Wikipedia:WikiProject India/Peer review/Deekshabhoomi

Deekshabhoomi
I have expanded this article fivefold. But I think there is still room for expanding it, and for pruning it whereever necessary. This article is about a very important palce, which is probably the only place in the world's history where mass conversion of such huge quantity of people occured from one religion to another. I want this page to be reviewed by interested wikipedians. Ganesh Dhamodkar (Talk) 04:29, 12 January 2009 (UTC)

-- Redtigerxyz Talk 14:54, 13 January 2009 (UTC)
 * "Dr. Ambedkar College" is an WP:UNDUE, not related to Deekshabhoomi directly, but besides it. Thus removing it
 * Added some . Please add references
 * "History of making" should go in "history" section
 * I contest the lead sentence "Deekshabhoomi is a sacred monument of Buddhism at the place". Deekshabhoomi is a place of pilgrimage for Neo-Buddhists (Nava-Bauddha in Marathi) or Ambedkarites, NOT for universal Buddhism. Bodh-gaya is a shrine of universal Buddhism
 * "Deekshabhoomi is famous for its architectural beauty and historical importance." Famous for history. definitely YES. architectural beauty is a point of view.
 * Write about " On October 14, 1956" in more detail, how many people converted, the fact that most of them were formerly Hindu Dalits should be noted somewhere.


 * Thanks Redtigerxyz for reviewing this article. I will try to make it better. Ganesh Dhamodkar  (Talk) 07:53, 15 January 2009 (UTC)


 * Introduction seems to fragmented. After stating what Deekshabhoomi is, one would expect more details, say meaning of word, location, historical and present day significance.
 * The line "Indian Railway has named an express from Nagpur to Gaya as Deekshabhoomi Express." seems to unwarranted in introdution section
 * Pictures detailing the monuments beauty, Buddha vihara and the Bodhi tree would help.
 * Article layout needs to be worked upon. Too many short paragraphs and empty spaces.
 * Does "History of making" really stand for "Construction of the monument"? Copyedit to add more clarity. Need more text on contruction history/details.
 * It would be better if there are references added to the construction details to verify the facts. Statements like "but it took a long time to finish." do not help. Move the completion date up and then cite reasons to why construction took long along with references.
 * Deekshabhoomi is visited a lot on the conversion day ceremony. The article provides very less details about this event in present circumstances. It would help to have more text on various aspects of it. This could be a seperate section in iselft and deserves more details and removal from tourism section

--Kedar (talk) 19:57, 19 January 2009 (UTC)