Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Robert Gray (sea captain)

Robert Gray (sea-captain)
Looking for an intital rating, ideas to make better/improve to push towards at least GA. Aboutmovies 22:17, 23 February 2007 (UTC)

Automated

 * Please see automated peer review suggestions here. Thanks, APR t 22:38, 26 February 2007 (UTC)

Kaisershatner

 * Intro and TOC are a mess...but help is on the way! Kaisershatner 15:01, 2 March 2007 (UTC)

Yannismarou

 * Per WP:MoS single years like "in 1790" should not be linked. Only full dates: "in January 1 1790 ..."
 * "He died at sea in 1806, near Charleston, South Carolina,[1] possibly due to yellow fever.[2]" IMO it is not nice to have a stubby paragraph like this in the lead.
 * "Early life" is stubby. Merge or expand.
 * "He is known, however, to have served in the Triangular trade of South Carolina, aboard the Pacific." Known by whom? Citation needed.
 * "On September 30, 1787", "On September 17, 1788". Per above, the dates here should be linked.
 * "Additional ships to explore the coast under the command of Captain George Vancouver.[citation needed] ...". These s should be fixed.
 * "And in 1788 Gray had attempted to enter a large river..." Why do you start the sentence here with "and"?
 * "Circumnavigation" is stubby and uncited.
 * "Gray then finished filling his cargo hold with pelts and set sail for China. In Canton, Gray again traded his cargo for tea. He then returned to Boston.[1] Gray returned to Boston in 1793, after again circumnavigating the globe." Repetitive and choppy prose.
 * "Legacy" is uncited.
 * In some of your printed sources used as "Notes", you have no pages.
 * The websites you have in "References" are not used as inline citations if I'm not wrong. If I'm right, then they are "External links" not "References".
 * Categories at the end of the article should be alphabetized.--Yannismarou 16:52, 3 March 2007 (UTC)