Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Henry Hoʻolulu Pitman


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Henry Hoʻolulu Pitman

 * Nominator(s): KAVEBEAR (talk)

I am nominating this article for A-Class review because it meets the criteria. Henry Hoʻolulu Pitman was one of a small group of Civil War soldiers of Hawaiian descent who have been subject of renewed scholarly interest of Asian/Pacific Islander soldiers in the American Civil War in the recent decade. Thanks for any feedback. KAVEBEAR (talk) 23:01, 8 January 2016 (UTC)

Support on prose per standard disclaimer. I've looked at the changes made since I reviewed this for FAC. These are my edits. - Dank (push to talk) 17:19, 9 January 2016 (UTC)

Support Comments: G'day, nice work with this one. I have a few minor nitpicks only: AustralianRupert (talk) 11:36, 15 January 2016 (UTC)
 * in the Bibliography, "Pacific Islanders and the Civil War". In Shively, Carol A. Asians and Pacific Islanders and the Civil War", as this is a chapter in a book, can a page range be provided for the chapter (to make this consistent with the way the journals are presented)?
 * Awaiting interlibrary loan request to get the book so I can view the page number range. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)


 * some of the works in the Bibliography might have OCLC numbers, which can usually be found at worldcat.org:
 * ✅--KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)


 * the Kam work probably should be moved out of the External links section to either the Bibliography or a Further reading section
 * ✅--KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)


 * in the infobox: "1862–1863" should be "1862–63" per WP:DATERANGE;
 * ✅--KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)


 * the duplicate link checker tool identifies the following as overlinked: Honolulu (in the lead),  Battle of Fredericksburg, Union (American Civil War);
 * ✅ Some of the double links are because of links in infobox, the intro and footnotes vs the main body.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)


 * "...of "a pair of thin, high-heeled and narrow soled boots" he had purchased..." --> the citation of the work where this quote comes from probably should be placed directly after the quote;
 * The entire paragraphs including the two quotes (including "I will be in camp by night, good by") are cited in the three sources by Carter. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)
 * No worries, I think it would be clearer if you moved the relevant citation, but I'll leave it up to you. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 03:05, 16 January 2016 (UTC)


 * citation order: "...mixed race,[53][1]" --> "...mixed race,[1][53]" (there are a few examples of this)
 * I believed I mixed most of them.--KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)

Let me know what else I can address. --KAVEBEAR (talk) 21:08, 15 January 2016 (UTC)
 * I made a minor prose tweak, but other than that it looks good for A-class to me. Thanks for your efforts. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 03:05, 16 January 2016 (UTC)


 * Support; I reviewed this at GA and it was in good shape then. Have checked changes since then and they are improvements that push this into A-Class for me. Good work. --Errant (chat!) 22:31, 31 January 2016 (UTC)
 * Image check I checked the images in this article, and they all appear to have appropriate licensing. Cheers, Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:24, 1 February 2016 (UTC)


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