Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Eveline Hańska

Eveline Hańska
I will soon nominate this article (about Balzac's wife) for WP:FA status. I have done lots of exhaustive research for a year now, and I believe the prose is of high quality. I have checked all pictures for proper license and source info, and I'm just looking to make sure I haven't missed anything before moving on to the next step of the process. Thanks in advance for your scrutiny! Scartol •  Tok  14:43, 21 April 2011 (UTC)


 * Comments from Nikkimaria
 * "Their family had deep roots in Polish history and nobility, with generations known for military prowess, wealth, and passionate living" - this sentence is rather vague
 * Agreed. Changed to: "Their family had deep roots in Polish nobility, with generations known for wealth and military prowess." Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Given that her year of birth is so debated, I'm curious as to why you chose 1801
 * Actually, this was a holdover from what was in the article before I reconstructed it. I just wasn't sure what to put in the lead and infobox, but I think it's better to say c. 1805. Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Be very careful to maintain a neutral and encyclopedic tone at all times
 * I always strive for such a tone. Are there spots where you feel the article veers away? Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)


 * "they visited the Russian capital" - is this St. Petersburg or Moscow at this point?
 * St. Pete. Clarified.


 * Don't use contractions
 * I don't! (Get it? I used a contraction there! HAR!) I found one ("she'd"), which I changed to "she had". Are there others? Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)


 * Read over careful for awkward or unclear passages and typos - for example, "roaylist uprising"
 * Yes, I've reveiwed the prose many times, and I've asked others to review it as well. If you know of other typos, please let me know. Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)


 * "They would also visit the Swiss village of Neuchâtel, to visit..." - repetitive phrasing, check for others
 * Yes, good catch. Fixed. Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)


 * "In any case, a wedding would be impossible without approval from the Tsar, which he would not grant until spring of 1850. He returned to Wierzchownia in October, and immediately fell ill." - is something missing here? Nikkimaria (talk) 18:17, 22 April 2011 (UTC)
 * Yes, my brain! 8) Changed final "he" to "Balzac". Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)
 * Thank you kindly for your careful attention to detail! Scartol  •  Tok  17:46, 5 May 2011 (UTC)