Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Henry (Bishop of Finland)

Bishop Henry
GA level article targeting now FA. IMHO, the article starts to have at least partial FA quality. Please comment on the possible shortcomings and suggest improvements. Contributions to the article are naturally very welcome! --Drieakko 12:04, 28 June 2007 (UTC)

Review by Psychless
This article is definitely a good article, and with a little improvement should be FA. After taking a look at the article these are my suggestions...


 * In the persondata you have his death date listed. Could you put this in the parentheses at the beginning of the article? Put a semicolon after Latin and then: d. circa January 20, 1150. If you can approximate a birth date you would put this: ...Latin; Birth year–January 20, 1150. Also get rid of the equals sign before his death place in the persondata.
 * Referencing is the only real major problem in the article. Some parts of the article are not referenced, I will point them out to you.
 * Vita and miracula
 * First paragraph, first sentence is referenced but the rest of the paragraph is not.
 * Second paragraph
 * Fourth paragraph to end of section
 * Development of the legend
 * Last sentence of last paragraph
 * Veneration
 * First paragraph, starting at Vadstena Abbey
 * Political usage
 * First paragraph
 * Folk traditions
 * Second sentence
 * Henry's origins
 * First paragraph, starting after ref 24.
 * Third paragraph
 * Last sentence of last paragraph
 * Death and burial
 * Second and third paragraphs
 * Development of folk traditions
 * First paragraph, and also, the first sentence doesn't sound very neutral. Maybe: The death-lay has been described as a (continue on..)
 * Historical sources
 * First paragraph, looks like only the first half of the second sentence is referenced.
 * Last sentence of second paragraph
 * Bishop of Uppsala
 * First paragraph
 * Bishop of Finland
 * First paragraph
 * Fourth paragraph, last sentence
 * Fifth paragraph, last sentence
 * Sixth paragraph, everything except first sentence
 * Seventh paragraph
 * Relics
 * Henry was allegedly buried in Nousiainen, from where his bones - or at least something that was thought to be his bones - were translated to Turku in 1300 → Henry was allegedly buried in Nousiainen, from where his bones—or at least something that was thought to be his bones—were translated to Turku in 1300.
 * First paragraph, last sentence
 * Second half of third paragraph
 * Fifth paragraph, last sentence
 * Henry's status today
 * Last two sentences

Other than forgetting to reference a few places you've done a great job on a complicated subject. If it's at all possible to incorporate the links in the See Also section into the main article please do. I also assume there are no external links? He doesn't have a blog or myspace page I suppose ;). If you're ready, then take it to FA.  Psych  less   19:50, 3 July 2007 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much for taking time to review the article. The reference frenzy is exhausting :) but I'll get to work! --Drieakko 20:16, 3 July 2007 (UTC)
 * Almost all done, 2 unreferenced claims marked for adding the references as soon as I find them. --Drieakko 04:58, 5 July 2007 (UTC)