Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Kenneth Dewar


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Kenneth Dewar
The article is GA, but failed its FAC. The request for copyedit has yielded no takers so I'd like another review via WP:MILHIST A-class. Cheers, Harlsbottom (talk) 13:50, 12 May 2008 (UTC)
 * Comment: The dates in the refs need to have consistent date formatting per WP:MOSNUM. Currently you have some with partial links, some with both dates linked, some in different formats. Consistency is key here.
 * There is no need for the comma in the dates; the parser makes 1 March, 1900 show up as 1 March, 1900 anyway.
 * There are still prose issues: "Promoted Acting Sub-Lieutenant," just doesn't flow. I think the prose is A-Class, just not FA class yet. I would continue to try and find a good copy-editor (I know it is nigh-on impossible to do), preferably one without a naval background.
 * Why link only the "C" in C class cruiser?
 * "and harmonious relationship between the two was to be expected out of necessity." Seems very disjointed. I think it needs rephrasing.
 * So; fix the dates and the little issues and I will support it for A, though until you can find one of those elusive copy-editors, I wouldn't support it at FAC. All the best. Woody (talk) 18:54, 13 May 2008 (UTC)


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