Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Help desk/Archives/2020 May 24

= May 24 =

02:03:37, 24 May 2020 review of submission by Ethanznelson
I am requesting assistance on this page because I recieved many errors in creating it. It is said that this page was "advertising" but I didn't do anything of the sort. Thanks. Ethanznelson (talk) 02:03, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * , High school theatre actors are not notable by Wikipedia's guidelines. Sulfurboy (talk) 03:11, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * It seemed to be "for the purpose of advertising, publicising, or promoting" Kennedy Muir.  — Jeff G. ツ 17:07, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

06:21:24, 24 May 2020 review of submission by Johntommy988
dont get me wrong, im new to creating article, im lerning and please if there is any mistates need to be fixed Alexander Kalombedraft let me know what do i need to add so the article can be accepted? i followed all the requirements. about his professional career. thank you! Johntommy988 (talk) 06:21, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * Your draft has been rejected, meaning that it will not be considered further, as it seems that this player does not meet the Wikipedia definition of a notable football player. 331dot (talk) 10:01, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

13:18:46, 24 May 2020 review of submission by SJvZM
The last rejection mentions that the issues from the previous reviews are still present. However, the draft article was substantially revised to adopt the ‘formal tone’ of an encyclopedia article, removing all so-called peacock terms and taking a rigorously neutral position on creation and values of its subject matter. There is not a single point of view being expressed in the article, and citations to sources have more than doubled from the original submission. The article cannot be subsumed as a subsection under Stellenbosch University, as that would mean that each of the hundreds of departments and research projects in nine different faculties should ideally be placed under the single entry of Stellenbosch University.

SJvZM (talk) 13:18, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * I concour that you have rewritten the draft in mayor ways, and from what I can see has Improced. I'm going to ping the reviewer if there is something specific that I haven't seen. Howewer, I want to remind you that per WP:ELNO plain external links don't belong into the body of an article. In addition, some of the sources (e.g. Dailymail) are afaik not reliable. Note: You are not currently listed as a reviewer, and as such are, at least according to the latter page, discouraged from reviewing AfC submissions (But from what I found it should be easy to become one for you). 15:38, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

18:42:38, 24 May 2020 review of submission by Bluesjuzpretty
Is this enough to be posted now?!

Bluesjuzpretty (talk) 18:42, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

20:13:34, 24 May 2020 review of submission by C4neo
C4neo (talk) 20:13, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

Can you please help create a wikipedia page for Olivia Andem the author. Thanks

Request on 22:51:33, 24 May 2020 for assistance on AfC submission by ExplorerX19
I'm requesting for assistance on continuing editing a draft article on an upcoming video game calle No Straight Roads. I summited it just now, and got rejected because mainly it was too soon. I'm waiting for more info to come before or during it's release. ExplorerX19 (talk) 22:51, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

ExplorerX19 (talk) 22:51, 24 May 2020 (UTC)

23:37:53, 24 May 2020 review of submission by Eeberbach
I tried to un-reject our draft and made multiple suggested substantial corrections, but for one month I did not hear anything from editors. I request re-review, because the editor who rejected the submission was unqualified (knowing nothing about the area of submission) and strongly biased in his opinions. Eeberbach (talk) 23:37, 24 May 2020 (UTC)
 * who is "our"? Wikipedia accounts are single-person only. If you are affilated with the subject in any way, please comply with the conflict of interest and paid editing policies. FAQ/Organizations may be in interest as well. As for the draft, I still fail to find some lead that tells me what this is. Most of the Wikipedia articles are read by people with little or no knowlegde of the subjects (at least for my observations) and therefore should say clearly in the introduction what the article is about, e.g. Jimmy Donal "Jimbo" Wales (born August 7, 1966) is an American-British Internet entrepreneur. He is a co-founder of the online non-profit encyclopedia Wikipedia and the for-profit web hosting company Wikia. Futher, your draft currently still uses WP:PEACOCK terms, which should not be used in encyclopedic articles. I am going to ping as the last two reviewers. Victor Schmidt (talk) 16:36, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
 * (P.S.: Accusing the reviewers of being unqualified and biased without evidence or diffs isn't exactly going to be taken to your adventage.)
 * As per my previous comments the lede section still very clearly fails to establish what the subject is even about. Until the draft is written in an understandable format it is not likely to be accepted. Theroadislong (talk) 16:50, 25 May 2020 (UTC)
 * There's also very serious WP:OR, WP:TONE and WP:NOTESSAY concerns with the article. Your unwarranted accusations of "unqualified" and "strongly biased" are churlish and baseless. I guarantee every reviewer here would have declined this and many would have rejected it. Sulfurboy (talk) 19:59, 25 May 2020 (UTC)