Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Help desk/Archives/2015 October 21

= October 21 =

13:57:27, 21 October 2015 review of submission by LMJones81
Hi

I received the following advice on my declined article and wanted to ask if someone could help me to write this in an acceptable way?

This submission does not appear to be written in the formal tone expected of an encyclopedia article. Entries should be written from a neutral point of view, and should refer to a range of independent, reliable, published sources. Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms that promote the subject.

Much appreciated!

The Draft article was for Centre for Justice.

LMJones81 (talk) 13:57, 21 October 2015 (UTC)
 * You don't seem to have left a message, did you write it within the template accidentally? -- Kethrus &#124;talk to me 14:06, 21 October 2015 (UTC)


 * I have tidied this message up to show the right article and the question now attributed to.
 * It is unlikely, though possible, that someone else will pick this up. Far better would be that you continue to revise it in line with our needs, assuming it to be notable in the first place. Fiddle   Faddle  16:27, 21 October 2015 (UTC)

16:44:45, 21 October 2015 review of submission by West32
I've added sources and additional content to the article that address the reviewers original objections. West32 (talk) 16:44, 21 October 2015 (UTC)


 * Yes, the Draft is now awaiting review and will be reviewed when a reviewer gets to it. Arthur goes shopping (talk) 10:47, 22 October 2015 (UTC)