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= June 15 =

01:50:57, 15 June 2020 review of submission by Mweberjr
Hi, I believe I made all necessary edits. The article read too much like an article previously. Could someone please take a look?

Mweberjr (talk) 01:50, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

05:13:03, 15 June 2020 review of draft by Victorinoxy
Victorinoxy (talk) 05:13, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

I'm a fan of actor Zhubin Rahbar, and am trying to create an article about him. Then I found a current article, and I started editing it and adding reliable reference sources. Now I am ready to get it published, but ran into a problem.

When I tried to Resubmit, I see this page which is quite confusing. Basically it starts with "Editing Draft:Zhubin Rahbar (new section)", and then the text in the white box says

I'm confused as to whether I should just press "publish changes" on this page to get it re-reviewed? Or should I do something else? Please advise - thanks!!

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 * User:Victorinoxy - If you really are only a fan and are not Zhubin Rahbar and not his publicist, leave his autobiography alone and start over. Robert McClenon (talk) 05:35, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

05:38:47, 15 June 2020 review of submission by SONGEZO SA
What Should I also do on the article that i created? SONGEZO SA (talk) 05:38, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

05:54:20, 15 June 2020 review of draft by Aston3421
My article was declined due to self advertising tone and poor reference quality. Can I have advise on my changes. I have used a more neutral tone and added a reference to the article. Thank you

Aston3421 (talk) 05:54, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Koukjian does not appear to meet the criteria for inclusion on Wikipedia. You would need to add further references that show that he has been written about in depth by reliable, independent publications such as books or national newspapers. Articles where Koukjian talks about himself, or biographies written by him and published by companies he is connected to are not considered independent. Curb Safe Charmer (talk) 07:37, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

07:53:10, 15 June 2020 review of draft by Michael Oreal
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Hello, I wrote an article about the French fashion designer Kostio de War. I have moved the article out of my sandbox for viewing and evaluation. The following day I received the following answer which you can read in the link at the top. I do not understand the argument that the article is an advertisement, because everything is based on independent, reliable, published sources and not on material created by myself of the topic. How do I proceed now? best regards, --Michael Oreal (talk) 07:53, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

Michael Oreal (talk) 07:53, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * Well to start with you have a whole section titled "An outstanding designer of knitwear" which is entirely promotional. Theroadislong (talk) 08:08, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * User:Michael Oreal - On reading the draft, I was not originally sure whether it was about the fashion house or about its founder. That is because it lacks a proper lede sentence, which is an important part of the way Wikipedia articles are written.  Once I figured out that it was about the fashion house, it read like an advertisement with press releases.  Robert McClenon (talk) 15:28, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

Request on 09:03:45, 15 June 2020 for assistance on AfC submission by Uros77
My Article was declined

I would really appreciate if you could help me with my article because it keeps getting declined. Could you review it and give me some suggestions?

Thank you. :)

Uros77 (talk) 09:03, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

09:07:56, 15 June 2020 review of submission by TBase2
The article seems to provide articles relating directly to the subject (being the main part of each article) and inline citations for each fact point. If you look at [Brian Humphries] the subject's predecessor they are of similar sources. It may be the case that the latter page should be up for deletion if this draft page is not notable? --TBase2 (talk) 09:07, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

TBase2 (talk) 09:07, 15 June 2020 (UTC)


 * Hi . On the face of it, Brian Humphries (IT businessman) looks like what the community derogatorily calls Vanispamcruftisement. For now I've tagged it for notability. When I or someone else has more time we'll see if it can be improved or should be deleted. --Worldbruce (talk) 15:11, 15 June 2020 (UTC)


 * Hey Thank you for this, I'm still a wiki novice when it comes to these matters, I'll stick to James Cameron and Avatar and avoid what seem to be ego contests! TBase2 (talk) 12:00, 16 June 2020 (UTC)

11:30:30, 15 June 2020 review of submission by Beyonceluver99
As the last editor suggested, I took out all the external links. Could this page be reviewed please? I have made the needed modifications. Thank you! Beyonceluver99 (talk) 11:30, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

14:38:09, 15 June 2020 review of submission by SONGEZO SA
What's left that i didn't do on the article that i created? 🙏🏿 SONGEZO SA (talk) 14:38, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * You have not suggested how they pass the criteria at WP:NMUSIC. Theroadislong (talk) 14:55, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

17:36:28, 15 June 2020 review of submission by 24.45.77.59
24.45.77.59 (talk) 17:36, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

To whom it may concern:

I was wondering if you could provide more information on how to edit this article to make it meet Wikipedia's notability standards, as well as what kind of source material would be preferable for writing this article.

Thank you!

18:31:07, 15 June 2020 review of submission by Diaa ahmedd
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Trusted sources

Diaa ahmedd (talk) 18:31, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

18:52:29, 15 June 2020 review of draft by Sbg487
I'm trying to a create a wikipedia page for a non-fiction book I read. I used multiple sources, all of them unconnected to the original authors to avoid bias. The article was declined saying "articles on fictional subjects should cover their real-world context and contain sourced analysis, offering detail on a work’s development, impact or historical significance—not just a summary of the plot." I'm confused because this isn't fictional subject matter, it's a non-fiction book on politics, capitalism, governance, and international relations. I'm not sure what needs to be adjusted to correct it. Any help would be appreciated.

Sbg487 (talk) 18:52, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

19:36:06, 15 June 2020 review of draft by 153artists
Received the rejection notice for the article and had some questions regarding the feedback: 1. The first comment received is that the article was deemed as a "promotional article." Would there be a way to receive feedback to know what makes it promotional versus informational? 2. The second comment is a question, asking if we have a "COI" - is there any way to receive more details as to what is being requested and why? Ultimately, the hope is to get a basic informational article out on the singer, as he currently has very little information available for the fanbase online. 153artists (talk) 19:36, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * NOTE: OP blocked under WP:CORPNAME (among other reasons). Ian.thomson (talk) 22:07, 15 June 2020 (UTC)

Request on 19:48:52, 15 June 2020 for assistance on AfC submission by Mangalsingh1213
Hi wiki team i was trying to create my Wikipedia page, I'm an indian cricketer and i want my page on Wikipedia because your platform is a source of genuine information. I learnt and tried my best to create my page i attached all references that needed for an page, my friend he is also an cricketer who play with me he have his Wikipedia page. Please understand and help me with this 🙏. Regards Mangal Singh

Mangalsingh1213 (talk) 19:48, 15 June 2020 (UTC)
 * , Please go through WP:NCRICKET before you attempt to edit again. Also, Wikipedia articles are based on notability only. As per your words you are subject to WP:COI ~ Amkgp 💬  15:46, 19 June 2020 (UTC)