Wikipedia:WikiProject Military history/Peer review/152 mm howitzer M1943 (D-1)

152 mm howitzer M1943 (D-1)
A common effort of a group of editors. We'd like to get some comments and suggestions concerning further improvement of the article. Bukvoed 08:29, 27 May 2007 (UTC)

Kirill Lokshin
Not bad, overall, but some points that still need work: Kirill Lokshin 11:32, 31 May 2007 (UTC)
 * The lead could stand to be longer; two or three paragraphs is pretty much the norm now.
 * The "Production" section is really too short to stand on its own; it may be better off to absorb it into the previous one (as "Development and production").
 * The "Summary" section is out of place; parts of it should be in the lead, while some of the more technical details would be better off in the description of the gun itself.
 * An explicit "Trivia" section is unacceptable. While some of these points are interesting, they should be worked into the text itself (as footnotes, if needed).
 * The "Surviving pieces" section should be converted into prose (a sentence or two, at most) and ideally absorbed into one of the larger sections ("Organization and employment", perhaps).


 * Thanks. We reworked the article, taking these remarks into account. Bukvoed 07:53, 3 June 2007 (UTC)