Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Princess Victoria Melita of Edinburgh and Saxe-Coburg-Gotha

Princess Victoria Melita of Edinburgh and Saxe-Coburg-Gotha
I'd like to bring this article up to Good Article status. Please offer suggestions for improving it. --Bookworm857158367 00:43, 2 February 2007 (UTC)

Yannismarou
Nice job as usual. This is my review:
 * I think you should expand a bit more the lead. IMO it is short.
 * Stylistic: "the ref tag should be directly after the punctuation mark without an intervening space".
 * "Kirill led his naval unit to the Duma on March 14, 1917 and swore his loyalty to the Duma, hoping to restore order and preserve the monarchy." The prose here looks to me a bit repetitive. I have also the impression that the prose gets sometimes choppy, as on the third paragraph of "Exile".
 * "Dark-haired [67] Kira, high-spirited and straightforward [68], had a somewhat more even temperament than her older sister." Citation after puncuation mark. And I think it would be nice to try to have the citations at the end of the sentences.
 * As a conclusion, I believe that the article will easily pass GAC.--Yannismarou 11:32, 5 February 2007 (UTC)