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= April 27 =

02:02:11, 27 April 2020 review of submission by Varunrajwiki
I have been asked to resubmit the article by making the following suggestions. "Please rewrite your submission in a more encyclopedic format. Please make sure to avoid peacock terms that promote the subject."

Could i understand a little more about what it means. I have also included a variety of independent government and media sources substantiating the content. I really appreciate your assistance on this

Varunrajwiki (talk) 02:02, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , Wikipedia is not for promoting its subjects. Our articles must be written in a formal tone and from a neutral point of view. Your article unnecessarily promotes the subject, puffing up his achievements like, well, a peacock strutting to show off. That may not have been intentional, its a fact that a lot of non-formal writing can read like that. But on Wikipedia, we present just the facts, and don't make small details seem more important than they are. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 04:35, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Also, phrasing is important. You may wish to read about WP:PEACOCK to get learn about words and phrases to avoid. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 04:36, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Thank you for the feedback. I have made changes to make it a lot more neutral. I have also removed the pictures as suggested in the live chat and cleaned up some of the sources. Varunrajwiki (talk) 07:44, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

12:20:48, 27 April 2020 review of submission by Cky.jdu
Cky.jdu (talk) 12:20, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * You don't ask a question, but Wikipedia is not for writing about ourselves or promoting ourselves for a political or other purpose. Please see the autobiography policy for more information. 331dot (talk) 12:45, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

13:44:00, 27 April 2020 review of submission by 1.186.199.14
1.186.199.14 (talk) 13:44, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

13:48:03, 27 April 2020 review of submission by Scienceandtechnology2003
Scienceandtechnology2003 (talk) 13:48, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * You don't ask a question, but Wikipedia is not for posting resumes or lists of accomplishments. This is an encyclopedia that summarizes what independent reliable sources with significant coverage say about a subject that meets Wikipedia's special definition of notability. 331dot (talk) 14:02, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

14:22:52, 27 April 2020 review of submission by PhilS223
PhilS223 (talk) 14:22, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , Well there's your issue: Wikipedia is not for writing about yourself. If you are truly a notable individual, someone will write an article about you in time. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 22:41, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

My page has been deleted and declined again. My page link- https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Draft:Phil_Sokowicz. I have many sources mentioning me in detail.

Request on 14:32:34, 27 April 2020 for assistance on AfC submission by Poliyatin
I have a content and I want to publish on wikipedia but its showing the content is copyrithed work but I have taken it from a book I want to bublish the work below Accomplished wrestlers are regarded as saints. Just as saints and great sages renounce the world of illusion and deceit and become absorbed in god, so do wrestlers have to focus themselves and lose themselves in their art. If his concentration should even slightly waver and his pace falter then it is certain that he will end up as the lowest of low and no better than a person who grovels in the dirt.

Wrestling is unique among India’s ancient arts. From the beginning wrestling practice has been done on the ground, in the soil. Among those who have practiced wrestling there are many who have made a name for themselves and have built up the nation’s standard. Among these, Brahmdev Pahalwan—the Lion of Uttar Pradesh—earned a reputation for his guru, the nationally known Chandan Pahalwan. Such skill as he demonstrated is rarely seen in your average wrestler.

A devotee of Baba Gorkhanath; a nobleman of Gorakhpur; a patron of wrestling, the late Babu Purushotam Das provided Brahmdev with the venue—Pakki Bagh Akhara—in which he performed, exercised and thereby gave his admirers such satisfaction. What fame he achieved may be attributed to his true commitment, deep concentration and self-consciousness. Today this straightforward man, advocate for the poor and under-privileged, and tireless political worker is no longer with us, but those in Gorakhpur—nay, the entire state—cannot live without recalling Brahmdev’s great skill.

Brahmdev was born the youngest son of Mahadev Mishra in Rudrapur, Khajni Gram, near the Bansgaon thesil of Gorakhpur district in 1917. Khajni is a veritable pilgrimage point for wrestlers. Brahmdev’s grandfather, father and brothers were all wrestlers, so how could he have been anything else! He regularly went to the village akhara with his father where he rolled around and covered himself with earth. The aura of so many great wrestlers must have rubbed off on Brahmdev and served to focus his attention on wrestling.

On account of his devotion to the akhara, Brahmdev’s formal education ended in middle school. However, being from a Brahman family and living in an intellectual community he learned the Ramayan very well and was able to quote Sanskrit verses with great proficiency. In addition to being a wrestler, Brahmdev took an interest in politics and was an accomplished public speaker. As a village pradhan [head man] and Block Officer he served the public well.

Brahmdev enjoyed his life in the peaceful environment of the village akhara. He exercised and ate to his heart’s content. In the city akhara of Pakki Bagh he became a disciple of Chandan Singh and thereby followed a more rigorous regimen and improved his skill. In local tournaments he sought out wrestlers bigger and stronger than himself and regularly defeated them. When he defeated the great Surti Pahalwan in a Gorakhpur tournament the fans’ excitement was unbounded. He also defeated a European wrestler in Gorakhpur.He also defeated the great wrestler Dara Singh in a dangal of Kolkata.

Brahmdev’s daily work-out consisted of two thousand five hundred bethaks and one thousand six hundred dands. After running he would wrestle with twenty-five good wrestlers. He was most accomplished in the nikal, tang, and multani moves. Any opponent who was subjected to these moves would most certainly “see the sky.”

His diet included one seer (a quarter measure) of ghi, six seers of milk, and thandai made from half a seer of almonds. He also enjoyed fruit and was a vegetarian. In Calcutta he exercised in the akhara at Mochi Pari Thana in Bara Bazaar where he instructed many great Bengali wrestlers.

According to Indian tradition he wore a dhoti and kurta with a dopatta around his neck and shoulders. With huge mustachios Brahmdev cut a very impressive figure. When he walked through the bazaar thousands of people would stand and watch while his many disciples would compete for the honor of touching his feet.

Brahmdev was married very young but had no children. However, he regarded his nephews as his own sons and personally looked out for them. He admonished the children of his family to pay particular attention to their studies. As someone who advocated education he was a model citizen until his death in 1975.

Poliyatin (talk) 14:32, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , I assume you refer to Brahmdev Mishra:The Lion of Uttar Pradesh. For starters, you need some WP:reliable sources which you provide citations to inline. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 22:39, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

18:18:11, 27 April 2020 review of draft by Hurst64
Hurst64 (talk) 18:18, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Trying to create a wikipage, but am having it declined for reasons that I do not understand.

- What is this at the top of my sandbox working page above the EDIT BELOW THIS LINE comment?

Hurst64 (talk) 18:18, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , I assume you refer to Draft:Salish Park Leaseholders' Association. It appears to be a run of the mill neighborhood association, not a notable topic worthy of an encyclopedia. It is also quite promotional. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 22:38, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Ah, ok, I see how it does look that way. It was not my intention. Too much info. Would it be acceptable to remove the content wrt the "run of the mill" association and just leave the content describing the property development - which has certain interesting notables in that it is on native unceded territory, and has been subject to legal actions? Hurst64 (talk) 23:32, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , Probably not. Very few housing developments are notable. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 22:58, 29 April 2020 (UTC)

18:34:25, 27 April 2020 review of submission by Stephenli2000
I have updated the article with inline references added. Please help to review again, and let me know if there is anything that I need to do. Appreciate the guidance.

Thanks Stephen Stephenli2000 (talk) 18:34, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , It appears to be a copyright violation so we can't really help you there. Don't copy and paste sources into Wikipedia. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 22:35, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the feedback. This has been addressed. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Stephenli2000 (talk • contribs) 23:29, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

21:46:31, 27 April 2020 review of submission by Julia.eger
Hi, I recently created a wikipedia page for Alfred Hodder and it was approved. However, the page does not show up in google search results. Do you know why this is? Thank you!

Julia.eger (talk) 21:46, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * It takes time for Google and other search engines to index pages. Since the article has been reviewed, it should appear in search results soon. 331dot (talk) 22:22, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , The time for Google to index pages can vary between hours and weeks. We have no control over that. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 03:06, 28 April 2020 (UTC)

21:55:01, 27 April 2020 review of draft by Jayhuerta81
I am needing to change the name of my wiki draft. It is named Hindsight, I need it to say Hindsight (band) as the previous name forwards to another page named hindsight bias. Jayhuerta81 (talk) 21:55, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Typically, any article title issues are dealt with once the draft is approved. The reviewer will handle the title when they place the article in the encyclopedia.  You can leave a note on the draft's talk page making this suggestion- but I would worry about getting the article up to standards first. 331dot (talk) 22:24, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , Looks like theroadislong took care of it for you Sulfurboy (talk) 22:24, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Ok great thanks guys — Preceding unsigned comment added by Jayhuerta81 (talk • contribs) 22:31, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

23:42:21, 27 April 2020 review of submission by 2605:E000:1525:4B3C:EDD7:B6AA:6238:1401
Cohen has had extensive news coverage, not just trade publications. He has been featured numerous times in the LA Times, including a recent profile on his and his multi-decade career as the defacto real estate agent for pro athletes in Southern California. He has represented countless celebrity buyers in large residential real estate transaction and has become a celebrity of sorts in his own right as other real estate agents have in recent years.

Cohen has continued to receive press coverage, that eclipse many real estate agents who are considered notable. Cohen was not featured one time, in some blog. A quick Google search will show he has had extensive coverage - over a period of years. 2605:E000:1525:4B3C:EDD7:B6AA:6238:1401 (talk) 23:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

23:57:46, 27 April 2020 review of draft by Prowords89

 * The submission has been received and its in the review queue. Please be patient and wait for a reviewer to get to it. CaptainEek  Edits Ho Cap'n!⚓ 03:05, 28 April 2020 (UTC)