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= September 12 =

06:53:43, 12 September 2016 review of submission by 212.50.99.23
212.50.99.23 (talk) 06:53, 12 September 2016 (UTC) Dear Sirs

Please advise why our article was decline, it was FXPRIMUS

Thank you
 * Draft:FXPRIMUS was declined because it read like something written by the company to promote itself rather than like an encyclopedia article written by a dispassionate observer. Even if that were fixed, it would be declined because no arms-length, reliable, secondary sources are cited. It may be unrealistic of you to expect a company barely 18-months old to have had the significant and demonstrable effects that would justify its inclusion here. Based on the cited sources, the subject does not appear to be a suitable topic for a stand alone encyclopedia article. Wikipedia is not for advertising, marketing, or public relations. --Worldbruce (talk) 14:18, 12 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Also, the article appears to be duplicated several times, probably by editing accident. Robert McClenon (talk) 06:07, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

Request on 12:22:05, 12 September 2016 for assistance on AfC submission by Lecobe
Hello, I am working on this: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Christian_Kerez I would like to know, if there's still information missing and what I have to ad. On the same person, there are existing articles on wiki in german and french and a lot of articles in the web. Could you please help me ? Thank you ! Lecobe (talk) 12:22, 12 September 2016 (UTC)

Lecobe (talk) 12:22, 12 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Hi . The section titled "Bibliography (Selection)" is confusing because the word "bibliography" is ambiguous. It the section meant to be a selection of publications Kerez has authored/edited/contributed to? Are these sources for the content of the draft? Are they "further reading", publications not already used as sources that would help the reader gain a fuller understanding of the topic? See MOS:APPENDIX. --Worldbruce (talk) 15:13, 12 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Hi . Thanks! You are right. I moved it below the reflist, this is where it should be. These are the books that helped me for the text and the information given in the article. Do you see other things to change or ad ? Lecobe (talk) 15:49, 12 September 2016 (UTC)


 * That clarification is very helpful. I urge you to take it a step further and identify with inline citations which pages of which bibliography entries support which lines in the draft. If the draft is declined as a biography of a living person with inadequate inline citations, you can try to argue that the uncited information isn't contentious and is not likely to be challenged, but it's generally easier and more productive to simply provide citations.


 * Put yourself in the position of people trying to verify something in the draft. Should they have to pore through more than 1000 pages in 6 different books to find the original source of information, when you (who, as the article's author, should know) could tell them now that it's on page 88 of book such-and-such? You've shown that you can do inline citations; it doesn't take much effort to learn the tricks for easily and compactly citing the same source more than once. If ten years from now you try to update the article, after another 50 editors have made 100 changes, you'll thank yourself for having cited everything.


 * Readers are likely to wonder what the selection criteria are for the lists, so if you've made a definite editorial decision (e.g. "projects over $5 million" or "awards from notable organizations"), then state the criteria in the introduction to the list. --Worldbruce (talk) 18:47, 13 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Hi . Thank you for your answer (and moving the reflist to the right place). If the text on Kerez’ biography would be longer, I would agree to ad the necessary citations. But I don’t find it very helpful to do so with the lists on works/ projects, awards and exhibitions.


 * I looked through quite a few wikipedia biographies on living architects where very little have citations in those lists. I added a few useful links but the problem with those you must know very well.


 * I’d love to leave it as it is. Do you see imperfection which should be corrected before the next submission ? Lecobe (talk) 10:00, 15 September 2016 (UTC)

12:50:34, 12 September 2016 review of submission by 24.178.16.54
Can you tell me how I can improve the references and make the subject more notable. I read the info for references but am still not sure what I need to do.

24.178.16.54 (talk) 12:50, 12 September 2016 (UTC)

13:16:31, 12 September 2016 review of submission by AbbotsMoss
I re-submitted the Article with references attached. Please advise whether it now meets the necessary requirements.AbbotsMoss (talk) 13:16, 12 September 2016 (UTC) AbbotsMoss (talk) 13:16, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
 * First, you don't need to include postnominal letters such as CBE and DL in the title of the article, and you don't need to disambiguate him unless there is another Bill Holroyd. Second, you appear to have duplicated the article by accident.  Robert McClenon (talk) 06:10, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

15:02:53, 12 September 2016 review of submission by Norman777111
I (Norman777111) have created the page "Gala Wilton F.C." successfully, and it has been live for a few months.

I was just about to make some updates when I have now seen that it has been deleted without any notification why.

Do you know how I can chase this up?

The page was as follows:

Gala Wilton F.C. are an English football club based in Longford in Gloucestershire, currently playing in the Gloucestershire County Football League. The club is affiliated to the Gloucestershire County FA.

History
Gala Wilton was formed in 1952 when a group of friends from the Wilton Road area of Gloucester City created a side known as 'Wilton Rovers'. Initially they played their football in the North Gloucestershire League gaining limited success winning the FJ Pope Cup in 1956-57 and Division 1 in 1959-60.

In 1970 the club moved to their present home at the Gala Club in Longford and in 1971 were elected to the Gloucestershire Northern Senior League winning Division 2 in the first year. In 1972, they were again promoted into the Gloucestershire County Football League where they played for 12 seasons before relegation down to the Gloucestershire Northern Senior League.

Gala Wilton were promoted back to the Gloucestershire County Football League in the 2012 season under the leadership of manager Jay Kelly, also winning the Reg Davis cup for the second consecutive season. Jay stood down in 2014 after getting promotion leading to a frantic search for a new manager.

Gala Wilton have now been given approval for floodlights and a spectator area from Gloucester City Council planning.

In March 2015, the Gala Wilton Veterans lost 2-1 to the Aston Villa Old Stars in a charity match to support the Hollie Gazzard trust.

Gala Wilton Reserves are currently top of Cheltenham League Division One.

Record
Gala Wilton have the following record in the Gloucestershire County Football League:

Teams
The club runs the following teams:
 * 1st Team, managed by Jay Kelly Gloucestershire County Football League
 * 2nd Team, managed by Mike Perris
 * 3rd Team, managed by Dave Parry and Culley
 * 4th Team, managed by Paul Hanley and Dean Brooks
 * Veterans, managed by Colin Gittins
 * U15 Team, managed by Liam Tandy
 * U12 Team, managed by Rich Davis and Matt Stevens

Committee
The club is managed by a Committee comprising the Team Managers, the Chairman, Jesse Smith, the Secretary, Terry Onions and Programme Editor, Paul Bowers.

Directions
From Bristol, Leave Junction 11 of M5 and turn towards Gloucester at next roundabout turn towards Ross on Wye and at next roundabout turn left towards city centre. Then take second left, after about 350 yards, into Fairmile Gardens where Gala Wilton’s ground can be found.

17:01:29, 12 September 2016 review of submission by L00k1ngu9
Good morning, I would like to know if I can create the article I have already submitted to AfC directly in the public space of Wikipedia. I do not want the article to be flagged as spam, but I also do not want to wait months for the article to become available to my community. I understand the article will still be subject to review and correction. Thank you!

L00k1ngu9 (talk) 17:01, 12 September 2016 (UTC)


 * Draft has been accepted. Joe Roe (talk) 11:22, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

18:57:07, 12 September 2016 review of submission by Actor Dharmendra Singh
Dharmendra Singh 18:57, 12 September 2016 (UTC)

Kindly tell me the reason why my post has been declined? What should I do for making it live. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Actor Dharmendra Singh (talk • contribs) 18:57, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
 * Read the autobiography guideline. Wikipedia strongly discourages the submission of autobiographies.  Robert McClenon (talk) 06:14, 13 September 2016 (UTC)
 * You haven't submitted your draft for review. Robert McClenon (talk) 06:15, 13 September 2016 (UTC)

21:17:38, 12 September 2016 review of submission by Tinsel Edwards
Hello, I have just created the article and moved it into the submission area - but I'm not sure if my reference links and list are correct.

I added links to other Wikipedia pages throughout the article, and also some external links to other website etc. There are 7 or so external links throughout the article, however are these meant to link up to the list of references at the bottom? They don't at the moment! The list of references are general, other online articles, should these actually be referenced in the main body text?

Many thanks

Tinsel Edwards (talk) 21:17, 12 September 2016 (UTC)
 * This is the only edit that you have made from this account. Did you create a draft using an IP address?  Robert McClenon (talk) 06:16, 13 September 2016 (UTC)