Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Joseph Szigeti

Joseph Szigeti
I've been working on this article for a while now and my eventual goal is to get it up to Featured Article status. I think it's getting close to being a potential FA candidate, but I'd like any input on how to make it better. Thanks, K. Lásztocska talk 19:51, 3 January 2008 (UTC)

Javascript review
The following suggestions were generated with the aid of a semi-automatic javascript program. You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 18:00, 4 January 2008 (UTC)
 * The lead of this article may be too long, or may contain too many paragraphs. Please follow guidelines at WP:LEAD; be aware that the lead should adequately summarize the article.[?]
 * The first section looks a little crowded with the images and music sample.
 * Per Wikipedia:Context and Wikipedia:Manual of Style (dates), months and days of the week generally should not be linked. Years, decades, and centuries should only be linked if they provide context for the article.[?]
 * Please add  along with the required parameters to the article - see Persondata for more information.[?]
 * Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
 * Vague terms of size often are unnecessary and redundant - “some”, “a variety/number/majority of”, “several”, “a few”, “many”, “any”, and “all”. For example, “ All pigs are pink, so we thought of a number of ways to turn them green.”


 * Thanks. Anything else? K. Lásztocska talk 04:38, 7 January 2008 (UTC)