Wikipedia:WikiProject Biography/Peer review/Valerio Ricetti

Valerio Ricetti
This article has the makings of a featured article and that would be a good goal for it. Please review the article to help it advance to the next level. -- Jreferee 23:00, 9 March 2007 (UTC)

Yannismarou
It needs work. This is my review:
 * The lead is not properly written. It is short and IMO does not consistute a proper summary of the page.
 * Most sections atre uncited or undercited. See for instance "Early life in Australia".
 * "Unfortunately he left the brothel somewhat absentmindedly leaving his wallet and its contents behind." Avoid adverbs like "unfortunately" that could be regarded as POV.
 * Many one-sentence paragraphs that make the prose listy. Merge or expand.
 * For quotes we use qms (""); not italics as you often do in "World War II internment".
 * For web sources, you can use Template:cite web or Template:cite news.--Yannismarou 19:03, 12 March 2007 (UTC)

Peripitus
In addition to the above comments: - Peripitus (Talk) 00:30, 13 March 2007 (UTC)
 * There are 3 sources that should be incorporated into the inline references rather than being noted as sources alone.
 * Should read and add material from From Broken Hill to Scenic Hill - the true story and part of Griffith's history, the Scenic Hill hermit Valerio Ricetti, 1898-1952 - Ceccato, Peter (2001). This seems available a Griffith library and possibly others
 * unlink partial dates like 1952
 * add non-breaking spaces per the style manual so 16 hectares -> 16&nbsp ;hectares