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William Sterling Parsons

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Closed as promoted --Sp33dyphil © • © 03:00, 22 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Nominator(s): Hawkeye7 (talk)

Following on the articles on Groves and Oppenheimer is this article on Deak Parsons, the US Navy's senior man on the Manhattan Project Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:59, 24 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Sources comments


 * In citations but not in bibliography: Groves 1962 and Thomas & Morgan-Witts 1977.
 * Be consistent in whether ISBNs are hyphenated or unhyphenated.
 * Be consistent in whether you provide OCLCs for books that already have ISBNs.
 * Be consistent in whether you use full dates in citations. -- Eisfbnore  &bull; talk  14:56, 25 September 2011 (UTC)


 * All corrected. Hawkeye7 (talk) 03:41, 26 September 2011 (UTC)

Support Comments  -- Very good as usual, almost ready to support. Structure, detail, referencing and supporting materials look fine; prose-wise, performed my habitual copyedit but a few things: Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 13:36, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
 * Remind me, do our American cousins not hyphenate "Commander in Chief"?
 * Does the section header "Proximity Fuze" need to be all caps?
 * On 6 January 1943, Helena was part of a cruiser force that bombarded of Munda in the Solomon Islands -- "bombarded off Munda" or just "bombarded Munda"?
 * Have to admit I don't quite get why Groves was (apparently) angered by the school at Los Alamos -- did Parsons go over budget in realising his more permanent vision, or what?
 * Not sure whether it's necessary/appropriate to put "Rear Admiral William S. Parsons Award for Scientific and Technical Progress" in inverted commas -- I'd have though just the caps would be sufficient for the name of an award.

Thanks for the review and the copyedit. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:44, 26 September 2011 (UTC)
 * 1) I don't have my American handy at the moment, but my understanding is that they do not hyphenate it.
 * 2) Decapped.
 * 3) Dropped "of"
 * 4) He misused the Manhattan Project's priority on something Groves regarded as non-essential. Added explanation.
 * 5) Removed quotes.
 * Looks good to me, well done. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 03:54, 27 September 2011 (UTC)


 * It's a big article and in my honest opinion the first four paragraphs need to be sourced/referenced. Then it may become a an "A Class" article.  Adamdaley (talk) 09:26, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * All the paragraphs are sourced. Per WP:LEADCITE, the lead does not require citations. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:27, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * The article has not been marked against the "B Class" assessment. Adamdaley (talk) 12:00, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * While it's probably worth someone's while (perhaps yours, Adam!) filling out the B-Class assessment, it's not a prerequisite for nominating at higher levels such as A-Class. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 12:55, 30 September 2011 (UTC)
 * The article was assessed B-class by User:RightCowLeftCoast on 30 July 2011. It became a Good article on 12 September 2011. Hawkeye7 (talk) 23:46, 30 September 2011 (UTC)


 * Support: looks pretty good to me. Just a couple of comments:
 * in the lead you use an abbreviation without having introduced it: "Parsons and Merle Tuve of NDRC";
 * Expanded abbreviation. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:15, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Notes 1 to 4 appear slightly different to the others (they don't have full stops). They should probably be consistent. AustralianRupert (talk) 12:16, 7 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Changed templates early on. Replaced the footnotes with the other template. Hawkeye7 (talk) 20:15, 7 October 2011 (UTC)


 * Comments Support
 * No dabs (no action required).
 * One External link reports an error :
 * "Sea Service Awards Descriptions (info) [navyleague.org]"
 * ✅ Link rot. Repaired. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Some images lack alt text (suggestion only)
 * The Citation Error check tool reveals no errors (no action required).
 * Images are all PD or appropriately licenced and seem appropriate for the article. Minor issue:
 * File:Thin Man plutonium gun bomb casings.jpg lacks a date, can this be added?
 * ✅ Could only add an estimate. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Typo here I think: "Parsons was posted back to in Dahlgren", specifically "back to in Dahlgren".
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "fatally damaged", maybe reword to "critically damaged" or something similar? Machines cannot be killed... (very minor point of course so suggestion only)
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * "Parsons arranged for a test program to be carried at Dahlgreen..." perhaps "carried out at Dahlgreen..."?
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk)
 * "There role was..." or "Their role was..."?
 * ✅ Hawkeye7 (talk)
 * In the 'Death and legacy' section you mention "the anti-intellectualism of recent months" and Oppenheimer being blocked from access to classified material. Why did these events occur? I'm by no means an expert on the era but I assume it had something to do with allegations of Oppenheimer being a Soviet spy and McCarthyism. Could you possibly add half a sentence to give further context here?
 * ✅ Added a reference to McCarthyism.. Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Overall this is an excellent article in my opinion. Only a few minor points above to deal with or discuss. Anotherclown (talk) 10:41, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * Thanks for your review. :) Hawkeye7 (talk) 11:24, 12 October 2011 (UTC)
 * All my points have been dealt with, so I've added my support now. Anotherclown (talk) 07:34, 13 October 2011 (UTC)

Comment: User talk:Dank. - Dank (push to talk) 23:08, 14 October 2011 (UTC)


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