Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Battle of Vukovar


 * The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page.  No further edits should be made to this discussion.

Closd/withdrawn -- Ian Rose (talk) 01:17, 4 October 2011 (UTC)

Battle of Vukovar

 * Nominator(s): Prioryman (talk)

Joy and I wish to co-nominate this article for featured article status; I have been advised by Dank to seek an A-class review first. It has recently undergone a major expansion and rewrite to mark the upcoming 20th anniversary of the battle, which falls two months from today, on 18 November 2011. The battle was a critically important event in the Yugoslav Wars of the 1990s and will be the subject of commemorations in Croatia. It will also attract significant international media coverage, some of which has already begun to appear, in the run-up and on the day itself. Having written featured articles before, I've set out to write this to featured standard from the outset and I'm pretty sure that it will meet many of the featured and A-class article criteria. The sister article on the Croatian Wikipedia is already a featured article (though this is not a translation of it). Prioryman (talk) 19:39, 18 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Sources comments


 * Be consistent in whether you put dates of publications inside brackets in the shortened footnotes.
 * Be consistent in whether you provide translated titles for citations.
 * Offline sources should have page numbers.
 * In what way are you sorting sources without authors; by title or by publisher? -- Eisfbnore  &bull; talk  15:02, 25 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I've omitted the brackets, since I don't seem to have any way of adding them through the harvnb template.
 * You can use harvtxt. Eisfbnore   &bull; talk  09:35, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Agreed, since I don't have reliable translations for the other non-English titles I've left them out altogether.
 * Hmm, in the previous GA reviews I've read, ad hoc trans_title seemed to have been preferred. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 07:35, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, if you want to go through all the non-English titles and translate them, please feel free to do so. Prioryman (talk) 07:37, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * What do others think, would this be a worthwhile effort? --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 19:04, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Still working on the page numbers. This should be sorted in the next couple of days. Please note though that some offline sources, such as news agency reports, do not have page numbers - adding them will only be possible for offline newspaper references.
 * Almost all page numbers now added. A couple are still missing; I'll try to track them down. Prioryman (talk) 07:01, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Sources without authors should be sorted by publisher. I've spotted a couple of discrepancies and fixed them. Prioryman (talk) 17:26, 25 September 2011 (UTC)

Comments. As always, feel free to revert my copyediting. Please check the edit summaries. - Dank (push to talk) 03:13, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I substituted "17th-century" for "Baroque"; if you meant specifically that the town retained original Baroque architecture, it would probably be better to say that. - Dank (push to talk) 03:13, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
 * The two aren't synonymous, I'm afraid. An art historian I cite further on in the article specifically highlights the pre-war town's Baroque architecture as the finest example of its kind in the country. Referring to it as a "17th century" town implies that it was founded then, which isn't the case. I've restored "Baroque" but linked it to Baroque architecture. Prioryman (talk) 07:01, 27 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Understood, and "17th-century" was a bad choice. The link helps. - Dank (push to talk) 12:24, 27 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "the Austrians' Military Frontier, a cordon sanitaire established as a barrier to block further Ottoman expansion.": Can we do without cordon sanitaire? - Dank (push to talk) 04:03, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * We can, the meaning here doesn't exactly match the latter article so there's no need to potentially cause confusion. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 07:41, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * "nom de guerre": This is a hard call. Did he use the name only during the war?  If not, about how long did he use the name? - Dank (push to talk) 11:39, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Dedaković came to be known Jastreb ("Hawk") in the Croatian media during the war and his second in command Borković was nicknamed "Mladi jastreb" ("Young Hawk"). It's difficult to pinpoint when these nicknames came into use and if they were really used as codes in military communications or were invented by the media, but the nicknames stuck and are almost always appended to their full names when they appear in the local media even today (which is every now and then as they both went on to became vocal critics of the government's handling of war veterans' affairs since the war ended). I think nom de guerre if fine but it could just as well describe it as his "nickname".  Timbouctou ( talk ) 18:48, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks. In that case, I'd prefer "nickname". - Dank (push to talk) 18:58, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Contemporary sources that I've seen suggest that the names were actually codenames used for reasons of operational security and that the men's real names were kept secret at the time of the battle. I'll look into this. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I also don't see the problem with using the meaning that maps to pseudonym through the nom de guerre redirect. The text there is a bit long on the original etymology, but then it clearly states: Such pseudonyms are often adopted by [...] resistance fighters, [...] This practice hides their identities and protects their families from reprisal; it may also be a form of dissociation from domestic life. [...] It's not a perfect match, but it seems appropriate and there are no inappropriate connotations as there were with the quarantine term (disease). --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 07:52, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I've linked it to nom de guerre. - Dank (push to talk) 19:20, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * OK, that works. There are several sources referring to the names as noms de guerre, and one specifically says that they were used as a codenames during the battle and that the men's real names were not disclosed until afterwards. Joy's comment about the reasons for using the pseudonym seem about right. Prioryman (talk) 20:31, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "Serbian Territorial Defense Forces": Since this article is BritEng, I'm inclined to say that should be "Defence", although of course organizations are generally entitled to pick their own name. Anyone have an opinion on this?
 * It's a legacy of a previous version of the article. Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "Yugoslav/Serb": Try to do this without a slash (including in the heading); see WP:SLASH.
 * Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "The head of the Serbian secret police, the SDB, visited a nearby Serb-held town in Croatia during the battle to find out why Vukovar had not yet fallen and officers of the SDB commanded Serbian TO units fighting at Vukovar.": There's some kind of problem here; I think it's that I'm not seeing the connection between the first and second part of the sentence.
 * Reworded as: "The Serbian secret police agency, the SDB, actively participated in military operations. Some of its officers commanded Serbian TO units fighting at Vukovar[63] and the SDB's head visited the area during the battle to find out why Vukovar had not yet fallen." Better? Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Much. - Dank (push to talk) 18:34, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "the town was ... eventually reduced by the JNA": reduced to rubble? - Dank (push to talk) 15:13, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * "Reduced" in the sense of crushing a rebellion (it's an alternative meaning of the verb). For the purposes of clarity, I've replaced it with "taken".


 * "intermittent artillery and mortar fire from Serb forces once a day or every couple of days": I'm not sure of the meaning here. I think it would probably be an improvement to remove "intermittent", unless I'm misunderstanding.
 * "Intermittent" is probably redundant. I've taken it out. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "Serbian/Yugoslav", "JNA/Serb", "and/or": same as above; see WP:SLASH.
 * Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Wikipedia is running slow now, and I'd like to finish up, so I'll list the rest of the changes to be made here rather than making them myself:
 * "between 6,000–8,000 soldiers", "between 1991–95": between 6,000 and 8,000 soldiers, etc.; see WP:ENDASH
 * Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * His trial is currently ongoing." "currently" is redundant. Also, as of when? (see WP:DATED)
 * I've taken the line out since, as you say, it's time-dependent. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "Croatian officials estimated that over 25,500 houses had been damaged or destroyed out of 28,000 homes in Vukovar – 90 percent of the total and put the cost of the damage at $2.5 billion": you're missing a dash, but I'd use parentheses. Also, describe them as "houses" or "homes", not both.
 * I've reworded this a bit to resolve these issues. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "the rump Yugoslavia": probably, "what remained of Yugoslavia"
 * "The rump Yugoslavia" is the standard term; see e.g. Prioryman (talk) 07:08, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * True, but most readers won't know that, and rump means "ass" and so will come across to them as POV. Is "what remained of Yugoslavia" inaccurate, or too informal? - Dank (push to talk) 10:09, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I went with "the reduced Yugoslavia"; feel free to debate this, but I need this for now to support. - Dank (push to talk) 18:39, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I switched it to its proper name and linked it, so it should be all clear now. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 18:57, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I'm not happy with "reduced" and "rump" is in no way POV - it's a well-established and widely-used geopolitical term, as in "rump state". I'm also not very happy with the proper name, as it risks confusion with the previously-used Socialist Federal Republic of Yugoslavia; the article doesn't explain the difference between the pre-war SFRY and the wartime FRY, nor should it, as that would be off-topic. As a compromise, I've restored the term "rump Yugoslavia" but linked it to Joy's "Federal Republic of Yugoslavia", so that if anyone is confused, which to be honest I doubt, they can always click on the link and find out more. Prioryman (talk) 19:21, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "high, due to the destruction of the town's major industries: high due to the destruction of the town's major industries, ...
 * Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "the majority of houses being rebuilt and the restoration": the rebuilding of the majority of houses and the restoration - Dank (push to talk) 18:56, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "reintegration": I'm not sure, but maybe: re-integration (considering the hyphenation style in this article)
 * Done. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "A Serb boy spoke of how he wanted to know what was written on the monument but was too frightened to go and read the inscription; one day he got up the courage, ran to the monument, read it and immediately ran back to "safety".": This reminds me that, if it's not clear already, I'm not evaluating the neutrality of this article, I'm just working on the prose. But ... I'm not sure how I feel about this sentence.  Saying that one boy had one reaction is going to strike some people as WP:UNDUE weight. OTOH, it personalizes the story, and many people find that details like these make the story more readable.  I guess I don't have a position.
 * I added it specifically for the human element - as you say, it personalises the story. Prioryman (talk)


 * "apology and regret.", "one place for all its citizens.": "apology and regret", "one place for all its citizens". See WP:LQ.
 * Agreed, fixed. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 19:03, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "Helsinki class missile boats": Helsinki-class missile boats
 * Fixed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * "on New Year's Eve ...": not a big deal, but I wouldn't include the quote. If reviewers decide it's better to include it, then it's a little better to capitalize the "On" even if it didn't start the sentence in the original.  As always, make sure the unquoted material (I'm assuming there's something before the "on" in the original) doesn't change the meaning of what you're quoting.
 * I've shortened it significantly, as a large amount of the quote wasn't really essential. Prioryman (talk) 22:23, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * I have no objection to the content of the Popular culture section, but another heading might be better ... "Films and books", perhaps.
 * Changed. Prioryman (talk) 07:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * I expect I'll be able to support on prose. Nice article. - Dank (push to talk) 21:31, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I just noticed your "GLAM/British Museum" infobox. About the one or two quotes that I thought you might want to remove ... it's entirely possible that they comport more with the type of article a museum might be looking for, say if a patron uses a QR code to get to Wikipedia to learn more about an exhibit ... and I see there's new QRpedia software out just today.  I'll give this some thought. I'd be very interested in how anyone interested in GLAM thinks the QRpedia initiative might or should affect prose standards at FAC. - Dank (push to talk) 21:42, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * One more thing ... all the A-class articles are getting reviewed, eventually, but with some articles, it's taking a while. Long articles like this one are sometimes the last to get reviewed.  If you like, after I'm comfortable supporting, I'll make a request at WT:MIL for more reviews ... and, whether they arrive or not, I would have no objection if you feel you're on a deadline and you want to head back to FAC.  The prose is solid. - Dank (push to talk) 21:50, 28 September 2011 (UTC)
 * P.S. I don't recall Nikki's points at the last FAC; make sure those have been addressed before heading back. - Dank (push to talk) 10:14, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * As far as I know they have been, though some of them were a bit vague and requested specifics weren't provided - it's the best we can do in the circumstances. Prioryman (talk) 22:23, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I had a brief look and found one that looks like a false positive - they said that "newspaper sources without weblinks should include page numbers", but that doesn't match for all - for example a Tanjug item is not a newspaper source rather it's an agency news item and it's safe to say that they don't span multiple pages :) I linked the agency to make it clearer - maybe we should also move it to the "other" reference section? I then also asked them to re-check. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 09:37, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. I haven't had a chance to review the recent edit by User:Justice and Arbitration; I'll look at it at FAC. (Note: the soonest this can go back to FAC is two weeks since the previous FAC, that is, October 3.) - Dank (push to talk) 19:16, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * As far as I was concerned the FAC nomination wasn't withdrawn, merely put on hold while the issues you wanted to raise were dealt with here. I'll ask for advice on this point. Prioryman (talk) 20:47, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I recommend waiting two weeks. - Dank (push to talk) 20:55, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't think the FAC nomination can be completed in time for the anniversary if a two-week wait is forced - that will only leave four weeks for the whole FAC process. I've asked Sandy for advice. Prioryman (talk) 22:23, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Understood that this is a judgment call, but the majority of our readers won't be familiar with the term rump state. The problem is that this is Wikipedia; if they're reading a history article, they will assume it's just something they need to learn; on Wikipedia, a synonym for "ass" might come across as vandalism or a sly POV edit. Obviously, they can educate themselves by clicking on the link ... the problem is that readers don't usually click on links, so the article has to make sense without the links.  As I said, I can't support with "rump" in the text, but I do agree with and understand your objections.  Find another word, please. - Dank (push to talk) 19:32, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * "Rump" simply means "remnant". I really don't agree with the proposition that article content should be governed by an assumed lowest common denominator of the reader's knowledge. As a further compromise I've reworded this as "Serbia and Montenegro, which had formed the rump state of the Federal Republic of Yugoslavia", which should make it abundantly clear what the FRY was and that the term is not in any way POV. You'll note that the FRY is already listed on that page. Prioryman (talk) 20:03, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I'll invite opinions from WT:FAC. - Dank (push to talk) 20:08, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Fine, but it seems to me to be a very strange ground on which to oppose a nomination. If a hypothetical 15-year-old American kid reading the article gets the sniggers because he sees what he thinks is a synonym for "ass" that's unfortunate for him, but it shouldn't be our concern, nor should we censor ourselves because of his ignorance. It's a completely unobjectionable, widely used term (see for many recent examples). And with a link provided to the context in which it's used, i.e. rump state - a distinction which is absolutely necessary to avoid confusion with the pre-war Yugoslavia - I don't see how it cause any confusion whatsoever. Prioryman (talk) 20:26, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * For the record, there are dozens of articles on Wikipedia referring to "rump states" . Prioryman (talk) 20:36, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * "Rump state" is a precise and widely used term for what the article is referring to. Interestingly, the featured article on William III of England managed to survive not one but two FARs with the term rump state in it.  Timbouctou ( talk ) 20:36, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I can understand how it might be read with an implication of contempt. The first use of the word in this context was in the phrase used by Clement Walker to describe the Rump Parliament as "This fagge end, this Rump of a Parliament with corrupt Maggots in it." DrKiernan (talk) 20:28, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * That is not the context in which the word is used in this article. The Oxford English Dictionary gives three related definitions. The one you're referring to is II.4.a, "A small, unimportant, or contemptible remnant or remainder of an (official) body of people, esp. a parliament" (specifically with reference to the Rump Parliament, which was certainly a POV term back in 1649 but isn't exactly controversial now). That's not the meaning I'm using, which is II.4.c, "The rest or remainder of a thing; a remnant", which has no POV implications whatsoever. Interestingly enough, the OED's first quoted use of the term "rump state" is actually from an American source of 1893, and its most recent quotation is precisely the context in which I'm using it, from the Wall Street Journal in 2000: "A mandatory-retirement proposal to force Mr. Panic, the former prime minister of the rump-state of Yugoslavia, and several other directors to step down." Prioryman (talk) 20:43, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay, don't worry about this, I value your time. The pre-Murdoch WSJ quote is very helpful; they used to have excellent copyediting.  If no one can find something reliable that supports my position, I'll have to give in on this one.  Garner's, Merriam-Webster's Dictionary of English Usage, and all my online sources are letting me down here. - Dank (push to talk) 20:55, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, in terms of online sources, try these several thousand for examples. It's the standard term in the literature, as it was and is still necessary to distinguish between the pre-war and post-war Yugoslav states. Anyway, thanks for your forebearance and your help in reviewing this article. Prioryman (talk) 20:59, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * (I might add that The Independent, Reuters, Los Angeles Times, BBC, CNN, The Guardian, New York Times and Wall Street Journal Europe all used the term ("rump Yugoslavia") in exactly the same context.)  Timbouctou ( talk ) 21:02, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Outstanding research, Timbouctou and Prioryman. Sorry for the trouble. - Dank (push to talk) 21:05, 29 September 2011 (UTC)
 * No problem, I'm glad we got it sorted out. Prioryman (talk) 22:23, 29 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Weak support: I think it reads well, but I'm not in a position to judge on the sorts of things raised at the FAC and above. Reference usage and style seems very good, the level of detail exemplary and no signs of a bias outside of the odd sentence where that bias is subsequently balanced or viewpoint questioned. Would be happy to see this go back to FAC in time for the anniversary. Grandiose (me, talk, contribs) 18:30, 29 September 2011 (UTC)

Comments - I've been asked to check whether the concerns I raised at the previous FAC have been adequately addressed. Some of them have. I did not redo spotchecks at this point. Others:
 * WP:ENGVAR, for example in the use of "meter" and "kilometre"
 * Now "metre" throughout. Prioryman (talk) 19:53, 30 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Check internal consistency, for example in "percent" vs "per cent"
 * Now "per cent" throughout. Prioryman (talk) 19:53, 30 September 2011 (UTC)


 * MOS issues - hyphen use, need to identify currency (is the damage estimate in USD or some other currency?), etc
 * Changed one hyphen in the text to a dash: "Serbian–Byzantine". I left the hyphens in "nationalist-fascist" and "Austria-Hungary". Since the text is BritEng, I agree that reviewers will ask for "US$" at first occurrence.  What's the "etc"? - Dank (push to talk) 14:18, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * It's more a lack of hyphens that's a problem - for example, should be "20-kuna note". Other MOS issues include wikilinking (for example, Yugoslav People's Army is linked twice in the lead), inconsistency in whether ranks are abbreviated or spelled out, and inconsistent use of blockquotes. Nikkimaria (talk) 16:27, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks. It'll be a few days before I can get back to this one. - Dank (push to talk) 16:47, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I think I fixed the first three specific issues, but I'm not sure what you mean about inconsistent use of blockquotes. I see four uses of quote which don't have the third or fourth parameters - do you think we must fill them out? The metadata is linked through references and each quote is preceded by an introduction that states the author, so the parameters seem redundant. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 19:59, 1 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "The town's proximity to the Serbian border also gave it a degree of strategic military importance" vs "The town itself was strategically expendable" later in the article - this seems contradictory
 * Not really. Holding it was more important to the Serbs than the Croatians - it was strategically important as a base for controlling the region, but its loss did not substantially harm Croatia's overall strategic position as it was far from the Croatian heartland and gave the Serbs little significant military advantage. The loss of a central Croatian town like Gospić, which was also a key strategic flashpoint, would have been a very different story. I've added some words to clarify this point. Prioryman (talk) 19:39, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * ... or Maslenica, Zadar, Šibenik - targets of parallel Operation Coast-91. Or Karlovac - have a look at the map at Croatian War of Independence that shows the choke points. --Joy &#91;shallot&#93; (talk) 20:09, 1 October 2011 (UTC)


 * File:Logo_of_the_JNA.svg still lacks source information. It's self-made, but on what source was it based?
 * File:JTO_Logo.jpg is still sourced to a deleted page
 * This has been discussed on the article talk page at Talk:Battle of Vukovar. I'll try to get that discussion resolved this weekend. Prioryman (talk) 19:39, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Since no satisfactory solution appears to have been found I've replaced the logos with File:Flag of SR Serbia.svg, File:Flag of SFR Yugoslavia.svg and File:Logo of Croatian National Guard.svg for the respective forces. Prioryman (talk) 18:17, 3 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Be consistent in how page ranges are notated
 * Resolved. Prioryman (talk) 19:53, 30 September 2011 (UTC)


 * All newspapers without weblinks need page numbers
 * No. See Prioryman's response to my point above. Some news agency reports do not have page numbers. -- Eisfbnore  &bull; talk  16:47, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * I realize that, but offline newspapers do, and there's still a few of those. Nikkimaria (talk) 17:56, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * As far as I can see, the following are the missing ones:
 * Champion, Marc (20 November 1991). "UN envoy inspects ruins of Vukovar". The Independent (London).
 * Radin, Charles A. (26 November 1991). "Reflecting on a battle's losses: Fallen Croatian city's restless defenders rue past and wonder what's next". The Boston Globe.
 * Tanner, Marcus (20 May 1991). "Croats likely to vote for independence". The Independent (London).
 * Are there any others? Prioryman (talk) 19:28, 30 September 2011 (UTC)


 * A couple of the "Other sources" lack publishers. Nikkimaria (talk) 13:18, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Resolved - they now all have publisher info. Prioryman (talk) 19:53, 30 September 2011 (UTC)

Conclusions. I think this pretty much concludes the A-class review - thanks to everyone who has participated. There is one outstanding issue, that of the three missing newspaper numbers, but I should be able to sort that out tomorrow. Due to the short time left before the anniversary I've now moving this back to FAC to take care of any remaining issues. The nomination can be found at Featured article candidates/Battle of Vukovar/archive2. Prioryman (talk) 18:31, 3 October 2011 (UTC)
 * I think we can treat this as a request to withdraw this nom, particularly as it's now been listed at FAC -- will action shortly. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 00:11, 4 October 2011 (UTC)


 * The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page, such as the current discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.