Wikipedia:WikiProject Articles for creation/Help desk/Archives/2023 March 20

= March 20 =

06:30:29, 20 March 2023 review of submission by Mambomo
provided enough reference Mambomo (talk) 06:30, 20 March 2023 (UTC)


 * @Mambomo: a single source, that isn't even cited, really is not "enough". This has been rejected, and will likely be deleted soon. -- DoubleGrazing (talk) 06:43, 20 March 2023 (UTC)
 * wow how do you guys even operate like Resident Advisor is the Biggest Artist magazine and you guys still don't want it talk about, racism not existing!!!! Mambomo (talk) 06:45, 20 March 2023 (UTC)
 * @Mambomo: please do not start hurling baseless accusations around.
 * This draft was rejected because the RA does not meet any aspect of the WP:GNG standard for notability: it is not secondary, it does not provide significant coverage of the subject, and while it may or may not be reliable it is certainly not independent. And given that both 'references' (which in any case aren't cited in the manner required for articles on living people) are to the same source, this also doesn't satisfy the requirement for multiple sources. -- DoubleGrazing (talk) 07:10, 20 March 2023 (UTC)
 * ok you win Mambomo (talk) 07:27, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

Can you check Draft:Asraman Bilig ? What should i do?
Can you check Draft:Asraman Bilig ? What should i do? Nasty32 (talk) 10:03, 20 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Your draft has no sources, articles are based on reliable, independent sources, NOT on what you know about a topic. Theroadislong (talk) 10:13, 20 March 2023 (UTC)
 * @Nasty32 You should find sources that talk about the subject,  and cite them; or abandon the attempt. David10244 (talk) 04:58, 23 March 2023 (UTC)

12:53:38, 20 March 2023 review of draft by Editorranjitksharma
Nocturnal781 has declined my draft article submission saying, "Whole article needs to be formatted and edited all around. Not ready to be on Wikipedia."

Could anybody kindly share some examples of places where the formatting and editing are lacking?

I would like to review my article and make the changes accordingly.

Thanks

Editorranjitksharma (talk) 12:53, 20 March 2023 (UTC)


 * I have read the article and found seems ok as I had Googled about the person you wrote. I am from India and heard about this man earlier Yasar2709 (talk) 17:34, 25 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Thanks @Yasar2709 for your kind words! Editorranjitksharma (talk) 18:02, 25 March 2023 (UTC)


 * Revise the entire text. Remove promotional phrasing and marketing jargon such as "various successful business verticals", remove all external links from the article text, and make sure that all information is supported by reliable independent sources. --bonadea contributions talk 17:49, 25 March 2023 (UTC)
 * @Bonadea Thanks for the detailed feedback! I will revisit the article based on your suggestions.
 * Editorranjitksharma (talk) Editorranjitksharma (talk) 17:56, 25 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Hi @Editorranjitksharma: IMO, this draft shouldn't have been declined as a 'test edit'; that said, it could and should have been declined for any number of reasons, most notably wholly inadequate referencing, so in that sense the decline was if not correct then at least justified. As for what needs changing... bonadea beat me to it! -- DoubleGrazing (talk) 17:54, 25 March 2023 (UTC)
 * @Bonadea Thank you so much for the feedback! Yes, calling it a 'test edit' sounded too hyperbolic. I will try to provide more referencing, wherever possible. Editorranjitksharma (talk) 18:00, 25 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Sorry! This reply was for @DoubleGrazing! Editorranjitksharma (talk) 18:01, 25 March 2023 (UTC)

13:03:13, 20 March 2023 review of draft by 64.114.255.114
Can you help me understand why the citations are not adequate in this case? Was it in regards to the MacRumors article regarding the LegbaCore acquisition being used, rather than e.g. the Gadgets360 citation used over on the Apple M&A page: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/List_of_mergers_and_acquisitions_by_Apple#cite_note-g360-legba-114 ?

64.114.255.114 (talk) 13:03, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

13:47:58, 20 March 2023 review of submission by Katehubert
Added a Forbes article as a reference/citation.

Katehubert (talk) 13:47, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

18:51:18, 20 March 2023 review of submission by A.marvin87
Hello. How can i improve this page? I think this app is old enough to have his own page on wiki - it has distinct user-friendly features. Sorry if my article looks like advert.

A.marvin87 (talk) 18:51, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

19:09:21, 20 March 2023 review of draft by Xin505324545
Xin505324545 (talk) 19:09, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

Dear Manager:

Based on your answer, I checked with the President of the International Association for Bridge Maintenance and Safety (IABMAS), Professor Dan Frangopol, and we modified the draft for International Association for Bridge Maintenance and Safety according to the requirements.

To make the references more in-depth, reliable, secondary, and strictly independent, several additional references were added including: [18] indicates that IABMAS 2022 was reported on the website of the European Commission. [20] and [21] show that the Honorary Member Dr. Tang is from T.Y. Lin International, which is a firm also approved by Wikipedia https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/T._Y._Lin_International [24], [25], [26], [27] show the news items about several IABMAS awards recipients by their home organizations, such as City College of New York, Aalto University, T. Y. Lin International, and Hong Kong Polytechnic University. [43] is from Monash University which introduces the proceedings of IABMAS 2018.

We hope the above resources can help IABMAS meet the requirements for inclusion in Wikipedia.

Thank you very much for your consideration.

Best regards,

Dr. Jiyu Xin and Prof. Dan M. Frangopol

19:52:57, 20 March 2023 review of submission by Olivierg13
so the guy says that i have a connection to superbestrapper44 but that is litterally me so yes i haev a connection how do i fix that because I shit talk myself a pretty good deal here Olivierg13 (talk) 19:52, 20 March 2023 (UTC)


 * @Olivierg13 start by reading Conflict of interest. It has instructions on disclosure and other ways to handle the issue. You're definitely gonna need to read and understand that page's contents if you're gonna continue working on your draft.
 * (Also, "the guy" is me. I put that notice on the draft as well as one on Olivier's talk page.) QuietHere (talk) 21:52, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

21:50:45, 20 March 2023 review of draft by KidderCart
Hi there!

I am requesting assistance to identify which sections of the submissions are still considered too promotional. I have tried my best to remove any sections from the submissions that might seem to violate the section, so I'd just like some feedback as to how I can improve the article.

Happy to make the necessary changes. Thanks so much for your time.

KidderCart (talk) 21:50, 20 March 2023 (UTC)

23:26:10, 20 March 2023 review of draft by WisnerDM
I received a notice of a speedy deletion. Reasons included conflict of interest and that I'm required to disclose compensation but I'm not being compensated for the submission. It also stated that the article is promotional. I was trying to write within the same style as other artist's pages that are published on Wiki, and am not sure what I need to do to make it read as less promotional. Any suggestions are more than welcomed! WisnerDM (talk) 23:26, 20 March 2023 (UTC)


 * Hi @WisnerDM: the speedy deletion was requested on the basis of the draft being promotional, nothing else. You have already contested this on the draft talk page, so for now there is nothing more to be done but to await administrator's action.
 * The COI query was made separately, albeit presumably at least partly for the same reason. You should respond to this on your talk page.
 * Neither of these are AfC matters.
 * Going forward, whether the current draft is deleted or survives, you need to write in a more neutral, factual tone. Expressions like "songwriting came naturally and easily" may be suitable for an album cover or the artist's website, but not for an encyclopaedia. Similarly, peacocky terms like "legendary" are only really allowed if you're quoting someone of authority, eg. "Shannon as been described as a "legendary songwriter" by the Rolling Stones magazine."; otherwise it's you inserting your own POV into the text.
 * And although this wasn't a reason why the draft was declined, I'll mention anyway that you need to ensure that the contents are properly supported by referencing. Currently there are a few paragraphs without any citations, and potentially sensitive and/or contentious claims related to the subject's health etc. need to be very clearly referenced with reliable published sources, per WP:BLP. -- DoubleGrazing (talk) 09:37, 21 March 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you so much for your feedback, it really helps! I'm going to go back and put together a better article now that I have an idea of what I need to do.  I truly appreciate you taking the time! WisnerDM (talk) 12:22, 21 March 2023 (UTC)