Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Help desk/Archives/2014 June 23

= June 23 =

09:14:08, 23 June 2014 review of submission by Sean.holbrook
I am writing on behalf of the management of Jesse Rose. I would like to know why the article got declined and get some feedback how I can get this article approved.

Sean.holbrook (talk) 09:14, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
 * I declined your draft and I left a very clear comment on that submission. To restate: "The two possibly reliable sources are each questionable. The mention in The Guardian isn't the paper itself, but the blog section, and it only mentions the subject once. I'm not sure how much weight to give Mixmag. The subject certainly doesn't meet our notability criteria for musicians." Also, since you admit having a conflict of interest please be careful in your editing of this draft. Chris Troutman  ( talk ) 09:26, 23 June 2014 (UTC)


 * I am not actually working for the company itself, it is more like a learning project I took on me. Is this still a conflict of interest? I tried to write it as neutral as possible and link everything to a source. I just saw your comment, thank you. this is my first project and it is still a bit confusing! I see why maybe the guardian is not a reliable source. I will look for a better source.

Sean.holbrook (talk) 10:40, 23 June 2014 (UTC)


 * Sean.holbrook On a related note, if a source title is "Jesse Rose", it's likely a profile — a piece of writing which Jose likely participated in writing, and nobody reviewed — of Jose on a site he's affiliated with in some way. Please try to look for books, publications, and news sources instead, as they canbe relied on to verify the facts you're writing about. I will leave more detailed comments on the article in a few hours. Gryllida (talk) 23:55, 29 June 2014 (UTC)


 * Sean.holbrook Comments added inside of the article. Please take a look and feel free to remove them as you resolve them. The first paragraph is difficult: I see trouble, myself, with describing the article subject essence in a few words. Gryllida (talk) 09:40, 30 June 2014 (UTC)


 * Thank you so much for helping me! I'll take a look at it and try to rephrase it in a more neutral way maybe? Sean.holbrook (talk) 13:26, 8 July 2014 (UTC)


 * : I changed it, can you maybe take a look if it is better? Sean.holbrook (talk) 16:53, 8 July 2014 (UTC)
 * I'm still not sure and I won't be reviewing this draft again. Your reliable sources are DJMag and Mixmag to a large degree. Some of those links are dead. Coverage in other articles is minimal. I haven't seen a clear consensus about AllMusic as a reliable source, either. Another editor might accept this draft based on these sources. I would recommend that you cut all the other so-called citations and their text to make the issue clearer. This article engages in a lot of name-dropping, which is typical for drafts about musicians. I'd remove all that, too. Chris Troutman  ( talk ) 18:28, 8 July 2014 (UTC)

10:15:12, 23 June 2014 review of submission by Temi Adebayo
I don't know what exactly is wrong with my article and what I should be correcting. I need some guidance on how to improve my article. Thank you

Temi Adebayo 10:15, 23 June 2014 (UTC)


 * I agree, We should have been more helpful. I have added a message to the draft article which will, I hope, be clearer for you. Please do come back here and ask again once you have read it if I was not clear enough. We try our best, and sometimes our best is not good enough. Fiddle   Faddle  13:15, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

13:20:04, 23 June 2014 review of submission by Yiblilah
i would like to create an article but always declined.

Yiblilah (talk) 13:20, 23 June 2014 (UTC)


 * The trick is to do more work. The article consists of a single sentence, pretty much and no references. Before you submit it (it will be declined again in this state) please read User:Timtrent/A good article and look for references which are about them, and independent of them, and in WP:RS. Construct your article around what the sources say, not what you hope the article should say. Wrote more than the bare bones and, if the gentleman is notable, the article will be accepted once it is ion the right state. You may also find WP:Mentoring a useful concept, to help you to get started well. Fiddle   Faddle  13:42, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

13:41:06, 23 June 2014 review of submission by QueenofKorea
I received a reference bot message which led me to try to remove this article from the sandbox and also try to move it but it was not allowed because I don't have autoconfirmed status yet. How do I get this article ref check completed and on wiki? QueenofKorea (talk) 13:41, 23 June 2014 (UTC)


 * The article is now in the Draft: namespace, and I have left a comment on it, and edited the references. I have not reviewed the article because work is to be done before it can be accepted. While awaiting the review please continue to improve the article, notably in the area of referencing Fiddle   Faddle  13:59, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

14:19:21, 23 June 2014 review of submission by Kortárs Galambocska
I request a re-review, as I have been working on my references. I added all the materials that I have used to create my article. I hope it can be published now. :)

Kortárs Galambocska (talk) 14:19, 23 June 2014 (UTC)


 * You have requested it by resubmitting the draft. Please await the reviewer's time. Asking here is not effective in hastening a review Fiddle   Faddle  22:52, 27 June 2014 (UTC)

14:31:12, 23 June 2014 review of submission by LEBOLTZMANN2
Fiddle Faddle recommended I ask for a review of Evolution, entropy and the second law of thermodynamics at the help desk. Do you have any recommendations to help me meet your standards. LEBOLTZMANN2 (talk) 14:31, 23 June 2014 (UTC) LEBOLTZMANN2 (talk) 14:31, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

14:34:30, 23 June 2014 review of submission by PropelaCL
PropelaCL (talk) 14:34, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

I submitted a page on the 19th June (Nahji Chu) but it was rejected due to lack of citations however I've used over 30 and I've seen other articles on wiki with substantially less references. Can someone help highlight the copy that needs referencing?


 * Please LINK to it. Fiddle   Faddle  22:55, 27 June 2014 (UTC)

14:51:40, 23 June 2014 request for review by APBres
Draft:Vizergy --> Edits have been made, please advise if this is ready for posting APBres (talk) 14:51, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

''' Viz•er•gy

/‘viz er gee/

Noun'''

An engineered word from the combination of Vision + Energy = Vizergy, the word has its roots from “vizier” trusted advisor to the kings. Vizergy specializes in offering hoteliers and property managers with online marketing.

 -The History- 

Vizergy was originally founded in 1998 as SECURE-RES in order to offer an online reservation tool for hotels’ websites. This technology was not readily available, or affordable, for most hotels. SECURE-RES is a license-based tool that provides online booking.

Along with the growth of services and product offerings, SECURE-RES was rebranded as Vizergy in 2006 and now offers new product offerings in addition to the original online booking platform. In 1998, Joe Hyman, founder, president, and CEO of Vizergy, began this Jacksonville, Florida based company. Mr. Hyman’s background is in sales, marketing, and management, and he has been recognized as one of HSMAI's (Hospitality Sales & Marketing Association International) Top 25 Most Extraordinary Minds in Sales and Marketing. He has led Vizergy to Northeast Florida's 50 Fastest Growing Private Companies 4 times and most recently Inc. 500/5000 Fastest Growing Companies in America for 2 consecutive years.

 -Products & Services- 

Vizergy focuses on Internet marketing strategies & deployment, website design, and reservation services that are exclusively focused on the hospitality industry. Online marketing services include search engine optimization, pay-per-click and display advertising, local marketing, website and mobile website design and development, reservation software and advanced analytics. SECURE-RES is the first booking engine to feature social media functions that allow direct links to be shared on Facebook and Twitter. Vizergy also employs a team of designers, content strategists, writers, and search engine optimization (SEO) professionals that work collaboratively to create effective, SEO-friendly hotel websites.

 -Resources- 

http://www.vizergy.com

http://blog.vizergy.com/first-social-booking-engine-produces-double-conversions/2010/09/29

http://www.hospitalitynet.org/news/4058720.html

http://www.interactivemediaawards.com/default.asp

http://www.inc.com/profile/vizergy

http://www.adrianawards.com/

http://jacksonville.com/opinion/blog/472000/kevin-turner/2011-09-12/jacksonville-based-vizergy-makes-inc-fastest-growing


 * No, it's not. Your submission has no independent and reliable sources. To oversimplify, unless the subject has been discussed in The New York Times, it's not notable and doesn't belong in Wikipedia. Not everything and everyone is notable.  Chris Troutman  ( talk ) 06:31, 24 June 2014 (UTC)

15:09:28, 23 June 2014 review of draft by 64.229.150.17
I am trying to submit a page creation and there was a message received the content is duplicated on another page. However that page is using the original content of a version of this page when it was formerly created. We have made changes to language and content, but I am inquiring as to whether this will disallow the page from being created on Wikipedia?

64.229.150.17 (talk) 15:09, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

17:08:46, 23 June 2014 review of submission by BBPMB
BBPMB (talk) 17:08, 23 June 2014 (UTC)

This is a new article about the Tarkett company, which I have written based on a previous article, which was eventually deleted as nobody seemed to be interested to help editing it. I have tried to incorporate changes I felt sensitive to meet Wikipedia's rules. In order to move from here I will need someone to give me some tangible advise in order to be able to rework my contribution. Could someone please provide this constructive critique? Many thanks in advance, BBPMB (talk) 17:08, 23 June 2014 (UTC)
 * Your submission has no independent and reliable sources. (See WP:42 and WP:RS.) Do you need an explanation about those guidelines? Realistically, you need to cut this submission into just maybe four sentences, based on sources like this book, this issue of Popular Science, and this article on Bloomberg. Your current "sources" and content will never be accepted. Chris Troutman  ( talk ) 22:34, 25 June 2014 (UTC)

19:50:18, 23 June 2014 review of submission by Haimbs
Haimbs (talk) 19:50, 23 June 2014 (UTC) Haimbs (talk) 19:50, 23 June 2014 (UTC) I would like to thank you for reviewing my draft. It is the second time that I am trying to update Wiki so I am a beat green. During the build of "celtro communication" draft I searched the web for references for every entry that I wrote and also find many which are independent web sites like newspapers... In addition, I've looked in the Wikipedia for other companies to get ideas and to learn the way it should be done. In my writing I tried to stick to the facts from my research in the web and also to keep the beginning and the end to a minimum so that it will not appear as an advertisement. From looking at other companies articles in Wikipedia i can point my draft as an humble version. Declining this article is not so fair and it should be reconsidered. Thank you very much for your time and patient. Haimbs (talk) 19:54, 23 June 2014 (UTC)