Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Help desk/Archives/2018 February 19

= February 19 =

16:20:37, 19 February 2018 review of submission by RC1996
Hello! I am writing my first page on Wikipedia and it has been rejected twice for appearing to read more like an advertisement. I have edited the text again and was hoping to get your advice whether you think it would pass (and get published) this time, or if there are more edits to make. If so, are their any parts in particular that should be changed? Thank you in advance for your help!

RC1996 (talk) 16:20, 19 February 2018 (UTC)

21:34:56, 19 February 2018 review of submission by Martyn GT
I was not intending this article to read like a tribute. I would like to try and convert it to read more like an article that would be acceptable. Can you make any suggestions? Martyn GT (talk) 21:34, 19 February 2018 (UTC)
 * - As the reviewer that declined, am replying on my Talkpage, where the author also asked for feedback. KJP1 (talk) 21:48, 19 February 2018 (UTC)