Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Help desk/Archives/2015 November 22

= November 22 =

Request on 06:40:33, 22 November 2015 for assistance on AfC submission by Edit888
I have read and I believe followed the guidelines for submission but I am not sure how to edit. I looked at dozens of other Hotel entries and tried to stayed brief and on point. Are the sources the issue or is it language? Is it possible to request an entry example that fits the requirements so that I can see where my error lies?Edit888 (talk) 06:40, 22 November 2015 (UTC)

Edit888 (talk) 06:40, 22 November 2015 (UTC)
 * It's difficult to write a very good hotel article. I could only find one, Trump International Hotel and Tower (Chicago). Wikipedia is forever a work in progress. It contains high quality content and low quality content. If you model your draft on other articles, be sure to use the best Wikipedia has.


 * Dump Luxury Travel Magazine and Pinterest as references. Poor references detract from the good references and hurt the draft's chances.


 * Language is not the only way in which a submission can be promotional. Structure and editorial decisions about what to include and exclude are also a factor. Axe the optional "see also" section, which in its current state is promotional. There's no reasonable reason to suppose that most readers, after reading an article on Park Hyatt Sanya Sunny Bay Resort, would wish to read articles on seven other Park Hyatt properties, and only those articles. It's okay to mention that it's the 35th Park Hyatt, but why did you choose to omit the fact that it's also the ~35th top five-star hotel in Sanya (South China Morning Post, 2015)?


 * Try to satisfy the broadest cross section of readers possible. The draft relies heavily on newspaper and magazine travel sections as sources. That provides information for travelers, but also consider readers interested in its architecture, or construction, or impact on local residents. Worldbruce (talk) 15:33, 22 November 2015 (UTC)