Wikipedia:WikiProject LGBT studies/Peer review/Triangle Foundation

Triangle Foundation
Also considering this article for B class and ultimately would like to nominate it for GA class. Varnent


 * Comment The citations need formatting - I have formatted citation 12 as an example. LuciferMorgan 18:18, 31 July 2007 (UTC)

Belovedfreak
This is looking pretty good so far. A couple of things: Hope some of this helps! -- Beloved freak  11:31, 2 August 2007 (UTC)
 * I agree with LuciferMorgan's comment. See WP:CITE.
 * The lead could be expanded somewhat, to better summarise the article. It should be able to act as a stand-alone summary. See WP:LEAD.
 * Everything in the lead section should be in the main article, (expanded) and as a result youshouldn't need citations in the lead, because they'll be in the main article.
 * In the "Community Building Program" it says "our events" which makes it sound a bit like advertising / promo.
 * Following on from that, statements like "...this program attempts to instill a sense of activism and need for community involvement..." without citations, well how do we know? It sounds like it's written by the organisation.
 * The four events mentioned in that section could do with being expanded.
 * I think in general it needs more third party references. Maybe the same ones already being used, but used more often so there aren't as many unsourced statements, especially about goals / intentions.
 * Maybe a little more about the history, who founded it, the circumstances etc?
 * The logo needs a Fair use rationale.
 * I don't know if it would be possible to get any pictures, maybe of the events. That would be a great addition.
 * I added "American" to the lead sentence. I hope you don't mind. Otherwise it is not immediately obvious to non-Americans where this organisation is. There are too many articles that don't explicitly state that the topic is American, or British or whatever.


 * Yes that all helps a great deal. I'll be out of town for a couple of weeks.  However, I'll be sure to implement those suggestions when I return - thank you! -Varnent 02:19, 4 August 2007 (UTC)