Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Assessment/Tim Hughes (soldier)

Tim Hughes (soldier)
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This article is about a decorated Australian Aboriginal soldier of the Second World War who went on to achieve success in the soldier-settlement scheme after the war and was appointed MBE for his inaugural chairmanship of the Aboriginal Lands Trust. Not a lot of corporals with their own articles, but Hughes has his own entry in the Australian Dictionary of Biography. Have at it. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 08:33, 25 June 2024 (UTC)

Support from Hawkeye7
Great article. Very little to say. Very impressive.
 * No spelling errors detected. Hawkeye7   (discuss)  22:01, 29 June 2024 (UTC)

Image review - pass
All images are appropriately licensed. Hawkeye7  (discuss)  22:01, 29 June 2024 (UTC)
 * File:Tim Hughes MBE MM.jpg, File:Land clearing team at Keppock.jpg, - copyright expired - okay
 * File:Tim Hughes MBE MM grave plaque.jpg - 3D artwork - Wikipedian generated CC 4.0 - okay
 * File:Tim Hughes Stadium, Repat Health Precinct.jpg - Wikipedian generated CC 4.0 - okay

Source review - pass
Hawkeye7  (discuss)  22:01, 29 June 2024 (UTC)
 * Sources are reliable and reputable
 * No issues with formatting.
 * Spot checks: 3, 8, 32, 33 - okay

Matarisvan
Hi, my comments: A good read overall Matarisvan (talk) 16:36, 5 July 2024 (UTC)
 * Perhaps change the "Aborginal" in the first sentence of the lead to "Aboriginal Australian"? I know that the former mostly always implies the latter but a clarification would still help.
 * "at the fifth grade": won't "till the fifth grade," be better?
 * "suffered with": "suffered from"?
 * Can we introduce in 1 or 2 words who Lowitja was in the lead and body, per NOFORCELINK?
 * "made a modest success of farming": "had modest success at farming"?
 * I reckon you would like to take this article to FAC. In that case, you should move around the lead a little so its length is 4 paragraphs instead of the current 3.
 * Why have we linked to South Australia in the body but not in the lead?
 * What was the reason for the first hospital stay in the Middle East?
 * "was recovered": "had recovered"?
 * Link to Wingfield?
 * "made a reasonable success of his farm": "had reasonable success at ..."?
 * Wouldn't the Tim Hughes stadium picture be better placed in the Post war section than in the footnotes?
 * Since we are using the 1993 edition for Wilmot, consider using ISBN 13 instead of 10, as done for all the other sources?
 * Consider adding images of the Battles of Tobruk, the Salient, Milne Bay and Buna Gona? For people who don't have many photograhps, I have seen photos od the events they were involved in being used on here.

Nick-D
I'd like to offer the following comments on this fine article:
 * I'd suggest linking 2/10th Battalion in the lead
 * the older sister of Lowitja O'Donoghue - I'd suggest noting who Lowitja O'Donoghue is
 * Given that First Nations Australians were officially banned from joining the military in 1939, can anything be said about how Hughes was able to enlist and remain enlisted? Many other First Nations men who enlisted at this time were discharged not long afterwards.
 * Can anything be said about Hughes experiences in the Army? Various sources note that when/once First Nations people were able to make it into the military they generally experienced far less discrimination than in civilian life.
 * " In 1956 he requested and received exemption from the Aborigines Act, although he deeply resented what was referred to as a "dog licence" and expressed criticism about the way Aboriginal people were treated. " - I'd suggest explaining the background here
 * " Hughes was only permitted expenses of 18 pounds a week" - was this standard for soldier-settlers, or did it apply to the First Nations ones only? Nick-D (talk) 00:19, 20 July 2024 (UTC)