Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Tim O'Brien (illustrator)

Tim O'Brien (illustrator)
This article is my first contribution to Wikipedia. I have attempted to follow all of the guidelines for creating useful and informative content, although I am certain to have made some mistakes and would appreciate any guidance offered. My particular area of interest is contemporary American illustrators and I would like to continue to contribute informative biographies on that subject. Thanks for any suggestions and tips to creating successful content. Rezimmerman (talk) 23:08, 18 May 2008 (UTC)

Yannismarou
Your references are well-formatted, but the problem is the lack of content! The article includes a lead, and then just a list of honors and awards, and an "Influence" section with no analysis; almost no prose; just a small sentence. Expand your article, add material, create a well-written biography, and then a peer-review will be more helpful. I think that at your stage you should try first follow these nice tips about how to create a biography.--Yannismarou (talk) 09:01, 18 June 2008 (UTC)

Comments from DrKiernan
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Similar to what Yannis has said above:
 * For longer articles, the lead is for summarizing the rest of the article, but here the lead is the article! Please see if anything can be expanded upon.[?]
 * No images! Please see if there are any free use images that fall under the Image use policy and fit under one of the Image copyright tags that can be uploaded. To upload images on Wikipedia, go to Special:Upload; to upload non-fair use images on the Wikimedia Commons, go to commons:special:upload.[?]
 * Very minor point: you may wish to add  along with the required parameters to the article - see Persondata for more information.[?] DrKiernan (talk) 14:18, 20 June 2008 (UTC)