Wikipedia:WikiProject Architecture/Peer review/Toma T. Socolescu

Toma T. Socolescu
I have written the English version of this article.

I am the author of the French version.

However, my level of English is not as good as it should for this kind of publication. I there need help to improve the level of English of the text.

Thank you! --Cbrajon (talk) 10:47, 14 December 2009 (UTC)


 * I've read through the article, it's obviously well researched. I'm happy to do a copy edit in order to improve the English. However, I do have some comments that may help you improve it prior to me doing that:


 * 1) The LEAD section at the beginning of the article should be able to act as a summary of the important aspects and should be able to stand alone as a concise overview. In this case you could write a few short paragraphs.
 * 2) There are couple of unreferenced paragraphs at the beginning of the article. Certainly I think that the sentence in the Biography stating he is still considered should have a reference.
 * 3) consider changing the sections with bullet points into plain paragraphs as the text will be easier to read. Refer to the Manual of Style for help MOS
 * 4) improve the wikilinks: there is no need to link a word several times in a section, for example, Ploieşti.
 * 5) Non-English sources: in the legacy section the quotation extract written in French is maybe not helpful to English language readers, it could be that you provide a translation in the footnotes if you think that it is important. There is some guidance at Non English Sources
 * 6) external links: try and reduce the number of external links, especially those that point to sites that English readers can't understand.


 * Kenchikuben (talk) 16:01, 7 April 2010 (UTC)