Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Lonnie Mack

Lonnie Mack
Although I'm not the main editor, the article has in fact been written mostly by one person, a neophyte editor: Slp512. My role has just been formatting and generally tidy-up duties.

Personally I think it has the makings of a GA article at the very least, as such I'd be grateful for suggestions from the experts :) -- Web H amster  15:39, 22 December 2007 (UTC)

Javascript reviewer
The following suggestions were generated by a semi-automatic javascript program, and might not be applicable for the article in question. You may wish to browse through User:AndyZ/Suggestions for further ideas. Thanks, DrKiernan (talk) 17:33, 28 December 2007 (UTC)
 * Consider adding more links to the article; per Manual of Style (links) and Build the web, create links to relevant articles.[?]
 * If there is not a free use image in the top right corner of the article, please try to find and include one.[?]
 * Please add  along with the required parameters to the article - see Persondata for more information.[?]
 * Per Manual of Style (headings), headings generally do not start with articles ('the', 'a(n)'). For example, if there was a section called  ==The Biography== , it should be changed to  ==Biography== .[?]
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 * There are a few occurrences of weasel words in this article- please observe WP:AWT. Certain phrases should specify exactly who supports, considers, believes, etc., such a view. For example,
 * Matt is considered a pivotal figure
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 * Watch for redundancies that make the article too wordy instead of being crisp and concise. (You may wish to try Tony1's redundancy exercises.)
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 * The script has spotted the following contractions: didn't, isn't, if these are outside of quotations, they should be expanded.
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 * Please ensure that the article has gone through a thorough copyediting so that it exemplifies some of Wikipedia's best work. See also User:Tony1/How to satisfy Criterion 1a.[?]