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= April 5 =

10:10:47, 5 April 2016 review of submission by WataniyaProject
Please I'm a new to writing pages on Wikipedia hence, I do not know clearly why my page declined the page is about a notable cleric in Kumasi , Ghana. This is the very first time something of this sort is put up online. Please kindly allow me it to appear. Thanks. Counting on your consideration.


 * Hello WataniyaProject. This draft needs a lot of work before it can be accepted. One problem here is that you have transliterated this person's name in so many different ways and the referencing is so poor, that the reader has no way knowing who you are referring to or to verify the basic facts about his life. Is the person you call Sheikh Ahmed Babal-Waiz the same person as Shaykh Baba Al Waiz, "founder of Wataniya Islamic School, Aboabo, Kumasi" as described in this source? Is he the same person as Baba al- Wahiz, "a leading Tijani scholar", talked about in Political Islam from Muhammad to Ahmadinejad? You need to have published sources as inline citations in the draft which entirely back up his biography and demonstrate his notability. You've put a picture of the cover of Arabic Literature of Africa, Volume 4: The Writings of Western Sudanic Africa by John Hunwick with the caption "Biography of Sheikh Ahmed Babal-Waiz written by others". Instead you need to add this as a reference, with bibliographic details fully written out and the exact page numbers where he discusses this person. You need to remove all the Arabic text from your draft, all quotations from his writing, and all the unreferenced interpretations and evaluations of his work. Ditto, your personal reactions to his life and work. Do not write in the first person. Make the article brief, concise, neutrally worded, entirely in English, and referenced to only what published sources say about him For example, this is one of the many examples of inappropriate tone and unencyclopedic writing style in the draft:
 * Amazingly, the historic narrative of Sheikh BabalWaiz is so huge that we could only state what we could. We hope Allah makes it easy for us to achieve this laudable and lofty objective. It is my wish to analyze the meaning of his names and alqaab [alias/code-names]. And I observe that the full name of our Sheikh signifies his noble position, exceptional dedication and commitment in the course of service to Islam and Muslims, as well as his propagation of this religion, since his infancy in Kumasi.
 * I hope this helps. Voceditenore (talk) 16:08, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

Request on 14:16:03, 5 April 2016 for assistance on AfC submission by Lynedia Sirieda Mathews
Lynedia Sirieda Mathews 14:16, 5 April 2016 (UTC) I'm an doctor


 * Answered below Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 18:17, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

16:36:43, 5 April 2016 review of submission by Edelmoral
I have attempted to submit this article for second time because it have been declined the first time, apparently the article was submitted before by another user(s) and has been declined too. I did a lot of fixes to make a neutral article, adding reliable secondary sources, paying attention to the golden rule and stick it to the Notability (organizations and companies).

The last reviewer tells me: "Still needs any further available amount of in-depth third-party news sources overall". I tried to reach the reviewer in order to discover the specific fails ofthe article...with no answer. Therefore I reviewed all the sources, removed some of them and added some others of better quality.

Now, I'm afraid of get a similar results of the current review without knowing exactly where the problems are, If I'm didn't fixed all of them. Edelmoral (talk) 16:36, 5 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Hello, Edelmoral. I haven't gone through all the references, but the vast majority of them appear to be press releases or essentially reprints of them. Several more are simply company profiles. These do not attest to notability. It's actually better to have fewer but high quality references, i.e. in-depth articles about the company in major newspapers or something like the The Economist or The Financial Times, not trade publications or business websites that essentially reprint press-releases. For example, you don't need four company profile "references" simply to verify when it was founded and by whom, and none of them attest to its notability, only its existence. There is virtually no company history in the draft. Why? It was founded in 2010. When did it start trading? They aren't the same thing. Also, leave out the "Clients" section. It is purely promotional. Leave out the dubious "Honors" section, ditto. These "Best place to work" awards are essentially meaningless. Ditto Glassdoor reviews. Honors sections are for truly prestigious awards like the Queen's Awards for Enterprise. A six-year-old private company has an uphill battle to get acceptance now. Wikipedia has been and continues to be literally flooded with paid advertorials and the standards for companies are rightly being tightened up. A brief, concise article on the company's history and what it does, referenced to several high quality sources has a much higher chance of acceptance than a promotionally padded article referenced to dozens of press releases. Voceditenore (talk) 17:57, 5 April 2016 (UTC)


 * Thanks for your deep explanation Voceditenore!, there's substance in it and I will take your recommendations. Edelmoral (talk) 22:32, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

17:39:22, 5 April 2016 review of submission by TarynAdams
My question is about this page that I created: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Airbiquity

It was rejected for this reason: "This needs to focus with the best available amount of in-depth third-party news sources and not press releases and trivial passing mentions."

But I'm confused as there is only one press release and we are in the title of the majority of the articles so I don't understand how they can say "trivial passing mentions"

18:05:05, 5 April 2016 review of submission by Lynedia Sirieda Mathews
Lynedia Sirieda Mathews 18:05, 5 April 2016 (UTC) Plessis I'm wondering why my article  is not made


 * Hi User:Lynedia Sirieda Mathews, your draft autobiography currently consists of only your name, you need to finish writing the article before we can review it. Roger (Dodger67) (talk) 18:10, 5 April 2016 (UTC)

21:04:48, 5 April 2016 review of draft by Wdjones8585
I want to create a new page for the company iPass. There is a dead link about this company, but the link goes to IPass. How do I create the page for iPass?

Wdjones8585 (talk) 21:04, 5 April 2016 (UTC)