Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Dredg

Dredg
This article has undergone a large amount of reconstruction since it was initially rated a start-class article. I believe that the article could be a B-class article. I would also appreciate any advice that others could give on how the article could be improved, especially from those that may not be familiar with the band. Thank you to everyone who takes the time to review this page. --Ars Sycro (talk) 07:11, 24 April 2008 (UTC)

Yannismarou

 * Why "dredg" and not "Dredg"? See below.
 * "While attending middle school in Los Gatos, California, Engles and Campanella started playing music together. After Engles and Campanella started attending Los Gatos High School," Repetitive prose. Done.
 * "In 2000, Engles said that the name was "a request"." Can you elaborate on that? Request by whom? Removed.
 * "Currently, very little information has ever been released about these demos." Do this "very little information" include any useful material for the reader? See below.
 * "While the EP shows their nu metal upbringings". "New" or "nu"? Maybe an ignorant's question! See below.
 * "Completed in May 2002, the album was widely available on the internet before being released on October 8, 2002.[15] Two tracks were later made into music videos, "Same Ol' Road" and "Of The Room"." Avoid stubby paragraphs like this one. Merge or expand. Done.
 * "the band expanded the focus to include sleep paralysis" Include it in what way? Done.
 * "Fourth studio album (2008-present)" is undercited compared to previous sections. See below.
 * You have no analysis of their music, and no critical approaches, influence analysis etc. Why don't you take some ideas from FA bands' articles, such as R.E.M., Metallica or Slayer?--Yannismarou (talk) 13:24, 28 April 2008 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your comments. I will strike them off as I complete them as well as post responses to your questions below.
 * "dredg" is the form that has been displayed on their CDs (Leitmotif, El Cielo and Catch Without Arms).
 * With the "request", it is a quote from the cited interview (which may be suspect in nature), and no other explanation was provided for the request. I will remove it in favor of the other quote.
 * As far as their demos, there is some information available for their second demo; however, there are no "reliable sources" by Wikipedia's standards with this information.
 * It's "nu metal". Dumb name, but that's the official title.
 * As far as the fourth studio album, much of this information comes from their Myspace blogs. As these are not considered "reliable sources" and cannot be linked to, it is difficult to cite; however, I think the information is appropriate. If better sources exist (as one did with a single MTV news post), I will certainly use them as reference. --Ars Sycro (talk) 02:38, 29 April 2008 (UTC)