Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Humbert Roque Versace

Humbert Roque Versace
The editors would like for the group to make comments on areas that need improvement and any ideals for expansion.--Oldwildbill 18:35, 29 August 2006 (UTC)

Yannismarou
The prose looks to me fine, but, since I'm not a native English speaker, I'll let such judgements to other users. My remarks have to do with the structural problems the article has:
 * I understand you want to make it FA. Then, according to my opinion, it is small. You have to expand it. I see that you have only one section: "Biography". You have to expand it with more information and divide it in further sections.
 * Taking into consideration the current length of the article, tha quote in section "Medal of Honor citation" seems to me huuuuuge. I also donot like the fact that this section has no prose.
 * Section "Awards and decorations": No prose. Not recommended. And you must mention in this section the years of the awards.
 * Section "In memory": Looks like a "trivia" section, which are no further recommended for FA. In general, there is a problem with these three sections:"Medal of Honor citation", "Awards and decorations", "In memory". Maybe you can rewrite them, add more prose or create one section with a better article flow. In this case the quote might also be OK. But I'm still wondering it if we need it all.
 * Inline citations go exactly after the punctuation. Do not leave a gap. I corrected two cases I saw and I think all your inline citations are now OK.--Yannismarou 14:38, 31 August 2006 (UTC)

Plange
The only comment I would make is that the Awards section should be removed from the body since it is already in the infobox. --plange 01:32, 9 September 2006 (UTC)