Wikipedia:WikiProject Architecture/Peer review/Japanese castle

Japanese castle
I have just finished a significant expansion and renovation of this article which I created in May 2005. I would really like to be able to hold this up as an example of my best work, since it is (a) largely my own work, with, for the most part only images and some minor stylistic/grammatical changes made by other editors, (b) a broad, important, and central topic, (c) one that is particularly non-esoteric and of general interest. Any suggestions anyone can make to improving this article would be most appreciated.

I've tried not to go overboard on detail, as it really doesn't need to describe every single important development in architecture, nor every military tactical/strategic/technological advancement - it's meant to be a thorough overview, and further details can be explained in separate articles (e.g. I may be creating at some point in the near future separate articles on different styles of Japanese roofing).


 * 1) Are there sentences that are awkward or hard to understand?
 * 2) Are there points that are superfluous or redundant?
 * 3) Points that are missing?
 * 4) How does the thing flow overall? - this is a problem I always have trouble with in my actual academic papers: paragraphs that don't flow nicely into one another thematically.

Thanks, all. LordAmeth 11:08, 12 February 2007 (UTC)


 * Automatic review - some pointers for compliance with WP:MOS and other policies - I'll comment on the content later. --Mcginnly | Natter 11:13, 12 February 2007 (UTC)

The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question. You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, Mcginnly | Natter 11:13, 12 February 2007 (UTC)
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