKR (talk) 23:07, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Having an interest in the world of chant generally, I read through the proposed article and checked for Newman and Durga Das on line. The text of the article is pretty much all based on personal websites and social media. I was unable to find a third-party source beyong the one Yoga magazine and it seems to be more pr than anything else. Until there are reviews of the albums or the studio in WP:RS, which might occur after the new album which is still in the porudction process, this appears to be a local musician/entrepreneur looking for WP publicity. I would say certainly not yet; the subject needs to have more more prominence than he has right now. If you have a careful read through Wikipedia's guidelines for notability in musicians, you will see that this individual meets none of the tests as far as I can tell. Bielle  (talk) 23:22, 22 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi Bielle,


 * Thank you for taking a look and for your feedback.


 * One of the guidelines for notability is "Has released two or more albums on a major label or one of the more important indie labels (i.e., an independent label with a history of more than a few years and a roster of performers, many of which are notable)" which I believe is applicable here since Newman's new album is being released through Nutone/Nettwerk, as was his last. The latest album was produced by a Grammy-award winning producer, who is also listed on WP. In addition, though chant is certainly a niche genre that will never get mainstream air time, there are other kirtan artists on WP who are also now making music through Nettwork/Nutone.


 * Would it help to have more review articles referenced for past albums? I did not do so since a lot of the information was repeat or strictly reviews of albums.


 * A few more points that might help the case: Newman has been putting albums out since 2003. In 2004 his second album was reviewed on NPR. In 2008 he was mentioned in an article called "Yoga Rock Stars" in Yoga+Joyful Living Magazine.


 * In any case thanks again for taking the time. I won't say the impetus for this article is devoid of promotional considerations but I have tried to make it objective and do want to respect the WP guidelines. I wouldn't submit an article if I didn't believe the person belonged here. However, if the consensus is to wait, I will.


 * Best,
 * AmaruKR (talk) 16:59, 24 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I appreciate your work and your interest, AmaruKR. However, I am still not seeing notable here as WP defines it for musicians; "at least" ia an absolute minimum standard. If there is some press in a major publication about the person, that might be helpful; the Yoga magazine is more pr than news, I think, and so is much of the writing still. As for the albums, if they get significant coverage, they might warrant an article with a paragraph on the musician, but I am not even seeing the grounds for that yet. This is just my opinion. Others' opinions are welcome. Bielle (talk) 17:05, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Anybody else care to weigh in? Advice on how to proceed is welcome. Thx,
 * AmaruKR (talk) 23:27, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

VertiKa
I started the page VertiKa and revised it after first review and seek another. --Ewikiwriter (talk) 13:07, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Just read through your article, and I think it's pretty good. There's plenty of references and reliable sources in there, and the structure makes it really easy for me to read and find out the important information. However, I would say with the 'history' section that you could perhaps put the dates in bold and separate the sections a bit more. Apart from that, I think it's a really well written article! Please ask if you require any more opinions on the article. Chevymontecarlo (talk) 16:18, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Edgar Blazona
Edgar Blazona Hello, I welcome all feedback on this new article I created. Please let me know where and how I can improve. Thanks! Taramelinchuk (talk) 18:09, 23 February 2010 (UTC)

Kathryn Wallace
Kathryn Wallace is an American film and print journalist. Please review and let me know if this person is notable enough and what else I might need to move to mainspace. Link to article is here:

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Joeistaller/Kathryn_Wallace

Joeistaller (talk) 01:06, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Not a bad start, although I would suggest a review of the external links and the in-text links. Also, the "Inside Guantanamo" section does not appear to be entirely relevant. - Reconsider !  01:32, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

Please check this article for publication
Jo Hamilton (musician)

Hello

I have comprehensively referenced this article, as well as adding a photograph of the artist.

I need the thumbnail to be accepted as I have reduced its size considerably.

Please contact me regarding this

Thanks

Shelley Atkinson —Preceding unsigned comment added by Artsdeville (talk • contribs) 16:18, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Dice.com
Hello, I just created an article for Dice.com. Dice is the leading IT recruiter in the United States and has also provided industry reports that have been published by Reuters. The article is here: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Athard/dice.com. Please look at it and let me know if this is good enough for Wikipedia. Thank you.

Athard (talk) 18:47, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Jordanmakesmusic/Faces_On_Film
I made a page for the band Faces on Film. Since it's my first page, general feedback would be appreciated. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Jordanmakesmusic (talk • contribs) 21:45, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

Jim Lord, Singer/songwriter
Jim Lord, Singer/songwriter Jim Lord, singer/songwriter requesting feedback on article. Lord is considered by many to be "one of the best artists you hear little about" (source: CHIC Magazine, Music Notes, January 1983 Issue, P.9). He was a singer/songwriter in the 70's/80's, influenced by the British folk scene, recorded a couple of successful albums but changed career tracks in the mid-80's to pursue a career in photojournalism, where he was a very successful, award winning, wartime photojournalist particularly known for his work in Nicaragua and Guatemala during the civil wars in those areas on the 1980s (the information on his photojournalism career is NOT included in his musicians bio page, but for your edification). Lord returned to his singer/songwriter roots in early 2000's and is currently working on an album, scheduled for release later in 2010.

Thanks for taking time to review Lord's singer/songwriter bio.

Jdlongshot2 (talk) 18:21, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

Village Roots Garden
Thank you in advance for your time and consideration. I've just completed my 1st Wikipedia aricle ever, on community gardening at User:VitusKonter/VillageRoots. Please let me know how it looks. VitusKonter (talk) 07:27, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * It looks really well done, nice organization nice pictures, nice layout, so it pains me to report that it may not meet the Notability requirements. I hope it does, but you should search for more examples of coverage in reliable sources.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:14, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you. I've added a few more citations, and hope to add more in the next week to help establish notability. VitusKonter (talk) 06:51, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * If it doesn't meet notability, see esp WP:LOCAL, then perhaps it should added to the Bay View, Milwaukee article. Nuujinn (talk) 20:50, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I've already done several edits and added 3 new sections to the Bay View, Milwaukee article (and I plan on adding more), but I think that the Village Roots article is too large to be included within the Bay View article. VitusKonter (talk) 06:51, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Nope, not even in "the other East Side" is this notable. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  02:38, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

User:NotableCheckertools/Sarey (singer)
How can i improve this article any help? Feel welcome to change the article to improve the quality. (NotableCheckertools (talk) 19:15, 28 February 2010 (UTC))

/User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

User:Wikiwhackjack/KSM_Guitars

I would like to publish this article and would like to know if there are any reasons that it would be denied.

Wikiwhackjack (talk) 20:53, 28 February 2010 (UTC) Chris Lott, 2/28/10
 * You haven't established why these guitars are Notable. You need to show that they are discussed in multiple reliable sources. So far, you have zero sources.


 * It will help (but not be sufficient) to show that notable musicians use the guitar. While you have listed two, you've haven't cited any references to verify that they do own the guitars.-- SPhilbrick  T  23:47, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Smoked Bear
Please provide feedback on a short article describing a public education campaign called Smoked Bear. Once I find the text or an MP3 of the radio spot(s) mentioned in the article, I will also include them on the article page.

Thanks in advance for any reviews. TnCom (talk) 04:59, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You linked to one article about the campaign, but I've found no other mention of the campaign, so I'm worried that it would not survive a proposal to delete on the basis of lack of Notability. Are there other discussions of this campaign in reliable sources?


 * Please do not copy the entire text of the campaign, as it is almost certainly a violation of Copyright. You may be able to use excerpts, but even that has to be done with care. An MP3 of the campaign is also almost certainly a copyright violation. You are free to investigate getting permission, but let's see if you can satisfactorily establish Notability first.
 * Sorry I can't be more positive.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:29, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I agree with SPhilbrick, I only found the one reference on google. It sounds like this is the personal mission of one indvidual at this point. Nuujinn (talk) 00:34, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Thank you for the feed back SPhilbrick and Nuujinn. I was able to find another source and put it in the reference section. I will also try to find where the campaign is posted and provide a link there instead of posting the text or the MP3 TnCom (talk) 05:08, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Sven Windahl
Hi, Just created a page on Swedish professor of communications Sven Windahl. This is my first Wikipedia article, so I hope someone out there will be able and willing to provide some constructive feedback.

Brainfu (talk) 10:32, 1 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I'm sorry, but I'm just not sure he's really notable--it seems like he has the normal credentials for an active academician, but nothing out of the ordinary or of particular notablity. This isn't a criticism of him or his work, there are very many people who do valuable and significant work who aren't notable. Nuujinn (talk) 16:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

FANTASTIC MAN magazine
Hello I created an article for Fantastic Man magazine last week and it does not seem to be live yet. I suppose it still needs feedback. I'm having a hard time with the whole Wikipedia submission process -- it is very convoluted if you ask me -- but from what I can tell, my article still needs to be reviewed. I'm eager to get it live so if someone can help me out, I would really appreciate it...

Thanks!

Matthew Stewart Matty stewart (talk) 12:54, 1 March 2010 (UTC)


 * It is live as Fantastic Man (magazine). I made some minor edits. When you reference a website you need to provide a brief title for the website, not just a link. See what I did with the New York Times reference. Anyway, a good start and OK as a stub article. Itsmejudith (talk) 13:58, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

Alex Hibbert
User:TinTin7/New article name here

Hello,

Below is the updated version of Alex Hibbert's wikipedia page. I would much appreciate some feedback and hope all is adequate before it goes live. Thank you very much!

Alex Hibbert is a polar expedition leader, outdoor photographer, athlete and zoologist. In 2008 he broke the record, along with his teammate George Bullard, for the longest unsupported polar expedition in history. At 21 years old Alex led the 1374 mile, over 113 day Tiso Trans-Greenland Expedition.

Alex Hibbert wrote the story of his expedition in his book The Long Haul which will be published by Tricorn Books on March 15th, 2010. [edit] References

<http://www.tricornbooks.co.uk/menu-reviews}

<http://www.londonspeakerbureau.co.uk/alex_hibbert.aspx]

<http://www.wideworldmag.co.uk/features/alex-hibbert-s-polar-expeditions} [edit] External links


 * [www.alexhibbert.com ]

TinTin7 (talk) 13:15, 1 March 2010 (UTC)March 1st, 2010

PeerPong
PeerPong

Please give a general review of newly posted PeerPong Wiki entry. I am looking for ways to improve it.

Thank You! Lforrest11 (talk) 19:20, 1 March 2010 (UTC)Laura Forrest 3/1/2010


 * The big problem here is notability - as the site is still in private beta it is most unlikely to meet the notability guidelines at WP:WEB nor does the company appear to meet the guidelines at WP:CORP. The website/company may meet the guidelines at some time in the future, but they do not at the moment. I have tagged the article for speedy deletion. Sorry. – ukexpat (talk) 18:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Jack Garson
Jack Garson

If anyone could review the above article it would be greatly appreciated!!

Jack Garson (born December 19, 1960) is the founder of Garson Claxton LLC and leads the firm’s business and real estate practice groups. Jack serves as a legal advisor for numerous local, regional and national companies, focusing on business transactions, commercial real estate, commercial leasing, and construction law. He is also a US author of How to Build a Business and Sell It for Millions published by St. Martin’s Press in March 2010.

Thanks!

MegOTMM (talk) 22:06, 1 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Eriktb/Ala Moana Bowls
User:Eriktb/Ala Moana Bowls

Hello, this is my first wikipedia entry. Please give me feedback. Eriktb (talk) 03:40, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I think it's a pretty good start. The first thing I'd suggest is cleaning up the citations, see WP:CS for exmples--you might start with the basic footnote examples. If you have any questions or problems, drop me a note on my talk page. Nuujinn (talk) 15:35, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Tongal
User:Fightonfortroy/Tongal

This article is about the crowdsourcing company Tongal. I'd appreciate any constructive criticism. Thanks for the help.

Fightonfortroy (talk) 04:03, 2 March 2010 (UTC)Fightonfortroy

Edward W. Estlow
Hello, please review [|Edward W. Estlow] for inclusion LSClark (talk) 07:56, 2 March 2010 (UTC)LSClark March 2, 2010


 * It's coming along nicely. In the headings, only capitalize the first word. The Manual of style helps with such things. Make sure you refer to the subject as "Estlow" throughout; avoid chatty phrasing like "Ed and his wife". Don't include the names of his children unless any of them are notable in their own right. Include links to relevant firms and institutions, especially University of Denver, on first mention. When you say "internal university documentation", that may be all right, but we prefer to use sources that other people can check. If you are referring to university web pages, give the URLs. Itsmejudith (talk) 12:41, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Portland (communications)
Dear All,

I would greatly appreciate it if someone could review this article have written on a PR company. Not the most interesting I know, but the consultancy has links to a fair few British politicians so I think it is of notable interest.

Many Thanks. --Adam Wildman (talk) 09:55, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I'm not sure the company meets notability requirements, since it appears that the sources cited focus mostly on the people rather than the corporation. See WP:CORP for some more detail. Nuujinn (talk) 23:24, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi,

Thanks for taking the time to to back to me so quickly. In regards your comments, do you mean that the article needs re-wording, i.e. having quotes/references directly refering the company itself. What I'm asking is, will re-wording the article save it from deletion?

Thanks again. --Adam Wildman (talk) 11:31, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I can't say what will or won't save an article from deletion, since I'm not really involved in that part of the process at this point. I will say I think that if you move the article into your user space and work on it some more there, it's got a better chance of lasting longer. And yes, what I take from the article in it's current state is here's a PR firm seeking PR on the basis of the fame of the people who are associated with them. Wikipedia isn't about promotion, and while it seems that some of these individuals are themselves notable, I'm not seeing any evidence that the firm is. Nuujinn (talk) 00:20, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Robert "Bob" Olszewski, Miniature Figurative Artist (Born: May 2, 1945 - )
User:ROlszewski/Robert Olszewski  —Preceding unsigned comment added by ROlszewski (talk • contribs) 15:30, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * This appears (based on your user name) to be an autobiography. Creating an autobiography is strongly discouraged as it is hard to write about yourself from a neutral point of view. The draft is very promotional/non-neutral/unencyclopedic in tone and will need a lot of toning down and rewriting before it can be moved to the mainspace. It will also need more references to reliable sources to demonstrate notability per WP:CREATIVE. If you are the subject, I would suggest that you abandon the draft but ask for it to be created by posting at articles for creation. – ukexpat (talk) 18:32, 2 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Shameless autobiographical spam; nothing of merit, nothing salvageable. -- Orange Mike  &#x007C;   Talk  01:23, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I concur with ukexpat and Orange Mike that this is not appropriate for WP. However, it is quite extensive, and shows evidence of a lot of work; it would be a shame to lose it. There is another site which accepts bios, without the NPOV requirement, but I've forgotten the name of it. Can someone remind me, so that Bob might move this work to a better venue?-- SPhilbrick  T  14:24, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Poking around, I found two options: Biographicon, WikiBios -- SPhilbrick  T  14:39, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Montana Justice Foundation
Montana Justice Foundation

I have recently updated the Montana Justice Foundation page to include links on and to the page. I am hoping for someone to review the article again with these changes in place.

The Montana Justice Foundation is a non for profit organizations that uses IOLTA funds and donations to fund legal aid initiatives around Montana.

Lauren Asprooth (Lauren Asprooth 16:53, 2 March 2010 (UTC)) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Laurenasprooth (talk • contribs)


 * Before we worry about links, there is a more serious problem. The article needs citations to reliable sources that demonstrate how or why the organization is notable per the guidance at WP:ORG. Without such references, the article is destined to be nominated for deletion. References to the Foundation's website do not qualify as reliable to show notability. There are some formatting issues too: please take a look at Infobox non-profit to see how to use infobox code correctly; the tables for the executives and directors are not necessary, bulleted lists will do. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 18:45, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

International League of Conservation Writers
User:PattyMaher/International League of Conservation Writers

PattyMaher (talk) 22:38, 2 March 2010 (UTC)Patty Maher

Music_Teachers_Association_of_California
Hi, I would like feedback on my article about the Music Teachers' Association of California, MTAC, at User:Lowellwebster/Music Teachers Association of California. My article is very similar to the article MTNA. When my page is accepted, then a new entry needs to be made in the MTAC disambiguation page. Thanks, Lowellwebster (talk) 22:40, 2 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Please read the notability guidelines for organizations set out at WP:ORG - at the moment the draft has no references to reliable sources that demonstrate the notability of the subject. Note that the org's own website is not a reliable sources for establishing notability - significant coverage in third party sources is required. Hope this helps. (The same comments apply to MTNA and I have tagged it accordingly - I am surprised that it has survived for so long without references.) – ukexpat (talk) 16:59, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Ramekin Counterpane
Thanks for reviewing my new article on Ramekin Counterpane, the '70s art-rock band from the Southern California desert.

I appreciate your help.

Rememberthe60s (talk) 02:21, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Saying that the band's popularity is comparable to 10cc does not reflect reality. You should have another look at this statement. Also, the quote needs attribution.

Brhodewalt (talk) 03:06, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * The fact that this band has no mention at Allmusic, instantly suggests to me that they are not notable. Please read the guidelines - they may save you much time and effort.


 * Derek R Bullamore (talk) 15:36, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

The Real Estate Investment Securities Association (REISA)
The Real Estate Investment Securities Association (REISA)

This is original information about a real estate industry trade group. There are currently about 30 of these type of groups listed in Wikipedia, but nothing on REISA. Errors pop up related to the references and am not experienced enough to resolve it. I tried to be neutral and only state the facts. Help me to not make this an advertisement, but an informative piece on what the association is about.

(Investmentconnector (talk) 05:47, 3 March 2010 (UTC))
 * It's not bad at all. It will be better if you take out a lot of the detail, because that is what makes it read like an advertisement or corporate website. For example, it isn't appropriate to have the full postal address; the city is sufficient. The article could be about half the length. If there is any discussion of the association in independent sources, for example trade press, that should be added. Itsmejudith (talk) 16:46, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Organizational Behavior And Leadership During A Political Revolution
To Whom This May Concern,

Hello, this is my first real contribution to Wikipedia. Please feel free to edit this so it meets the encyclopedia standard, or help teach me so I can do this myself.

Thanks! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Robsmyth40 (talk • contribs) 07:23, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Hi, I will see if I can provide some helpful points. First off, this article indeed reads a lot like an essay - and needs to be re-written in encyclopedic style.  Also, please look at incorporating good inline citations (see here), and add a good introduction that properly summarizes the entire article - with a short succinct statement that truly defines what is meant by "Organizational Behavior And Leadership During A Political Revolution", and that this can be considered a truly encyclopedic article. Jwoodger (talk) 02:18, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Head Cut (Stream Geomorphology)
Would appreciate a review of my first article about a geomorphological feature I encountered on a recent field visit. I was calling this feature a small waterfall in the field but I assumed there was a better name for it. Thus I found info on a head cut from the North Carolina Dept of Water Quality and summed up what I learned in this article.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Submerged-arc_furnace_for_phosphorus_production
To whom it may concern

Very little is found in Wikipedia on submerged-arc furnaces. Submerged-arc furnaces is a very important subset of electrical arc furnaces and should have a rightful place on such a great website. This article deals with the production of phosphorus by using such a furnace.

I hope you find this a good first step Regards Emile —Preceding unsigned comment added by Emilescheepers444 (talk • contribs) 16:03, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I think it's a very good start, but I think you need more references. It's best if every assertion made in an article can be supported by an external and reliable source. I think you should be able to find some more with just a little work, but drop me a note on my talk page if you get stuck. Nuujinn (talk) 21:17, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Electro Thermal Dynamic Stripping Process
Electro Thermal Dynamic Stripping Process

Can someone please review my article?

Thanks!

174.0.65.21 (talk) 17:22, 3 March 2010 (UTC)Phil mc2 2010/03/03


 * I am afraid that I have tagged the article for speedily deletion as spam - it appears to be an advertisement and how-to for the process masquerading as an article. – ukexpat (talk) 16:50, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Ski Utah
Hello- I am trying to create an article on the history of skiing in Utah. This is the first draft User:Jkunzer/Ski Utah. The article discusses the history and development of skiing in Utah and the state's 13 resorts. I would really appreciate any feedback.

Jkunzer (talk) 22:32, 3 March 2010 (UTC) Jessica Kunzer 03/03/10


 * At the moment the draft is far too promotional in tone and would be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace in its current form. Some of it is written in the first person which may indicate that you are connected with the organization - if so, you have a conflict of interest and should not be creating the article. Final point for now, the draft has no references to reliable sources to demonstrate that the subject meets the notability guidelines set out at WP:ORG. – ukexpat (talk) 16:45, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Maclau/Cecilia López Montaño
User:Maclau/Cecilia López Montaño

I would really appreciate a ny reviews on the Senator's page in english. She already has one in Spanish but given the nature of her international work, she feels it would be helpfull to have an official version in this language.

Thank you,

MC —Preceding unsigned comment added by Maclau (talk • contribs) 22:47, 3 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I’m afraid this is not suitable to go live at present, firstly because it does not comply with Wikipedia’s policy on neutral point of view. The layout is fine and some of the material is neutral and factual, but in parts it reads like a promotional piece written by the senator herself or a press officer, and  contains a number of peacock terms  and value judgements: (“... a tireless and determined writer” “... effective and strong political control” “...her most outstanding work is ...” “...solid professional background that keeps growing every day”).  These all need to be removed or rewritten in a neutral tone, as does the comment about “the government’s inefficient management of the financial crisis” which is political bias.  If you are writing this on behalf of Ms. Lopez, you should read Conflict of interest carefully before proceeding further.  If you do go ahead, the second sentence in the lead section would be better as the first sentence, stating exactly what Ms Lopez does before anything else.  Most crucially of all, this article is completely unreferenced and has no citations at all for any of the information in it.  You need to find reliable third-party sources and cite these correctly  - see  Citing sources.   The two links to Ms Lopez’s websites are currently embedded in the text; they should be removed to an external links section at the end.
 * I am slightly concerned by your reference to an “official” version in English. Please bear in mind that if this article goes live it is in no sense an official work:  you will not own it  and nor will Ms Lopez.  Anyone can and will edit it, and you will have no right to keep your own preferred version.  It’s always worth reading through WP:LUC  before making an article about a person or subject with which you are closely affiliated.   Ka renjc 20:47, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Paintball
Over the last several months I have worked on Paintball quite a bit, and would be curious to see if it could be a candidate for a higher ranking (currently sitting at B ranking - and is a former good article nominee). Jwoodger (talk) 00:52, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm not involved in quality assessment at all; perhaps someone who checks in here on occasion can help, but my impression is that Quality assessment of articles tends to be managed by projects. There is a WikiProject Paintball; perhaps check in there (and add your name to the list of volunteers :) and you might ask one of the regulars in that project who does the assessments.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:45, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

James W. "Jim" Case
James W. "Jim" Case

(Jborrego16 (talk) 06:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC))


 * It's a well constructed, well organised and and generally well written article, though it suffers somewhat from POV language and "anecdotism" in places and should be toned down to a more neutral style. The lead section should be more specific about what the subject actually did - his notability isn't down to his university, it's down to his work as a TV production executive.  I did have some anxiety about his notability at first, because there are few checkable references and those that exist don't make too strong a case for his notability, but reading through WP:N again I think he makes it on his association with pioneering programmes for public TV, and perhaps this could be emphasised more in the article.  The "personal interview" cited in several places is an inadmissible piece of original research unless it's published somewhere in a neutral third party source, and it should be removed from the citations list along with any important facts that rely solely on it.  Subheadings should be initial capitals only, per WP:MOS.  The article title should not have both versions of his name in, and should be changed to Jim Case if that's how he was always known, or alternatively James W. Case with the first line of the lead section beginning "James W. "Jim" Case was ..." etc.  Hope this helps, and thanks for writing the article.   Ka renjc 11:21, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Good Garage Scheme
Please could the page Good Garage Scheme be reviewed and any appropriate feedback left so I can ammend and build upon the page. I have added all appropriate sources and information to my best ability, but would appreciate any constructive criticism.

Thanks

Laurahuet (talk) 09:28, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to establish Notability, by showing this is discussed in third party, reliable sources. While you do have some references, all but one is to the entity itself, so do not qualify as external references. The remaining reference may not qualify, but I didn't even see the reference to the campaign.-- SPhilbrick  T  14:57, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Winifred Marshall Gales
I'd love to get any feedback you may have on this article on Winifred Gales. I've included all of the biography I could find, and also some external links. Thanks! NCandbeyond (talk) 13:50, 4 March 2010 (UTC)
 * One of the key issues to address is Notability, in particular, look at WP:AUTHOR. I don't know anything about the books this author has written, but there are books and there are books. The notability could be established by identifying reliable sources discussing either the author or the books, ideally both.-- SPhilbrick  T  14:49, 4 March 2010 (UTC)

Lost Boys: Why our Sons Turn Violent and How We Can Save Them
The article in question

My first ever article so need some help. Wrote a simple introduction with external links for an important book in the comprehension of youth violence. Thanks in advance --Mbret001 (talk) 08:10, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Well, the article itself lacks inline citations--you're providing a simple description of the work, and an external link to a review. You could improve the article by adding some inline citations for some external references that help establish why this book is notable. Nuujinn (talk) 14:59, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Project Noah
Project Noah

Peterhorvath (talk) 15:12, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I have reviewed and added a couple of maintenance tags. The main issue is notability - I am not convinced that the references demonstrate notability per the guidelines at WP:PRODUCT. – ukexpat (talk) 16:34, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

John Russell (musician)
This is my first article. I've put quite a lot of work into it but would appreciate it if someone could review it or give some feedback. Many thanks!PressedBack (talk) 15:49, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

Here's the link: John Russell (musician)PressedBack (talk) 15:52, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Unfortunately the link you have provided is to the disambiguation page for John Russell. Could you try again ?


 * Derek R Bullamore (talk) 16:13, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * – ukexpat (talk) 16:24, 5 March 2010 (UTC)


 * A very impressive first article; congratulations. I've removed the unreviewed tag. If I had a (very) minor quibble it would be the reference to events being "ongoing" as this type of material tends to date. Other than that, nice work.  Ka renjc 18:46, 6 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Hey, thanks! I take your point about "ongoing" and will find a way to ammend that. --PressedBack (talk) 22:38, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Employer Branding and Employer Brand Management
User:R W Mosley/Employer branding and Employer brand management

(R W Mosley (talk) 18:20, 5 March 2010 (UTC))


 * I have taken a look and made some formatting fixes to the headings to comply with the manual of style. The subject would appear to be notable. A couple of points - please take a look at WP:LEAD for an explanation of what the lead section should do. At the moment it is not at all clear from the lead what the subject actually is/means. Also there is some jargon in the article which may not be immediately comprehensible to the layman reader. When it is ready to move to the mainspace, I think Employer branding would be the correct title. You have plenty of references, which is good. If any of them are online, please use the cite web template to cite them, and similarly cite book for citations from books and cite journal for journals. There is also a technique for using the same reference more than once and that's explained at WP:NAMEDREFS. Hope this helps.  – ukexpat (talk) 18:35, 5 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.
Hi.

I am looking for feedback on my first article. The Article is: User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

I have tried to read the help articles and guidelines thoroughly, and would appreciate some feedback. I have permission to reproduce the material contained in the article, and have footnoted all the information in the article itself.

The wikilink to the article is:

User:Rangertee/75th_Ranger_Regiment_Association,_Inc.

Thank you, in advance, for your time.

Rangertee (talk) 20:13, 5 March 2010 (UTC)Rangertee. March 5, 2010: 3:07p.m.EST (GMT-5:00)
 * Entries in "See Also" should not be full links but Wikilinks. I fixed the first two for you.
 * Please read Article Layout, as your layout does not match the desired layout.
 * Links in External Links should not be the same ones as in References.
 * You have a Notes section with some references, but a separate Reference section with others. The second section is not how references are done. See footnotes
 * In many cases, you've linked to a term in WP, but used the full url, not just the Wikilink. I fixed the ones in your lede, as examples.
 * Most importantly, you said you obtained permission to use material. This is a tricky and serious area. Sometimes, people will give permission to use material as long as it is used in Wikipedia only. That type of permission is not sufficient, and people need to understand that once in Wikipedia, it can be used elsewhere, for many purposes include for profit and for parody. You need to have permission sent to Wikipedia, in proper format. See WP:COPYRIGHT for general info, and WP:PERMISSION for specific steps to ensure that proper permission is obtained. Sorry for the bureaucracy, but copyright is taken very seriously and we want to make sure we do it right.-- SPhilbrick  T  15:45, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Ideatree
IdeaTree

Looking for general correctness. Thanks.

Ronman57 (talk) 21:09, 5 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to establish Notability, by showing this is discussed in third party, reliable sources. While you do have one reference, you need more. -- SPhilbrick  T  15:28, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Lost Boys: Why Our Sons Turn Violent and How We Can Save Them
Would like to request feedback for the revisions I have made for my page. Page link. Thanks in advance for your time. It is much appreciated.--Mbret001 (talk) 21:34, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Dimitri "Mobengo" Mugianis
dimitri "mobengo" Mugianis —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bovenga (talk • contribs) 21:37, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Denver Depression of 1893
Denver Depression of 1893 I would just like to have my article reviewed to make sure things are in order for a wikipedia entry.

MichelaA (talk) 21:57, 6 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I don't think "bimetallism" should be capitalized. I changed it.
 * I made a few other minor fixes, you can click on history to see what I did (ask if you need more help on how to see historical changes).
 * I'm not enamored with "disestablished" as a word choice under causes. What about "repealed" (assuming it was repealed)?
 * You have some phrases indented with a bullet point for no obvious reason, e.g "Owned by Reverend Thomas Uzzell".
 * Your opening sentence of "Effects" could use a more specific time frame.
 * The next sentence is too long, consider changing July to "in July and ending the sentence there.
 * The sentence that starts "Many unemployed miners.." needs work—it starts fine, but ends awkwardly.
 * The sentence starting "August 11, 1893" shouldn't start with a bare date; work it into the text. The end of that sentence is awkward; I can guess what it means, but it needs improvement.
 * After footnote 12, you should have text that flows, not bullet point type items in text.
 * In the last sentence before Politics, this should not be a bulleted. What does "this" refer to? "broadway" shows are in New York. I assume you mean something like theatrical productions.
 * In People, I presume all of these people are dead, so it is odd to see the death date for one of the people. I suggest removing it.
 * "Only saved from destitution in 1898 by his appointment to Postmaster." Is not a sentence.
 * Despite this longish list, everything I've mentioned is easy to fix, but give it a good run through to see if other wording needs tightening up. -- SPhilbrick  T  23:00, 6 March 2010 (UTC)
 * External links are for links not in references, so I removed the external link.-- SPhilbrick  T  23:03, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Bexhill Amateur Theatrical Society
Bexhill Amateur Theatrical Society Bradburp (talk) 09:37, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Please read Article Layout, your article structure isn't in the form desired. You'll also need to establish Notability by providing references to reliable sources.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:13, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Publishing Article
Hello - can you please let me know why my article isn't posting? http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mbeaudreault/Mercator_Risk_Services

THanks,

Maura —Preceding unsigned comment added by Mbeaudreault (talk • contribs) 12:20, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
 * By "posted" I assume you mean you want it to show up if someone does a search for it. That won't happen until it is moved into mainspace, but that shouldn't happen until it is ready.


 * Sorry to be blunt, but it reads like a advertisement, not an encyclopedia article. See WP:PROMO.


 * You haven't established why this company has Notability. I'm sure it will meet the standard; I'm familiar with the company, but you need to establish it by providing references to reliable sources. References can be tricky for new editors, see WP:CITE and footnotes for help.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:10, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Alan Loveday
Dear Wiki Editor

Please review my article on the violinist Alan Loveday Alan Loveday Flying spiccato (talk) 15:19, 7 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You have no references to reliable sources. The format is not appropriate for Wikipedia, see Article Layout for some guidance. The style of writing is not encyclopedic; check other articles on other violinists to see the difference.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:32, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Article named Virtual disk image
I will appreciate a review of the technical article virtual disk image

Categories: Virtual machines | Virtualization software | Hypervisor | Computer Storage | Computer File Systems

Thanks (Barnet.Herts (talk) 23:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC))


 * I took an admittedly quick look through, and it seems fine to me. I'll take another look later once my head cold clears up, but that seems like a very useful article for sysadmins. Nuujinn (talk) 00:17, 8 March 2010 (UTC)

WindPower
tl - speedily deleted per A7. – ukexpat (talk) 17:42, 22 March 2010 (UTC)

WindPower

(FinChris (talk) 18:17, 15 March 2010 (UTC))Garath Oldmen 15/03/10


 * Sorry but the band does not meet Wikipedia's inclusion criteria for bands set out at WP:BAND. I also responded to your comment on the talk page - Wikipedia is not a free webhost. – ukexpat (talk) 18:39, 15 March 2010 (UTC)

REALA 500D
tl - details to be added to existing article. – ukexpat (talk) 13:53, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

I would like some feedback on my first article, and very small article here on WikiPedia. It's about a film stock available from Fujifilm, I'm a bit worried it's not notable enough. --Skurmedel (talk) 23:29, 22 March 2010 (UTC)


 * As it stands, I would say that it fails the notability requirements. I've had a pretty good look online, and not found any sources to really help - I can't tell if this was published/independent, this paper isn't online, this is a primary source - and they were the better ones I could find.


 * I don't see enough material to expand it much, either.


 * My advice would be to instead add it to Fujifilm - you could redirect from "REALA 500D" to that article. Sorry.  Chzz  ►  07:13, 23 March 2010 (UTC)


 * No problem. I'm here to learn :) Will add it to the Fujifilm page instead. Thanks for the help. --Skurmedel (talk) 09:33, 23 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Question, should I remove this "issue" from this page or is it something moderators do? --Skurmedel (talk) 11:23, 23 March 2010 (UTC)


 * No, I have marked it as "done" so it will be archived. – ukexpat (talk) 13:53, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

Property Records Industry Association
tl - speedily deleted as blatant advertising. – ukexpat (talk) 20:57, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

Just looking for a general review of Property Records Industry Association article. We believe we've gotten most everything correct and want to remove the "new, unreviewed article template" that appears at the top of the article.

Mark Ladd 03/21/201098.144.49.32 (talk) 15:54, 21 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Unfortunately, there are quite a few problems with this article. I will mark it as reviewed, and will add 'tags' at the top of the page, to indicate some of the issues. Some important points are;


 * It is written in non-encyclopaedic 'corporate-speak' - as an example, To successfully develop positions and standards for the property records industry, and see them implemented, a broad based constituency must be established and maintained. - this sounds like an advertisement, not an encyclopaedic article.
 * I removed the external link to PRIA from the first section; external website links should only be used for either references, or in the 'External links' section at the end - not within the body
 * A large amount of the text cannot be verified through third-party sources; as such, it is over-coverage. The sections "How PRIA works", "Why Do Standards Matter?", "What are the PRIA Standards?" and "PRIA's Experience Resources" are particularly inappropriate in an article. None of the information presented here looks to be verifiable, and thus is likely to be removed.
 * It says "national government" - but it does not say which nation; is it American?
 * There are very few wikilinks


 * This demonstrates why we are so careful about conflict of interest situations; it is extremely difficult to write a neutral, balanced article. It is necessary to imagine that you knew nothing at all about the organization, and to write the article only presenting facts that any person would be able to check, from independent reliable sources.


 * I hope that this feedback will help you to improve the article. Please read the business FAQ.  Chzz  ►  12:11, 22 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Article has been speedily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 17:18, 22 March 2010 (UTC)

Strange Young Things
tl – ukexpat (talk) 20:53, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

Strange Young Things [] Strangeyoungthings (talk) 16:48, 22 March 2010 (UTC)
 * May not meet WP:BAND as I don't really see non-trivial coverage from reliable sources. -- Neil N   talk to me  16:57, 22 March 2010 (UTC)


 * And you user name is a clear violation of the user name policy. – ukexpat (talk) 17:07, 22 March 2010 (UTC)

Operation Exodus (Louisiana)
tl - and thank you for acknowledging the review, makes it easier for us to archive the request. – ukexpat (talk) 20:50, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

I recently created the Operation Exodus (Louisiana) article after seeing some media attention on the subject. At this point, I feel it could use some attention from people other than me; I tend to be concise to a fault. However, of value to me as an editor would be pointing out what's worth expanding, what I should look for more sources on, etc. I appreciate your time on this. --YixilTesiphon TalkContribs 19:27, 23 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Looks good so far. It's worth expanding on any aspect that you can - the reasons for it, the name controversy, additional media and public reaction etc. I added a couple of categories and will add project banners to the talk page. – ukexpat (talk) 20:07, 23 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks! I'll probably gradually add things as I see them and do a little research on occasion. Thanks again for looking it over. --YixilTesiphon TalkContribs 17:37, 24 March 2010 (UTC)

Panache Desai
tl - speedily deleted as blatant advertising. – ukexpat (talk) 20:47, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

Panache Desai

Hello!

I am hoping you might provide feedback on this wiki article about inspirational figure Panache Desai... Thanks so much!

68.54.56.138 (talk) 12:30, 25 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Your article has been speedily deleted as blatant advertising. Please read the guidelines at WP:BIO and WP:SPAM. – ukexpat (talk) 21:47, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

Sales Force Solutions, Growth Dynamics
tl - speedlily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 00:30, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

Sales Force Solutions, Growth Dynamics

GDI 17:46, 26 March 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Tswain1 (talk • contribs)


 * Please read WP:SPAM - this is nothing more than an advertisement masquerading as an article and I have tagged it for speedy deletion. The inclusion guidelines for companies are at WP:CORP. I have left a welcome message on your talk page with lots of other useful links for you to read. – ukexpat (talk) 20:42, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

Morrison Management Specialists
tl - draft speedily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 00:29, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

Request for feedback for my first post User:Jlott01/Morrison Management Specialists

Jlott01 (talk) 20:32, 26 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Please read WP:SPAM - this is nothing more than an advertisement masquerading as an article and would be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace in this form. The inclusion guidelines for companies are at WP:CORP. I have left a welcome message on your talk page with lots of other useful links for you to read. – ukexpat (talk) 20:38, 26 March 2010 (UTC)

GodfreyKalimugogo
tl – ukexpat (talk) 00:28, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

New article. Would appreciate your feedback. Many thanks.

User:Wikifountain/GodfreyKalimugogo

GodfreyKalimugogo

Wikifountain (talk) 15:32, 27 March 2010 (UTC)

lm;lk —Preceding unsigned comment added by Maryam Negm (talk • contribs) 20:30, 27 March 2010 (UTC)
 * It's a fine start, though it could certainly use more detail on his life and his novels. I've made a number of edits and added some material. When you are ready to go live, simply move it to the correct title. On that issue, from my review of sources, it appears that he is better known, and his novels were published, without his middle name. If so, the article should probably be moved to Godfrey Kalimugogo, though you would keep his middle name in the article. Note that I have placed the categories in nowiki tags because the article is not yet in the mainspace; when you move it, remove the nowiki tags. Cheers.--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 15:03, 28 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks so much for your quick review Fuhghettaboutit. I've just corrected a couple of grammatical items in your edits. I am a new member so need to wait a few days to move it as far as I understand. I will try to source more information on his life and novels and add to the article once it is live. Cheers! Wikifountain (talk) 16:59, 28 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I have moved it for you - no point waiting. – ukexpat (talk) 17:29, 28 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks ukexpat. I appreciate you taking the initiative. Wikifountain (talk) 18:17, 28 March 2010 (UTC)


 * No problem, tagging this thread for archiving. – ukexpat (talk) 00:28, 29 March 2010 (UTC)

George T. Heery
tl- Article already in mainspace, needs generalized clean-up (regular editing). -- Banj e b oi   19:26, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

This is the first full article I've written and wanted to open this up for review. The subject is George_T._Heery, a famous American architect who is most notable for his contributions to the foundation of the Construction Program Management industry. Regarding notability, Heery's first firm Heery International, is an internationally known company and Heery is widely known throughout the design and construction industry. I am continuing to do research to improve the article but felt that the article has reached a point where it might be ready for moving to main space soon. The one outstanding item I've marked for citation is the number of construction projects executed using a particular delivery method developed by the subject; I'm awaiting information from the General Services Adminstration, which apparently uses this process quite often. If I cannot locate information which can be cited to support that number I think that the sentence should be removed. Look forward to your help! --Drewprops (talk) 22:09, 14 January 2010 (UTC)

Update: I've gone ahead and moved the article into mainspace and have updated the link here to point to that article. Look forward to help with reviewing the article!--Drewprops (talk) 18:43, 19 January 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry for the delayed response. In general the article looks acceptable although to really get constructive feedback please ask at the Architecture Wikiproject. If you look at the article talkpage I've added their tag. Follow that link and ask there, you'll get feedback in that specific subject area that concerns his notability. There is some extra layers of formatting but those are mainly a stylistic concern compared to the content. You can always add more and better sources, consider posting tl on the article's talkpage and that will direct you to more sources that may help, especially the Google books link as this person has been active for so long, also the Google News link should pull some sources. -- Banj e  b oi   19:26, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

Memorial Laws: Laws Dedicated to the Memory of a Victim
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 02:18, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Draft text added by Fleibman (talk • contribs) 20:25, 30 January 2010 (UTC)

Moved to user subpage: User:Fleibman/Memorial Laws. – ukexpat (talk) 20:29, 30 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Sorry that it's taking us this long to get to this article. It looks like you've got some experience with the subject, but you need references to reliable sources to support the article. It's hard to ascertain whether this topic is notable without such refrerences. Also, the prose is very dense--but if you can get some references, I'd be happy to help you with the prose, just drop me a note on my talk page if you want help with that. Nuujinn (talk) 21:28, 6 March 2010 (UTC)

Lindsay Vickery
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 02:19, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Lindsay Vickery

Requesting review of the entry on the Australian composer Lindsay Vickery 124.182.21.77 (talk) 08:18, 31 January 2010 (UTC)

Sherif Sonbol
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 02:51, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Sherif Sonbol (Egyptian photographer). Someone else already did a small article in German, so I've been working in the English version and would appreciate someone's opinion to see if I can put this one on up.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Welle_1/Sherif_Sonbol

Thanks, --Welle 1 (talk) 20:51, 31 January 2010 (UTC)
 * The career section is problematic, that kind of details is not needed nor suitable for Wikipedia. You should avoid words like Unfortunately, and sentences like "he managed to shake the foundations of Egyptian interior photography". See WP:Peacock. Sole Soul (talk) 22:43, 31 January 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks will work on it. Will try to re-locate and add some of the Arabic original references (like the interior photography comment). —Preceding unsigned comment added by Welle 1 (talk • contribs) 20:21, 5 February 2010 (UTC)

Aage Giodesen
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 02:41, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Aage_Giodesen Article is about the Danish artist Aage Giodesen with a number of references, and includes an example of his work from Wikimedia. --whb123 (talk) 15:05, 3 February 2010 (UTC)Whbonney 2/3/10

Skirmish Paintball
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 02:56, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I am requesting feedback for Skirmish Paintball

Skirmish paintball is one of the leading Paintball Networks across the UK, providing thousands and thousands of customers with paintball games across the UK, and so far there is no mention of it on Wikipedia.

Chriscollins405 (talk) 16:12, 3 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I think you have established some notion of notability with the BBC new article, but as it stands, this article is basically an advertisement for the company--it just lists services and products for sale or rent. I also see that you've adding a very promotional line to Paint ball. I hope that there's not a conflict of interest here. In any case, I would suggest overhauling the article to make it neutral in tone. I see that the article has been marked for deletion once already, but could not find any discussion as it seems that tag was removed without comment by an ip number that same day. Please contact me on my talk page if you'd like some help with this article. [[User:Nuujinn|Nuujinn (talk) 13:04, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

Uyama Hiroto
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 02:57, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Elliotmc/Uyama Hiroto

A beginner here, writing an article about an established Japanese musician and producer who ironically does not have much information posted about him on the web. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Elliotmc (talk • contribs) 22:32, 11 February 2010 (UTC)


 * Sorry for the delay in responding to your request. At the moment the key problem is demonstrating notability per WP:MUSICBIO. If he hasn't received significant coverage in reliable sources, he is very unlikely to meet Wikipedia's notability guidelines. Note also that references do not have to be online, as long as they are properly cited (see WP:CITE), nor do they have to be in English. – ukexpat (talk) 15:02, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

History of Hartford City, Indiana
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 02:59, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I have added some sections to History of Hartford City, Indiana since it received its initial rating. What does it need to get beyond a "B"? Does it have too much, too little? What is the preferred style of footnotes and references? TwoScars (talk) 01:25, 18 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Article quality ratings are not, in general, as far as I know, undertaken by the editors who visit this feedback page. Ratings are generally managed by projects. The article you mention is part of WikiProject Indiana. Usually, projects has a list of volunteers you can contact. I don't see one for this project. I suggest you post on the project Talk page, and/or directly contact some editors who regularly post there.-- SPhilbrick  T  16:53, 7 March 2010 (UTC)

Alpha, Washington
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 03:01, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Sorry if I'm asking for feedback too often, but I would like to know what is left before I launch User:Buggie111/Alpha, Washington. I've nearly knocked myself insane finding info about this, and I'd like to move it to it's namespace home as part of my unannounced de-redlink the Lewis County, washington tempalte campaign. Constructive critiscisim would be appreciated.

Buggie111 (talk) 17:09, 22 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I've done a revamping of the references and formatting. It could certainly use some more detailed information and sources, though my searches turned up nothing.--Fuhghettaboutit (talk) 18:34, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

Well, I could not find anything else in searches, and I do not want to pay for a flight to Seattle to reasearch. I'd say that this is as far as I could go. Buggie111 (talk) 19:24, 22 February 2010 (UTC)

Laimes
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 03:16, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

A new page on Laimes a venacular building type of Upper Silisia --AnnaSomerset (talk) 16:23, 24 February 2010 (UTC)
 * You mean Laimes (User:AnnaSomerset/Laimes), not Laimes. If your article turns out to be acceptable, we'll work out how to avoid the confusion, for example, the article you are working on might become Laimes(building).-- SPhilbrick  T  17:15, 24 February 2010 (UTC)

Astro Solo
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 03:28, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

The Astro Solo is a new vehicle mentioned on several automotive blogs. I've put together some basic facts and a link to the company website.

Jwakeman (talk) 19:33, 24 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Interesting. The pictures in the two references do not appear to be the same vehicle. One clearly shows solar cells, the other does not. The side panels are shaped differently. Any thoughts?--  SPhilbrick  T  20:56, 24 February 2010 (UTC)

Glencadia
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 03:38, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

My town had a nice name, Glencadia. I wanted to set up a place to clear up why the word is floating around the area but is no longer the name of the town. Apologies if I did not follow all guidelines.˜˜˜˜ —Preceding unsigned comment added by Willpflaum (talk • contribs) 02:36, 25 February 2010 (UTC)
 * You would need to add reliable sources to establish notability. I think a better solution would be to merge this info into Stuyvesant, New York and then redirect it there.  If you do merge this info it will need to be established through reliable sources that Stuyvesant Falls was once called Glencadia because at this point the external links do not establish this.  The article at this point does not even establish that this name is notable or that the hamlet of Stuyvesant Falls is notable.   GB fan  talk 02:50, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

Create Synchronicity
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 03:45, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Hello world!

I've just created the Create Synchronicity Wikipedia article, describing briefly the backup application bearing that name. Since I'm it's developer, it may not be totally objective, although I tried to be as Neutral as I could. The application is growing int terms of user base, and I thought it deserved its entry on the List of backup software page. As the software needed to have its own article to appear on the list, I created the article to.

Create Synchronicity has been written about by many sources, in many different languages. It was recently updated to version 3.0, and already appears in the French Wikipedia.

Could you please review this article? I'm pretty new to creating fully new articles.

Thanks a lot! CFP. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Cfpcompte (talk • contribs) 14:30, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * There is at least one mistake in the article it curently says, "Its development started in June 2010." I am not sure what date belong there.
 * Currently the article does not explain why it is significant it just states the software exists and what features it has. I would suggest you read through the notability guideline, Notability.  The main thing you will need to do is add references from reliable sources to the information in the article so that it can be verified.  It looks liek you have a good start on the article, it just needs to be expanded with references.  Hope this helps.   GB fan  talk 15:34, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * [GB fan has indeed commented a lot on this article. Could somebody please review the changes that I made to satisfy his demands? Cfpcompte (talk) 00:34, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I am sorry if you feel like I demanded you do anything. You asked for an opinion on the article and I gave it.  Orangemike has also reviewed it and felt it was lacking enough that the article should be deleted.   GB fan  talk 01:40, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Sorry for my previous comment, I basically missed your answer. It is nice to suggest ways to improve the article. I've corrected the date problem, and added other references. What do you think of it now, and what remains to improve? Cfpcompte (talk) 08:55, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I suggest you remove the links in the article that go back to the projects sourceforge site, it's release notes, or any web pages that automatically collect and publish data about the code. What you need are more links like the karp review (although that one's not a great reference, it's better than the others). Not all software packages are notable--I think you have a tough row to hoe here. I think you would be best off to start by adding this project to the List of backup software article. Nuujinn (talk) 21:17, 28 February 2010 (UTC)

Hamilton Bradshaw
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 03:54, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:CodyJDick/Hamilton Bradshaw

I have created a page about the UK private equity firm Hamilton Bradshaw. Here is the link to the page I have made in my userspace: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:CodyJDick/Hamilton_Bradshaw

I believe the page has the quality required to go live. However I would REALLY APPRECIATE if the page could be reviewed. I will gladly listen to suggestions and accept edits. Thanks for your time.

CodyJDick (talk) 15:08, 25 February 2010 (UTC)

The Invisible Thieves
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 03:55, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

The Invisible Thieves is a description of a case of attempted extortion, bombing, and murder that occurred in Madison County, Illinois, in January of 1901. Three men were eventually tried and one convicted.

MarshaEns (talk) 19:43, 25 February 2010 (UTC)Marsha L. Ensminger, 25 Feb 2010


 * Fascinating.
 * It will no doubt not surprise you that Wikipedia articles rarely rely solely on references that are not available online, but it is not a requirement that they be online. (Sorry about the multiple negatives). One worry I had was how to confirm the basic story, but this (sort of) online link from the Atlanta Constitution will both help satisfy that concern and add to your point about widespread coverage.
 * Wikipedia articles except for stubs, are not generally written as a single section. I don't have a lot of useful advice beyond breaking out a WP:LEAD, but check out Article Layout and see if there is a natural way to have a lead followed by two or three sections.
 * I didn't like the phrasing "said that" (used twice). Is it really necessary, or can it be written in a more straightforward way.
 * The External Link was a placeholder in the Wizard for you to add any if you had any. I removed it,
 * I made a tiny grammatical change.
 * Nice work, I won't be surprised if this article is challenged for inclusion, but I hope it survives.
 * I fixed the link to the article -- SPhilbrick  T  21:35, 25 February 2010 (UTC)


 * I have gone ahead and moved the draft to mainspace at The Invincible Thieves. Also considering DYK nomination... – ukexpat (talk) 16:45, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

Slobodan origins
tl - answered. – ukexpat (talk) 04:06, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I am trying to research the Family surname Slobodan. From what I have found, it was dirived from the word Sloboda which ment freedom or Peace. I know that the name Slobodan is a very comon firts name but from what I read and understand from speaking to people in the so called "Old Country" the name Slobodan is rare as a last name. My family came over from Galicia, Austria in 1909 and setteled in Canada. Can someone please more information on the last name Slobodan and where it may have originated. Thanks, Terrill Slobodan —Preceding unsigned comment added by Slobodan1 (talk • contribs) 15:13, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * That's not really the purpose of this page, which is to review draft articles created by editors. You may do better by asking at one of the Reference Desks, where they specializing in answering questions like this. I'm not quite sure which on is best, you might start with Reference desk/Humanities, and I suspect they'll let you know is another one is better.-- SPhilbrick  T  18:38, 26 February 2010 (UTC)

p-derivations
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 04:07, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

A map type of map in differential algebra that is used to prove diophantine results. Anyone with a background in abstract algebra can review it. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 97.123.25.21 (talk) 21:56, 26 February 2010 (UTC)
 * I made a couple small fixes.
 * Someone has added tags noting that the article has no WP:LEAD and needs a better introduction. A good lede could solve both issues.
 * The external link is subscription only - not having a subscription, I cannot determine whether it should be in here, but per WP:ELNO (see item 6) probably not.
 * Many mathematical articles do not follow current practice regarding referencing. Presumably because many of them were created years ago, before referencing guidelines were written. I don't know whether they have been grandfathered, and new articles should comply, or if the community accept that math article will not be properly referenced. If I find discussion of this point, I'll pass it along—at this time, I'm just noting that it doesn't meet my referencing standards.
 * You said An example such lift could.... Did you mean An example of such a lift could...
 * Your reference (Buium) lists 1998 as a publication date. Are you sure it isn't 2005?
 * Did you consider mentioning the quotient field in your second example?
 * My algebra is very rusty. I hope someone else will take a look. -- SPhilbrick  T  01:58, 27 February 2010 (UTC)

NatalieWynnePace
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 04:09, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:HeatherSophia/NatalieWynnePace

```` HeatherSophia February 27, 2010

FYI: I haven't put in her rock and roll years yet, but I plan to once I find more links to support her work there. —Preceding unsigned comment added by HeatherSophia (talk • contribs) 00:35, 28 February 2010 (UTC)
 * Well, I personally don't think she herself is notable, and the article doesn't contain very good references. Links to personal home pages, to youtube, and esp links to a site owned by the subject of a biographical article are not good sources, see Biographies of Living Persons for more information. Mere lists of interviews and speaking engagements do not really establish notability and do not really contribute much information to the article. The link to http://www.womensfoundca.org/site/pp.aspx?c=aqKGLROAIrH&b=4993029&printmode=1#LADC might help if it mentioned her, but I do not see any information about her located there. What you need are articles from reputable magazines and newspapers, books, or the like. The article is also very promotional in tone, and lacks a neutral point of view. Sections also appear to be directly copied from press releases on external web sites, eg: http://vanguardpress.net/book.php?isbn=9781593154912, http://www.everythingfinanceblog.com/2009/01/book-review-put-your-money-where-your.html. I'm pretty sure that's a violation of copyright. I'm sorry I can't think of anything good to say about this article, but I can't. Nuujinn (talk) 21:08, 28 February 2010 (UTC)

Great Melbourne Telescope
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 04:15, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Rgillespie/Great Melbourne Telescope

Rgillespie (talk) 03:56, 1 March 2010 (UTC) Richard Gillespie 1 March 2010
 * First, I'll note this is the type of article I enjoy seeing added to WP. However, there are some challenges to overcome.


 * You've provided references, but not in the required format. See WP:CITE for help. Additionally, it is not sufficient to merely list the references, you have to provide footnotes to identify which references support which claims. See footnotes.


 * I'm surprised at the claim that this was the second largest telescope at the time. While it was obviously smaller than the Rosse, it may also have been smaller than Herschel's telescope. (Here, we may have to do some sleuthing, as 40-foot telescope identifies it as a 48 inch, but List of largest optical telescopes historically identifies it as 49.5 in. This is one reason why it would help to see the specific reference, to help sort this out.


 * I wikilinked a few terms.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:16, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

24SevenCart
tl - deleted, expired PROD

24SevenCart Shomikz (talk) 06:16, 1 March 2010 (UTC)


 * You need to establish Notability, by showing this product is discussed in multiple reliable sources, which you support with references.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:34, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Green Horizon Magazine
tl - deleted per this Afd: Articles for deletion/Green Horizon Magazine. – ukexpat (talk) 04:18, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I'd be interested in having this article reviewed Green Horizon Magazine

Stevewelzer (talk) 08:13, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You need to establish Notability, by showing this product is discussed in multiple reliable sources, which you support with references.-- SPhilbrick  T  00:39, 3 March 2010 (UTC)

Mark Moffett
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 04:19, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

This is my first article (though someone kindly did an article about me), an article about a distinguished explorer/photographer/expert on insect behavior, who is a top photographer for National Geographic and distinguished former student of E. O. Wilson. User: Rocordman/Mark Moffett is not currently on wikipedia but has given me permission to post an article about him. I also would love to know how to put a photo or two in the article. Feedback/suggestions are welcome. You can reach me directly at Thanks Roc Ordman March 1, 2010  —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rocordman (talk • contribs) 16:13, 1 March 2010 (UTC)
 * It's a good start but needs work. I would say that the subject meets the notability guidelines for professors as a former director of the museum at Harvard. That should go in the first sentence. Not "wonderful man". See WP:PEACOCK. Itsmejudith (talk) 12:46, 2 March 2010 (UTC)

Stephen Fried
tl - deleted as a copyvio, advice re user subpage creation left for user. – ukexpat (talk) 02:16, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

This is my first "new, unreviewed article" and I am looking for feedback. Please help me out!

Stephen Fried

Thanks!Rowbull (talk) 22:31, 26 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I responded to your message at New contributors' help page. It has some pretty serious copyvio issues and I have had to tag it for speedy deletion. – ukexpat (talk) 02:28, 27 March 2010 (UTC)

Wolf & Badger
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:33, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Curious George53/Wolf & Badger

I have created a page about a new boutique that has opened near me. It has been featured in a lot of national press - something which you can see by doing a quick Google search.

This is my first article; could you please let me know if the page is okay, and when it is ready please move it over to the main site for me - I am not sure how to do this yet.

Many thanks,

George

Curious George53 (talk) 17:53, 11 March 2010 (UTC)


 * At the moment the tone is a little unencyclopedic/promotional, eg "licencing space within the boutique to exciting, independent designers", "now provides a platform to promote". I also trimmed the external links that are already used as references and fixed the wikilinks, and made some other formatting fixes. – ukexpat (talk) 22:00, 11 March 2010 (UTC)

Thanks for your feedback Ukexpect, I will make some further changes. Curious George53 (talk) 18:50, 12 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Per your request at WP:RM, I have moved it to the mainspace (Wolf & Badger) and despammed it a little. Do not be surprised however if it is tagged for deletion under one of our deletion processes. – ukexpat (talk) 18:45, 15 March 2010 (UTC)

Scott Moore (screenwriter)
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:33, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I would welcome feedback for my first contribution. Thank you.

Scott Moore (screenwriter)

Stthor (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 00:15, 12 March 2010 (UTC).
 * There really needs to be more referenced content from independent, reliable sources to establ;ish notability. There doesn't seem to be any significant news coverage of this person. DES (talk) 18:16, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

In order to establish notability, several sources have been added to this article - this in response to your recent critique (thank you!). I am hoping it is ready to go live. I myself cannot yet take an article live (I am new), so if you are able to assist in this, I am most appreciative. Stthor (talk) 05:04, 16 March 2010 (UTC)

Joseph Civello
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:28, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Joseph Civello is my first article for Wikipedia -- it is about the former Mafia boss in Dallas. Can someone look at it to see if I did everything correctly, and click patrolled. Thanks. DallasPalace (talk) 08:26, 12 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I'd say it's a fine start. Could use a wider range of sources however.. something other than just Dallas Morning News. I made a few MoS fixes and added a couple categories. -- &oelig; &trade; 15:06, 12 March 2010 (UTC)

A New Romanticism
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:27, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

A New Romanticism

A New Romanticism is an idea developed by Andrew Chavez who has published several books with that title. Those books are: A New Romanticism: Essays and Poems; A New Romanticism: Updated And Revised, and: The Expanded Version of A New Romanticism. The latter two books are recommended for a full discussion. Chavez has also published books that either illustrate his ideas or are inspired by his original idea. His other books are Shanidar Cave, Three Verse Plays, and A Modern Romantic Odyssey.

Chavez states that Nietzsche was wrong to say that God is dead because the naturally occurring mental attribute that gave birth to the idea of God is alive and well; indeed, that naturally occuring mental attribute that gave birth to the idea of God is a vital part of what it means to be human. The idea is that native genius, an attribute of mind that gives a person an intense sensation of truth and beauty, is what the ancient prophets called God. All the attributes and adjectives that describe God also describe the experience of native genius. The reason, according to Chavez, that God and native genius share the same qualities and general descriptions, is that they are one and the same thing. Chavez bases his belief about God and native genius on his own personal experiences along with his reading both of the Bible and other authors who talk about who God is, what He is all about, and the qualities that God has such as truth, beauty, splendor, glory, radiance, and etc.

The significance of Chavez's belief is that there is no loss that we need suffer as individuals or a society as the word or idea of God weakens and may finally disappear; there is no loss because we have the original source of God as a natural inheritance, and that natural inheritance belongs to every member of the species. God may die but as individuals we can still experience an awe-inspiring, and often life-changing sensation, that is natural to the mental attribute called native genius. God, as native genius, stays with us and continues to do all that we have ever ascibed to God's power, only now, God is no longer needed or mentioned.

Chavez sees the whole process of creation and innovation as a survival mechanism that eons of evolution has put inside of our minds; indeed, Chavez says we have two minds. One deals with routine and habitual behaviors while the other is for unique circumstances that need creative solutions. Along with native genius, there are two other sources of creativity and innovation: creative and symbolic genius. Creative genius is the Eureka effect and deals with especially difficult problems. Symbolic genius is not concerned with specific problems like creative genius; instead, symbolic genius offers words, music, images, or other symbolic stimuli to give us uplifting experiences that may also be useful in our work.

A new romanticism says that all members of the species have native, creative, and symbolic genius. Chavez says that the present and future will have to deal with this concept of a broadened out concept of genius like Victorians had to deal with Freud and the concept of sex. All people have native, creative, and symbolic genius. Those three forms of genius are the water in which we swim because they are the creative and innovative centers that give us all myths, fictions, and illusions while also being the sources that give us the very best of our arts and sciences generally.

Chavez isolates, describes, and characterizes each of the three forms of genius that we now recognize as both creative centers and sources that feed our will to life. Native genius is what fuels our will to life because the truth and beauty it offers is so overpowering that we become mesmerized by it; just like a person responds to God; again, there is good reason for this similiar response: God and native genius are the same thing; they both serve, or had served, the same function.

Thus, Chavez argues that the minimalism and dislike of otherworldly forces, central parts of modernism, are all wrong. We have every reason to think on a grand scale and to conduct ourselves with honor and dignity, or at least, as much as possible. Early modernists were wrong to attack Christianity so strongly. Christianity has kept a vital truth alive for us that a new romanticism is currently putting to good use. Native, creative, and symbolic genius can act in surprising and sometimes miraculous seeming ways; so then, we have to be careful about how strictly we define "otherworldly;" what is more, we do not need to feel lost, weak, bereft, alienated, or anything else that modernism tells us is part of what it means to be modern. We have the same inspiring sources that belong to our most productive ages. We have lost nothing of antiquity's motivation for splendor, glory, truth, or beauty. Again, we have the same motivations as during religion's strongest eras because the creative sources for all revelatory religions are still with us. If God and His splendor were ever the motivation to do great things then that same motivation remains with us in native genius.

Chavez admits that the "full force" experience that native genius can offer is not something that everyone has, but then, weaker versions are common to one and all. He describes those lesser, but still very potent native genius experiences, by pointing out how we feel when admiring a broad panoramic scene in nature or when we get carried away by music, looking at a stunning painting, or when we stare at our beloved and know that we have never seen anyone so beautiful. These powerful sensations are native genius in their lesser forms, and yet, they still act as survival mechanisms by making our lives more truthful and beautiful; they make us more willing to sacrifice and endure. The last person to build a religion on native genius was Joseph Smith (Mormonism), but then, Taoism, Platonism, and of course, Christianity and Judaism are born from the same revelatory experiences that belong to native genius. We are all prone to these "full force" experiences, but we do not all work so thoroughly with them, if we do anything at all beyond enjoy them as they are acting upon us.

Chavez tells us that a new romanticism is especially focused on those who are displeased both with traditional religion and with secularism although he is quick to add that his discovery has a lot to offer to our whole understanding of creativity and genius itself. Genius is not a singular quality. It has three fundamental parts that belong to all people; not everyone can use his or her own "native divines" with broad-ranging matters but we all use them routinely throughout our lives.

Native, creative, and symbolic genius act by way of revelation. Think of the Eureka effect as an example and then consider how contributions made by way of "revelations" have given significantly to the best of our artists and sciences. This is why Chavez says that our "natural divines" have always led mankind in the past and should be encoured to do the same for the present and future. According to Chavez, modernity is no longer fit for modern times because it is too restrictive and too prone to producing mediocrity. Chavez sees a new romanticism as a bridge from the present to our future.

Anroman (talk) 18:46, 12 March 2010 (UTC) 12 March 2010


 * Looks like you are trying to add a new article here. This is a forum for editors to review your contribution, but not the place to enter it. For an article to remain, it should have references to reliable source. You should take a look at Article Layout, and WP:Article wizard 2.0 is a great way to create a working draft in your user space.-- SPhilbrick  T  01:43, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

Nayna Mehta
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Nayna Mehta

Please can you help me add categories to the same

thanks

Saturday 13th march 2010 10.02 pm —Preceding unsigned comment added by Athemful (talk • contribs) 16:26, 13 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I have added a couple of categories, but the real problem her eis notability. accordign to our "one event" guideline a person notable for only one thing, such as makign one special work, will usually not be notable enough for a separate article. DES (talk) 20:17, 13 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I agree with DES. Perhaps it is worthy of a mention elsewhere, but doesn't qualify as a standalone Biography.--  SPhilbrick  T  20:52, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

Lee Academy (Hamilton)
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:24, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Lee Academy (hamilton) is a new listing under the main category Private Schools in Ontario. We have done our best to follow the style/content of the existing listings Hubertadrian. March13,2010Hubertadrian (talk) 19:27, 13 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Please see Notability; in particular WP:COMPANY (which mentions schools). I believe the presumption is that high schools are generally notable, but elementary schools are not, unless they meet  the notability criteria - coverage in multiple reliable sources. You have none.--  SPhilbrick  T  20:58, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Christian_History_Institute
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History and current activities of Christian History Institute, creator of Christian History magazine, winner of numerous American and international awards for videos, and producer of the popular video series Torchlighters. This article has been in place for several weeks without review. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 71.206.123.211 (talk) 21:32, 14 March 2010 (UTC)
 * (1) The tone of this article tends toward the promotional in places. "Award-winning" is not necessarily a peacock term in Wikipedia, but it is flagged as a term to watch out for and may indicate a tendency toward promotional tone, particularly where the awards in question are given by industry insiders to one another, and are not well known outside a small niche market. I would certainly remove the term "Award-winning" from the title of section 3, since not all works in the section seem to have won awards, and would also prefer not to see it in the lead section either.
 * (2) The section listing all the organization's publications and productions is too long and too detailed. The catalogue of every award each production has ever been given is unnecessary and also unhelpful in its current form; since none of the awards or awarding bodies is Wikilinked, readers cannot easily research them to determine the relative importance of the award anyway.
 * (3) The article needs to be Wikified, with more internal links to other articles. Individuals mentioned by name in the article should be Wikilinked to their articles. If they are not notable enough in their own right to have a Wikipedia article, consider whether it is appropriate to mention them in this one (it may be so, if they have a prominent role in the organization, but otherwise probably not).
 * (4) Titles of films and books should be standardized to italic font.
 * (5) The inline citations to the external websites chinstitute and chitorch should be removed from the body of the text per WP:MOS - they are fine in the external links section but should be expanded to display a clear description of what they are.
 * (6) Most of the references cited are to the organization's own publications, and none are linked to be verifiable online. I have no doubt about the organization's notability or the accuracy of the facts stated, but citations to further reliable, third-party sources would improve the article greatly, particularly if some of these were verifiable online (although this last is not an essential requirement for referencing on Wikipedia).

Ka renjc 19:19, 15 March 2010 (UTC)

france
tl – ukexpat (talk) 20:16, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Q1-Explain the three events that shape the present day of france and explain why? Q2-Major economic exports and explain why they are the mane stay of economy? Q3-Relationship with world community and neighbors.Explain these? Q4-Internal political and social history dynamics and its effets today? Q5-SWOT analysis and its explaination? Q6-Explain the political party in power its idiology and how it compare to the opposition? —Preceding unsigned comment added by 58.27.155.212 (talk) 10:53, 15 March 2010 (UTC)
 * This is a page for discussing editorial needs of articles. You might try the Reference_desk, although they are not here to do your homework.-- SPhilbrick  T  13:35, 15 March 2010 (UTC)

Robert Ammons
tl – ukexpat (talk) 20:14, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Txrunner246/Robert Ammons is an article on a living person I just completed. I've done all my tutorials and just wanted to get some feedback from you kind folks to let me know if I screwed anything up before I post it live. I tried to Wikilink and reference every possible thing I could! Txrunner246 (talk) 23:15, 16 March 2010 (UTC)

Truong Tran
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:14, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Truong Tran Has been over a week and still has "new unreviewed article" tag. Benjaminmorris (talk) 23:38, 16 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Please be patient, we are all volunteers here and there is no deadline. Having said that, the article has been reviewed and edited by several other editors. It really needs some additional references to support the subject's notability and it has been tagged accordingly. – ukexpat (talk) 17:33, 22 March 2010 (UTC)

Baseball's Dairy Diamond
tl - speedily deleted as spam. – ukexpat (talk) 20:12, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I would like feedback on a page I created Baseball's Dairy Diamond as suggested by this message at the top of the page:

This page is a new unreviewed article. This template should be removed once the page has been reviewed by someone other than its creator; if necessary the page should be appropriately tagged for cleanup. If you are the article's creator, you can seek feedback on your new article. (March 2010)

If you could provide feedback, I would appreciate it.

Iguanawannabe (talk) 01:02, 17 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Well, what you need are some verifiable sources that demonstrate notability], such as newspaper or magazine articles. Also, please keep in mind that Wikipedia is an encyclopedia, not a venue for [[WP:promo|advertising. In its current incarnation, this reads like ad.... Nuujinn (talk) 01:43, 17 March 2010 (UTC)

WTWW
tl – ukexpat (talk) 20:09, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

WTWW has changed frequencies from 5755kHz to 5080kHz —Preceding unsigned comment added by 96.28.76.170 (talk) 05:15, 17 March 2010 (UTC)


 * If you can find a reliable source (perhaps a newspaper or magazine article), please edit WTWW and add the information, thanks!  Chzz  ►  08:45, 17 March 2010 (UTC)
 * As noted, the ideal situation is that you find a reliable source and add it to the article. If you just happen to know the answer (perhaps you listen to the station and hear the announcement, but that doesn’t work as a reliable source), you could post the information on the article talk page. I added a small note, but you could elaborate there is you have something to add. SPhilbrick  T  13:32, 17 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Guadalcanal_Campaign
tl - wrong forum. – ukexpat (talk) 20:09, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Just a thought from somebody who loves this site but knows nothing more than how to enjoy it. Steven Speilberg & Tom Hanks just started a series called "The Pacific" that is similar to "Band of Brothers." Wikipedia is an amazingly good source of information to help people follow that show. Next week's episode will be well explained by the above link. Not sure what you can do to get people's attention about that. How about you feature this on your home page? I'm sure future episodes will be equally well served by Wikipedia, and you also have an overview page. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 67.180.106.152 (talk) 15:46, 17 March 2010 (UTC)
 * This page is for people to request a review of new articles they have created, rather than for suggestions about other aspects of Wikipedia. The article on the Main Page is chosen from those that have been awarded "featured article" status for their high quality.  Guadalcanal Campaign is already such an article and thus would be a suitable candidate.  The place to propose this is Today's featured article/requests.  The day's featured article is planned well in advance, so next week would be too late, I fear.  The team who work on that project quite often do match the theme of the article to a significant date, although I am not sure whether a TV broadcast in one region of one country, or even in one country as a whole, would be deemed a sufficiently important event to influence the choice of article for that day.  The English language Wikipedia is used by English speakers all over the world, after all.  But it's certainly worth making some suggestions on the request page linked above if you feel they'll be appropriate.  Featured articles can be identified by the little gold star in the top right hand corner of the screen, or by checking the list of featured articles.  Ka renjc 16:06, 18 March 2010 (UTC)

Article on Efficiency Based Absorption Costing (EBAC
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:07, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I have written an article on EBAC. I am the originator of EBAC which is a new fixed cost absorption technique. I will like to know if my article is accepted to be published in Wikipedia. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Samuel31 (talk • contribs) 15:59, 17 March 2010 (UTC)
 * As the originator of this new technique, you have a potential conflict of interest and are strongly discouraged from writing about it on Wikipedia. The argument runs thus: if the subject is notable enough, sooner or later an uninvolved third party will come along and write the article.  From what I can see, and from a Google search, the only place your new technique appears to be discussed is in your own 2009 academic paper on the subject in the Journal of Applied Business Research.  Wikipedia requires the subjects of articles to be notable and the information in them verifiable.  This means that they need to have had significant coverage in multiple credible independent sources, which can be checked and verified.  In the case of your new technique, unless you can add some more references to demonstrate that EBAC has become a recognised technique in accountancy and is more than a theoretical proposal in a single issue of one academic journal, I'm afraid the article should not be in Wikipedia at present and is liable to be proposed for deletion.  If you can't produce more references as yet but believe they will be available presently, you can always move the article to your userspace and work on it there.  The existing inline references do need to be formatted correctly (see Citing sources).  I have not been able to access your journal article, so I am assuming that the Wikipedia text - in particular, the examples that make up the bulk of it - is not copied directly from the JABR article.  Wikipedia cannot accept copyrighted material unless it is specifically donated by the author (see Donating copyrighted material) so this would be another issue of concern.  Ka renjc 16:50, 17 March 2010 (UTC)

David Pearl (Property Entreprenuer)
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:06, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

David Pearl (Property Entreprenuer)

is a new article, feedback welcome please.

Kurt K Hahn (talk) 17:29, 17 March 2010 (UTC)

), as they add too much white space. Similarly, only single lines are necessary between paragraphs and sections. Also, we use sentence case for section titles, see WP:MOSHEAD. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 17:45, 17 March 2010 (UTC)
 * There is a typo in the title and it is not a standard form of disambiguating title so I moved it to David Pearl (businessman). At the moment the tone is way too promotional - it reads like a PR bio and needs to be toned down to a neutral point of view. There are some layout/formatting issues too: there is no need to insert hard paragraph breaks (

Notable Quotables (board game)
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 20:04, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I created this article a while back, and don't believe it has been looked at yet. Any help or advice would be much appreciated. My primary concern is its notability. Mattqat (talk) 01:01, 19 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I have moved it to Notable Quotables as there is no need for a disambiguating title. I also cleaned up the reference formatting and removed the "unreviewed tag". I share your concerns about notability, one or two more references would probably put it beyond doubt. – ukexpat (talk) 14:19, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

C-Infamous
tl - user name spamblocked. – ukexpat (talk) 20:03, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Chronicomusicgroup/C-Infamous

Chronicomusicgroup (talk) 12:23, 19 March 2010 (UTC)March 19, 2010Chronicomusicgroup (talk) 12:23, 19 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Username blocked as a spamname, but in any event, subject does not appear to meet the notability guidelines at WP:MUSICBIO. – ukexpat (talk) 14:39, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

QPS Employment Group
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:01, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Wikipedia talk:Articles for creation/QPS Employment Group

Mke Editor (talk) 13:44, 19 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I agree withg the AFC assessments. The draft does not sufficiently demonstrate the notability of the subject per WP:CORP. As such reads like a directory entry and Wikipedia is is not a directory. There are other outlets such as WikiCompany. – ukexpat (talk) 14:34, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

Hull History Centre
tl - deleted as a copyvio. – ukexpat (talk) 20:01, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:His1mae/Hull History Centre and Wikipedia talk:Articles for creation/Hull History Centre

His1mae (talk) 16:39, 19 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I have tagged the draft for deletion as it is a clear copyright violation of http://www.hullhistorycentre.org.uk/discover/hullhistorycentre/aboutus.aspx . Wikipedia cannot accept copyright materials. – ukexpat (talk) 18:25, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

please help
tl – ukexpat (talk) 20:00, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

hi i have dstv in thailand, i am being told by a lot of people that the signal is going to be cut off in may 2010, is this true or false, thanking you ron hamilton —Preceding unsigned comment added by 124.121.189.186 (talk) 08:17, 20 March 2010 (UTC)
 * I'm sorry, but you seem to be asking this question in the wrong place. Although there is a Wikipedia Cabal seeking world domination, it does not yet have control of Thai TV stations. Nuujinn (talk) 11:10, 20 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You would do better asking at the Reference Desk. Ka renjc 11:40, 23 March 2010 (UTC)

Richard J. Lazarus (law professor)
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:59, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Hello,

I recently created a page for law professor Richard Lazarus, modeling it on Professor Robin West's page.

This is my first attempt at a wikipedia page, so feedback would be appreciated.

Do I need to create a disambiguation page? there is also a psychologist named Richard Lazarus and a Dr. Who character.

Thanks in advance for any comments. --Vfs3 (talk) 15:56, 20 March 2010 (UTC)


 * A good start! I moved the article to Richard J. Lazarus as there is no need for a disambiguating title (there is no other article titled "Richard J. Lazarus"). The subject almost certainly meets the notability guidelines at WP:PROF, but you need to cite the sources rather than just list the external links. Take a look at John Bell (professor) to see what I mean. It would also be helpful to use the tl template for the books as I did in the John Bell article. I also added some categories, a stub template, did some other clean up and added talk page project banners. – ukexpat (talk) 16:38, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

thermal bar
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:59, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

this is my first article, it concerns an interesting hydrodynamic feature called the thermal bar that has been extensively studied in freshwater lakes. Casaht (talk) 18:37, 20 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Great first article! I removed the "unreviewed tag" and made a few formatting and layout edits to comply with WP:MOS and WP:LAYOUT. Couple of suggestions: add references to the early part of the article if you can; consider using the tl template for the books that you are using as in-line refs and in the additional refs section. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 19:12, 20 March 2010 (UTC)

Nick Grosso
tl - see below. – ukexpat (talk) 19:57, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I have written an article on the English playwright Nick Grosso who doesn't appear to have an article devoted to him on Wikipedia, though he does get numerous mentions in other Wikipedia articles.

I would like some feedback on the article if possible, regarding if it has been done satisfactorily and to Wikipedia standard.

Also, I put it up live but I also posted it as a user draft, as I was confused. Hopefully this doesn't mean two Nick Grosso articles are put up. At the moment they are both the same, but I'm aware that one may get edited and then there would be two different articles on the same person.

Hopefully somebody can deal with this issue. Thank you.Gordondriskell (talk) 00:28, 24 March 2010 (UTC)


 * See below. – ukexpat (talk) 02:13, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

Nick Grosso (2)
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:56, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Hello. I am a theatre studies student. I have written an article on the playwright Nick Grosso. I am wondering how to get the template removed? It says the article hasn't been reviewed. I am wondering how I get it reviewed, and if the article is satisfactory?

Thank you.Gordondriskell (talk) 20:56, 24 March 2010 (UTC)


 * You have already posted a request a few posts above. Please be patient - we are all volunteers here and it may take a few days for us to get to your request. – ukexpat (talk) 21:20, 24 March 2010 (UTC)

Steven1969 (talk) 22:22, 24 March 2010 (UTC)

I am VERY new here myself so take this with a grain of salt. But I am not sure I would call Nick Grosso, "Nick" through out the article.

Just my thought and it might be perfectly acceptable.


 * Yes, biographies read better if you use the surname. Gordondriskell, I think it's a pretty good start, and it looks like you have enough good references to pass muster. I took the liberty of pulling the unreviewed notice off of the page. The text does need some work, I think, it's a bit terse, but that can happen over time. You definitely want to focus on the version in main space for additional work. --Nuujinn (talk) 23:30, 24 March 2010 (UTC)


 * See WP:SURNAME for use of last name, and the rest of that page for other Manual of Style for Biographies general help. All in all this is a great start at article creation. I will take a look and tweak if required. – ukexpat (talk) 01:33, 25 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I have reviewed and tweaked a little: adding some wikilinks, removing unnecessary italics, adding necessary italics, adding some categories. The article could be improved with a little more detail such as place of birth, education etc. – ukexpat (talk) 02:01, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Cdonkey/Maizex
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 21:00, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

I have created a page about maizex seeds in my userspace. If someone could take a look at it and let me know if I could make it live without  it being deleted that would be great! Thanks! (Cdonkey (talk) 16:49, 8 March 2010 (UTC))


 * You have quite a bit of formatting issues. Headers are incorrect, first sentence the  title should be bold, references are unformatted. Really important for  new articles is to assert importance. Your article does that. But just  googling the name, Maizex, I don't get many hits. Are you sure the  company is Notable enough to warrant having a  Wikipedia article? I don't think your article would be immediately  deleted, but I'm not sure it would last through an AfD. Read over the WP:N  and be sure Maizex is notable enough to have a Wikipedia article  according to Wikipedia policy (notability here refers to criteria  established by Wikipedia and is not used to disparage the company in any  way). --Odie5533 (talk) 07:19, 11 March 2010 (UTC)


 * I agree with Odie5533's assessment and indeed I would go further and say that the draft is too promotional in tone. In its present state it would be unlikely to survive an Afd discussion. – ukexpat (talk) 14:55, 19 March 2010 (UTC)

Enigmatode
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:58, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

User:Milesdrew2000/Enigmatode

Just want to keep this separate from Morgellon's entry as the term involves more pathologies than just Morgellon's. Interested in comments/critique.

Milesdrew2000 (talk) 04:22, 10 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Well, I've looked through this twice now, and the problem is that the article does not have any verifiable and reliable sources. The first three references do not mention enigmatode at all, and the only other reference is a blog article. I googled around a bit and couldn't find anything other than blog posts about this, or about the Drew Sabe mentioned in the blog post. I'm not sure that you can establish notability for this given that the subject is at this point completely hypothetical. Nuujinn (talk) 19:58, 13 March 2010 (UTC)

article on Mark Paredes (me!!) is loaded with errors -- what to do?
tl – ukexpat (talk) 20:54, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Mark_Paredes Article name: Mark Paredes

I have just found out that someone created a Wikipedia page on me that is riddled with errors (birthdate, employers, etc.). Do you have info on the creator of the page? I tried to edit it from this computer at work, but I can't. Can the article be deleted? If not, I need to make some changes. Please advise. Thank you.

205.156.136.229 (talk) 20:01, 10 March 2010 (UTC)Mark Paredes March 10, 2010
 * This is a serious issue, and we will take it very seriously.


 * First the article was created by User:Johnpacklambert. I'll follow up with more detailed advice shortly.-- SPhilbrick  T  20:26, 10 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Please go to the article's talk page and list the issues that need to be corrected, with references to reliable  sources. If that doesn't work, there is a  further process set out here. – ukexpat (talk) 20:29, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * Wikipedia is very interested in ensuring that all articles are verifiable, and places special attention on Biographies of living person, which covers the article about you.
 * At this point, I don't know whether the errors are easily correctable, which would be the desired course, or if the article is so full of errors that it would be better to delete.
 * The best first step would be for you to create an account, if only so that you will have a talk page where we can discuss issues.
 * See Why create an account?
 * It is not necessary to do this, we will address the issue whether you do or do not, but it will be easier if you do.
 * The ideal second step is to post on the discussion page of the article, identifying some of the errors.
 * The page is here. You can click on "new section, and add whatever you want, remembering to hit save when you are done. -- SPhilbrick  T  20:36, 10 March 2010 (UTC)
 * You can also post on the editor's talk page. That talk page is here. It is not unusual for a new editor to misunderstand the goals of Wikipedia, and post material without a lot of support. However, while I've never run across this editor to my knowledge, he was 50,000 edits, so he isn't a newbie. That doesn't mean he gets special treatment, in fact, it means he has no excuse for not knowing the rules. That article is more poorly sourced than is acceptable. I urge you to follow a guideline we call Assume Good Faith. If the statements in the article are not true, we will correct them or remove them, but civil comments will help the process.
 * I've now reviewed the contributions of the editor, and find a number of examples of other articles created without adequate referencing. Please note a policy of Wikipedia, that does sound odd to some people, but really makes sense - it is the conflict of interest policy, which means you should not edit an article about you. (although as mentioned, you are encouraged to post on the talk page. If you think it would be better to simply remove the article, I would be happy to propose it for deletion. That is a process that takes seven days, and a consensus of editors, but I think it is quite likely it would be deleted. If you'd prefer that it remain, but it should be corrected, we can address that as well. To be honest, if someone else proposed it for deletion, it might not survive even if you wanted it kept, as the claims for Notability are not, in my opinion, met. -- SPhilbrick  T  20:51, 10 March 2010 (UTC)

If you want to find out who has been editing any article on Wikipedia recently, just click the 'history' tab at the top of the page. You can see what users did what and when. Chevymontecarlo. 13:11, 11 March 2010 (UTC)

Christopher Melian
tl - deleted per AFD. – ukexpat (talk) 20:46, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Hello, What is the problem with this Wiki page "Christopher Melian" ? It should exist because he has been in 2 influential music groups and is involved in a circle of people that has been written about many times. He has written about and featured in magazines and in videos played on popular television channels around the world. He has recorded with famous producers like Jack Douglas who have worked with John Lennon and he has influenced many people through his music. I as a fan want this page to exist. What is the problem? I would like to fix it I have provided more than enough sufficient evidence of the facts on what i wrote on Christopher Melian. References that include from extremely popular music magazine such as CLash music and NME. Everything has been provided for concrete evidence. Can we have this page exist please because he is an influential person. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Carcrashscene (talk • contribs) 16:14, 11 March 2010 (UTC)


 * See the discussion at Articles for deletion/Christopher Melian. All discussion about the possible deletion should take place at that page. – ukexpat (talk) 16:31, 11 March 2010 (UTC)

Italian America (magazine)
tl - deleted, expired PROD. – ukexpat (talk) 20:44, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi, I would like to have the box at the top of my article removed, which cites that it has been unedited! could someone have a look over it and let me know if there are any further changes that need to be ? it is a short summary about the magazine that "Order Sons of Italy" - an organization that promotes italian-american culture - publishes each season. The name of the article is "Italian America (magazine)". Italian America (magazine)

March 11, 2010, thank you in advance!! Sincerely, Osianational (talk) 16:38, 11 March 2010 (UTC)


 * It has been reviewed and the tag removed. It has also been proposed for deletion because it does not demonstrate the notability of the subject. Please take a look at the general notability guideline. In particular it needs to have refernces that cite significant coverage in reliable sources. – ukexpat (talk) 17:44, 11 March 2010 (UTC)

Finspreads
tl - no response from requester. – ukexpat (talk) 20:39, 30 March 2010 (UTC)

Hi, could I please get some feedback on Finspreads? The page was originally marked for speedy deletion after coming across as pure promotion, but hopefully the offending elements have now been eradicated. Thanks in advance. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Adamjmorrell (talk • contribs) 17:15, 11 March 2010 (UTC)
 * It's too promotional and lacks good references. For example, the article says "Finspreads pioneered fully-interactive online spread betting in 1999", and when I look at reference three, paragraph two starts "We pioneered fully interactive online spread betting in 1999 and we continue to invest in technology to ensure that our service remains amongst the market leaders." That's indicative not only of a WP:COI but also a potential copyright problem. The references are not very good:
 * References 1, 2, 3, 8, 9 and 12 all seem to emanate from the company itself (use of 1st person plural or are obvious press releases or has prose very similar to other references that are press releases or in the 1st person plural).
 * References 5 seems to mention finspreads only in passing.
 * References 6 seems completely irrelevant, but that may be a browser issue.
 * Reference 7 seems to me to just be the web site's designer's site and does nothing to establish notability
 * Reference 10 seems to be a fluff promotional piece for finspread's training course.
 * Reference 4 is ok.
 * So overall I'd say it needs a lot of work, and I'd add that I think the same holds for City Index Group page. If anything, it would probably be better to try to merge this article into the City Index Group page. Nuujinn (talk) 02:10, 12 March 2010 (UTC)

David "Big Dave" DeJernett
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:43, 31 March 2010 (UTC)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Keith_Ellis

On my User Page I've written the linked-to article about a seminal example of achievement in sports integration in US basketball history. Would appreciate advice/criticism. One thing in particular I'd like to know is how to add footnotes or reference-links to the many facts contained in the article.

Many thanks and best regards,

Keith Ellis Keith Ellis (talk) 00:56, 25 March 2010 (UTC)


 * Article has been moved to David "Big Dave" DeJernett (not sure that's an appropriate title though). I have tagged it with a few maintenance tags that should be self-explanatory. – ukexpat (talk) 21:52, 25 March 2010 (UTC)

User page vandalism
tl - question answered. – ukexpat (talk) 21:15, 3 April 2010 (UTC)

User:MacRusgail

I don't know whether this is the right place to report this, but my user page was altered recently by User:Rich nffc without my permission.--MacRusgail (talk) 16:20, 1 April 2010 (UTC)


 * You have done the correct thing by reverting and warning. If the vandal persists, please report it to WP:AIV. – ukexpat (talk) 17:36, 1 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Thank you. Just I notice that sometimes it gets done automatically.--MacRusgail (talk) 17:59, 1 April 2010 (UTC)


 * There are bots that undo obvious vandalism based on strings of blacklisted words, phrases and URLS, and there are tools such as WP:HUGGLE that can semi-automate the reversion, warning and reporting process, but there is no truly automatic process. – ukexpat (talk) 18:11, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

le Corbeau
tl

le Corbeau le Corbeau Francoisg (talk) 17:46, 1 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Not sure what you want. le Corbeau has been around as an article for over 4 years. This page is used to ask for feedback on articles that are new.   GB fan  talk 17:53, 1 April 2010 (UTC)

David Abraham (Executive)
tl - in mainspace and reviewed. – ukexpat (talk) 19:32, 5 April 2010 (UTC)

Please have a quick look at my first article, David Abraham (Executive). I'd like to get rid of the New Unreviewed Article tag. Thanks Alistair Stevenson (talk) 13:45, 5 April 2010 (UTC)


 * Nice work! I have reviewed, made a few minor changes and removed the tag. I also moved it to David Abraham (executive) which is the proper capitalisation for disambiguating titles and tweaked the cats a little. – ukexpat (talk) 15:14, 5 April 2010 (UTC)
 * Thank you Ukexpat, I appreciate your time Alistair Stevenson (talk) 16:00, 5 April 2010 (UTC)


 * My plesure, marking this as "done" for archiving. – ukexpat (talk) 19:32, 5 April 2010 (UTC)

RYPSA FC
tl - draft deleted as spam/non-notable, user spamnameblocked. – ukexpat (talk) 15:23, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

User:Rypsafc/RYPSA FC

This page offers an outlook into Redbridge Young People's Sports Association Football Club who were founded in 2008 by a team of 4 ambitious friends. Since then the club has come on leaps and bounds and has decided to setup a wikipedia page for the club. All the key information is listed with detailed sections on History, Season Progress and Sponsership a long with a small brief outline of the key roles at the club. As one of the original founding members of the club I can ensure all information is completely valid and bares the appropriate references wherever needed.

RYPSA FC 12:25, 8 April 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rypsafc (talk • contribs)


 * Please take a look at WP:CLUB - the subject club does not meet the notability guidelines and the article would be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 15:24, 8 April 2010 (UTC)

The Latimer Group
User:SlatersGarage/The Latimer Group

Looking for feedback on an article I'm working on about The Latimer Group, a communications coaching firm in Wallingford Connecticut. Subheads include info on its founder, as well as company history...

This is my first Wikipedia article, so I'm hoping I got it pretty close... Feedback would be much appreciated.

Thanks SlatersGarage (talk) 13:24, 12 April 2010 (UTC)SlatersGarage 04-12-10


 * At the moment it reads like a promotional piece for the company and its founder, which is a violation of WP:Spam. Also, it does not demonstrate how or why the company is notable per the guidelines at WP:CORP, although it is possible that Brenner may be notable enough per WP:BIO for his sailing activities. In either case you will need to WP:CITE non-trivial coverage in multiple sources independent of the subject to show notability. Hope this helps. – ukexpat (talk) 14:03, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

RYPSA FC
tl - draft deleted as spam/non-notable, user spamnameblocked. – ukexpat (talk) 15:23, 12 April 2010 (UTC)

User:Rypsafc/RYPSA FC

This page offers an outlook into Redbridge Young People's Sports Association Football Club who were founded in 2008 by a team of 4 ambitious friends. Since then the club has come on leaps and bounds and has decided to setup a wikipedia page for the club. All the key information is listed with detailed sections on History, Season Progress and Sponsership a long with a small brief outline of the key roles at the club. As one of the original founding members of the club I can ensure all information is completely valid and bares the appropriate references wherever needed.

RYPSA FC 12:25, 8 April 2010 (UTC) —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rypsafc (talk • contribs)


 * Please take a look at WP:CLUB - the subject club does not meet the notability guidelines and the article would be speedily deleted if moved to the mainspace. – ukexpat (talk) 15:24, 8 April 2010 (UTC)