Wikipedia:WikiProject Aviation/Peer review/De Havilland Mosquito

de Havilland Mosquito
I've listed this article for peer review because it has undergone a great deal of hard work and discussion and (possibly with some tweaking) it is up for an A-Class review

Thanks,

◆ 'Min✪rhist✪rian ◆ MTalk''   08:38, 7 January 2012 (UTC)

Compdude123
I have never done anything with this article, so I thought that a fresh set of eyes might be good for it. By the way you might want to promote it to GA-Class before you promote it to A-Class. GA-Class comes first, I believe. Anyway here's my review:
 * Lead section
 * In the third paragraph of the lead, what year did the Normandy Campaign take place? What about the Battle of the Atlantic?
 * In the fourth paragraph you might want to spell out "CBI" in CBI Theater, as well as RAAF. But make sure to put the abbreviations in parentheses.


 * Development
 * In the very first paragraph it mentions that the Mosquito was built out of wood. This seems pretty unique for a WWII aircraft, and you might want to mention that in the lead.
 * "...a vast improvement on the 100 miles per hour (160 km/h) Handley Page H.P.42, and other biplanes, it was replacing." You probably should get rid of the comma before "...it was replacing." as that seems a bit weird.
 * "...compensated for the low power de Havilland Gipsy Twelve engines used,"--Change to "...compensated for the low power of the de Havilland Gipsy Twelve engines that the aircraft used,"
 * Despite some of these minor issues, this first part of the development section (before subsections come along) gives me a pretty good grasp of previous aircraft which the Mosquito's design was based off of.


 * Air Ministry bomber requirements and concepts (subsection)
 * In the first sentence where it says "3000 pounds," get rid of the "s" on pounds.


 * Inception of the De Havilland fast bomber (subsection)
 * In the photo caption for the De Havilland Albatross pic, get rid of the "Photo-Flight International" part. Such info belongs on the photo's description page.
 * How does the footnote (nb1) relate to the context of the article?
 * That first paragraph is a little long. Consider splitting it into two.
 * The second footnote should be incorporated into the prose since it adds meaningful context to the article. It seems to be important enough to be in the article and not a footnote because it tells of the Air Ministry's response to de Havilland's design.
 * "On 5 October 1939, with the new war a month old,"-Just say "World War II" here instead of "the new war."
 * Spelling error(?): "sceptical" should be changed to "skeptical," unless that's actually the British English spelling of the word.
 * How does the fourth footnote relate to the surrounding text? Move it down; see my comment on this below.


 * Project Mosquito (subsection)
 * Consider incorporating the fifth footnote into the text.


 * Prototypes and test flights (subsection)
 * Where it says airscrews (right before ref 35 in first paragraph, second sentence), consider changing that to propellers.
 * In the second paragraph, make "pound" plural.
 * In the fourth paragraph, where it says "teething problems," maybe change that to "buffeting problems" or something like that. If this relates to another issue with the aircraft, explain it.
 * "Cunningham concluded that when the type was fitted with radar..." - Footnote 4, which I mentioned earlier, should be moved down to here as it has to do with the fact that the word "radar" was coined later on in WWII.
 * In the paragraph regarding on aircraft being refitted with Merlin engines, explain what "snowguards" are.


 * Design
 * "(Based on the FB Mk VI)" --What is that supposed to mean?
 * Mid-wing aircraft or shoulder wing? Which one? It can't be both.
 * In the construction sub-section as well as the systems sub-section, what is "oleos" supposed to mean? (Interestingly enough, if I type that into MS Word that is an actual word)


 * Operational history
 * "The Mosquito was first announced publicly on 26 September 1942 after the Oslo Mosquito raid of 25 September." Change to "The Mosquito was first announced publicly on 26 September 1942, the day after the Oslo Mosquito raid took place."
 * The units were "little more than glorified squadrons and achieved little against the elusive RAF aircraft." Who is quoted here?
 * I love the quote of that German guy. It really shows how powerful the aircraft was against the Germans.
 * Variants
 * I like how you organized the variants by specific role (ie, bomber, fighter, photo-reconnaissance, etc)


 * Production: Is it really necessary to have a separate section for this? I'm not so sure, but maybe it would be better to put it in the Development section.


 * Operators: You should mention civil operators as well as military operators. I know there's a sub-article for this but it should at least be mentioned here.


 * Survivors: I know this has a sub-article too, but expand this section more. What other airworthy examples of this aircraft remained after WWII?  What about aircraft on display in museums?

Anyway, I think you've done a pretty good job on this article so far, just needs some improvements before going up to A-Class. And again, I think you should promote this to good article status and then go for A-Class. Hope this helps, Compdude123 (talk) 21:28, 21 January 2012 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the good advice - not all my work BTW:
 * Lead section
 * ''*In the third paragraph of the lead, what year did the Normandy Campaign take place? What about the Battle of the Atlantic?
 * In the fourth paragraph you might want to spell out "CBI" in CBI Theater, as well as RAAF. But make sure to put the abbreviations in parentheses.''
 * (Sorted - in addition there was some confusion in the roles undertaken by the Mosquito, and the grammar was all over the place, so this has been addressed)
 * ;Development
 * *In the very first paragraph it mentions that the Mosquito was built out of wood. This seems pretty unique for a WWII aircraft, and you might want to mention that in the lead. (Done)
 * "...a vast improvement on the 100 miles per hour (160 km/h) Handley Page H.P.42, and other biplanes, it was replacing." You probably should get rid of the comma before "...it was replacing." as that seems a bit weird. (Done)
 * "...compensated for the low power de Havilland Gipsy Twelve engines used,"--Change to "...compensated for the low power of the de Havilland Gipsy Twelve engines that the aircraft used," (Done)
 * Despite some of these minor issues, this first part of the development section (before subsections come along) gives me a pretty good grasp of previous aircraft which the Mosquito's design was based off of.


 * Air Ministry bomber requirements and concepts (subsection)
 * In the first sentence where it says "3000 pounds," get rid of the "s" on pounds.(converted)


 * Inception of the De Havilland fast bomber (subsection)
 * *In the photo caption for the De Havilland Albatross pic, get rid of the "Photo-Flight International" part. Such info belongs on the photo's description page.(Done)
 * *How does the footnote (nb1) relate to the context of the article? (Not really worth mentioning, omitted)
 * *That first paragraph is a little long. Consider splitting it into two.(Done)
 * *The second footnote should be incorporated into the prose since it adds meaningful context to the article. It seems to be important enough to be in the article and not a footnote because it tells of the Air Ministry's response to de Havilland's design.(Done)
 * "On 5 October 1939, with the new war a month old,"-Just say "World War II" here instead of "the new war." (Done)
 * *Spelling error(?): "sceptical" should be changed to "skeptical," unless that's actually the British English spelling of the word.(Sceptical correct British spelling)
 * *How does the fourth footnote relate to the surrounding text? Move it down; see my comment on this below.(AI equipment was specified for the Mosquito: it is better to explain that AI is an early British term for Radar the first time the term AI is used in the article. Cunningham would not have said Radar in 1941, so this has been changed)
 * Project Mosquito (subsection)
 * *Consider incorporating the fifth footnote into the text. '''(Done)

'''
 * Prototypes and test flights (subsection)
 * *Where it says airscrews (right before ref 35 in first paragraph, second sentence), consider changing that to propellers.(Done)
 * *In the second paragraph, make "pound" plural.(Changed)
 * *In the fourth paragraph, where it says "teething problems," maybe change that to "buffeting problems" or something like that. If this relates to another issue with the aircraft, explain it. (Done - other problems mentioned in the text included the u/c doors remaining ajar, and castoring problems with the tailwheel.)
 * "Cunningham concluded that when the type was fitted with radar..." - Footnote 4, which I mentioned earlier, should be moved down to here as it has to do with the fact that the word "radar" was coined later on in WWII. (See comment on fourth footnote)
 * In the paragraph regarding on aircraft being refitted with Merlin engines, explain what "snowguards" are.(Done)


 * Still more work to go... ◆ 'Min✪rhist✪rian ◆ MTalk''   11:45, 22 January 2012 (UTC)