Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Minefields in Croatia


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Article promoted Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:52, 28 June 2013 (UTC)

Minefields in Croatia

 * Nominator(s): Tomobe03 (talk)

I am nominating this article for A-Class review because it has recently went through a GA review and I trust it generally meets the A-class criteria. Tomobe03 (talk) 13:39, 12 May 2013 (UTC)

Support: I did a bit of copy editing:. Please check that you are happy with my changes. I believe that the article is now good enough for A-class, although I would suggest further copy editing before taking to FAC. Regards, AustralianRupert (talk) 12:41, 23 May 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you for the review, copyedits and the suggestion for further ce. I have posted a request for help in that respect with WP:GOCE in mid-April, but I'll take a further look myself as well.--Tomobe03 (talk) 13:57, 23 May 2013 (UTC)

Comments - Dank (push to talk)
 * "Minefields in Croatia": Don't link bolded words in general, but particularly not in the lead, per WP:BOLDTITLE. You and I know that the garish blue is just an artifact/artefact of bolding and linking, but for the typical reader, it looks like we're singling out one word in the lead as being particularly important for some reason.
 * "They were laid to strengthen defensive positions that lacked sufficient weapons or manpower. Despite this, the minefields played a very limited role in the fighting.": They were intended to strengthen defensive positions that lacked sufficient weapons or manpower, but played a very limited role in the fighting.
 * "Euros": There's an argument for capitalization, but a better argument against.
 * "relying heavily on them until early 1992 in order to stop advances": relying heavily on them to stop advances ... until early 1992
 * "frontline": front line (frontline is the adjective)
 * "casualties of land mines": casualties from land mines - Dank (push to talk) 03:49, 5 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Thank you for taking a look at the article. I fixed all of the above as suggested, extending the capitalization (or lack thereof) to kuna as well.--Tomobe03 (talk) 10:58, 5 June 2013 (UTC)


 * Continuing. "in the Operations Flash and Storm", "during the Operations ...": in Operations, during Operations (and style guides tend to recommend lowercasing "operations", but it's not a big deal)
 * "given the latter offensive": this refers to "comparably light" I think, but it's not close enough to what it refers to
 * I tried to fix this. Please have another look at the passage.
 * "post war": postwar or post-wa
 * "The theft of the minefield signage has proved a significant problem, and has been particularly marked ...": Use "pronounced" instead of "marked", which could be confused with of being marked by the signs. - Dank (push to talk) 01:59, 6 June 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the comments. I think all the issues are fixed now, but could you please have another look the one marked above by a comment.--Tomobe03 (talk) 07:51, 6 June 2013 (UTC)


 * "considered that the posters appeared threatening, and were a potential source ...": This meaning of "consider" isn't in the dictionaries. "believed" might work, but I recommend: "considered the posters a potential source ..."
 * "suspected of containing mines": suspected to contain mines (A person is "suspected of" bad behavior.)
 * "locally-designed" no hyphen per WP:HYPHEN and per most style guides
 * Support on prose per new standard disclaimer. - Dank (push to talk) 20:28, 6 June 2013 (UTC)
 * All of the above implemented. Thanks.--Tomobe03 (talk) 20:45, 6 June 2013 (UTC)


 * support. Seems comprehensive and well written. I'd suggest creating a bar chart showing how the estimated number of mines changed through time. --Piotr Konieczny aka Prokonsul Piotrus&#124; reply here 16:21, 26 June 2013 (UTC)
 * That would prove quite problematic because the number is merely estimated. Besides that, I could find reliable sources for the initial and the present figures only.--Tomobe03 (talk) 16:25, 26 June 2013 (UTC)


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