Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Alcibiades

Alcibiades
I've completed another copy-edit of the article. I know some more tweaks are still necessary before going for FA (the article is already GA), but I thought it was high time I had some suggestions and thoughts from peer-reviewers.--Yannismarou 13:00, 14 September 2006 (UTC)

Plange
Great article, I just made some minor tweaks. Only things I found were: --plange 20:59, 17 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Lead seems a bit long
 * Under Recall to Athens: "The Peloponnesians mooring their ships together, they fought with their adversaries as they sailed down upon them" - this sentence doesn't make sense to me. Do you mean: "The Peloponnesians, mooring their ships together, fought with their adversaries as they sailed down upon them" but still there's too many pronouns to know who is what...
 * Under Recall to Athens: "His performance is judged as skillful" should that read: "His performance is judged as skillful by historians"?
 * Under Assessment: "According to Vlachos the expedition had nothing the extravagant or adventurous" do you mean "According to Vlachos the expedition had nothing of the extravagant or adventurous"?
 * Thanks! Working on the lead. I've reduced it a bit, but I'm reluctant! It is so well-written by Robth! I'll check the language issues.--Yannismarou 17:07, 18 September 2006 (UTC)
 * Lead trimmed now a bit.--Yannismarou 20:52, 21 September 2006 (UTC)