Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/First Command Financial Planning


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First Command Financial Planning, Inc.
A recently written article, am curious as to what changes/improvements might be needed.Balloonman 15:37, 7 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Comment nice article, but I don't want to judge it. It's too alien. Wandalstouring 21:50, 7 May 2007 (UTC)


 * Support a nice article indeed. Carom 22:20, 8 May 2007 (UTC)
 * Comment. I can't understand the second sentence of the second paragraph in the "History" section.  There are a lot of words and phrases throughout the article that are capitalized but don't need to be, such as "Enlisted Personnel," "Board of Advisors," and and the cardinal cornerstones.  The quote in the "systematic plans" section isn't formatted correctly as a quote and the last sentence in the section isn't cited.  The abbreviation "NASD" is used without being spelled-out until later in the article.  I don't think long quotes are supposed to be italicized.  I think, perhaps, the article might not be quite ready for A-class review yet, but it's almost there. Cla68 00:41, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
 * thank you for some excellent feedback... I'll look at it this weekend/evening and see if I can fix your concerns.Balloonman 14:53, 10 May 2007 (UTC)
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