Wikipedia:Requests for feedback/Archive 9

First Strike (mod)
This is an article on a video game mod moved from Wookiepedia. How much of it can be retained as per Wikipedia guidelines on video games. In my eyes, the Content section should be cut down, as should the Support section per WP:Crystal. Feedback?

Please provide sources so people can WP:Verify your claims. -Optigan13 (talk) 04:02, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

I agree- cut down the Content section and expand the Setting section. Also, more graphics since it is about a video game that includes numerous graphics. --bnr1984 —Preceding unsigned comment added by Bnr1984 (talk • contribs) 00:56, 29 October 2007 Cut down on the content, see the game it is a mod of for an overview of on how to structure it. The article says it was featured in various publications/podcasts, but none have citations to check this. The article also says it won the most anticipated mod award, but who gave this award? -Optigan13 (talk) 04:32, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Emotion work
I started to expand on the stub emotion work. I will continue to work on expanding it, but I am looking for some feedback from someone that is familiar with the topic.


 * I can't say that I'm familiar with the topic, but I did find the article interesting, even as short as it is. A few stylistic points: The disambiguation hatnote to Emotional labor shouldn't be more than a few words. Insert some paragraphing to make the flow of the reading easier. You should also use footnotes so that people can see what reference goes with which statement. A very nice start of an article on a subject I wouldn't have thought about myself, thanks for sharing it with us. —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 02:47, 13 January 2008 (UTC)


 * I agree, a nice beginning to an interesting topic. I think it might fill out the article if you were to explore the clinical and theoretical history of the concept.  these kinds of self-help/therapeutic systems are usually either improvements on or variations of previous systems or techniques, or else attempts at making 'real-world' implementations of one or more psychological theories.  find some of the authors who write about this stuff, and look through their books - they are usually up-front about their sources and inspirations. Ludwigs2 (talk) 02:18, 20 May 2008 (UTC)

Jack o' Kent
Ok, so I was poking around and found a list of articles that need writing...this one caught my eye but I have no idea if I've completely screwed it up Jack o Kent

Thank you for any help you can give! Legotech (talk) 07:42, 1 January 2008 (UTC)


 * I think it's a strong start, and worthy of more work. The first few and the final sentences are great.  The middle section seems to more about those particular folklore examples than about the character Jack.  I know nothing about English Folklore, and I only looked briefly at that article, but it has many links to articles about folklore of specific areas.  If practical, you might provide wikilinks to the specific myths or the areas (Monmouth area?) in which Jack O Kent appears most.   Petershank (talk) 21:01, 9 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Good start. You may also want to look at alternating between "he" and the more formal "Jack" to keep the tone together. Expanding it might help get some scope, you may want to look at Orion (mythology) and Featured articles for some examples of what you might want to do as you expand it. -Optigan13 (talk) 06:17, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Merriam-Webster's Words of the Year
Hello there. I'm a relatively new editor here, and I just created the article Merriam-Webster's Words of the Year. I have submitted this article for "Did you know..." before, but that failed because my article was lacking in some areas. I have already responded to various feedback that I received from that area. Since my nomination for "Did you know..." I have added more information, wikified the entire article to the best of my ability, and tried to make the article as detailed as possible.

Basically, I am here because I now have writer's block. I don't know how I can improve the article to a higher degree. Should I organize the words into a table for each year? Should I provide the definitions for each word so that readers wouldn't have to click on each link? I would greatly appreciate any advice.--Dem393 (talk) 18:20, 2 January 2008 (UTC)


 * This request for feedback has been posted for a week and a half. I would like a response to my question sometime soon, please.--Dem393 (talk) 00:20, 13 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Sorry! Your post might have gotten missed in the post-holiday recovery period- you know, hangovers. Anyways, I just checked out the article and it's very nicely formatted with nice explanations for each year's selections. I did notice that many of the links are leading to either disambiguation pages or to Wiktionary soft links. You might want to disambiguate the links or directly link to Wiktionary articles. As the article's going to need annual updating, you might also consider adding an update after template to the page. The article's a very nice read, thanks for sharing it with us! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 01:59, 13 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you for the advice. I would really like to get started on all of your suggestions ASAP, but I'll see what I can do.--Dem393 (talk) 03:26, 15 January 2008 (UTC)


 * I noticed that you mentioned "[direct] link to Wiktionary articles." The only way that I could do that is by using an external link (the 3rd button on the toolbar), but I'm having this strange feeling that that's not what you mean. Could you enlighten me a bit on this?--Dem393 (talk) 04:00, 16 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Your strange feeling is correct. While they are technically external links, interWikimedia links can be formatted similarly to internal wikilinks. As explained in the link in the previous sentence to link to a Wiktionary article, you would format the link thusly:  which renders as Light. There are also abbreviations for these links, for Wiktionary the abbreviation is "Wikt"; therefore the link can be formatted as , which renders as Light which leads to the same article. Now, of course, you don't normally want those prefixes to be in the rendered page, so what you do is use the pipe trick to make the software automatically eliminate the prefix from the rendered version. I can type   (notice the "|" character) which renders as Light. Hope this helps out, happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 08:27, 16 January 2008 (UTC)

Slough
This article has been relatively stable for some months, and a newish editor has asked why it has got stuck as a B class article - a fair question to ask existing editors such as me who should have improved it by now. All advice on how the article could be improved (or even making improvements directly) would be gratefully received! Grblundell (talk) 15:37, 3 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Well I'd say it is in need of many more inline citations and the quality templates need to be addressed. The trivia section, for example, should probably be worked into the main article, where it is relevant.—RJH (talk) 21:03, 3 January 2008 (UTC)


 * The list sections are the longest parts of the article, and the actual information sections don't actually have that much information. Maybe mix it all in some?  Fléêťflämẽ 03:38, 5 January 2008 (UTC)

Joe Klein's 21st November 2007 Time magazine column
The article reviews and summarizes a controversial column that Klein wrote. A number of people have stated that the article is a good candidate for speedy removal. If this is true, then I would like to know what sections need to be revised as soon as possible. --NBahn (talk) 02:28, 6 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Hi Nbahn, thanks for writing. It's always great to see when someone writes an article and includes copious citations as you have. The article does, however, have a number of issues. Most of them have been mentioned at the article's deletion discussion, but let me mention my own first impression. I can't figure out what the heck it's about. There's no narrative about what the subject is, and why it's important. Most of the article is a series of quotes that don't really enlighten me as to what this is all about. I actually got a much better picture of what this is about from reading the two paragraphs at the Joe Klein article- and if that's all there is to it, then this incident probably should stay a short section of Joe Klein's article unless something more extraordinary were to develop from this.


 * I see that you've put a lot of work into it and it's always painful to see that much work end up deleted. If I may make a suggestion, in the future when you want to work on an article and share it with people here and elsewhere for comment and improvements, you should use a subpage of your user page as a work-page to write the article. Then people can comment on it and help to improve it without fear of it being deleted- and when (and if) it becomes ready for prime-time, you can simply use the move function to place it into mainspace

--NBahn (talk) 02:01, 15 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for writing. —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 02:33, 13 January 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking the time and making the effort to respond. You're right about this being painful.

S.Raven
Please check my links. I have created this page on the UK travel writer Simon Raven. I have checked the facts.

--LakeToba (talk) 08:41, 11 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Hi LakeToba, thanks for your post. It's a nice start to the article, with a goodly number of citations. I did notice right off the bat that the name of the article doesn't conform to the naming conventions. Since there is already another person who has an article at Simon Raven, you need to differentiate the two by using a parenthetical disambiguator- something like Simon Raven (travel writer) or some-such. Then you can add disambiguation hatnotes to each article and perhaps also create a disambiguation page as well. Also, instead of bare links, you should format your references as proper citations, I myself like to use citation templates to make everything uniform. Notes should be renamed References. Bibliography should be renamed Works and moved above the References- right now it looks like they're additional references for the article. Lastly, but most importantly, the article needs to better explain just how this person satisfies the relevant notability guideline; just how is Mr. Raven important to the world of Travel Writers? Thanks again for your note and happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 03:24, 13 January 2008 (UTC)

Please see Your first article.
 * 1) Ensure that you have an account and you are logged in. If you don't have an account, create one
 * 2) Make sure the subject is notable enough to have their own article.
 * 3) Find references
 * 4) Make sure no article on the subject exists under a different title by typing the subject into the search box to the left (←) and clicking 'Search'
 * 5) Type the page name in the search box to the left (←) and click 'Go'
 * 6) Click 'Create this page'
 * 7) Create the article, including all your references, making sure you adhere to the Manual of Style and our article layout guidelines
 * 8) Be aware that Wikipedia deletes thousands of new articles for failing to adhere to our policies and guidelines. New articles by new users are at extra risk of deletion, due to new users' unfamiliarity with our rules. Consider gaining experience by editing existing articles before attempting to create new ones. -Optigan13 (talk) 21:24, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

List of Samurai Shodown Characters
Hi there. I've been working on trying to make this article notable since its removal from Wikipedia. The deleted version of the article was made on this user's page but it appears he has left Wikipedia. It has undergone vast improvements from when it was deleted, and I was wondering if the article as it is now if good enough to be included with the main article  again. Or does it belong on a Wikia instead? I wish to know soon as I would like other fans to contribute as well. Thanks for your time! :) Sake neko (talk) 05:24, 14 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Hello. Indeed, the article is more substantial and better referenced than it was before it was userfied. I also note that this article's AFD didn't reach a consensus, so the default of such a decision is usually keep; however userfication was undertaken unilaterally by two editors. Also notable is that the article was brought up as part of a recent RFARB. Given these facts, I don't see why the article can't be in mainspace. The complication here is that the userfication was done via a cut and paste move that has split the page history between List of Samurai Shodown characters and User:MissingNOOO/List of Samurai Shodown Characters. Before anything else is done, the page histories need to be merged back together; this case should be listed at the Cut and paste move repair holding pen. That process can leave the final article at either location, my personal opinion would be for it to end up in mainspace because there never was a consensus to delete or userfy it. You might also want to ask about this article at WikiProject Video games to make sure this fits in with consensus there. Hope it all works out! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 23:40, 15 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Wow, thanks a lot sir. I didn't know about that case so that was kinda shocking. I will take your comments into consideration and get started right away. Thanks again! Sake neko (talk) 02:52, 16 January 2008 (UTC)

Re: Articles on the Kosi river, Gandaki River and Mahakali River
I have added a lot of text material on the above rivers in wiki pages of the above rivers. I have not seen anybody posting any comments or suggesting changes to the additions made. I propose to add text for one more transboundary river of Nepal - Ghaghara - Karnali river. Before I do that I wish to know if the contents added are accepatble to wikipedia.--Nvvchar (talk) 12:35, 15 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Your additions to those pages seem to be well written and well documented. You might want to read up on how footnotes can be implemented using Wikipedia's software, I myself like to use citation templates to keep my citations standardized. Also I note that you've sometimes inserted information between previously asserted facts and their associated citation (the bit between the tags.) This is undesirable since it can be confusing as to what information is being cited. Full WP:dates should be wikilinked (e.g. September 51969), this is because registered users have the option in their preference settings to change the way the date appears. Depending on one's settings, the above date could appear as September 5, 1969 (American style), 5 September 1969 (European style), 1969-09-05 (ISO 8601), or even 1969 September 5. These are quite minor nitpicks compared to the excellent information you have added to the articles. In general, if nobody's complaining at the articles' talk pages, you've probably done well. Thanks for your contributions! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 03:46, 16 January 2008 (UTC)

Roman Catholic Church
Hello Fellow Editors, I am requesting feedback from other editors about some changes I recently made to the article Roman Catholic Church. I have been using the FA Islam as a guide to make a page that defines what the Roman Catholic Church is without cluttering the page with too much inflammable content that is already extensively covered in other Wikipages. The page has summaries of important events and Wikilinks to subjects like Catholic social teaching and Spanish Inquisition and the like. The references need work to make them in-line citations but I will get to them when I complete the content portion of the page. Please come take a look at the page and offer your non-POV comments about its content. I would like to work and make the page a FA but I do not have a reviewer who has a NPOV. The page will be stuck without one. Thanks.

See previous page before my changes here: http://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=Roman_Catholic_Church&oldid=184675288

See present page with my changes here: Roman Catholic Church

Many thanks! NancyHeise (talk) 22:07, 17 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Often with a heavily edited page such as that one, the feedback gotten on the article's own talk page will be more focused than here, as it seems to have been for you. Sorry for the delayed reply and happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 14:23, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

Iowa Democratic caucuses, 2008
Hi there. I began to edit the article Iowa Democratic caucuses, 2008 on January 3. Over a period of almost 2 weeks, the article has dramatically improved from the edits of several editors and has earned a place in the main page's "Did you know..."

In what ways can this article be improved? Are there any major gaps between pieces of information? Is there a possibility of reaching Good Article or Featured Article status? Any kind of help would be appreciated.--Dem393 (talk) 23:35, 21 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Looks pretty good to me! Well written, well referenced and well illustrated. A *See also* section of related topics might be nice, but that's about all I have to add. In terms of WP:FA or WP:GA, checking with those projects for a review would be best to see what they'd like- which you have already done. Sorry for the delayed reply and happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 14:31, 3 February 2008 (UTC)


 * Thank you--Dem393 (talk) 16:18, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

the pj's
in regard to the location of the pj's, i believe that they reside in the chicago area. i ca me to this conclusion after taping all the episodes and watching them. i really emjoy the show, despite what some critics think. now the reason why i say this is because in several episodes there give strong reference to the fact, such as......season 1 episode 7 (thurgood is interviewed by channel 9, a strong indicator that it is WGN in chicago), in episode 8 ( muriel mentions wether the "bulls" (chicago) were in the playoffs. in season 2 episode 17 ( thurgood mentions that the storm is blowing through chicago. in episode 11 ( thurgood runs for alderman in ward 9), which is in chicago's south side —Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.2.201.8 (talk • contribs) 15:43, 23 January 2008

i believe that the pj's reside in the chicago area, due to certain statements made and things shown, such as in season 1 episode 7(thurgood is interviewed by ch.9,certainely possibly WGN),in episode 8 (muriel metions the "bulls") in season 2 episode 11 (thurgood runs for alderman and in the ninth ward, which is the southside of chicago. there are no aldermans in detroit. and finally in season 3 episode 3 ( lou rawls is giving a concert to the tenants of the hilton-jacobs projects, and lou rawls was a long time resident and native son of chicago). please consider this, for changing of the locale.    THANKS!!!!!! —Preceding unsigned comment added by 70.2.201.8 (talk • contribs) 16:06, 23 January 2008


 * Thanks for writing about The PJs article. I appreciate your desire to share your theories about the show, but unfortunately what you are discussing is original research which is strictly against Wikipedia policy. If you can find this information published by a reliable source, then you may add it to the article provided you include a citation, preferably in the form of a footnote. Thanks again for writing and sorry for the delayed reply. —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 14:40, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

fase reporting
I was browsing thru your site and some thing popped up saying I changed something on an article about the Niagara River using an obscenity. Well, it certainly was not me. I havent even logged in, and I was completely unaware one could even make any changes to written text here. There is some mistake. My e-mail is [e-mail removed to prevent spam]. I have only used this site to obtain info for my daughters school projects or to look up info on some topic I was curious about. I am troubled by this and do not want my name associated with any changes to this site esp. using profanity. I value the info here and would never do anything like that. Please look into this and let me know what you find. Thank You...Lenore Nahs
 * Responded by e-mail.--Pharos (talk) 18:45, 26 January 2008 (UTC)

KoshVorlon's first article seeks reviews
Hello,

This is the first article I've created for Wikipedia - so I thought it might be a good idea to ask you guys to look at it before I post it in main article spce and make sure there's no glaring errors on it. I know there's going to be some errors in it,however, I'm looking to keep the error count low!

- Please reply on the discussion page for this work in process (User:KoshVorlon/WIPS)- Thanks KoshVorlon  ".. We are ALL Kosh..."  19:50, 26 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Replied on the article's talk page, as requested. —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 19:42, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

Internet Elbow
Internet Elbow

Internet elbow is the condition where a callous develops on the left elbow due to it continuously digging into the left armrest. The right elbow is unaffected do to it usually being elevated while the right hand is on the mouse. Internet elbow is characterized by thick, rough skin at the left elbow. --Patrick Brashers (talk) 22:18, 26 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Hi there and thanks for your post! Wikipedia is an encyclopedia and as such doesn't accept simple dictionary definitions. We do have a sister project, Wiktionary that IS a dictionary that can be edited just like Wikipedia can be. However, be aware that they have their own content guidelines on that project and protologisms like this might not be immediately welcome, though you may be able to add it to their List of protologisms. You may also be interested in the fact that the Urban Dictionary seems to have a slightly different definition of this "condition" than you do- you may want to add your definition there. Thanks again for your post and happy editing! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 20:06, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

Mons Claudianus
The article Mons Claudianus needs to be wikified. Could you please have a look at it and tell me what it is missing. It is one of my first articles so I apologise if it is a complete mess. Thanks. ItemSeven (talk) 12:40, 27 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Hi there and thanks for your post! No need to apologize for anything, you're here for advice, right? The article, while short, is clearly written and piques the reader's interest. One thing I did notice right off the bat was that your references don't really qualify as reliable sources because one's self published and the other's a tourism site with very little information. Luckily, the first site included a link to an article from British Archaeology which certainly IS a reliable source. I would recommend that you cite that source and any other similar ones you might be able to run down. It really is preferable if you can make the citations in-line by using footnotes— I myself like to use citation templates so that the citations are properly formatted in a standardized way. The article need the addition of one or more appropriate stub templates. You should also add the banners of appropriate Wikiprojects on the article's talk page. I think it's a very good start to what promises to be an interesting article, good work! —Elipongo (Talk contribs) 20:33, 3 February 2008 (UTC)

I Agree this needs more reliable sources and references. -Optigan13 (talk) 23:16, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Shomer Shabbat
Greetings. I've edited on WP for awhile. But I'd like some help learning how articles are assessed and how I might improve an article. For starters, I'd be grateful if somebody could glance at Shomer Shabbat, tell me it's quality rank, and what are the key steps needed for improvement. Thanks. HG | Talk 07:33, 28 January 2008 (UTC)


 * Note left on user's talk.  delldot   talk  01:10, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Loss of session data
I recently attempted to create a new page/article (title: Cooperative living arrangements). After spending considerable time to input text, I hit "Save page".

I then got a screen that said, "Sorry! We could not process your edit due to a loss of session data. Please try again."

My new article appeared as "Preview". When I clicked "Article" to see how it looked there, it disappeared and, in spite of much searching, I have not been able to find it again.

How does this happen?

Can I retrieve my input in any way?

Do I have to start all over again?

If I do start over, how do I know that the same thing won't happen again?

Please advise.

Thanks!


 * Hi! When the session data was lost, the article was never saved. If you had clicked the "Save Page" button again, you might have been able to save it that time. Unfortunately, by clicking the "article" link at the top, you canceled the edit, and as it was not saved, it will have been lost, unless you are using Firefox (possibly others) and you can get back to it by clicking the "back" button. If this is no longer possible, because you have closed your browser since then, I'm sorry to say that it will have been lost. If you want to create the page, you will have to start over, but to stop you from losing it again if the problem recurs, then I suggest copying the contents of the page to a text editor, and saving it on your machine. Then if you do lose it again, you can easily copy-and-paste it back. This is a problem that usually occurs when spending a long time editing. I hope that this helps.  Stwalkerster [  talk  ]  23:07, 31 January 2008 (UTC)

Pandora Jewelry
I'd just like a fresh opinion on this article I've written... User:Pairadox believes it reads like an advert and whilst I've made a number of changes I just can't see what else can be tightened. Is it a case of author-blindness? I've never written a product article before but thought I'd actually done a decent job of keeping things verifiable and neutral. Thanks PageantUpdater talk • contribs  23:59, 1 February 2008 (UTC)
 * call me naive, but I can really see much wrong with it either...

The brand concept is "one for every unforgettable moment". It is suggested that beads be added to a bracelet to recognise special moments in the wearer's life.[7][8]


 * This was the only part I found a bit dodgy, because reworded it could seem like we are just placing their slogan for free marketing for the company, but I can compare it to an article on ask,(the internet search engine that is), and that its typified by the "ask jeeves" slogan and in the same way that Google has "google it". I think it tows the line. But as ever, lets wait for a second opinion.

You could also ask the person who tagged it in the first place to overview it again if you haven't already asked.-- Kerotan Leave Me a Message  Have  a nice day :) 00:11, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * I should have noted their comments here, sorry about that (don't forget that I've done some rewriting since they wrote this...)
 * "It's a very well crafted article in many respects, but it still reads like advertising. There's the detailed products list, right down to a price range. There's the hype in the lead about their growth without a section in the body of the article that corresponds to it, nor any perspective to that growth. The tone of the entire article is one of unmitigated praise, right down to the PR-like mention of charity works."
 * My comments were that as it is a product article, I felt that it followed to include a detailed description of the products sold. The comment about the growth is valid but I got that fact from an article which didn't give it much context either.  I think it was impressive and worth mentioning, though.  As for the last bit...  well I just don't see it.  PageantUpdater  talk • contribs  00:45, 2 February 2008 (UTC)
 * And I agree that the "concept" sentence is a bit clunky, but I couldn't quite figure out what to do with it. That is basicaly the whole premise behind the bracelet, that people buy you beads to symbolise special moments in your life (birthdays, Christmas, graduation etc) Its too important to simply not include. PageantUpdater  talk • contribs  00:49, 2 February 2008 (UTC)


 * I think this discussion is a good one to have, but it should go on the article's talk page. Remember, the most important thing is to provide reliable sources for each statement.   delldot   talk  02:57, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Template on Hamlet (bibliographies)
Hi, I wrote an entry Hamlet (bibliographies) which, after seeing a template on top about its style, I rewrote where I could conceive rewriting in a quick chock-a-block entry on rapid information finding. My changes are summarized in the summary page (which makes sense...), and of course is in the diff.

How can that template sign be assessed for removal? I'd like to have the article hit the bases.

Thanks, --Shlishke (talk) 07:57, 2 February 2008 (UTC)


 * Template's gone, note left on user talk.  delldot   talk  02:54, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Weekly Torah readings
Greetings. A hard-working editor (User:Dauster) has created a series of terrific articles. See Category:Weekly Torah readings. I'm wondering if somebody would glance at Mishpatim and Shoftim (parsha) and let me know what he/we might need to do -- generally -- to bring this kind of article into GA status. Please reply to my Talk. Thanks very much for you time and attention! HG | Talk 19:20, 3 February 2008 (UTC)
 * Note on user's talk page for above request probably covers this one too.  delldot   talk  02:59, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

New Article
I would like to submit the following article for inclusion in Wikipedia:

The Urshan Gateway Library is an academic library that supports the faculty, staff, and students of Urshan Graduate School of Theology and Gateway College of Evangelism. Collection development began with the acquisition of the personal library of Ernest E. Jolley, a United Pentecostal Church minister. Rev Jolley’s library was donated to Gateway College of Evangelism and consisted of almost ten thousand volumes. This donation was catalogued and shelved in one of the large classrooms. A major shift in the library took place in 2001 when the Urshan Graduate School of Theology began operation. Intentional acquisition of material relevant to curriculum and research of the school’s professional staff became a top priority. The library now consists of approximately 40,000 holdings with 30,000 titles. Future development will broaden to other formats but printed manuscript is the prefer medium for present development.


 * Noteability? Guidelines state "If a topic has received significant coverage in reliable sources that are independent of the subject, it is presumed to be notable." --Interactbiz (Norm, Vancouver Canada) (talk) 23:12, 2 June 2008 (UTC)

Michigan Technological University
I just did a complete writeup/rewrite ((Was a little of both)) of the "Student Life" section, and was hoping to get an informal review. My primary concerns are grammar and sentence structure, in addition to general content. Additionally, I'm a student, so I'm looking to make sure NPOV was maintained. I have other additions planned, and noted them on the talk page. Thanks ahead of time! :-)

Comparison of the Current/Previous D1universe (talk) 00:57, 6 February 2008 (UTC)

Is it at all possible for someone or anyone to start compiling information on 'Being and Time' by Martin Heidegger. Yes, there's information there, but not a section by section analysis as done by other individuals. I tried this and someone else did not look kindly on it, with a  claim that it was a 'poor addition'.
 * The language in the introduction needed to be toned down. You might also want to consider adding an external link to [motivational drives] . Ottre (talk) 17:28, 21 August 2008 (UTC)

Edward P. DeBlasio -- American Television Writer
I used the sandbox to create a profile of my husband's (Edward P. DeBlasio) credits and cannot locate it. His credits are numerous and can be verified on IMDb, Google, WGA. He is only mentioned on Wikipedia regarding the Dynasty Reunion. He wrote for the show and was executive script consultant for eight years. He was executive script consultant and writer on Police Woman for four years. Same for: In The Heat of The Night, Paris, The Man & The City, Owen Marshall. He wrote a book -- "All About The Beatles" and numerous TV movies -- "This Town Will Never Be The Same", he Sister and The Savage". "The Boy Who Drank Too Much", "Janek". He Also worked in England on "Strange Report" with Anthony Quayle.  Ed wrote for "The Defenders", "East Side/West Side" plus several episodes of Marcus Welby, MD, Ironside, Seaway and many more.  He cowrote "The Legend of Lyllah Clare with Robert Thom as a television movie -- they sold it to Robert Aldrich and it was made into a theatrical starring Kim Novak. Ed was born in Brooklyn, New York on October 19, 1926, attended the High School of Music and Art, Columbia College and Columbia School of Journalism. He started out as a reporter on the Hartford Courant newspaper -- eventually became editor of Front Page Detective. He wrote a spec script for Kraft Playhouse called Flowers For 2B which launched his television writing career. He had been represented by Sol Leon of William Morris Agency at the time of retirement. All of this can be verified. Irene DeBlasio —Preceding unsigned comment added by IDeblasio (talk • contribs) 01:23, February 15, 2008

 -- omtay 38  01:24, 15 February 2008 (UTC)

Can you provide third-party information from trade papers or other media to substantiate the data? He does seem worthy of a wiki entry, but all the information should have reputable third-party sources readers can find should they need more information. User:A_little_mollusk

New edit today
I added information to the Abdullah Ibrahim (jazz pianist) page, expanding information on the contents of a long playing record from 1977 called THE JOURNEY. I thought it might add value to add a .jpg image of the front and back of the cover. However I need clearance first that posting the two images wont be a contravention of any rights e.g. copyright?

Not sure where you post a reply to this question? Thank you. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Hokaai (talk • contribs)


 * Left note on user talk.  delldot   talk  01:58, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Structure of the Sindy article
I have rewritten the article for the Sindy doll (diff) and would love to get some feedback about the structure of the article. I've grouped the history of the doll by decades but I'm not sure if another grouping would make more sense or just make it unnecessarily complicated - e.g. headings such as "Development of the doll", "Sindy versus Barbie", "Controversies" etc. Can someone please provide me with some advice on this? Also, is anything else lacking? I know the article really needs images, but I don't have access to any myself. Thanks! Somno (talk) 02:55, 20 February 2008 (UTC)


 * Note left on user talk. delldot   talk  03:03, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Eva Cassidy
Please post suggestions for improvement at Talk:Eva_Cassidy. Thanks. --165.21.154.92 (talk) 05:06, 23 February 2008 (UTC)

Emotion and the Stock Market
Redacted full article submission
 * User:Jinxedup had submitted what appears to be a first article. I've now moved the page to user's sandbox. -Optigan13 (talk) 03:13, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Feedback Radio 4 programme
There is a need for an article on Feedback the BBC Radio 4 programme which provides a weekly structured response from listeners to the BBC's radio output, in two sessions a year - brodacst Sunaday at 18.15 on Radio 4 and repeated
 * See Requested articles—RJH (talk) 18:44, 27 February 2008 (UTC)

Street Fighter IV
This is a well referenced article, and I had like to know if there's something we can do to improve it. Thanks. - Master Bigode from SRK.o// (Talk) (Contribs) 22:43, 25 February 2008 (UTC)

Digital Media Academy
This article has been flagged as blatant advertising. However it is simply meant to be an informational article about Digital Media Academy explaining the company background, overview and services.

Please help. —Preceding unsigned comment added by DigitalMediaAcademy (talk • contribs)


 * Hi DigitalMediaAcademy. There are a few problems with the article that I can see. 1) No independent, reliable sources to establish notability, 2) the article was written by someone who has a conflict of interest, 3) it's not written in a particularly neutral point of view (e.g. "exclusive learning experiences", "prestigious universities"). You might also like to refer to What Wikipedia is not: an advertising service. Hope that helps. Somno (talk) 00:28, 27 February 2008 (UTC)

rabbit
how many legs do rabbit have ?


 * Hi. For factual questions, please use this page, and by the way they have four legs. Thanks. ~ A H  1 (TCU) 17:10, 28 April 2008 (UTC)

Biography of Henry Willobie, Elizabethan poet(?)
On 1st February 2008 I made a significant correction to the biography of Henry Willobie (1574/5-1639). This correction has vanished from the page, leaving it inaccurate. Is there anyone out there who can tell me who I contact about this, and how? (An e-mail would be best, as I doubt my capability to find any reply on the Wikipedia system). Giles Browne Giles Browne (talk) 22:05, 3 March 2008 (UTC)
 * The user who reverted your change explained why in their edit summary . You didn't include a verifiable, reliable source for the information you added, so that's why someone reverted your change. Hope that helps. Somno (talk) 01:10, 4 March 2008 (UTC)

Insted (artist)
Article submission — Preceding unsigned comment added by 76.94.74.79 (talk) 19:02, 2008 March 3

Please see Your first article.
 * 1) Ensure that you have an account and you are logged in. If you don't have an account, create one
 * 2) Make sure the subject is notable enough to have their own article.
 * 3) Find references
 * 4) Make sure no article on the subject exists under a different title by typing the subject into the search box to the left (←) and clicking 'Search'
 * 5) Type the page name in the search box to the left (←) and click 'Go'
 * 6) Click 'Create this page'
 * 7) Create the article, including all your references, making sure you adhere to the Manual of Style and our article layout guidelines
 * 8) Be aware that Wikipedia deletes thousands of new articles for failing to adhere to our policies and guidelines. New articles by new users are at extra risk of deletion, due to new users' unfamiliarity with our rules. Consider gaining experience by editing existing articles before attempting to create new ones. -Optigan13 (talk) 23:31, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

request for a Poeremetator page on wikipedia.
Dear miss/sir,

My name is Baboe Poeremetator and I'm from eastern-Timor. I come from a long line of proud Poeremetators in Eastern-Timor. I want to ask if I can make a story on Wikipedia about the Poeremetators and the near extinction of the Poeremetator race.

Please let me do it cause there aren't many Poeremetators left after the war...

Sincerely,

B. Poeremetator. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Baboe (talk • contribs) 16:10, 2008 March 7

Please see Your first article.
 * 1) Ensure that you have an account and you are logged in. If you don't have an account, create one
 * 2) Make sure the subject is notable enough to have their own article.
 * 3) Find references
 * 4) Make sure no article on the subject exists under a different title by typing the subject into the search box to the left (←) and clicking 'Search'
 * 5) Type the page name in the search box to the left (←) and click 'Go'
 * 6) Click 'Create this page'
 * 7) Create the article, including all your references, making sure you adhere to the Manual of Style and our article layout guidelines
 * 8) Be aware that Wikipedia deletes thousands of new articles for failing to adhere to our policies and guidelines. New articles by new users are at extra risk of deletion, due to new users' unfamiliarity with our rules. Consider gaining experience by editing existing articles before attempting to create new ones. -Optigan13 (talk) 23:39, 1 June 2008 (UTC)

Helen Lester
Any feedback on the page on Helen Lester would be appreciated. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Kenaibound1 (talk • contribs)
 * Left note on user talk.  delldot   talk  01:58, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Category assistance for Biography (my first entry)
Greetings! First article James Norwood Pratt, I am sure needs work on the Category section. Where do I go to find specific directions or guidelines for Category content? The number of categories seems expansive. Thanks! Teaprofessor (talk) 04:08, 10 March 2008 (UTC)


 * Answering on user's talk page. Fusion Mix 17:56, 20 March 2008 (UTC)

Capresso
Hello,

Could someone check out the Capresso entry? I noticed it had two stamps on it a couple of months ago, and I believe I've made all of the necessary changes to it now.

If it still does not meet Wikipedia standards, I would love some helpful hints on how to improve the entry.

Thanks!


 * I'm leaving feedback on the Discussion page. No one is suggesting anything as dramatic as deleting the page, even as it stands. However there are a number of small things which might all help. Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 09:07, 12 May 2008 (UTC)

Israel lobby in the United Kingdom
There are a number of reliably sourced paragraphs about this topic in the article but one editor keeps rejecting any summary as a lead sentence to the article, alleging WP:OR. Any one want to see if the can come up with a lead sentence from those sources that will past muster? Thanks. Carol Moore 14:39, 11 March 2008 (UTC)Carolmooredc {talk}

Freda Utley
Someone put on a neutrality template. I added more mainstream sorces and took out original editor's POV laguage. Anyone want to check quickly and remove template? Thanks. Carol Moore 14:42, 11 March 2008 (UTC)Carolmooredc {talk}
 * It seems fine now.&mdash;RJH (talk) 21:55, 20 March 2008 (UTC)

Handbells
I've removed a lot of unsourced and unencyclopedic info, added a bunch of sourced info, added references for other info, and added photos in this article. I think it's going pretty well, but I'd love some opinions/feedback from people who are not familiar with the subject. Thanks! |God of biscuits | 14:52, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I had a look through the article and I think it is well written and easy to understand. :) Although there are two sections with the same name ("Handbell music") that could probably be merged.  QUILzhunter931 (talk) 11:52, 19 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Thanks, QUILzhunter- for the feedback and the edit. I guess those are the things you need an outside perspective on.  Any other takers? |God of biscuits | 16:51, 20 March 2008 (UTC)

Mesh analysis
I have completely changed the Mesh analysis article. There was not much information on this article before. This is the first article that I have written and am looking for feedback on how I can make it better. Some examples of the comments that I am look for are as the following:


 * Do I follow the standard Wikipedia article?
 * Is my article easy to understand?
 * Are my graphics help explain my topic?
 * Does the structure of the article make sense?
 * Is there anyway to make my article better?

Thanks for your input! Mrball25 (talk) 18:56, 12 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Answer on talk. Mion (talk) 13:16, 22 March 2008 (UTC)

Rabbit haemorrhagic disease
Lisakauth has substantially expanded the Rabbit haemorrhagic disease article for an English class and has requested feedback. I've given some advice but I'd appreciate more experienced insight. Cheers. – Liveste (talk • edits) 09:43, 20 March 2008 (UTC)


 * Notes left on user and article talk.  delldot   talk  02:05, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Walkman effect
I just created the Walkman effect article earlier this afternoon. It's the first Wikipedia page I've started and my first major edit. There are a couple things that I still plan to add or tweak when I have a few minutes, but I would love some feedback/corrections particularly on style stuff:

—Rhododendrites (talk) 00:49, 25 March 2008 (UTC)
 * First and foremost, I couldn't figure out how to reuse references; you'll see at the bottom there are duplicates and triplicates of a couple articles.
 * There's a little bit of tense switching at times when it seemed appropriate, but I don't know if there's a Wikipedia guideline about it.
 * When citing sources, it seems like most Wikipedia articles just use a ref link instead of using the source's name (or instead of doing both). I tended towards using the names quite a bit. I know that use of (Ibid)s is not so Wiki-friendly, but the frequency with which I say "Hosokawa" in here might be a bit much. When should you use a ref/footnote and that's it?
 * Thanks :)
 * Note left on user talk. delldot   talk  02:18, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Future Entertainment
Just created this page, please provide feedback as it is the first page i have done. E.3 (talk) 09:01, 27 March 2008 (UTC)

User:Stuartfost/BCC Research
Hi, I'm just trying to continue to work to improve this article that I am working on for this company. If anyone has any information (particularly of the independant kind) it would be most appreciated. Also I would like to add some more of the unassigned/unclassified business tags to the article, but don't know how. Any help is good help! Thanks Stuartfost (talk) 16:31, 27 March 2008 (UTC)

Nikon F100
Hello, I began to expand this article a little while ago. I'd like to see if anyone has any comments or helpful suggestions. This is my first article, so I'd really appreciate any feedback Thanks! Warped4498 (talk) 19:49, 27 March 2008 (UTC)


 * I've added a few comments on the F100's Discussion page.


 * Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 22:13, 3 May 2008 (UTC)

SHS International
Hi,

I just posted the page above on behalf of a company I work for. Can someone please check it is ok? The company has just released a website which is an information site for sufferers of metabolic conditions and I just tried to post the website as an external resource on the PKU page but it told me the website was blacklisted. Is this as a result of something that I have put on the company profile page http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/SHS_International.

Thanks in advance

Nublue (talk) 16:10, 28 March 2008 (UTC)
 * What is the domain of the link? Most likely it has been spammed, however if you can tell me what the link is, I can look into this further for you. ——  nix eagle 00:46, 31 March 2008 (UTC)

User:Stuartfost/BCC Research
+BCC Research Article Development Hoping to get some more feed back and see if the first source I provided is adequate for notability. Thanks Stuartfost (talk) 17:11, 28 March 2008 (UTC)

Exalted
I am looking to get some constructive criticism and feedback on the article Exalted. I have been working on the article for over a year, and while I am not the only contributor, I seem to be the primary contributor of material for the article. I appreciate any assistance. Thank you! -  B o <font color="#0000FF">d <font color="#1E90FF">h <font color="#63B8FF">i <font color="#00BFFF">s <font color="#87CEFF">a <font color="#B0E2FF">t <font color="#C6E2FF">t <font color="#CAE1FF">v <font color="#BFEFFF">a <font color="#E0FFFF">s <font color="#BBFFFF">p <font color="#98F5FF">a <font color="#00F5FF">t <font color="#00FFFF">h  * <font color="#CAE1FF">T <font color="#BFEFFF">a <font color="#E0FFFF">l <font color="#BBFFFF">k  * <font color="#C6E2FF">C <font color="#CAE1FF">o <font color="#BFEFFF">n <font color="#E0FFFF">t <font color="#BBFFFF">r <font color="#98F5FF">i <font color="#00F5FF">b <font color="#00FFFF">s    02:10, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * I'm somewhat concerned by the relative dearth of real-world coverage versus primary sources; it all begins to smack somewhat of original research. SamBC(talk) 12:40, 29 March 2008 (UTC)
 * You need secondary sources. See WP:CITE, and WP:SOURCE. (sorry for the alphabet soup). ——  nix eagle 00:45, 31 March 2008 (UTC)

Recent article submission on Grant Stoelwinder
I would prefer that this was noted under my user name rather than my computer. Is this the case or can it be done, post submission?Catieb (talk) 03:57, 30 March 2008 (UTC)
 * It is not possible to re-assign edits as far as I know. ——  nix eagle 00:43, 31 March 2008 (UTC)
 * Not possible as far as I know either, sorry.  delldot   talk  03:10, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Norma Adams Clemons Academy
The official name for Public School 6, located at 43 Snyder Avenue, is "The Norma Adams Clemons Academy". Norma Adams Clemons was the first principal of the school formerly known as "PS 6".

During her tenure, she was well respected and liked by both students and staff alike. It is widely believed that she held her staff to the commitment of hard work and putting the students first. This bond led her to defend them stoutly against supervisors from both the district and the region.

Her outstanding leadership qualities motivated many paraprofessionals to pursue degrees to become teachers. This is a major part of her legacy.


 * Ok, and what article is this? If the post itself is the article, we need secondary sources and citations. ——  nix eagle 00:47, 31 March 2008 (UTC)

Harlow
Harlow 80's Glam Band

Harlow was formed in 1985 in Kansas City, Missouri. Mickey Kravitz, a singer with a vision to put together a glam band that the kids in Kansas City. Having been majority influenced by bands like The Sweet, T-Rex, Angle, Piper, Starz, he stared his search.. A local cover band The Bad Boyz were also looking for a new singer to write original music with to try a get signed. He joined up with Hyland Church on guitar, guitarist Matt Cascio, drummer Mike Rubyor, and on bass, Gregg Hurla. The band found an old 6 story building in down town KC and started writing, the band decided that to do what they were trying to accomplish, they needed to live together so they could eat, drink and breath this vision. Harlow started playing local parties and The Uptown Theater, a 1500 seat venue. The show went so well that the band started to headline shows there with other local bands. Also, the band’s reputation grew for being known for their drinking, partying and especially all the girls. Their house was a constant party unless they were practicing. On more than one occasion, the police would bust up a party and take one of the band members to lock-up and then the people at the house would pass around a hat to gather money to bail them out.

The band hooked up with the manger of local band that had ties with Greenworld Records to record there debut record ‘We do what we wanna do” at Chapman Studios with the band producing and Mike Frasier engineering. The song “Rock the Box” was added as a bonus track and was recorded at Chapman’s after a long night of partying at a bar and inviting 20 or so people over to the studio to sing backup vocals. “Rock the box” received a small amount of airplay in the United States

In 1986 the band out grew KC and packed up and moved to Los Angeles. In 1986 being the height of the glam scene They fit right in on the Sunset strip. The band started playing, recording and building a following. 1989 the band split and went there separate ways. Mickey went on to play and record with Baby Strange and Vendetta, Hyland joined Suite 19, Grave Danger and teamed up with ex-Dubrow and Invasion guitarist Greg Leon, and then on to DC 4. Mike and Matt moved back to KC and put together a couple of recording projects. Gregg moved over to the country side of music.


 * In 2005 Cleopatra records re-released the single "Rock the Box" on the  box Set "Hollywood Rocks" along with other 80's rockers Poison, L.A. guns, Faster Pussycat, Great White, etc… Now in 2008, Harlow has signed a deal with Retrospect Records. They are releasing a full-length album in June. The band has written some new material and will add 5 new songs with the original unreleased EP.  The New CD "Now and Then" will b out spring 2008

Need feedback on new page: Transformation of culture
Hello all, I'm relatively new to Wikipedia and would like feedback on a page that I have created. The page encompasses the work of Prof. Robert Hershey, a law professor at the University of Arizona. There is a lot of confluence here with Globalization, but because the Globalization page centers so much around the WTO, trade, and other economic issues, I felt that this body of work deserved its own page.

Please tell me what you think and feel free to post comments to my user page. Thanks! Blueelectricstorm (talk) 13:57, 31 March 2008 (UTC)


 * Note left on user talk. delldot   talk  03:13, 5 September 2008 (UTC)

Motofen
I've been on Motofen for the past 15 years for crohns disease. Latley I've unbeen able to obtain it and its left me with a very bleek future. I've also been told that there's a possibility that it will return to the market on May or at least a replacement for it. I would certainly like to know if anyone can inform me of this.

Gary Steltzer Corpus Christi, Texas e-mail removed

Dear sir:

How to translate an English word or phrase into Chinese word or phrase?

Thanks


 * You are looking for the Reference Desk. However, they will not answer requests for medical advice. —<font style="color:Orange;">BradV 20:08, 4 April 2008 (UTC)

WP:BELIEFS Wikipedia talk:Reliable_sources
I have not used RFF before so I hope I am doing this right.

I have developed a new section for the WP:RS guideline and I would like some feedback. To date it has been discussed in the talk page and seems to have generally positive support but needs work. The text has been revised and now I am asking for feedback to (A) avoid potential pitfalls and (B) refine wording for clarity of appropriate use. I could just be bold but since this new guideline could potentially have very wide impact on many articles I would appreciate all the help I can get before going live.

Thanks. -- Low Sea (talk) 19:59, 4 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Would Village pump (policy) be a better place to have this discussion? —<font style="color:Orange;">BradV 20:07, 4 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Per your suggestion I have replicated this post at Village pump (policy). The specific topic item is here. Feedback is appreciated. -- Low Sea (talk) 13:12, 5 April 2008 (UTC)

Luke Wyland
Rewrote this article in hopes of getting it undeleted. Have placed the appropriate References and Links.

The only thing i don't know how to do is to change the heading (Wyland instead of wyland)

Thanks

--Auband (talk) 20:02, 8 April 2008 (UTC)


 * Capitalized. –Pomte 18:34, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Altar crucifix
A requested article which I wrote from scratch. I'm looking for additional information that's lacking and that sort of thing. Any comments are welcome. --Liempt (talk) 21:33, 9 April 2008 (UTC)


 * There are a number of small things to be corrected. I'm going to do a little copyedit on your article, trying to avoid changing meaning. I'll explain the changes I've made in Discussion.


 * Since your sources are Catholic, it's not surprising that this article emphasizes Catholic usage. However, other churches use a crucifix, which will probably come to their attention (or to the attention of a general copyeditor) as showing bias -- even though you probably did not intend any. (As always, assume Good Faith, lol.)


 * There's an existing article Crucifix, that is in reasonably good shape, and you may want to consider the bigger picture that your material should be worked into that article, rather than being a different article.


 * Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 23:11, 3 May 2008 (UTC)

Author William Heffernan
Your information on William Heffernan states that you do not know the place or date of his birth. Author William Heffernan was born in New Haven, Connecticut, on August 22, 1950. Hopes this helps.
 * Thanks, I've added the info to William Heffernan. Do you happen to have a source for it? –Pomte 18:41, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

INTO University Partnerships
I have created this article and would like feedback on it, especially ideas on links or categories that should be included. I posted a similar notice asking for comments on a couple of project noticeboards and got nothing except one rather disheartening one here, which says "Conflict of interest is obvious, and notability needs to be asserted." I really don't see the problems alluded to (not specified, and that editor hasn't weighed in again to be more precise), given the sources I've quoted, but I do accept that I am by definition too close to the forest to see all the trees. Any help would be appreciated. BusinessAsUnusual (talk) 11:26, 12 April 2008 (UTC)

Wetlands restoration will produce an unstable or stable Mississippi River?
Please review the below article I published on the internet. I will publish it under Mississippi River as an external link in Wikipedia after the review.

The below writings will provide information for both sides of the fence and one side will produce an more unstable river and the other side will produce a river with essentially no added unstability.

The present Master Plan for wetlands restoration of South Louisiana only covers one side of the fence. The plan discusses 20% to 30% of the river being diverted along the Mississippi River between Donaldsonville and the mouth of the river and, I believe, this will make the river unstable. The other side of the fence is diverting with keeping the river stable and I want to share some ideas of how, I believe, to keep the river stable.

Please see below link:

Wetlands restoration will produce an unstable or stable Mississippi River?

What if a page already exist for that name?
Hi, I am trying to add a page on Charles Wilson, the R&B singer. However, there are several Charles Wilson pages and everytime I do a search, I keep getting a master list. How do I add a page if the name is already there but it is not the person I want to add? Thanks, maryewilkins Maryewilkins (talk) 08:37, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I would start a page with the name and then the disambiguation (R&B). Like: Charles_Wilson_(R&B_singer).  If you click there, you have the option of starting the page since it doesn't exist. --<font color="#66CC33">Digital <font color="#00CCFF">Gadget  09:17, 15 April 2008 (UTC)

Comb binding
I've got two chunky tables that are fighting on this page. I don't think anything should get tossed because I feel it's useful, but what would be a better way to flow the page and align/border the tables? --<font color="#66CC33">Digital <font color="#00CCFF">Gadget  09:02, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * It looks like this page is laying out correctly now. Tiggerjay (talk) 15:29, 19 May 2008 (UTC)

National Museum of Beirut‎
Hi, i started editing this article which was only a stub, i couldn't find much references even though the subject is of importance since the museum holds the one of the largest repertoires of Phoenician artifacts. after my edit and expansion i still feel that the article is very weak in many aspects... Help is graced Elie plus (talk) 18:40, 15 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Actually, I feel that the article is pretty good. Needs a little work, sure, but definitely a great beginning. Lazulilasher (talk) 19:46, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Very good article. I have one remarks about the logo though: If this is indeed the museum's official logo, it might be protected even if you created the image file yourself. I will look for a place to learn more. --Yooden &#9774;


 * Do you guys think it's suitable to be reviewed for GA?  Eli  +  12:10, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I'd say yes. --Yooden &#9774;
 * It's definitely pretty close. Lazulilasher (talk) 15:39, 18 April 2008 (UTC)

Comments on article split: Science in Medieval Western Europe
I am seeking commentary on the PROD (should be a merge proposal, really) for Science in Medieval Western Europe. If you have comments please provide them there.

--Mcorazao (talk) 18:45, 16 April 2008 (UTC)
 * PROD is gone, any more issues? --Yooden &#9774;

Vereniging Basisinkomen
Hi,

I'd like some comments and help with Vereniging Basisinkomen, especially since in this case I have a COI. Recently, some users from nl:Wikipedia showed up and are questioning my every edit, and every article that I have ever worked on, even from ages back. Guido den Broeder (talk) 13:03, 17 April 2008 (UTC)
 * I guess you refer to the AFD entry. I commented on that.
 * The section Basic income in The Netherlands seems to be too long. I'd suggest to cut it back to avoid problems.
 * As for the background problems, my impression is that all of you should sit together, talk it through and maybe get a binding agreement. I noticed that not everyone involved is ready to do this, so I'm afraid the problem will come back. --Yooden &#9774;

Universal Peace Through United Countries Of World
Dear Readers,

I have posted an article entitled "Universal Peace Through United Countries Of World" in www.wikipedia.com.

My nane is Manoj.K.mullapudi. My email id is

Please critically evaluate the article and send your feed-back to my e-mail.

Thanking you;

With love, Manoj.‘


 * No, doesn't seem like you have. Have fun! --Yooden &#9774;
 * Sorry, we're unable to find it.Tiggerjay (talk)

Article On CIPS
I just added the article Center for Integrated Plasma Studies, see my disclaimer on the talk page. I belive i have avoided WP:COI and WP:NPOV issues. But I would like any assistance in going over the page and fixing any problems and bringing them up to par. (Also it should pass notability as there are a bunch of other Univ. of Colorado departments listed.) --21:15, 18 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Another editor cleaned up the references and it appears to be a fine WP:STUB at the moment. Tiggerjay (talk)

Help is needed for a new contributor
HI,

I need to clean up an article I submitted: Bellefonte Forge House

Any suggestions would be greatly appreciated.

I am new to this, so may be somewhat slow in knowing what to do next.

Thanks

KeithKoch KeithKoch (talk) 15:16, 19 April 2008 (UTC)


 * It's quite good. Even to the extent that editorial comments are more nits, than anything. (But I'll make a few, anyhow, lol.)


 * It would be helpful if more of your edits were combined in to a single "Save Page", so that the Page History had a handful of your changes, instead of dozens. There are various reasons for this, but you'll get a sense of why soon enough. Suffice it to say, other editors will want to review the history.


 * Regards,


 * Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 00:40, 4 May 2008 (UTC)

Lake monster
Hi. I'm about to expand the list, and perhaps eventually make new articles, and would like some feedback and suggestions if possible (also see the talkpage). Thanks. ~ A H  1 (TCU) 00:51, 22 April 2008 (UTC)

Help required
I got a warning at my talk page quoting "User talk:61.11.91.157." that says about vandalism. I am a new user and don't know what to do as I haven't done anything wrong. I may be wrong for putting a question here but kindly help!!! —Preceding unsigned comment added by Sengupta Sonali (talk • contribs)
 * It appears that it is in relation to Harappa.com article you've created and are asking for help for on the next section below. Tiggerjay (talk) 15:19, 19 May 2008 (UTC)

Harappa.com
I have added a new page at Harappa and need contributors' help to cite sources and bring it to the required standards of Wiki. So, please plunge forward and improve the page. I would also welcome criticisms from you for the betterment of the content of this page at my talk page. —Preceding unsigned comment added by Sengupta Sonali (talk • contribs)

help needed to post article on award winning producer-director Nina Rosenblum
I entered an article about Nina Rosenblum, but it must have been removed, even though it was not listed on the deletion list. I had about 10 references including the NY Times at the end of the article. What happened to it? It was original writing about an Oscar nominated, two time IDA award documentary film producer/director Nina Rosenblum, with an esteemed 30 year career as a major player in the documentary community. She is a member of the Academy of Motion Picture Arts and Sciences and has produced with HBO, PBS, BS, Showtime and many other tv stations. Please let me know how best to post the article. Thank you, Dan Allentuck, Daedalustv —Preceding unsigned comment added by Rosenblum Photography Archive (talk • contribs)

Farm Fresh to You
Farm Fresh To You is a subscription Community Supported Agriculture provider of organic produce based in Capay Valley, California. The farm was started in 1976 by two-back-to-the-landers, Martin Barnes and Kathleen Barsotti who were raised in California suburbs.

Inspired by University of California, Davis professor Isao Fujimoto, the farm began as a garden on rented land. The couple helped to start the Davis Certified Farmers' Market and the Davis Food Coop Storefront  before moving with their twin boys to 22 acres in Capay Valley in 1979. The farm was one of the earliest in Yolo County to have organic certification from the California Certified Organic Farmers

Local sales were supplemented by sales to San Francisco Bay area farmers' markets and to wholesalers such as Veritable Vegetables and Greenleaf Produce   Two more sons were born, but in 1990 the couple suffered a marital breakup leaving Kalthleen to manage the business. She founded the Farm Fresh to You subscription CSA in 1992, and it soon became an essential element in the farm's income.

Kathleen died from breast cancer in 2000 leaving her sons to inherit the farm. They expanded the farm, buying and renting land from neighbors, and establishing a retail store, Capay Organic, at the San Francisco Ferry Building.

By 2008 Farm Fresh to You had grown to over 4000 families in Northern California making it one of the largest CSA farms. The boys have kept alive the ideals of their pioneering parents by providing fresh, organically grown food, husbanding the land, and respecting the farm's employees.

EXTERNAL LINKS

Farm Fresh to You 

Fruit Grower News 

Davis Enterprise 

Agriculture Pioneer Award 

UC Small Farm News 


 * Is this an advertisement or a question? If the former, it is not appropriate here.&mdash;RJH (talk) 21:06, 6 May 2008 (UTC)

BahnCard
I've started this article and would like to submit it for assessment on the Railways Wikiproject. Any feedback on how to improve or tweak it is welcome. --<font color="#990066">Cambrasa  <font color="#996666">confab  18:44, 1 May 2008 (UTC)

Land value tax
I and a few other editors have done a lot of general improvement to Land Value Tax, but it failed its Good Article submission because it lacked a NPOV. Since then we've made the changes asked for by the GA reviewer, but I'd like some critical opinions on the current article before resubmitting for GA status. --Explodicle (talk) 13:34, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Ok, I'm not checking this page any more. If anyone ever replies please just post it to Talk:Land value tax. --Explodicle (talk) 14:53, 5 June 2008 (UTC)

Clarice Lispector
I have cleaned up and expanded the article on Clarice Lispector and would appreciate any comments or help with organization. Eve.b.i (talk) 12:00, 7 May 2008 (UTC)

My Uncle Napoleon
I've recently heavily edited this article, however I still think it can be improved but I've ran out of ideas. I would like other people who have a fresh view towards the subject to have a look at the article and tell me how it can be improved. Here is a link to my diff. Many thanks. aryonoco (talk) 10:26, 8 May 2008 (UTC)

Geography Statistics Tables
I have created a set of geography statistics tables in a user subpage User:Bejjinks/ sandbox. I haven't done much filling in the information. At this time, I'm focusing on the layout of the table. I would appreciate any suggestions on how I might improve the layouts. Include program code information if you can since I'm not a techno-geek. Thank you.

Forgot signature. --Bejjinks (talk) 22:00, 11 May 2008 (UTC)


 * It looks to me like it's trying to pack too much information into a single graph. For reducing the information content, you could look at list of African countries as what I think is a good example. And if you were intending for this to be only one graph per country/city/whatever, something like an infobox would be more appropriate (Template:Infobox U.S. state for example). I'm not sure what to tell you if you had something else in mind. Someguy1221 (talk) 23:47, 14 May 2008 (UTC)

Thank you for the list of African countries. That is close to what I'm trying to do. I'm not trying to create an infobox because I want people to be able to compare one region with another without having to look up each region individually. There are only two differences between what I'm trying to do and the list of African countries: I want to focus on geographical information instead of political information and I want to cover regions like the Iberian Peninsula or the Kerguelen Ocean Plateau instead of just countries.

Comments on wikification of Cattus Island Park
I have recently wikified Cattus Island Park, and I'd like to know what I can improve in my wikifying skills. I'd be grateful for any comments. Lunar Jesters (talk) 22:35, 12 May 2008 (UTC)


 * I'm leaving comments on the Discussion page. Although there are some of the usual copyedit changes to be made, after reading over the article for a few minutes, I'm asking myself: What's the goal for the article? What's significant that readers should know about? Cattus Island Park is an environmental center...is that the focus? Does the long history section somehow contribute to the article's focus?


 * Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 08:24, 14 May 2008 (UTC)

Naturally Advanced
I wrote the article which was tagged for being unreferenced and written like an advertisement. I added references and edited some of the copy which could have been seen as promotional. How may I get the advert and unreferenced tags removed? I don't want to just do it myself as that could be seen as a conflict of interest. Thanks, Ajcslr22 (talk) 17:47, 13 May 2008 (UTC)


 * In the opening sentence, you mentioned both "evironmentally friendly" and "cost-effective." Both these terms sound like advertising, and I'd ask if either has been mentioned by independent sources. Although you can always say that the company describes itself as such somewhere in the main body of the article, these are rather subjective terms that should be left to outside sources. Although "cost-effective" seems entirely unecessary - Any action taken by a company that is not losing money is presumably cost-effective. In the History section, "to reflect its new core direction as a developer of technology" also sounds like marketing. Again, a third-party source would be ideal for such a statement, although you could neutralize it by making it, new stated direction. Anyway, all I've stated is quite easy to fix if you're taking the "neutralizing" approach, and otherwise needs only a few reliable sources to back the company's own image of itself. I'll look for RS's right now to see if I can do that. Someguy1221 (talk) 23:31, 14 May 2008 (UTC)

Anglesey's railways
I've been working on the Anglesey Central Railway and Red Wharf Bay branch line pages for a while, and as a relatively inexperienced editor, I'm starting to feel that I'm getting out of my depth.

I'd appreciate feedback from people who aren't railway fans, and that's why this section has just appeared. I'm particularly unsure about my citing of sources. Is there too much? Too little? Is it all just a bit wrong? I'm double-guessing myself so much that I'm no longer getting much work done on the articles. Some guidance should get me back on track (pun may or may not be intentional).

Ansbaradigeidfran (talk) 19:22, 16 May 2008 (UTC)

User:BuffFans/iModerate
I just completed a rework of this article, which was listed in WP:COI and is probably ready for mainspace posting. Please feel free to comment. Tiggerjay (talk) 15:56, 17 May 2008 (UTC)

Bergen, New Netherland
This article gives an overview of the area of northeastern New Jersey that was originally settled by New NetherlandersDjflem (talk) 08:47, 18 May 2008 (UTC)


 * It looks good; the one change I'd make is to take out the forced-large-size images. For some of them such as the maps, the forced width is necessary to make them legible, but for the photos it's disruptive to have them at anything other than thumbnail size - not only does it force the section breaks to jump around, but for users with small monitors it makes the article look very disjointed. (See MOS.) Other than that it looks fine to me.<font face="Trebuchet MS"> — <font color="#E45E05">iride <font color="#C1118C">scent  16:37, 20 May 2008 (UTC)

How to provide citations for an article?
Hi,

An article is created on wikipedia with the name MSPL. At the top of the page it says that: This article or section includes a list of references or external links, but its sources remain unclear because it lacks in-text citations. You can improve this article by introducing more precise citations.

I am not able to understand with the word citation. Does it mean that we need to give some references which clears that the data given in this article is valid.

Appreciate your early response and help in regards to the same.

Thanks, Ketan Vaidya Mspleditor (talk) 09:49, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Please see WP:YFA for some additional information on creating articles. It is a good idea to provide reliable and verifiable sources which helps illustrate that the information you provided is not original research. For how to actually cite your material, please see wp:cite. Tiggerjay (talk) 15:02, 19 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Ketan - I'll stop by the MSPL page and add in a couple of in-text citations (if I can see appropriate places) so you see what it means. it's not too difficult.  I'll leave a note on its talk page. --Ludwigs2 (talk) 21:44, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
 * whoops, looks like it's already taken care of. :-)--Ludwigs2 (talk) 21:48, 21 May 2008 (UTC)

Stone Gossard
Myself and a couple of others have significantly expanded this article over the last 2 years. As a fairly inexperienced wikipedia editor, I feel that some sort of external review on the progress of the article is needed in order to ensure that the necessary changes are made to move it towards being a good article.

Thanks Kristmace (talk) 13:47, 19 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Upon a quick review it looks good. Tiggerjay (talk) 14:58, 19 May 2008 (UTC)

FBI Name Check
My first attempt to write a new article from scratch. I'd like feedback on the general features, such as overall length, structure, balance, NPOV, etc. If there are specific technical remarks, I'd like to hear about them too. Also, is there some natural wikiproject that this article might fit in to? Thanks, Nsk92 (talk) 22:31, 20 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Looks okay on the surface. Tiggerjay (talk) 03:39, 21 May 2008 (UTC)

Seventh-day Adventist Kinship International
I would like to know if this page created on my "user page" will meet the notability requirements, and whether there are any glaring mistakes I need to correct before trying to publish it. Carrol Grady (talk) 05:48, 21 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Based on a quick glance through, I think you may need to be careful about maintaining neutrality. Please see Neutral point of view.&mdash;RJH (talk) 21:47, 22 May 2008 (UTC)

Dakota Blue Richards
I first edited this article back in December 2007 and expanded it quite a bit (diff). Between then and my most recent edit (diff) the article has had quite a large number of minor edits mostly done by other users but has changed little overall (diff between the two edits above). I've not really worked on an article to this depth before, so I'd really appreciate some advice about what to do next: what to expand, what to cut out, any sections that are missing, etc. I don't really know how I can take it forward. The article hasn't been rated since I edited it so I don't even have any idea about which class it currently is. -- KittyRainbow (talk) 00:13, 23 May 2008 (UTC)

Collaboration graph
My second attempt to write an article from scratch. I'd appreciate feedback on style, clarity and English (my native language is Russian) and anything else that comes to mind. Thanks, Nsk92 (talk) 02:57, 24 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Your English is quite good! No problem there. It is clear what you are writing about. (A simple graphic illustration as in the Hypergraph article would be useful.) You've got more than a sufficient number of references. I am struggling with the examples. I had to look at Six Degrees of Kevin Bacon to puzzle out whether that was added (by Bradv) as vandalism! (It wasn't, but it still seems more like a party game without specific logical foundation than a method for statistical analysis.) The article takes something of an abrupt shift when it moves from "over-explaining" simple concepts to "under-explaining" much more sophisticated concepts in the last section "Generalizations of the collaboration graph". Some effort might be made to work definitions of hypergraph and multigraph into the article, itself, to explain why and how they are cogent (those articles are written in quite a different style that might not be accessible to a reader of this article). The terms "hyperedge" and "weighted collaboration graph" are left unexplained. Hope some of this is useful as you expand on this! Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 20:00, 24 July 2008 (UTC)

wolf-dog hybrid
There actually has been a lot of info regarding rabies vaccination of wolves and wolfdogs which was, in fact, approved by the USDA (see the wolfdogalliance.org pages on this). I am sure that NWA would LOVE to have this information exposed via Wiki, so more people are aware of the fact that vaccines have been approved.

There seem to be repeated efforts, however,by the USDA, to go backwards (and against their own rules, policies, and guidlines, and claim that there is no evidence that any vaccine works on these animals- which counters their position that there is.

I recently was told by an Animal Control officer locally that the 'new'federal policy, should a wolfdog bite, is to immediately euthanize the animal because, supposedly, there is no evidence that the rabies vaccine works- this, again, is in direct conflict with their ruling that the vaccines have, in fact, been approved for wolfdogs, and wolves. The public needs to be aware of this sticky situation.

Also, to claim anything as a hybrid, it, scientifically speaking, would not have the ability to breed. Wolfdogs certainly can, and do, breed!So please drop the 'hybrid'- they are merely referred to as wolfdogs.
 * Have you tried mentioning this on the article's talk page?&mdash;67.160.10.246 (talk)

ALSO- you could make it a LOT easier for someone to get info to you!- It is SO confusing to people who have never done this! Why not just furnish a contact button that emails you with info? There are a lot of people who have specific knowledge about many subjects, but you make navigating your site difficult for people who have never done this- half the terms used are confusing, and people are not going to spend hours learning about them, just to make an edit to a page. Contrary to popular myth, not everyone is 'computer' savvy. And just because they aren't does not mean that they do not have valuable knowledge to share. —Preceding unsigned comment added by 4.228.183.86 (talk • contribs)
 * It's perhaps best to start with the Help section in the "Interaction" at upper left. Wikipedia does have a bit of a learning curve, so it's sometimes best to start slow and pick things up as you go.&mdash;67.160.10.246 (talk)

Kaiserin-Friedrich-Gymnasium, Humboldtschule (Bad Homburg)
Hello! Yesterday I have written this two articles. Because my English is not so good, I request some of you for correct everything there. Thanks. — Despairing, 23:58, 28 May 2008 (UTC)


 * Despairing, I've made a few simple changes in the Kaiserin-Friedrich-Gymnasium article for you, and explained the reasoning in Discussion. These are small changes, the article is reasonable, even without the changes. Regards, Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 20:34, 24 July 2008 (UTC)

Gymnasium der Stadt Kerpen
I have also written this article now. I hope that someone will correct it. Thanks. — Despairing, 14:31, 29 May 2008 (UTC)

Abitur after twelve years
Please correct this new article. Thanks for correcting. — Despairing, 19:25, 29 May 2008 (UTC)

SF Freedom School article
I have a draft submission on my user page. Can I get some feedback on it and then an explanation of how to submit for acceptance?

thanks,

kathy


 * I'm leaving comments for you on the Mke4think Discussion page.


 * Alpha Ralpha Boulevard (talk) 13:37, 31 May 2008 (UTC)

United Nations
Resolved. The article needs a correction. It states that plans for the UN were developed during a 1944 meeting at the Dumbarton Oaks estate in Washington, DC, which brought together representatives of the US, Soviet Union, China, Britain, and France. I am a docent at Dumbarton Oaks and thus quite familiar with this episode of its history. France did not play any role in this meeting, had no representatives present, and should be deleted from the list of participants. Best regards,

Marc E. Nicholson —Preceding unsigned comment added by 138.88.248.196 (talk) 15:22, 2008 May 31
 * Corrected, thanks for pointing that out. In the future you can just correct inaccuracies like that yourself by clicking the edit button at the top of the UN page or even in the individual section. -Optigan13 (talk) 01:59, 1 June 2008 (UTC)