Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Bill Denny (Australian politician)


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Article promoted by Ian Rose (talk) via MilHistBot (talk) 02:06, 8 February 2015 (UTC)

Bill Denny (Australian politician)

 * Nominator(s): Peacemaker67 (crack... thump)

Denny was a South Australian Attorney-General who enlisted as a soldier in the AIF aged 43, rose to the rank of captain and was awarded the Military Cross. Returned to SA after the war, and was twice more appointed as state A-G. Article created and brought to GA since early January. An Australian for a change... Regards, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 07:36, 23 January 2015 (UTC)

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 21:30, 24 January 2015 (UTC)


 * Support Comments - a remarkable fellow, very surprised we didn't have an article until recently so great to see this gap filled.
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 * Possible MOS issue with date range format. You use "1910–1912", I believe it should be "1910–12" per WP:DATERANGE
 * Some minor inconsistency with presentation of percentages, see "80 percent" vs "9.9 per cent".
 * Inconsistency with both "World War I" and "First World War" used in the article.
 * In the lead you say he was "he was severely wounded", however in the body of the article only that "he was wounded".
 * This is a little repetitive (and might be confusing to some readers): "returned first of three in Adelaide with 30.2 per cent of the ballots cast.[20] He returned to Australia via the United States of America on 2 August 1919,[2] returning to his seat..." Specifically repeated use of the word "returned" or variations of it, used to mean different things. Perhaps reword or clarify? (suggestion only - I know what you mean and its not very unclear I agree)
 * Some inconsistency in how you refer to his brother. Specifically at first you refer to him as " Reverend R.P. Denny", then "Rev. Richard Power Denny" and then just "Rev. Denny". I would suggest at first use he should be introduced as "Reverend Richard Power Denny" using full name and title per WP:SURNAME and then subsequently as "Reverend Denny" (expanding the abbrevs).
 * I made a couple of minor changes and tweaks - here.
 * These fairly minor issues aside this article looks very good to me. Anotherclown (talk) 13:11, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
 * All done, these are my edits. Thanks for the review! Regards, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 23:45, 25 January 2015 (UTC)
 * Cheers. Changes look good, I've added my support now. Anotherclown (talk) 00:57, 26 January 2015 (UTC)

Comments This is a very strong article, and I have only a few comments: Support My comments are now addressed - nice work Nick-D (talk) 23:07, 6 February 2015 (UTC)
 * "William Joseph Denny was born in Adelaide, South Australia on 6 December 1872, one of three children of Thomas Joseph Denny, a publican, and his wife Annie (née Dwyer)" - this sentence seems bit overly complex (lots of commas), and might work best as two sentences
 * Do we know what the duties of a "weather clerk" in the post office were? It sounds like a strange job!
 * "and unsuccessfully contested the two-member seat of West Adelaide in the 1899 South Australian state election" - did he stand as an independent? (no party is mentioned here) Nick-D (talk) 10:36, 6 February 2015 (UTC)
 * Fixed points 1 and 3 (he was ULP), but there isn't any more info on what that job entailed. The Post-Master-General's Department (as it was in SA) did a lot of stuff, including telegraphic, weather and normal postal stuff, so the answer may be there, but I'm buggered if I could find anything that explained what he did... Thanks for the review, Nick! Cheers, Peacemaker67 (crack... thump) 10:54, 6 February 2015 (UTC)


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